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Title: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on December 31, 2022, 04:33:47 PM
Making a  little Manga story thats aimed a little more at younger audiences(13-15). Its meant to be a series of short chapters about a stubborn little farm girl who wants to destroy the tower of death, a mysterious building that appeared in her kingdom long before she was born and is a plague upon the land.

Its a PDF in screenplay format, so its just short form writing essentially. This is meant to be simple story thats fun and doesn't entirely go where you expect it too.

Chapter 1 is simple and focuses mostly on introducing Birna as a character and primarily focuses on her flaws. Just curious how this is! You can read through the 3 and 1/4th pages. Birna has a slightly different speaking pattern than others and that's on purpose. Its an odd quirk I thought was fun.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1avi7V5tCHBX8GelbDnh_WkciVteFIULu/view?usp=share_link


Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: Coryn on January 01, 2023, 09:45:42 AM
It's definitely an interesting tone, lol. I like the concept of the slightly daft farm girl taking in the ominous death tower. A fun little short read. I'm interested in seeing where this goes!

My main comment since this is so short so far is that the tone is a bit swingy. Birna either comes off a empty headed or totally serious, without any room in between. There's some space to blend those two together I think.

Oh, and for future reference, we'd prefer if you can embed your writing into MR directly. For writing people usually just copy the text in directly. You may have to reformat a bit, but please give it a shot. We just want to cut down on making people click on links that could be dangerous.
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 01, 2023, 01:06:22 PM
Gotcha, I can embed it!

Yeha, Birna is both empty headed and serious at the same time. I thought it was a fun contrast because she's impulsive and not stupid. She's inexperienced and has to learn on the way, but has her own skillset (which pops up next chapter).

I'm working on the second chapter where she has to fight a giant crap fly to earn some money to buy a map.

Thanks for reading my work!



Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 03, 2023, 01:06:40 PM
Ok, heres chapter 2 of Birna and the tower of death.

Spoiler
ext.town - day

Birna sits on the sidewalk and holds a sign "warrior for hire" as people walk past her.

BIRNA
C'mon, ya ingrates. I'm broke and need to buy a map and compass

An OLD MAN looks over her sign then at her.

OLD MAN
Are you really a warrior?

BIRNA
Yeh.

OLD
You look like a kid.

BIRNA
I AIN'T a kid, ya idiot! Hire me or get lost!

OLD MAN
Well...Can you handle a crap fly?

BIRNA
A crap fly?

ext. farm - day

Birna and the Old man and his WIFE(OLD WOMAN) stand in front of a solid 6 foot pile of crap beside their farmhouse.

BIRNA
Thats... a huge crap fly nest. How big is it??

OLD MAN
About as big as a sheep?

OLD WOMAN
No, it was the size of a cow!

BIRNA
COW SIZED!? You serious!?

OLD WOMAN
Dear? Is she going to complain about it, or kill it?

A shadow looms above them, all 3 look up. The cow sized crap fly drops a turd on the pile and flies away.

BIRNA
It could have only gotten that big from the towers power. Ok, I'll do it for 10 silver.

OLD WOMAN
5 silver.

BIRNA
Naw, 8 silver.

OLD WOMAN
6 silver.

BIRNA
7 silver or I'll start walkin'!
The old woman chuckles.

OLD WOMAN
No, you wont. If you're willing to kill that thing for just 7 silver you must be really desperate.

OLD MAN
It wouldn't have been so obvious if you asked for more. 6 silver, no more.

BIRNA
...Deal.

Birna sits in a tall tree a few yards away from the crap nest. The Old folks sit in chairs on their law and wait.

In the horizon the fly appears, buzzing towards the farm with a new load for its nest.

Birna unsheathes her sword.

OLD WOMAN
Well, dear? What do you think?

OLD MAN
She's got spunk, but my moneys on the crap fly.

The fly hovers over its nest, Birna leaps from the tree and onto its back. The Fly shoots through the air like a missle.

She clings on the hair on its back and screams as the panicky beast tears through the sky in an incredible speed.

The old folks sip tea and watch Birna ride the crap fly.

OLD MAN
Impressive.

OLD WOMAN
That shes riding the crap fly?

OLD MAN
That she's still alive.

The beast going at full speed towards the house now.

BIRNA
Ya trying to kill us, ya idiot!?

