Chapter 3:
I hadn't written very far ahead (or planned the magic system too far) when I wrote the healing not properly working on him, and it seems like more of a plot hole because I never addressed it. You're not far off, he does have a general magic resistance, but that also doesn't work well or consistently (also why would you resist healing? it's a glitch as well)
In my opinion for food use-by dates, there's a scale factor involved. i.e. if it lasts a year, one week more doesn't make a difference (~2%more), but if it only lasts 3 days (e.g. seafood), then a week puts you in massive danger (~200%more). So I think a tin will go much longer out of date (also the companies have to err on the side of caution)
Yeah this entire manga is an awful remake of The Gamer with an Isekai twist to be honest, that was basically the core of my inspiration.
Chapter 4:
thanks yeah some of these title pages turned out quite nice as well, although past about chapter 6 I kinda skimped on the backgrounds and so they weren't as great as they could have been. This chapter cover is probably my ultimate favourite over all the manga I did, as it's very full of energy and artistic balance as well.
I really wanted to show that Will had left things behind in his old world - as you say it's not touched on hardly at all in other Isekais and that's somewhat disturbing to me - that they have nothing or noone that they mind leaving behind. Obviously that makes them a prime target for an Isekai, but it's hard to relate to. Like they miss nothing at all, not even late-night corner shops? internet? google?
I wanted to show a lot of Will's emotions but I figured it would take up too many chapters and ultimately get nowhere, so I moved on but at least I touched on it.
almost all the other Isekai not even level up their MC to begin with, they START the entire thing OP as hell, and it infuriates me no end. Any levelling they put in (so they can say "see, they earned it!") is fundamentally pointless since after one episode they end up OP anyway and it's just fanservice and poor writing in my opinion. Everyone might want to see explosions and awesomeness, but make it realistic and earned and it will feel far better.
ahaha great new idea! There's plenty of Isekai sub-genre that haven't been fully addressed by a hit manga yet, so there's a lot of room for exploration (in more ways than one :P). Personally I want to find a new genre outside of Isekai because it feels like it's getting overused and saturated with poor stories now.
I'll work on adding more zoomed out panels. Part of the issue is whenever someone speaks I try to have them in view, which I finally realised isn't always necessary if it's clear who is speaking, and secondly silent panels can have any composition since noone is talking. Composition of shots took quite a back seat in this project since I was working on just drawing ANYTHING to any standard. My next massive project will try and feature more composition and skill in the art department :P
Glad you think it resembles other manga in the composition area, I'm currently putting off a massive research project on heavily analysing a lot of manga to understand composition, camera angles and so on. I'll likely do that before my next massive project, perhaps :P
I did try and make this manga and MC a lot more lighter on the emotions, so it could lean into comedy sections easier and be more lighthearted story in general.
Yeah I didn't see a need to make mana-exhaustion fatal in this story, since "you can live without magic so why would you die from not having it?". It also mirrors the gamey-feel of MP running out and you just have to wait for it to recharge with no negative effects.
the chapter ending was sort of chopped at the best location, I didn't originally plan for the falling asleep to be the chapter end, but I literally couldn't cut the chapter anywhere else, so it naturally turned out alright, but no skill of mine ahahaha
Chapter 5:
I've never slept overnight on grass, but it's basically as comfortable as a carpet. I've dozed on grass on warm days before and minus the bugs, it's surprisingly very comfortable. Easy enough to sleep for hours I think.
I did a bit of tonal testing for night-feel but gave up since I didn't want to spend a lot of time on it. I really wasn't sure how to make it nighttime without pasting a 30% grey over EVERYTHING in sight, so I left it white after the first page or so.
The MC being reluctant to remake himself unfortunately fuels a lot of (not so very interesting) non-plot in the entire manga. This was a result of me trying to avoid the normal gung-ho Isekai MC trope.
"Indie Universe" is not very far off from what it is to be honest, and the reason behind the original "Beta Reincarnation" title, as in "Beta Tester", for a game. The reason it's called Omega is that there are many worlds, each with a god/gods ruling it, and the one Will has landed in is a new world with a newbie god (with his world ranked last - Omega), so the world isn't properly set up yet and Will isn't properly integrated and the game system is broken as hell. I missed out on a lot of other ways I could have hinted more at this or revealed more in the "White Room", but I was working on a tight time budget and didn't have the time nor the experience to write anything better this time around :P
At the point in time Will uses the fireball he's not OP, just sort of general ability at the moment, but he doesnt have a lot of issues such as learning spells, so he's still got a lot going for him.
I considered Alpha World, but I think the meaning would be lost, as alpha games dont get as much coverage as beta games do, since alpha version is more in the developers room and doesnt leave until it's beta, so it's not really mentioned in forums/news etc.
Incidentally Will himself is from the Alpha World, which is the most advanced world out of all of them in terms of society and technology.
Dariel is just super stoked at this point to be an adventurer so it's more like his adrenaline never went down from the previous day ahahaha
Chapter 6:
Yeah the string solution came to me, not sure the exact order of how that worked. I think I wanted to make Will useful to them, to make them indebted to him and to show his resourcefulness, so I made sure that they wouldn't get the herbs in time, then I had to figure out what would Will have in his backpack that sounds plausible, and what would I do to solve the issue, and I figured "mark the plants somehow". It didn't feel so epicly cool as a solution but there was a bit of a nice logic shift from "the plants have to be picked in a small timeframe" to "they can be picked whenever as long as we know which ones".
Yes sadly virtually noone ends up in their dream job, and in some cases their dream job doesnt properly exist or it's so difficult to get into because of lack of availability. For example me wanting to be a mangaka :P
I think I originally planned something like Dariel left and Darice went after him the next day, and she's only just caught up with him the hour previously before the slime chapter, so it's still the same day Darcie left the house, and she didn't figure she'd need to pack food, or anything useful.
Sometimes sitting figures are easier because you only have to draw the upper half of the character. But that comes with its own set of challenges. Drawing at the low quality I did probably masks a lot of problems because of the loose lines.
ehehe you're getting a lot of interesting ideas off my mangas XD
now you've given me one - an Isekai where the girl MC ends up working as a maid but she really wants to adventure, and she's really OP and keeps destroying the shop by accident (and therefore has to keep working there to repay them for the damage) I'll add that to my list :P
yeah Will is a generally Niceguy(TM). I wasn't sure how much of a priority to make his survival instincts. i.e. "I'm only sticking with these kids to survive - I dont care about them at all", but that felt kinda bad.
goodness knows what happened to the purse - I did that just to make the struggles easier to write, and add some urgency to things to move the story on. Also saved them renting a room and the plot going nowhere.
I've never been super broke but I can imagine yeah wouldn't want that again...T_T
Loraine knows Dariel already from previously, they kinda grew up together as they're from nearby villages, as shown by the interaction with Darcie next chapter.
chanting the spell increases its strength, but not by crazy much as explained later. Also I noticed this discrepancy as well, but given the amount she uses this spell, it would be hard NOT to be proficient and to therefore skip the incantation.
Chapter 7:
nope the guildmaster was just a name drop I'm afraid. But he'll eventually turn up when Will registers as an adventurer, but I've not written it.
Darcie doesn't want to be an adventurer because it's uncertain (financially and otherwise) and dangerous, and she doesn't want to leave home. She also feels a responsibility to look after her parents and eventually take over the clinic they run.
ahaha only the first level of city drawing so far - there's a lot more to just cubes with roofs that I need to learn. Going to try and steal the style from Fairy Tail because those buildings and cities always look so neat and detailed, but they're actually deceptively simply constructed.
mehhhh it probably smells a bit, but it saves being cold from the night air, although it's set roughly in spring so it's not crazy cold at night. Also blankets and hay to sleep on.
hmmmm a very interesting question about building a car. I dont have extensive knowledge in car/engine mechanics to say "yeah I could totally build one", but I know enough to almost give it a shot, plus I'm used to working through prototypes and stuff to gain new experience and knowledge. The main issue would be that an engine requires very complex and precise manufacture (not to mention precise operation), and some methods wouldn't even exist yet in a medieval world (such as an electrical spark). An electric car would probably be easier methinks as an electric motor is much easier to make and is much more forgiving of bad tolerances (assuming you can figure out how to make a battery). Assuming all the materials could be procured there's a half decent chance it would work, but given the non-smooth roads in the current era it would never go anywhere (and would require constant maintenance methinks). you'd be best off making something else useful, like a toothbrush and toothpaste.
indeed even if it was there it would be bugged :P
ahahaha would be a great series name
coffee probably exists but it hasn't started to be imported yet. This is based off a medieval setting and so there's not much variation in goods yet.
There's already an OP Farmer manga lol if you can believe it. I lost interest after about 50 chapters but it starts massively interesting from a construction/learning to survive in another world viewpoint. Isekai Nonbiri Nouka if you care to read it.
it is 50% meta commentary but also that is the village structure, it's closer to a hamlet or whatever is the next thing smaller than a village. That's also partly why they have travelled to the other town on occasion as it is bigger and has things not sold at their hometown (homehamlet?)
yup Darcie is super polite and a Verygoodgirl(TM)
Chapter 8:
I semi-tried to make the covers relevant to the chapter content although it wasn't a big thing.
Dariel is mostly self-taught, he's got friends that also learn magic as an interest like he does. so they sort of bounce off each other for tips and ideas. Generally most children will play with magic as it doesn't require anything other than yourself. and boys lean towards destructive magic because of course.
they know what toast is but not the term when used to mean "I'm toast!". "you're a piece of cooked bread?"
I did wonder if that would be misunderstood when I wrote it tbh :P
hmmmmm the family are definitely competent healers, but given the medieval structure, people dont travel far for their needs, and so he's the village doctor basically. something like that. and children will take on their parents skills in this setting as they did in real life past.
ehehe yeah it was pretty chekhov's gun mentioning an unhealable person at this point.
yeah I was short on dialogue and didn't really know what do do for adding more scenes with the chopping wood. also chapter length wouldn't allow it as I'd already decided the cut probably by then. I did speed up some sections just to move the story forward because knowing me I could write a whole chapter on chopping wood and the story would go nowhere.
generally on my medieval research I found that travellers were quite well received by villagers as they went about their travels, so generally most people would be happy to have a traveller stay with them and hear stories of where they have been and what they have seen.
Chapter 9:
ahaha true true on the title page XD
noob programmer indeed. Unfortunately never explained in the entire first volume of the story, or even hinted at properly (although you sort of guessed it there so perhaps I hinted well enough?) always hard to tell how much to give away and when.
They're normal chickens because I ain't making a new animal and then drawing it 100 times lol
glad the flow has been followable. This story has simple settings, I dont move about much, but generally I've had a solid idea of where the characters are, and so that has helped in drawing them in the scene well.
healing doesnt work on old injuries, because they have already healed. kinda makes sense when you look at it that way. I never gave his injury a backstory, but your theory makes a massive amount of sense with the hinting I gave earlier. Perhaps he was hiding his injury and didn't want his parents finding out, and it only became an issue as he got older (like a sports injury or something), or he was out camping far away from a village and had to strap his own leg up. ouch. dont want to think too much about that otherwise it'll be
127 Hours all over again. Never seen that film but I can imagine.
Hmmmmm DIY in japanese is apparently "Nichiyou daiku" i.e. Sunday carpentry. ahahaha.
glad you like the small talk. I like adding it, but it can take away from actual plot, and takes up valuable page real-estate, so I'm still getting to grips with how to fill a chapter.
"BECAUSE OF ANIME AND MANGA" Meme. Let it be a meme pleaseeee
Maybe in my next life as a hamburger?
Made me spit air XD
I tried to make the chapter titles fit but I generally kept to one word abstract phrasing.
In this case Will skips one of the requirements, but using the chant he fulfils another. I went with the fact that the fireballs were unreliable last time and so he wants to learn it "properly". But his magic sense is totally overpowered since he has this "link" of the Hero System. If I'm honest I can't fully explain why he is overpowered in this scene, I just wanted it to be a contrast and like, a surprise to everyone even Will. Really badly written power system to be honest. It's heavily plot driven unfortunately.
