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Offline Tenori Tejima

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Trying to be productive
« on: December 09, 2023, 06:41:07 AM »
Gonna see if I can actually finish a project for once... by abandoning traditional drawing. I will miss working with real pen and paper, but nothing's gonna get finished if I don't cut corners. Has no title yet, I'll just see where it goes... (If it's too large, I can adjust the page sizes)

























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Re: Trying to be productive
« Reply #1 on: December 10, 2023, 07:24:11 AM »
Hey. Cool is this one of those isekai pieces. Its a little hard to understand where the lady is at. I thought a bar /grocery even a movie theatre weirdly XD. It's like she's making some slow realizations in the scene i think.

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Re: Trying to be productive
« Reply #2 on: December 10, 2023, 05:15:24 PM »
Hey. Cool is this one of those isekai pieces. Its a little hard to understand where the lady is at. I thought a bar /grocery even a movie theatre weirdly XD. It's like she's making some slow realizations in the scene i think.

It's supposed to look like a bar in the middle of the void, disconnected from everything. Like a bar at the end of time... (or outside of time)

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Re: Trying to be productive
« Reply #3 on: December 10, 2023, 05:43:42 PM »
ooohhhhh a nice intro so far
I like your art style, it's quite similar to a style I'm aiming at where the sketch is rough, but still quite accurate.

love the panel shot from behind where she's adjusting her clothing, that's a super nice framing.

yeah I did get the feeling it was a bar in the middle of nowhere XD

I was wondering what the shiny things are though, if they were hanging lights or fireflies/spirits/sparkles.

one super minor critique is the choice of the word "facility", it just didn't seem to fit given the fantasy vibe. But it's not technically wrong.

but great stuff so far, can't wait for more.
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Re: Trying to be productive
« Reply #4 on: December 11, 2023, 02:08:48 PM »
Hey. Cool is this one of those isekai pieces. Its a little hard to understand where the lady is at. I thought a bar /grocery even a movie theatre weirdly XD. It's like she's making some slow realizations in the scene i think.

It's supposed to look like a bar in the middle of the void, disconnected from everything. Like a bar at the end of time... (or outside of time)

Oh cool. Bar . The main seem to be intimate with the wares

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Re: Trying to be productive
« Reply #5 on: December 14, 2023, 06:09:52 AM »
You mention you are faster at drawing on the computer. I suddenly wonder if I might be more productive drawing on the computer as well. Will have to give it a try.

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Re: Trying to be productive
« Reply #6 on: January 14, 2024, 02:33:00 AM »




(Jesus, this rear view angle took way too long to visualize! If it looks horrible, just refer to this design:


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« Reply #7 on: January 14, 2024, 06:28:28 AM »
I think the angle looks pretty good, it's a notoriously difficult angle to draw so even when drawn correctly, it sometimes looks wrong anyway!!!!
another nice page, can't wait for more!
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Re: Trying to be productive
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« Reply #9 on: March 10, 2024, 08:55:57 AM »
nice, loving the setup and sense of mystery!!
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« Reply #10 on: April 10, 2024, 01:38:38 AM »