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Manga Artists Wanted / [For Hire | Paid] Web-Comic Artist
« on: May 10, 2021, 12:48:34 AM »
Hi there! My name is Wynter and I am a Web-Comic artist. The format that I do works well for sites like Webtoon and Tapas. I am offering a rather simple style so my prices are on the cheaper side of things. Basically, if you have a story that you love, and want to see your story come to life, you have come to the right place.

My work is coloured and I use a cel-shading anime style. Here is an example of my typical panels:

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So prices:

I charge per panel 

A face shot costs $4 USD +$2 USD per character

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A torso shot costs $6 USD +$3 USD per character

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A full body shot $8 USD+ $4 USD per character

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Simple Backgrounds are an extra $2 USD per panel.

Medium level backgrounds are an extra $4 USD per panel

Complex backgrounds are an extra $8 USD per panel (use em' wisely)


No NSFW content unless you wanna pay extra $$$

Minimum of 6 panels per episode, please.

Payment is done through Paypal and I charge 25% upfront.

Please PM me if you are interested and we can discuss more. :)


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break Room / Re: Tea or Coffee?
« on: April 29, 2018, 08:44:32 PM »
I drink waay too much ice coffee from Tims (like... a majority of my money is spent on ice coffee)

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break Room / Re: What do you do when you are bored?
« on: October 18, 2017, 07:54:54 PM »
I start by complaining to my friends that I'm bored, then to my mom and then to whoever else will listen.

Eventually, one of these lovely people will renind me that I either have homework that meeds to be done or they'll give me a list of stuff I could be doing (Drawing my webcomic, writing, reading manga, watching anime, ect....) and I'll reluctantly give in and end up forgetting that I was bored in the first place.

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Members Manga / Re: Texting Buddies (Should I continue dis?)
« on: October 01, 2017, 11:16:11 PM »
Thank you for the advice, I'll definitely finish the first chapter and then I'll see how it goes from there.

 I thought about doing a manga format at first, but I'm a little worried about the paneling, I'd need to get better at figuring out how to make it flow properly. (If that makes any sense)

"It" was one of the main inspirations of the first arc, along with the clown apocalypse that took place yesterday.

Thanks for the reply     c:

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Members Manga / Texting Buddies (Should I continue dis?)
« on: September 21, 2017, 06:59:31 PM »
I made a thing today, debating if I should continue it. c: (More of a webcomic format then manga)
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Manga Writer workshop / Re: Writers Novel Workshop 2.0
« on: August 28, 2017, 12:14:38 AM »
Hello everyone c: I put together a little activity so that we'd get to know our characters better.

All you need to do is fill out all the character sheet below, if some things don't apply to your character then you can just skip over them. You don't need to answer them all, just answer as much as you want to.

Also, it's up to you how many characters you want to do this for.

Hope you enjoy 👌





Character Sheet
General Info
Character’s Name:
Name’s meaning:
Who named this character:
Loves or hates name:
Nickname(s):
Gender:
Birth Date:
Zodiac Sign:
Birth Place:

Appearance
Picture: (Optional)
Height:
Weight:
Build:
Race:
Species (If applicable):
Blood Type:
Skin Color:
Birthmarks:
Hair Color/ Length/ /Type/ Style
Eye Color:
Eye shape/ size:
Nose shape:
Teeth:
Complexion:
Facial hair:
Tattoos:
Clothing/ Style:

Physical Characteristics
Illnesses:
Physical limitations:
Allergies:
Scars/Injuries:
Stance:
Mannerisms::
Physical/ Mental augmentations:

Character Pych and Preferences
Temperament:
IQ:
Level of ambition:
Self confidence:
Self control:
Self Esteem:
Nervous tics:
Soothers:
Soft spots:
Cruel Streaks:
Humor:
Regrets:
Secrets:
Pet peeves:
Honesty:
Loyalty:
Patience:
Insecurities:
Predictability:
Reliability:
Respect:
Responsibility:
Trustworthiness:
Fears:
Failings/ Weaknesses:
Favorite Color:
Favorite Food:
Most hated food:
Alcohol/ Drug use:
Favorite music:
Most hated music:
What does character hate about self?:

What is character proud of:

What does character desire more than anything else? Why? What is standing in the way?

Describe a formative/ traumatic/ significant childhood event, and how it affected your character:

How would a stranger perceive character?

How does family perceive character?

How mentally stable is your character?



