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In-depth story critiques and reviews
« on: February 02, 2022, 01:25:20 AM »

Hello^^
thought I would make this post to help find the active writers floating around  here and gather fhem in one convenient spot

I'll be brief, if your a writer who wants their story to be reviewed then go ahead and post your Google docs link or the link to your story down below and I'll do my best to review it in a timely manner

do keep in mind My reviews focus on  characters/world/story and plot consistency

[so you won't hear me talk about how to properly use adjectives/verbs/pronouns ect.]

In short I'll just talk about your story and the characters that reside in it.

if you're unfamiliar with my style of reviews then go ahead and check out my recent posts to get a general idea

Looking forward to working with you^^
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Re: In-depth story critiques and reviews
« Reply #1 on: February 02, 2022, 06:36:14 AM »
I do have an ongoing story in my CAIRLANN thread over in the "Develop your Story" section that you could try your review on. Granted it's divided in 34 parts and counting at 28k words, so it'll take you awhile to grind through it. I'll link it here as well as my own feedback survey should you like to write a review for it! This would be my first work I've done using exclusively the gardening method, so you'll notice a stark difference in contrast to my previous writings, so I'd love to have more people give their thoughts and opinions! Have fun!

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Re: In-depth story critiques and reviews
« Reply #2 on: February 02, 2022, 07:10:29 AM »
Awsome ^^ it Sounds like i am in for a adventure^^
Thank you, ill try and review 1-3 chapters a week^^
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Re: In-depth story critiques and reviews
« Reply #3 on: February 16, 2022, 02:12:00 PM »
If your offer applies to comics as well, then I would love a review of Whispering Magic. In my opinion it was the best of my 4 stories I worked on to make a novel, so I'd like to know the problems with it.
http://forums.mangaraiders.com/index.php/topic,20803.0.html
no need to comment on the art side if you don't want to (actually please don't lol it's really bad XD)
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Re: In-depth story critiques and reviews
« Reply #4 on: March 02, 2022, 05:35:11 AM »
Hello glad to have another passionate user here^^ and sorry to say art is not my specialty but don't worry I can show  Animation and he be more than happy to give you all the feedback you'd like [is there anything in particular you want him to mention or look at?] And since operative story is on hold I can take a look at your story if you'd like^^
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Re: In-depth story critiques and reviews
« Reply #5 on: March 02, 2022, 07:49:07 AM »
well art-wise, the quality is deliberately sketchy, but general comments on the layout/composition/angles would be useful.
and writing-wise, are the characters/dialogue believable, does the story flow well, are the plot points/tropes used effectively, that sort of thing would help me to see if I could have done anything better.
No worries if that's not the sort of critique you were offering, though :D

If you would prefer to review a proper written story, I wouldn't mind some feedback on the recent short story I completed, The Choice in the Mirror.
http://forums.mangaraiders.com/index.php/topic,20815.msg308993.html#msg308993
many thanks :D
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Re: In-depth story critiques and reviews
« Reply #6 on: August 24, 2022, 02:29:17 PM »
well art-wise, the quality is deliberately sketchy, but general comments on the layout/composition/angles would be useful.
and writing-wise, are the characters/dialogue believable, does the story flow well, are the plot points/tropes used effectively, that sort of thing would help me to see if I could have done anything better.
No worries if that's not the sort of critique you were offering, though :D

If you would prefer to review a proper written story, I wouldn't mind some feedback on the recent short story I completed, The Choice in the Mirror.
http://forums.mangaraiders.com/index.php/topic,20815.msg308993.html#msg308993
many thanks :D

Sorry for the long wait, didnt see that this had a responce. I and Animation would be more then happy to look over your work. I also noticed you had alot of work already done with a few chapters redone, which chapter would you like us to look over that you feel is done with?^^
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Re: In-depth story critiques and reviews
« Reply #7 on: August 24, 2022, 04:50:55 PM »
(no chapters have been rewritten or changed since their first posting, maybe you're thinking of someone else's work?)

The choice in the mirror (the link in the previous post) is still the only actual short story (over 1000 words) I have written, so if you're happy to give feedback I'm more than happy to receive it.

for feedback on manga comics, any of my 3 novels, Whispering Magic, Omega World, Eclipse, I wouldn't mind feedback on, but they are comics, not written works.
links to all my stories here:
http://forums.mangaraiders.com/index.php/topic,20799.msg307252/topicseen.html#msg307252

also on the same link, my current story, The Eye of Light, we would love feedback on too, my writer and I :D
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