Birna pulls on its hair with all her strength and the flys direction changes upward before it strikes the farmhouse.

The flys wings slow down the higher up it goes, Birna pulls her sword back and slams it into the back of the flys head.

Immeditaly it stiffens and it's wings stop fluttering. Birnas eyes widen.

BIRNA
Uh -oh.

Birna and the crap fly plummet back to the farm and a huge cloud of dust flies into the air on impact.

As the dust clears the old folks stare at a spatter on the ground that used to be a crap fly.
OLD MAN
I'll be. She really did it!

OLD WOMAN
Thank goodness.

Muffled noises come from behind them. They turn to see Birnas legs sticking out of the crap nest.

OLD MAN
Well, if we leave her we save 6 silver.

OLD WOMAN
Dear, she'll die! You can't hide bodies at your age anyways! Pull her out this instant!

Covered in filth Birna groggily stands before the old folks.

OLD WOMAN
Thanks for your hard work!

He drops a small bag of coins in her hand. She looks at the coins and tosses it back to him.

OLD MAN
Whats that for?

BIRNA
Thats for your bath, your soap, and for you to keep your mouths shut.

OLD WOMAN
Deal!
END of CHAPTER 2



Spoiler
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: NO1SY on January 03, 2023, 01:48:11 PM
Cute and simple adventure story so far with solo D&D vibes, or, strangely enough, old short snoopy comics. Still not sold on the screenplay style, because so much richness and depth is lost from the utilitarian language and minor amount of description, but at least it does the job in conveying the plot and puts the focus on the dialogue.

I actually quite like Birna’s sassy character. It lands a lot better in the second chapter, but only because of a couple of stumbles in her dialogue in the first:

“It’s too dangerous to go alone…” doesn’t seem like something Birna would say, rather: “I know it’s dangerous, but someone’s gotta destroy it.”

Also I like the idea behind: “Hoped if ya couldn’t tell I wasn’t a kid ya also couldn’t count.” but this is written in a way that sounds like a non-sequitur (also, not sure how just removing her cloak would reveal visually that she isn’t a child…). I’d probably go for something like: “hoped that your counting was as bad as your ability to tell a girl’s age.

Look forward to seeing more. Good luck!
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 03, 2023, 02:07:38 PM
Thanks, I'm still a little unsure on some of the lines in ch1 myself, but the "its too dangerous alone" line was meant to also be a legend of zelda reference ;P

Part of the reason I went for a cloak reveal after the line was also that this is the first time you get a good look at Birna(delayed character reveal) but I think it works. Visually its up to me as an artist to make sure Birna doesn't l really look like a kid to help sell the moment though. Still working on an art style for this project.

But some of that is for later.

I'm still sorting out the first story arcs destination for Birna, as well as her next few problems. Gotta give her a more serious monster to fight thats actually causing chaos than a crap fly and introduce some lore for this world. Right now the only thing you guys know is theres a mysterious evil power that corrupts crap flies.

She hasn't had a chance to do anything heroic just yet O.o
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: NO1SY on January 03, 2023, 03:20:09 PM
Honestly, dark mysterious tower warping creatures into monsters of the week whilst Birna ambles her way to destroy it is not a bad way to go in terms of a plot. Sometimes simple is best.
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 03, 2023, 05:11:23 PM
Was mostly what I was aiming for, minus a few larger parts of the tale. I'm still sorting out Birnas want vs her need as well as trying to sort out what her major weakness is. While it doesn't have to be earth shattering, its always needed to give a character some solid depth.

Gotta sort out magic, and how I want to handle warriors and other classes.

Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: Coryn on January 04, 2023, 10:51:38 AM
NO1SY was pretty on the money with the reference to newspaper comics. This gives me big Non Sequitur vibes (not sure if you get that one in your region or not). In the comic there's an old fisherman who tells wild stories of fighting off sea monsters with a fishing rod or discovering a magical kingdom of fairies on an island after wrecking during a storm (all while sitting at the bar). Definitely a similar feeling to Birna's adventures.

Second chapter does exceed the first. The character feels a lot more consistent and the giant fly as a concept is just irreverent enough while still being anoying. Could have done with a few synonyms for the titular dung pile however.
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 04, 2023, 11:23:41 PM
 Gotcha, Well heres chapter 3. It s more kidsy and playful and...needs some more conflict than I had here. Might have to lengthen the short battle she has a bit more. Its meant to be a side chapter  that at the least sets off Birnas first destination really.