Background
Place of birth:
Grew up:
Lives now:
Religious:
Ethical:
Political:
Talents:
Skills:
Education/ Training:
Occupation:

Family
Mom: (Name, Age, Ect..)
Dad:
Other(s)
Relationship between parents:
Relationship with character:
# Of Siblings:
Name(s) of siblings:
Age(s):
Birth Order:
Relationship with character:

Romantic Interest:
Define relationship:
How did they meet:
How long together:
Biggest issue between them:

Other Relationships
Worst enemy:
How did this relationship start?:
Best Friend:
How did this relationship start?:
Role model:
How did this relationship start?:
Mentor:
How did this relationship start?:
Combat (If applicable)
Ability:
Element:
Martial Arts:
Immunities:
Resistances:
Strengths:
Weaknesses:
Futilities:
Restrictions:
Signature move:
Special Attack:
Courage Level:
Type of fighter (Runs in? Strategizes? Flights from afar?

I borrowed most of these questions from these two sources
 http://www.stlcc.edu/Student_Resources/Academic_Resources/Writing_Resources/Writing_Handouts/Character_Development_Worksheet.pdf
https://theboson.deviantart.com/art/Blank-Character-Sheet-2-1-8-390-Questions-460031650

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Manga Writer workshop / Re: Writers Novel Workshop 2.0
« on: August 26, 2017, 01:52:48 PM »
Story: Forever in Our Dreams
Genre: Fantasy, Thriller, Psychological

Synopsis: Sasha is used to living a picture perfect life, that is until he starts having a similar dream every time he falls asleep.


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Manga Writer workshop / Re: Writers Novel Marathon Workshop: Day 24
« on: August 23, 2017, 08:22:42 PM »
-The Coming Storm-Operative13-
I’m still trying to figure out Allen’s character, so far what I’m getting from him is that he is a responsible, ambitious young man, but I still don’t feel like I know him as a character. Though, I think that the main reason for this is because I haven't had the chance to see how he’ll react during a conflict.

Again, I enjoy seeing your character interactions. I chuckled when Allen’s friends reaction to Allen going to ask for the radio, the way they joked about him being a gonner.

I liked the way that you used the radio as a method to show what was going on somewhere else in the world. I’m wondering what the intensifying fighting in Alva is going to mean for the main characters.

 I liked the last bit about Garrett, I can really see where he is coming from, by the way you describe his thoughts.

Another thing that I really enjoyed was the descriptions in the Battle of Alva section, the way you described the bloodshed and action segments. 

As of this point, I havn't noticed any other Novels that were updated recently.

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Develop Your Story / Re: Forever in Our Dreams [Novel Marathon Workshop]
« on: August 22, 2017, 11:18:38 PM »
Part 8
Word Count: 1115
RS Day #23
Part 8
He bit his lip in frustration, wishing that he could just bury all his silly feelings.

With the intention of not delaying things any further, Cato advised “L-Let's get to the point” making it a point to look into Sasha’s eyes, so that he was forced to continue with the conversation.


Sasha nodded his head, wanting to give Cato a chance to answer his questions without causing the boy to cower. He couldn't understand why, but for some reason the boys tendencies seemed to reside with him. The way he spoke softly made Sasha instinctively treat him gently, with care, which he wouldn't normally do with someone he just met.

“S-So this place, let's start by saying that it is not some sort of paradise, so don't believe any lies that Kamil may tell you.”

“Kamil?” Sasha questioned, not recognizing the name which left his tongue.

“O-Oh right, sorry, I should probably explain who and what Kamil is..or would you rather know what this place is?” Cato asked, not sure which direction to take with his explanation, he had never been very good at getting information across.

Sasha didn't need to think too hard to decide on his answer. He was more interested in learning what this dream world he kept stumbling upon was, rather, than finding out who this Kamil person that Cato mentioned was. Sure, he was curious, but the dream worlds meaning took priority.

“Can you tell me what this place is first?” Sasha asked.

“S-Sure that's doable.” Cato murmured, his dull eyes focused on Sasha as he continued “This place is a-”




“Dammit Sasha! Wake up already! Class is finished.” Todd nagged, as he tugged on Sasha’s white collared shirt.

Sasha’s eyes popped open, his thoughts still focused on what Cato was about to say. Dammit He thought, I just had to wake up at the worst possible moment! 

He rested his head against the desk, forcing his eyes to close, trying desperately to fall back asleep. He wanted to know what Cato was about to tell him, to learn more about his situation and he felt terrible, just leaving Cato there.

With attitude, Todd huffed “Look man, you can't just sleep here, there's a class after!”

Sasha wanted to argue with him, but he saw that his friend had a point. Acknowledging his defeat, he forced himself up from his chair, taking the time to pack up the textbooks that he hadn't touched.

“I can't believe you slept through the entire class! Like, seriously man, get more sleep or something” exclaimed Todd.

Sasha nodded his head in response, still upset that his dream had been cut short it was finally getting interesting he complained to himself, remembering the timid way Cato spoke to him, a shy smile forming on his face over the memory.


Kamil lay in a pool of her own ruby red blood, her previously white dress was now drenched in cherry red. She cold smell a metallic scent in the air, as she continued the process of restoring her neck to its regular state.

“Now now, Kamil, that looks uncomfortable” a sly voice beamed, as it's owner approached the restrained girl.


She sighed “It’s been awhile Dagon”

“Yes, it has” Dagon replied, his toned figure towering over her tiny form.

“I didn't think these types of games interested you” Kamil murmured, while she reconnected the the blood vessels in her neck.

Dagon grinned “You know that I've always had my sights on that Cato boy. What a tragedy, really, I can't help but feel sorry for the kid.” A frown appearing on his narrow face.

“I can never tell if you're being serious or not.” Kamil groaned, she was just beginning to repair the tissue on her neck.

“You’re so cruel, I'm being sincere when I say that I pity him.” he whined,

“I don't quite understand how you can feel anything towards humans, they're so below us, I hope you aren't growing soft now, Dagon.”

“Says the girl stuck to the ground” he huffed, slanting the inner half of his eyebrows mischievously. 

“Why yo-”

“Anyways, I'm definitely not growing soft, Cato’s a special case, I couldn't care less about the rest of these low life's.” he reassured her, 

“It’s true that his circumstances are different, but doesn't that just make crushing him more fun?”

“I'm far more interested in destroying Sasha” Dagon stated with a devious smile.




The cafeteria was bustling with conversation, but Addison was too focused on sketching in her notepad to notice. She wasn’t up to talking to Sasha, especially after his comment concerning her earlier. So, she focused on moving her pen across the paper, making sure to add texture to the hair. She wanted to do her subject justice, but she wasn’t sure if she was getting the face right, she couldn’t quite capture the girl's beauty in her art. It’s hard trying to picture her in my head, it’d be so much easier if she was just standing here. Addison groaned.

She tried again to picture the girls face in mind, remembering large eyes which were framed by prominent eyelashes, bright red lips which matched ruby eyes. She said her name was Kamil Addison recalled, deciding to write the girl’s name under her drawing, in an attempt to make it more obvious that the drawing was actually of Kamil.

She was caught off guard when she noticed that Sasha was peering over her shoulder, his eyes locked on her drawing. She quickly slammed her notebook shut, not wanting him to see it before she was happy with it herself.

Kamil? Sasha asked himself, knowing that the name on her notebook sounded familiar, Oh wait! He remembered as it hit him, Cato had mentioned the name before when they had talked. He said something about not listening to her lies Sasha recalled, then wondering what reason Addison had drawing the girl, she seemed like bad news to him.

Curiosity won him over so he questioned “Kamil? Who’s that?”

Addison looked at Sasha weirdly, surprised by the fact that he had taken an interest in her artwork. I guess that’s a start she acknowledged, believing that Sasha was trying to make it up to her by taking on interest in her work.

“It’s the name of the girl I mentioned this morning, the one that I met in my dream, I figured that I’d try drawing her, but it’s not working out the way I wanted it too”

Oh right, she did mention something like that, huh? Sasha realized, remembering their conversation in the morning, he hadn’t really cared much at the time, but now she was starting to interest him.
RS Day #23

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Manga Writer workshop / Re: Writers Novel Marathon Workshop: Day 22
« on: August 21, 2017, 11:14:07 PM »
-Real Heroik- By GreenBeverage-
Wow, your first paragraph really caught my attention. It really got me hooked, I'm interested in learning why Glade’s parents were hanged, his reaction to this and how he got through this.

The first chapters escape sequence was really creative, I liked how the fat boy that he used as a decoy ended up getting injured because of Glades actions, his reaction gave me some insight of the type of person he is.

Your character descriptions are impressive, the way you describe different parts of them makes them feel very human, I can easily picture them in my mind. (Also loved the addition of the drawings at the bottom! Very nicely done!)

Another thing that was really well done was the world building, I can see that humans and non-humans have a tense relationship but live side by side. I liked the history you gave to heroes and heroines, it gave me good insight on the situation and explained why heroes/ heroines are no longer needed in their developing society.
Your main characters all seem to have distinct personalities, I like the combination of Junko and Reilly, the two seem to make a good team and I’d like to learn more about them. Olivia seems like a hardworking woman, with a strong moral sense. Glade feels more like a mystery, so I'm excited to learn more about him and his goals.

Also, I'm looking forward to meeting Laurens, I'm curious to see what he is like.
-By Heart, By Soul - By shishi02-

Your story really gives me Shounen vibes, the way that Seishun strives to better himself through hard work. I’m expecting some high action scenes in the future with some friendship/bonding moments.

I liked the way that you explained how the powers work, it all made sense to me. I especially liked the concept of a soul anchor and am curious on the sorts of constraints that Seishun is going to need to face.

Another thing that caught my attention was Filla’s trust in Eris, I’m still really looking forward to some background information on how they met and I’m wondering if there is a distinct reason for Filla’s loyalty towards Eris. I’m also questioning Filla’s mindset, whether he was really willing to die in order for Seishun to unlock his abilities or if he just really trusted Eris’s judgment. If it’s the former, then it makes me question what’s going through his head and it makes me wonder if we’re going to get some Filla angst in the future.

I also wanted to mention that I giggled at Filla’s report to general Eris. Oh, and Eris got a little backstory this part, I’m starting to see why he was interested in recruiting Seishun. Plus, he was going to tell Seishun something but then stopped, makes me wonder what he wanted to say, feels like Seishun got cucked there.

-The Coming Storm - By Operative13-
I find that the dialog sounds very realistic for the military, this really makes me take the setting seriously.

When it comes to the explanation of the gun, it looks like you either put a lot of research into firearms or have a really strong knowledge on them. Either way, being able to describe the equipment in such detail adds a lot to the story.

Another part that I enjoyed was Allen’s and Wallace’s interactions, parts like the two of them fighting over who got to be the gunner or Wallace’s failed attempt at carrying the bag were nice, it added some lighthearted humor to the story. Also, very relatable interactions between friends.

That's all I have to say this time around 👌

-Sincerely, Your Dearest Phantom - By OhGodHelpMe-
The awkwardness between your characters at the beginning was a nice touch and it made complete sense considering what went on between them.

The description of the dead angel in the church was really well-written, I especially enjoyed the bit where you described it’s insides, I found it fun to picture.

I'm still questioning the transition, wondering why Yonaka’s heart had to be transferred into Shinya, but I'm sure there is a major reason behind this and I can see it being a big twist.

Now that reveal though! The fact that it was Yonaka’s angel that almost destroyed the world!? The part where she was questioning whether it was her choice to separate was intense! I can really see her emotion as she pleads with Daedalus to answer her.

Props to you for writing this, so far every part is filled with so much emotion and intensity. It’s starting to make more and more sense to me, as the story progresses, like a puzzle coming together.

@GreenBeverage you asked which art style I would choose for this story

So I’m going to say for character designs I’ve always imagined my characters being drawn looking similar to the artstyle of “Seraph of the End”


(Here is a sketch I did of my characters)


I can see the colour palette changing between the slice of life scenes and the dream sequences. (The slice of life bits being paler)

Something like this for the dream bits

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Develop Your Story / Re: Forever in Our Dreams [Novel Marathon Workshop]
« on: August 19, 2017, 08:29:48 PM »
Part 7
Word Count: 1062
Part 7
Cato glared at her confident expression, annoyed by her lack of agony. He wanted her to hurt, he wanted to hear her pained cries, he wished that she would suffer the same way she made him suffer. But he knew that she wouldn't give him that satisfaction, any hope of revenge had been killed off long ago.

He reached into his pack, pulling out a bundle of wooden stakes, which he had carved beforehand. The best he could do was restrain her for a bit, before she had the strength to reattach her destroyed neck.

One by one he nailed the wooden stakes into her clothes, trying his best to ignore her pleasant smile. When his job was complete, he returned to hiding in the shadows, hoping to put some distance between the two of them.

She wasn't strong nor fast, but her regeneration made her a competent opponent, it was an impossible battle, no matter what he did he couldn't rid himself of her. He had no choice but to treat her with caution. He only had one life while she had limitless chances, so one mistake from him and she'd be the winner of their little game.

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   Sasha lay at the edge of the cliff, his back resting on the crystal surface. The old man must not mind me sleeping in class he sighed, remembering that he was still in science class. I'm going to have so much catching up to do he grimly thought with a frown forming on his face.

He jumped when he heard a tumble beneath him, peering over the cliff's border to see if he could locate where the sound was coming from.

But the landscape was too vast for him to pinpoint the single movement he had heard. He sighed, defeated.

In a last ditch effort, he attempted to call out , hoping that someone would come and explain things to him.

“Please”

“Someone, anyone!”

“Where even am I?!”

“Is anyone around?”

“C’mon answer me”

He was about to give up and just mope around endlessly  until he finally just woke up from the dream, but then a quiet voice caught his attention.

“Sasha…”

He tried to detect where the voice was coming from but had little luck, it was too dim and sudden for him to react in time.

“Who's there?” Sasha asked, even though he could tell that the voice belonged to the same boy from before, he wanted an introduction, so that he'd have an idea of who the boy was.

The boy peeked his head from out of the underbrush, his face was drenched in a red layer of what looked to Sasha, like blood. An expressionless gaze masked the boys face and his eyes were staring blankly into the distance.

Trying his best to hide his shock over the boy's blood sullied state, Sasha brushed a hand through his hair and gave the boy a cheerful smile, not wanting to drive him away.

“T-The names Sasha, but I guess you already know that, huh?” Sasha mentioned, trying to make conversation.

The boy’s eyes widened at the introduction, taking a small step back before he nodded his head and replied sheepishly “Cato..M-My name is Cato.”

“Cato, huh? That's a sharp sounding name”

Bombarding Cato with questions didn't seem like the best way for Sasha to start things off, the boy already seemed on edge, so he didn't want to make him more nervous than he already was. 



"Thanks." Cato shrugged, trying to keep up his unreadable face, trying his best to hide his emotions from Sasha.

He didn't exactly know what persuaded him to show his face to Sasha, but it was better that he got to him first, before Kamil had a chance to deceive Sasha's view on this world.

Judging by Sasha's confusion, it looked like Kamil was telling the truth when she said that he wasn't getting there through regular methods, so it seemed pointless to give the boy a warning, telling him not to come back. Instead he'd need to explain things the best he could, to keep Sasha from falling for the same traps as before.

"So.." Cato struggled with his words, "Y-You asked where you were, right...?"
He was trying his best to come up with a way to explain the situation without sounding completely crazy.

"Maybe you should wash off before you start talking" Sasha suggested,  pointing to his blood soaked skin.

Cato winced, the moment he remembered that he was still drenched in Kamil's blood, he didn't have the chance to wash it off before he heard Sasha's calls.


He looked to the ground in a failed attempt to hide his appearance from Sasha's staring eyes. At the realization that he probably looked like a complete mess, not only was he soaked in blood, but his hair was a mess, it was knotted and small twigs were caught in his curls. His clothes were dirty, covered in a mix of mud and rips. Up until now, he couldn't remember the last time he had been self conscious about his appearance, then again, Sasha was the only person that made him want to take care of the way he looked.

“You can wash up upstream and then we can talk.” Sasha murmured calmly.

Cato nodded his head slowly, brushing his sleeve against his face, trying his best to remove the dry blood.

When the pair reached a calmer point of the running river, Cato bent down and splashed the shimmering water against his olive skin, rubbing his cheeks in order to remove the stains. The cold water seemed to be numbing his face as he continued to scrub, but he ignored the chill, bent on cleaning his face.

His messy hair came next, he dipped his head into the rushing water. Grimacing when his head hit the water, as a stroke of pain shot through him, causing his head to ring. He ran his fingers through his shaggy hair, trying to smooth it out and remove any leftover sticks or leaves in the process.

He pulled his hair out of the cool water, allowing it to drip down his back and dampen his clothing. This is stupid  He thought. He had more important things to take care of, but instead he was fretting over the way he looked in Sasha’s presence.

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-The Coming Storm-Operative13-
You did a really good job describing the atmosphere of the scene, the way you started the chapter explaining how sleep is hard to come by in the army. I could especially see how tired Wallace was and this was shown in the way his actions were written.

I like the way that you describe your setting. It gives me enough information that I can imagine the scene in my head, but it doesn't drag on, it gets to the point without boring me.

Another thing that caught my attention was when Allen mentioned that he had responsibilities, it makes me wonder what he means by that. I'm getting the impression that he is taking the soldier thing more seriously than his peers.

I had to look up what territorials were, because I don't have a big military knowledge, so what I understand is that territorials are a sort of emergency force, so judging by their appearance, it looks like the action is about to pick up very soon.

-By Heart, By Soul - shishi02-
The concept of everyone's soul having a specific colour that pretty much determines where they’'ll sit in life is an interesting idea. It makes me wonder which sort of constraints Sheishun is going to have to get past if he wants to fit in during his experience in the army.

I'm going to start by talking about your world, it looks like it's taking place in a modern setting and you explain the important landmarks decently. I get the impression that your world is a big place and it makes me wonder if the characters are going to be moving around a lot.

I found that the conflict started off a little randomly, maybe consider mentioning that Soulless exist and that they are a threat to the people. I'm interested in learning more about them and their origin story.

As for the characters, they didn't really stand out to me, but that's reasonable because its only the start and I haven't gotten a chance to really get to know them.

So far, I found that Leila was the most interesting, her character brings up questions, like why does she insist on being a peddler is its an outdated job and how can she tell that she is going to meet Seishun again.

My impression on Seishun is that he is an underdog and he's going to need to be constantly proving himself in order to get past his souls colour.

Eris seems like a swell guy so far, him and Filla seem to be on good terms, so I wonder if there is going to be any background information behind why Filla admired Eris so much.

The pacing feels a little off from place to place, like I found the big attack on Seishun’s hometown was too fast paced for my liking, but anyways, I'm excited to see how Seishun’s tests go and what Filla was writing in his diary.


-Sincerely, Your Dearest Phantom-OhGodHelpMe-
Again, the way you write your characters emotions is wonderful. I especially liked the way you described Yonaka’s sadness over her eye in the beginning.

Also, you brought in some interesting concepts in this part of your novel, I've never actually thought about language like that, but after reading that portion it got me debating.

I can understand Shinya’s reaction to her mother not remembering that she told her about the suicide. When things start piling up and everyone seems to think that someone is not making sense, they tend to snap.

I liked how Yonaka was stumbling on her words when she was trying to comfort Shinya, the way she had to pause and catch herself before she said something that she shouldn't.

The transition from this tense scene to a more comedic, teasing sort of light hearted scene was well done.

On another note, it looks like the ship has sailed! 👌👌(I think) anyhow this final scene as a whole was very emotion packed, it really showed how much your characters cared for one another and trusted each other.

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Develop Your Story / Re: Forever in Our Dreams [Novel Marathon Workshop]
« on: August 17, 2017, 06:09:34 PM »
Part 6
Word Count: 1938

Part 6

“I guess that makes sense” Addison replied, taking a moment to push away a strand of hair that was blocking her face.

“Hey Sasha,” Addison asked “If you had the chance to escape your life, would you….?” her amber eyes desperate for an answer.

Sasha was confused by her sudden question, not understanding what she was getting at, or where she was coming from with her random question. He didn't bother to mask the confusion in his voice as he responded to her “Why would I need to do that?”

“That's kinda random, isn't it?” Todd questioned, feeling out of the loop.

Addison sighed “I guess you two just wouldn't understand, you have such easy lives.”

Todd sneered “You don't exactly have the right to call our lives easy” as a glare formed on his usually cheerful face, he continued his scolding “Especially when you have no idea what goes on in our personal lives”

Sasha was shocked by Todd’s sudden outburst, his friend wasn't exactly the type to complain and definitely not the type to get angry over something trivial like Addison. He was usually just cracking jokes and messing around, it wasn’t like him to pick a fight.

Sasha tried to calm Todd down by saying “Hey man, calm down, she probably didn’t mean anything offensive with that comment, you know how she is.”

Addison hissed “What do you mean?? You know how she is? I don’t get upset over nothing!! You two might think I’m overdramatic b-but I’ve got reason to be!”

This isn’t good Sasha thought, at the realization of that he had put Addison in a pissy mood and Todd wasn’t making any effort to help and fix up the situation, instead, Todd’s earthy eyes were glaring at Addison.

Sasha attempted to calm things down, not liking that Addison was pissed at him. “You’re right. I don’t know what you’re going through, so it’s hard for me to put myself in your shoes. I’m very sorry that I took your feelings lightly.”

"Hey! Don’t just give into her! Come on! She should be the one apologizing to us. She has no right to judge us when she knows nothing.”

But she’s right…..well about me at least, Sasha thought. Realizing how defensive Todd was being, it was like Addison had really struck a chord with him or something.

