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Author Topic: Amanomai and Nomena [Collab] ("CHOPSTICKS QUEST")  (Read 2758 times)

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Amanomai and Nomena [Collab] ("CHOPSTICKS QUEST")
« on: October 04, 2015, 11:40:18 AM »
Hi guys,

This is the first part of a collaboration work I am doing with Amanomai.

Title: CHOPSTICKS QUEST (Part 1)

To be read from RIGHT to LEFT

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Re: Amanomai and Nomena [Collab] ("CHOPSTICKS QUEST")
« Reply #1 on: October 04, 2015, 12:29:57 PM »
Love it :thumbs:

Simple and humorous story, clean and well drawn character art.

The best thing about it in my opinion is the page layouts, which are well thought out and executed.

Only found 1 grammar issue ("I don't understand how the rich think") (also don't get what the "Transfer" thing is...?

Art-wise something to work on is the scene art, could be a bit more detailed and made to match the aesthetics of the characters a little more. Also some settings are completely missing - such as the throne room and maybe the outside of Ton's house in the country.

Good stuff though :)

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Re: Amanomai and Nomena [Collab] ("CHOPSTICKS QUEST")
« Reply #2 on: October 04, 2015, 05:20:57 PM »
Thanks NO1SEY :)

It was a great practicing, though yeah, we were still short in setting details...I guess that is where our backgrounding skills limited us...lol

Amanomai would reply better to your question since he is the one who type the text in...but I think "Transfer" is an SFX meaning the Queen used magic to teleport the tuna in the room, like transferring the tuna in the room  :-\
« Last Edit: October 04, 2015, 05:22:35 PM by Nomena-Alrina »

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Re: Amanomai and Nomena [Collab] ("CHOPSTICKS QUEST")
« Reply #3 on: October 09, 2015, 10:11:33 PM »
Very funny manga.  With the transfer thing, I think you could use the word summon but I didn't find that to be a big of an issue.

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Re: Amanomai and Nomena [Collab] ("CHOPSTICKS QUEST")
« Reply #4 on: October 09, 2015, 10:32:48 PM »
Forgot to mention this but mangas are pretty much in all caps with centered aligning.  Now that I look back, some of the speech bubbles touch the text or get extremely close. 

Also, I know this is on the internet but there are a couple of times you go past the safety zone.  Basically in manga they don't type outside the safety zone because when it in a book, you can't read between the 2 pages or it would be extremely hard to read it

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Re: Amanomai and Nomena [Collab] ("CHOPSTICKS QUEST")
« Reply #5 on: October 15, 2015, 07:02:00 AM »
Thank you for checking this out Matsui ^^...we will keep your remarks in mind for the future ^^

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Re: Amanomai and Nomena [Collab] ("CHOPSTICKS QUEST")
« Reply #6 on: October 31, 2015, 06:46:37 PM »
I love hilarious stuff like this hahaha. You seem to be the collab queen Nomena. I should also definitely write more Grey Souls this week when I have time.

Would like to see how this turns out. Always fun to read manga on the site haha

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Re: Amanomai and Nomena [Collab] ("CHOPSTICKS QUEST")
« Reply #7 on: November 01, 2015, 11:02:19 AM »
I love hilarious stuff like this hahaha. You seem to be the collab queen Nomena. I should also definitely write more Grey Souls this week when I have time.

Would like to see how this turns out. Always fun to read manga on the site haha

I'll take that title with great honour lego ^^ ... cooperation runs the world one says...I don't really know when we will have time to finish this though  :-\

Sure you can go ahead and write more Grey Souls whenever you feel like...I'll take a look at it...I might also start illustrating it some time soon... putting some particular scenes or character designs in the main post...doing it as a manga still feels like a too long way to go considering my curent time schedule  :unsure: