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Video / PC Games / Re: What is your favorite fight game?
« on: September 28, 2010, 02:56:54 PM »
I'm a Pure, Die Hard, Hardcore King Of Fighters Fan!^^ Nothing more!!!^^

Manga Art Gallery / Re: TrueFiction manga Art
« on: September 28, 2010, 01:13:48 PM »
Thank you all Very much!!^^ Yes My little sister is the artist I only supply the ideas of who  the characters and Their personality in most cases though I like her try have her come up with the looks she always makes up the outfits she is really good with that. She will be extremely happy to know how everyone felt about these arts since it's how sh draws now.^^ I hope manga goes somewhere in the future as well. I know my sister will be the main reason why heh heh.^^

P.S. oh yea there is many different mixes in this story including Gothic lol.^^

Manga Art Gallery / Re: TrueFiction manga Art
« on: September 28, 2010, 10:12:31 AM »
Sorry about the quality. Like i said before all we had now for her new art work is picture phone stuff, though hopefully you all still like it. These art here are most of the new arts she has done now. after this I can only post the old art well not so old arts that we were able to get on the computer. They maybe a little old though we'd like you too see more characters in our story.^^


This is nosiop Look at his name for a bit and you'll be able to guess his powers.^^

Here is a spoiler scene lol, Lazaro (kid with jacket) and Nelson (big head) Sadly a cunt of Nelsons cool hair was cut from the pic making his head look weird..

I personally love this one the most. The Evil TaiLei and Dalia.^^

Manga Art Gallery / Re: [aero]'s Junk
« on: September 28, 2010, 09:43:21 AM »
Wow this look great, I wouldn't be able to tell of mistakes.^^ It looks straight out of anime! I never heard of air gear but from what I see it must be really cool!^^

Manga Art Gallery / Re: Last Traveler (Dec 2006)
« on: September 28, 2010, 09:38:42 AM »
That's really cool how this manga looks. The background, effect, and sound effects really gives this a manga feel^^

WOW!!^^ Your art work is so incredible. The coloring and shadows look perfect!! you truly have a talent there!!!^^

Manga Art Gallery / Re: WrittenSound Originals? :D
« on: September 26, 2010, 09:31:30 AM »
The phone one really is the best!^^ I also like the second one and boy with the really bad scare in his eye.^^ he is the same one with the guy with the knife right? They are all really nice the coloring good, what did you use that time?^^

Manga Art Gallery / Re: TrueFiction manga Art
« on: September 26, 2010, 09:21:38 AM »
Thank You Very Much!!!^^ My sister is happy to know that you like her improvement. We are surprised you critiqued everyone with detail, sorry we put so many lol it must have been tiring.^^" I really wish we could post the really new ones up, but I don't really like how the picture phone thing though we did do it with a few. I'll still post them, but for now  as well i'll post some of her old arts just so everyone can see all our different character we have in our story of TrueFiction.^^

Manga Art Gallery / Re: TrueFiction manga Art
« on: September 25, 2010, 08:38:33 PM »
Well I finally got a little more time. Here are some of my sisters recent art work all based off our manga.^^

This guy is a perfect example for our goal and dream. He is a crossover my cousin's friend who took and interest. He drew a pic and we converted him into our story, lol our first participating fan!^^

This is Emma in one of our ep. pics, notice the shadow in the back.

This droopy fellow is Nelson's right hand man in the future. He is very lazy, but very powerful...

Paul someone some how important too Emma.. only lol

Another drawing of Selina a main cast.^^

It's Nelson when he gets a little older..^^

Emma at the Beach!!^^

This boy one of Nelsons Deadly Tigers..

The girls Night out Dalia Emma Selina..^^

These girls may look Nice and Happy but there aren't to Lazaro... lol^^

Another one of Nelson's Deadly Tigers


The Coolest Deadly tiger!^^

Sorry I got to go but Soon I'll be back for more hopefully you enjoy the arts!!^^

Manga Art Gallery / Re: TrueFiction manga Art
« on: September 23, 2010, 10:11:14 PM »
Everything is nicely 'inkish' Your sister has a good style.  I especially like the black and white ones, the shading looks really worked on.

Thank you very much!! I'm glad you think so, she is practicing a lot on the inking. She is improving very well.^^

The last one was good too :] I think she could move the placement of the facial features on a few of the characters, though. Like the one with the black hair: she should shift everything upwards just a little bit, or change the position his head is angled. It looks a little funny to me. I think the one in the middle with the hair over his eye is Chris, right? He looks great He's my favorite based on appearance in the picture. And if you add anything new soon I'd be happy to add my input! ^_^

 yea I see what you mean on the placement thing. Ah Nelson we have the most trouble trying to get his character right lol weather it's looks or hair lol.^^"" Though it's has gotten better. Yes your right Chris, lol It's very true he is the best looking one there besides Lazaro in my case lol^^ But I would have to say Chris as himself would think the same way heh heh with his personality.^^ I will be looking forward to more of your input written I will show my sister so she can improve more. I'll try to post more as soon as I can but The time I have lately this week only gave me to do so much with this site. I've been mostly only able to reply to comments.^^""" I hope tomorrow or this weekend I have more time.^^

Manga Art Gallery / Re: TrueFiction manga Art
« on: September 23, 2010, 04:16:29 PM »
The biggest critique I have is with the hair of some characters. It's alright to fill in a darker hair color but the scratchy hair fills make it look messy. Your sister can greatly improve this by having a few stroke lines to indicate direction and then a solid and consistent pencil-filled shading with light reflections to give the drawing a much cleaner look.