Before their argument could carry on, their science teacher entered the classroom, with the intention of starting class the old man barked “Cut the chit-chat, we’ve got a lot to go over”

Which left Sasha to his own thoughts, he was glad that his teacher had stepped in, because it gave his friends a chance to cool their heads. He was still curious about their little conflict, it was completely out of the ordinary. Sure, he expected that from Addison, but not from Todd, Todd would’ve normally brushed off a comment like that as if it was nothing, but after that clash, Sasha could see that Todd was an edge about something.
Whatever, it’s Todd’s business and not mine. Sasha told himself, remembering another detail in their conversation that was weird, what did Addison mean when she asked about escaping life. Not only was it a weird question, but he felt like he should know what it meant, like the answer was somewhere in the back of his mind, but he just couldn’t remember it no matter how hard he tried and this bothered him.

Sasha lay his head on his desk, friends are so confusing he sighed, allowing his heavy eyelids to finally close, not even bothering to fight his need for some sleep.

This time, it didn’t surprise Sasha that he was in the same dream again, at this point he was expecting it. It still raised some important questions though, like, how long he was going to have the same dream? If it meant something? What Addison had to do with it? And who was the boy? He wondered if he’d see the black haired boy again, He probably knows something Sasha thought, judging by his actions, he definitely needed to know something. Sasha remembered what the boy had said to him, you shouldn’t be here, so Sasha that meant the boy must have a reason why he didn't want Sasha to be there, which could lead him to some more answers.

So he decided that his first course of action should be to locate the black haired boy, which was easier said than done. The glowing landscape stretched far off into the distance, so Sasha had a lot of ground to cover. He even doubted the possibility of finding the boy, it'd be like finding a needle in a haystack he sighed, stomping on a patch of glittering wildflowers in frustration.

He felt like he was walking endlessly, as he turned his head side to side, attempting to locate a mop of black hair. He kept his ears attentive, waiting to hear a crackle or stomping of footsteps. He didn't have anything better to do but look around and hope that he could get some answers, or at least wake up.
Wait He told himself, suddenly stopping his movements, he realized I just need to die to wake up...an idea popping in his mind so let's test this, I just have to find a way to die.
He promptly looked around in search of the perfect place to kill himself, it's just a dream….so I should be able to do this, he convinced himself, eyeing a high cliff in the distance which framed one of the waterfalls.

His footsteps felt like they were becoming heavier every step he took, as if he was only registering bit by bit what he was about to do. It’s only a dream He repeated to himself, developing a rhythm as he quickened his pace.

When he reached the bottom of the cliff, his heart race increased under its massive shadow, intimidating  he huffed, reaching for one of the cracks with burning conviction.

The cliff had a nice steep incline in the center, but on the left side, it went up gradually, allowing Sasha to scale it, using cracks and chips as footholds, some bits near the side were slippery due to splashing water from the falls, but Sasha was able to maintain his strong hold on the crystal-like stone.
His shaking hands clinging to the rock as he pushed himself to climb higher, he could feel an intense wind blowing through his fine hair, chilling his porcelain skin. Drops of water from the waterfall, splattered his left side, as the gap between him and the summit grew smaller.

By the time he reached the top, his entire body was shaking, he could hear the sound of his teeth grinding together over the crashing water beneath him.

The view was breathtaking, it looked different when he stood up high. It seemed larger, like it stretched out forever and the landscapes glow illuminated the clearing, many different sparkling colours mixed together, making the forestry landscape look like glossy ornaments coated in a blazing galaxy skin.

The cliffs drop was intimidating to Sasha and the risen hairs on his arms were proof of that. He didn't like the feeling he got while standing on the edge, it was overpowering. I can do this He told himself, eyeing the clutter of rocks which lay below him. He wasn't certain how to go about killing himself, would a jump work? Or would that only break my legs? Maybe if I try going head first..he debated, his legs timidly shaking, while he tried to picture his options.

It was no use though, his legs felt like lead, they were completely frozen in place. It was stupid thinking that he’d be able to make a jump like that, it felt too real for him to just treat it like a dream. There was no way that he could muster up enough courage to take his own life, he was too afraid of dying, even though he knew that he’d wake up right after, the threat still clung to him like leftover puddles after a rainy day.


Curious black eyes observed from a safe distance, hiding behind a webby tree trunk. His expression was a mix of confusion and sadness, as he watched Sasha wait at the edge of the cliff, wondering if he’d go through with it.
He could feel his heart sinking as he gazed at Sasha’s prominent features, his beady blue eyes had actual life in them, he missed that, the way Sasha’s eyes use to always shine, they used to be filled with so much ambition and power he remembered.

