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Seven Manhwa
« on: April 23, 2021, 05:43:26 PM »
Long time since I've posted here!
I'm sorry if I'm posting this on the wrong forum just thought it'd be the easiest place. I started this project a long time ago but always stopped. So here's hoping I have the drive to keep going this time hahaah. Anywho originally this was in manga format but I've been trying to experiment with this layout and also I think it'd be fun to post this on webtoons! Still wanted to stop here, get some feedback and also catchup! There's an old post with the original Seven but that's deep in the members manga and trying to find it seems difficult. Glad to be back here and I hope you guys enjoy!

Chapter 0: Genesis
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Re: Seven Manhwa
« Reply #1 on: April 25, 2021, 04:32:59 AM »
wow long time no see indeed!

welcome back and great to see you're working on a comic!

I can't wait to see more!
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Re: Seven Manhwa
« Reply #2 on: April 27, 2021, 10:02:38 AM »
Thanks suuper-san!

Here's the cover or thumbnail of the manga!

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Re: Seven Manhwa
« Reply #3 on: April 27, 2021, 03:14:59 PM »
Hello! I don't know if we've ever spoken before, but welcome back!

Manhwa/Webtoon layout is fun to play with c: I like the intro scene and images in your Chapter 0. Personally, I prefer a slower start as well, for that same reason of setting the mood. Also helps to absorb the info.

Hope to see more soon!
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Re: Seven Manhwa
« Reply #4 on: May 02, 2021, 06:29:51 AM »
nice cover!

only critique is that the title font is really had to read, I read it as "Scorn" first of all.

I'm a super slow paced writer as well, although I think I'm picking up pacing lately. Not sure if I like it or not :P
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Re: Seven Manhwa
« Reply #5 on: May 04, 2021, 09:56:17 PM »
Echo_River thanks! Yeah, it's some concepts I want to introduce before I get to some action and I also want to convey that this is more somber.

Suuper-san yeah I noticed it was a little difficult to read maybe I'll mess with it again. I'll probably have to start from scratch since I'm pretty sure I lost the original file, oh well hahaah.

But I'm now done with the few manga pages so from here on out it's all new stuff!
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Re: Seven Manhwa
« Reply #6 on: May 09, 2021, 06:41:27 AM »
ouch...make sure to back up your stuff!!!

love the new post, good work

not too much happening since it's a short post, but I think perhaps the speech "where..." sounded super ambiguous. You might make it more suspenseful by saying "Where is it...?" or "Where are they...?", which gives a little bit of information, otherwise it could equally be "Where am I...?", which I'm plies the character is lost, instead of looking for something.
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Re: Seven Manhwa
« Reply #7 on: May 09, 2021, 05:08:08 PM »
Thank you suuper-san! Yeah sorry it wasn't so clear and I might go back and edit it! But you're right the character is lost! So at first the character is dead hence the blood and them being on the floor but then finds themselve in hell. So its a little disorienting because they don't really know where they're are and are looking around trying to figure it out.

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Re: Seven Manhwa
« Reply #8 on: May 16, 2021, 06:09:16 AM »
Ahhh I see, very cool!

I'm still getting used to writing scenes myself to be honest!
often we know exactly what's going on in our own minds, but we don't always convey the right things to the readers :P
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Re: Seven Manhwa
« Reply #9 on: May 16, 2021, 06:52:38 AM »
Ahhh I see, very cool!

I'm still getting used to writing scenes myself to be honest!
often we know exactly what's going on in our own minds, but we don't always convey the right things to the readers :P

Omg been thinking bout this a bit lately.

Story writing and story telling through your chosen medium. Two very different things.

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Loving this. I get all happy and warm fuzzy feelings when I see people drawing their own comics. It keeps me going seeing others push through all the obstacles.
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Re: Seven Manhwa
« Reply #10 on: May 16, 2021, 04:41:48 PM »
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Story writing and story telling through your chosen medium. Two very different things.
100%, although there will be some overlap with generic things like character design. working with your chosen medium to get the most out of it is very important.
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