Spoiler
ext. road - day

Birna rides on the back of a ox drawn carriage and studies her map.

BIRNA
K...Should be at Grimwald in another day or so. Then I gotta cross the Viladis river.

She rolls up her map.

BIRNA
Thats another 2 days of travel. Wish there was a faster way to get to the tower.

The cart hits a bump.
BIRNA
TAKE IT EASY, WILL YA!? I ALMOST FELL OFF!

The cart suddenly stops.

BIRNA
Oops.

Birnas now trudging down the road with a sour expression.

BIRNA
What a dick! Ain't like I was slowing him down! I was just making sure no one was stealing his wares!

Her stomach grumbles.

BIRNA
Shut up! I hadda use the last of the money on the map! I'll kill something to eat later!

Her stomach grumbles louder.

BIRNA
Dammit.

Birna spots a small creek beside a Forrest.

At the creek, she looks into the water and spots some small fish swimming about.
BIRNA
Bleh...Fish.

She sharpens the tip of a long slender branch into a spear.

Birna hovers the spear above a fish and goes for the kill...But loses her balance and falls into the creek.

BIRNA
Dammit!

She lets out a cry of pain and scrambles out of the creek with a fanged frog chewing on the back of her head.

BIRNA
GET OFF! GET OFF! GET OFF!

The frog leaps off her and bounces back into the water.

BIRNA
Disgusting.

Birnas stomach grumbles and she reluctantly grabs her spear.

She holds the spear and waits...then strikes and pulls out a small fish stuck to her spear!

BIRNA
Got ya!

The frog leaps out of the water and snatches the fish off the spear and lands into the creek with a splash.

Birna stares blankly at her spear then the frog.

BIRNA
Ya realize that frogs can go to hell tool, right?

The frog spits a jet of water in Birnas face.

BIRNA
DIE FROG!

She slams the spear into the creek, again and again missing the frog entirely and it swims under  a small marsh scattering of marsh.

Her eyes dart around the creek, suddenly Birna cries out in pain as the frog chews on her hand, she flings it aside.

The screams in pain again, the frogs now biting the back of her head. She pries the frog off with the spear then  collapses to her knees, frazzled and huffing.

It spits more water in her face.

BIRNA
The hell kind of frog ARE you!?

The frog starts convulsing and spasming around before letting out a huge spray of vomit all over her.

The color drains from her face. She looks down and spots the fish. Dozens of tiny sharp barbs cover its body.

BIRNA
The fish here are poisonous? Could have said something, ya little dickhead!

The frog sprays water in her face again and leaps into the creek with a soft splash.

BIRNA
I really hate frogs.

Back on the road Birna trudges onward looking defeated and irritated. She spots a small apple tree on the side of the road and walks past it.

Her stomach grumbles in protest.

BIRNA
Oh shut up! Ya think I wanna eat something after all that? We're skipping breakfast!

END OF CHAPTER 3
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 08, 2023, 12:18:59 PM
Still fumbling to put in a lil more conflict for chapter 3...But chapter 4 is a different beast all together. This was my original chapter 3, but I thought it might be better to have a small funny side chapter before getting into things being a lil more serious. Also introduces the second character of the story.

Spoiler
INT. WOODS - NIGHT

Dusk in a thick Forrest during a storm.  KARL,18, sprints through the rain. He spots a tent and rushes over. He carries a small shield on his back.

KARL
Sorry to intrude, can you share your tent?

Snoring comes from inside the tent. Karl lifts up the flap and looks in.

KARL
Uh...Excuse me?

Birna screams and slams her foot into his face knocking him away.

BIRNA
NEVER enter a ladys tent without permission, ya creep!

KARL
I didn't know, sorry! I need shelter from the storm!

Birna scowls at him, then spots a shield on his back.

BIRNA
Alright, ya can come in, IF ya give me that shield.

KARL
That's my fathers shield!

BIRNA
It any good at keeping ya dry in the rain?

Hes silent and holds up a few coins.

KARL
You can have this, not the shield.

BIRNA
...Deal. But on one condition.

Karls heads sticks out of the tent and he has the shield on to keep himself dry.

KARL
This is ridiculous.

BIRNA
You're too tall to be in here anyways. Stay on your side and I wont stab ya, k?

He scowls.