The character designs are great though. They each have personality and style. =)

Thank you very much REDRYUGA and SAIAWKEYE for your comments.^^ SAIHAWEYE for you critique I fully see where you are coming from I will post her most recent arts to see if she has improved to you.^^

Manga Art Gallery / Re: TrueFiction manga Art
« on: September 22, 2010, 11:18:27 PM »
Thank you everyone!^^ I will let my sister know what everyone thought I soon as I can. I can't wait to not be so busy. Though I have to say I am very glad you all like the second one because everything else besides the last one pretty much out dated from what she draws now, but all the drawings are kinda mixed up on my face book so I just got what I felt was good from her really old ones to the only two new ones. The last pic is the final look for the main cast. we've been trying to get that right lol. I'm glad to like my pirate edit I just winged it from photoshop long ago lol... Well then when I have the time i'll look for all the arts of the style you like cause there are some the really really new ones are hard to get on but we will try it may have to be crappy picture phone like the last one. But thank you all!!^^ Special thanks to you written for your input.^^ 

Manga Art Gallery / TrueFiction manga Art
« on: September 22, 2010, 08:27:24 PM »
Hello everyone I'm not much of an artist I just do the script writing.^^ I little starter is the artist. She works on the character arts for our manga. She works very hard and I am very proud of her progress!^^ Even though she feels as though her work isn't good at all. Well here they  are hopefully you like them! All art work is past and present work of our manga Called TrueFiction.^^ I'll post what I can a day.^^

This is a real old drawing the first one for our first Ep. actually my sisters art changed a bit from then. They are named Emma and Lazaro. you can see the difference From Emma here and the one from the second drawing.^^

One of our main cast! Her name is Emma

This is another old one. The other one who changed thought was Selina who is in the for left. The boy is Nelson, and the girl in the right is Dalia.^^

This is Karson. He is the ultimate evil in our story. Just recently he went through a major change because My sister did feel he was "Evil" looking enough plus it was and ancient drawing lol saddy we can't post his new look at the moment.


Now when My sister drew the picture up above I took it and tried my newbie editing.^^"" Well he doesn't look like this anymore saddly but I still wanted everyone to see it.^^

Well hope you like these they are mostly old arts but the one of only Emma. I'll post more soon. I'll try some latest ones.^^ Thank you everyone!!^^

Here are a few more of my sisters arts for TrueFiction.

 This is Dalia one of the main casts. she has a spicy yet icy attitude. Beware...

Here's a lovely episode pic of the starting main cast. Emma is the captain, Selina is on top, The girl and boy looking through the scopes are Dalia and Lazaro. Nelson is the only guy left.

This was one of my starting edits.

This here is a future picture Far future, I haven't even written that far yet. This is Lazao in his Blood lust form.

Here is also a future picture Far future, I haven't even written that far yet either lol. This is nelson in a fierce new look.

This would be our sixth new member to our main cast. Chris this is an old picture though I'll try and look for a better one.

Now this guy is our final member to the cast, Brian.

Now the Whole Cast!!^^ Lazaro is on the champagne, Chris is on the Turkey leg, Brian is wearing the funny hat with the cheesy smile, Emma is hanging from the glass, Dalia is in the Glass, and Finally Selina is under the glass modeling.^^ Hope fully you like them all I'll post more soon!! Please let us know what you think!!^^

Manga Creations / Re: TrueFiction/ A manga my family and I are Working on
« on: September 22, 2010, 07:00:54 PM »
Lego already hit up many of the points that I was thinking of so I won't go into those.

There are really two things that I would like to say:
1) The way you have it written makes it difficult for us to grasp what is going on. The script/manuscript style is really good for when you begin actual production of the pages but it makes it difficult for us to grasp what is going on because our train of thought is broken each time we have to read a name to figure out what's going on. Even worse is that we have to think of a "voice" that the character would have as they speak. One key thing I encourage for writers is to make the reading more accessible by setting up a format that makes the reading easier on the eyes and the mind.
2) The writing is a bit confusing. I felt like many points (like the very beginning of the first) were infodumps that pretty much took away my energy even more.

The story itself has good grounding but as Lego said it seems that multiple chapters are grouped into one. You can improve the pacing and character development a lot better if you slowed down a little bit and gave us time to digest names and events occurring.

The comedic elements you have are pretty good and you have a great imagination. Just be sure to clearly explain your world to us so that we may enjoy it better.

As for your sister's artwork she has potential. It's great to read that your family is working on this story together and I would like to see you improve your skills together with us over time. =)

Thank you for your advice. Thinking from what you and lego said about the characters and getting to understand and know them a little before it all begins I am going to create a new beginning. this well not change everything of the first ep it will just make ep 2 or three.

Welcome Center / Re: Hello Everyone^^
« on: September 21, 2010, 11:03:26 PM »
I kinda... can't read your story yet. =|  lol   Every time I start to read my mind wanders elsewhere. Give me until Friday. ^^;

Oh no there is no time limit, I can understand if its rough to read or understand, it really wasn't make the first  time wrote it to been seen by anyone, we were just going to just straight out draw it but we are having tough times with it and so much time has past that at least letting people know something new is getting worked on is out there thats enough.^^ I'll be posting my sisters arts of the characters in the story if you are interested. the story you don't really have to go through all the trouble.^^ I wouldn't want to bother anyone like that.^^

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