It is ssooooooo good. Omg i was actually surprised to see such amazing artwork on a manga forum. Like you said, didn't get much of the story from this, but there was quite a bit of foreshadowing (lol). Also, the only thing I would change is the face of the girl on the sixth page. Maybe make it less cartoony, since it will be the first face people will remember. You want that to be a beautiful, defined face people will want to come back for. It is still good artwork, don't get me wrong. I would just maybe make it a little more realistic, idk.