Chapter 10:
I loved the mushroom cloud and the shock combo.
In my head I think the fireball just ate up the target as it went along, so it was probably a well aimed shot. Or Will being surprised by the size of the fireball upset his aim and it went off in a funny angle by accident. I didn't think about that too much.
Ah the answer to that is that Dariel doesn't have good focus, he's easily distracted by things and never finishes stuff he starts, like always on to the next new thing. So he's unknowingly not putting in very good focus, but he thinks he is. Perhaps will's response should have been "No you don't!!", and it would have made more sense.
looking back that was a cute running shot. Probably because I skimped on the face details their expression looks more comical than it should have done ehehe. They weren't meant to look so casual, it was just the scale of the panel didn't allow for the detail.
Also, a comical no speaking running scene? say no more
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jJQXshfncfcyou're welcome :P
I struggle massively with both sequential illustration of actions, but also general flow of plot. Glad you liked the chopping wood but I can't say it was like a conscious "This'll definitely be a good scene" moment.
Dariel is kind of an adventurer fanboy - he's heard stories and also heard adventueres give their own stories as they pass through, so he's giving Will sort of hero-worship I think. But energy is his primary personality component, so whatever he does, it will be loud.
Chapter 11:
I think this is the first birds eye shot I have ever drawn, so it came out quite well.
Yup curse spoiler ahaha I threw that in but never brought attention to it.
I really had no idea what order to reveal world information about the god and so on. Ultimately he has been born into the world for a purpose - the defeat the evil that is growing the other side of the world (thanks to a "prank" from another higher level god)
ahaha I love that finger pose but I think I overuse it a tad because I'm short of other pose ideas. Definitely lacked a variety of stuff like that all over the project.
tbh Will was on the fence mostly as well, as well as me, so that's why it's kinda surprising that he does become an adventurer in the end.
Chapter 12:
I did generally muck about for the chapter titles on this story, mostly because I was so unsure what even made a good cover.
Yup Mr Langford is indeed 100% Jake. I copypasted that personality because that was the easiest thing to do ahaha.
Yeah Dariel answers one typical kind of hero but there are plenty more. People can be a hero for many reasons because hero is a quite vague term like "winner".
was finally glad to give Will purpose he was being far too non-MC so far.
The music, I imagined as a rip-off 8bit mario track. i.e. sort of catchy but you end up hating it real quick.
I definitely need more silent panels. Most of the issue is that I mostly wrote dialogue as the main script content, and so I drew panels to match that. I didn't really write any silent panels in much. Fortunately I take that regret forward into my next project, and hopefully, along with better composition, I'll have some silent panels as well.
Basically the sick girl who is a patient - her parents are utter trash and want her out of the way because they want a firstborn son to inherit the estate or something. So to make it look normal and natural they've paid to have a deadly curse that looks like a disease put on her to kill her off. Yeah I'm sure there were other ways, but the other ways would probably have succeeded. Perhaps other people would suspect them of foul play. Didn't really think too hard for it. Thanks to the Langfords persistence though she's been kept alive massively longer than they wanted. Will can't lift the curse at this point but he removes the debuffs and brings her back to normal, minus the out-of-shape body. She eventually catches Will up later as she wanted to give her thanks, and joins them on their travels . At which point he's OP enough to lift the curse. Her mind is still that of a little girl, despite being I dunno 18 or so, which leads to interesting misunderstandings and situations. Also makes for a perfect 2/2 boy/girl balance. I had in mind Will becomes a sort of father figure to her,but it was just a passing thought.
Will Will' is offically one of my favourite question-sentences now
ngl I tried so hard to not have the word "will" anywhere, especially as the font is always in capitals you can't see the difference. but I love the "Will Will?" combo.
and all your questions are on point, and I sort of answered them as I went along as well.
Bonus:
maybe it depends what countries money you try and rip? UK old paper money ripped quite easily. The new plastic money is indestructible though.
There are a lot of manga moments in many stories where an enemy/monster duplicates on being cut, or has an invulnerability to physical damage. it always adds an interesting bit of logic to the fight as they have to find a new way to defeat it. such as using fire, or destroying a core of sorts.
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