Stop that
he scolded himself, forget about him, this is not the Sasha I use to know. He reminded himself, clenching his fist relentlessly.

“Cato, dear, this sure is a strange turn of events, huh?” a voice, Cato recognized as Karmil instigated.

He tensed at the sound of her artificial voice, a shiver running through his spine as he leapt into action, ditching his hiding spot for a more open spot, not wanting to be cornered during battle.

He glared at her, taking in her dolly appearance, he hated her blood red eyes most of all. They looked at him, the same way a predator looks at its prey. They were filled with bloodlust, hungry for their next meal.

She faked a whine “Ah Cato, dear, you’re so mean, why is it always violence with you?”

“It's not nice to play with your food!” he snarled, pulling out his skinny blade from his blood soaked cloak. He stood on the palms of him feet, ready to move while he waited for an indication that the smaller framed girl would make her move.

But she remained still and relaxed, her long black hair swaying in the breeze. “But what fun would that be, Cato, dear.” she asked, a smirk planted on her pretty face.

He growled harshly “What are you playing at? Bringing Sasha here, didn't you have a deal?”

“Oh, we’re just as confused as you are. He didn't get here through regular methods, him being here is an abnormality, but isn't that interesting? I guess it really is impossible to escape this little game?”

“If you lay a hand on him..”

“You'll what?”

Cato stared at her blankly, unable to come up with a threat.

“That's right, you're powerless, you can't do anything, huh? It must hurt, not being able to protect the one person you were willing to sacrifice everything for.”

Cato launched himself in her direction, his blood boiling with anger as he swiftly slashed his dagger through her throat, he could feel her skin tearing as he forced his blade deeper, his weight causing her to fall backwards as he tumbled on top of her. He continued to force the dagger deeper, putting all his weight into the cut. Ignoring the feeling of her warm blood spraying his skin. Eventually the dagger hit her spinal chord, which was too sturdy for him to cut through, so he removed it, allowing her blood to splash his face as he tore it out.

“Don’t you dare go near Sasha...or I'll chop you into so many *censored*in pieces that you won't ever be able to reattach them again”

A childish laughter could be heard across the clearing, coming from Karmil’s nearly severed head as it dangled on the forest floor, crimson blood leaking out which formed a scarlet puddle. She giggled “Oh dear, you know it doesn't work that way. I can just simply regenerate if I need to.”

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Manga Writer workshop / Re: Writers Novel Marathon Workshop: Day 17
« on: August 17, 2017, 08:51:38 AM »
-The Coming Storm-Operative13-
Since, I missed last week's review session, I just want to mention that I really enjoyed the church sequence, I found that it really helped give me an idea of the type of setting that they were in and I especially liked Allen’s reaction to the baby being baptized. It’s an interesting way of thinking and I can see his uneasy feeling as being a sort of foreshadowing of what is to come later on.

I found that the latest chapter focused a lot on the new character, Wallace. I'm guessing that he’s going to serve as Allen’s best friend character during the story, so I'm interested in seeing how their relationship is going to develop during major conflicts. As for his character, I definitely like him and am very curious about learning more about his life as an orphan and the struggles that came with that. I find that he is a really relatable character, I can personally see where he’s coming from. (Not the orphan part, but religion being shoved down your throat)

Finally, Allen’s need to do something meaningful stood out in this part, it sparked a new interest in his character, I feel like we’re starting to get to know him better as the plot continues.




-Sincerely, Your Dearest Phantom-OhGodHelpMe-
This was a really nice part, like usual your words flow very well and it’s engaging. Things are starting to piece together more and more, for instance, the revelation that Shinya’s been living in an illusion all this time. I'm curious about the angel concept and still haven't completely wrapped my mind around it.

Another part that caught my attention was Yonaka’s reaction reaction to the violence, I found that it really made her feel human, a bit like a scared little girl, I liked seeing that side of her.

On another note, the ship is so real. I saw a lot of the hints before, so I questioned their relationship, but now you have me completely shipping them together. Shinya’s mom is a saint for just dropping the fact that Shinya wanted to marry Yonaka as a child. Their conversation afterwards was also pretty cute. As a reader, I really feel for Yonaka and her struggles. It must be hard her to have to constantly lie to the person she loves most. I can't wait to see where their relationship goes as things progress.
Also, I'm interested in how Shinya is going to react to Yonaka’s eye when she wakes up.

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