KARL
Can't I have a blanket at least?

Birna groans and tosses a small blanket on him, it barely covers his legs.
A rumble comes from the distance.

BIRNA
Thunder. Great.

Another rumble, this time the tent shakes. Birnas eyes widen, she grabs her sword.

BIRNA
(whispering)
Hey, creep. Is something out there?

KARL
(whispering)
Keep quiet.

A giant crash makes the ground tremble from its impact.

Karl watches the thing in the woods. Its about the size of a cow, on all fours and has bright glowing eyesthat slowly scan the surroundings...then lock onto the tent.

KARL
(Whispering)
It found us!

Inside the tent brightens up under the things glowing eyes.

It crawls closer to the tent, the brightness intensifies Birna has to shield her eyes from the light now.

Karl trembles and squeezes his eyes shut.

The things directly outside of the tent on Birnas side.

BIRNA
PISS OFF!

The blade thrusts through the side of the tent and sticks into the things eye. A loud croak of pain follows.
Birna rushes out of the tent with her sword at the ready, but its gone.

BIRNA
The hell was that!?

She scowls at Karl.

BIRNA
Ya could have helped, ya dope!

Karls still. Birna lifts up the shield, he's unconscious. She groans and lowers the shield back in place.

Morning.

The suns out, the sky is clear and water droplets trickle down from the trees above Birna and Karl.

Birna rolls up her tent.

BIRNA
K, creep. I'm off.

Karls sits silently under a tree, his expression is both serious and sad.
Birna kicks the tree and water droplets pour down on him. After a moment he blinks and looks at Birna.

KARL
Hmm?

BIRNA
I'm off.

He limply waves goodbye.

BIRNA
Ya know, if ya have this much trouble with monsters yer better off staying home. I can't protect ya all the time.

Karl sighs.

KARL
Yeah, I know.

BIRNA
Ya also might consider giving that shield to someone-

KARL
No.

Birna shrugs and marches away leaving Karl beside himself. He lowers his head.

KARL
I'll never make it to the tower of death like this.

END OF CHAPTER 4


 
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: Coryn on January 09, 2023, 09:31:42 AM
I don'tknow, I think that the frog "fight" is pretty much the length you would want it to be. DBZ this story is not, so a long encounter doesn't really fit the vibe so far. Short and sweet is more fitting for now.

I like Karl so far. He's more grounded feeling than Birna for sure. Looking forward to how he integrates into the story!
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 09, 2023, 10:43:38 PM
Good to hear, I try to show off a little bit more of who Birna is in each chapter and that chapter doesn't really show anything new about her. It does let her breathe a bit and be herself which helps but I was working on trying to show a lil more. Other than hating frogs.

The next few chapters will all be their own story since its Birnas first real test Gotta balance out the serious and the silly.

I'm still experimenting with Birnas character design and trying to make her a little stubby. This design is almost there.
https://imgur.com/gallery/k2eydb5
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 11, 2023, 07:35:18 PM
Still revising Birnas design and keep things simple and fun. Will adjust her arm bands a little more so they have some style to them.

(https://i.imgur.com/1RMGCOQ.jpeg)
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: Coryn on January 12, 2023, 09:54:32 AM
Fun art style! Gives me real Legend of Zelda: Wind Waker vibes.

I admit, I did imagine her with a short hairstyle like that, but would have expected pants.
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 12, 2023, 04:14:03 PM
I considered giving her pants and boots, then shorts and boots, and then I started thinking more about how much money she would have, what clothes she'd wear as well as the status within this world and shes just a farm girl really.

Birna wouldn't have much money, wouldn't have nice clothes or clothes that really fit.  The idea of a small character with a long dress that sort of drags behind her as she walks and moves around is a lot of fun visually. It helps make her look smaller as well.

Heres chapter 5! Oh and (O.S)? That means off-screen.

Spoiler
ext. rough road- day

A carriage pulls up the top of a hill above a forest glen.

In the carriage the DRIVER turns around.

DRIVER
Ok, this is it!

Birnas curled up against several rugs fast asleep

DRIVER
Hey, kid! Wake up!

Birnas eyes burst open and she eyes daggers at the Driver.

BIRNA
I ain't a kid!

DRIVER
Well ya look like one, get out!

BIRNA
This is Grimwald?

DRIVER
This is as far as I go.

The carriage rides away in the opposite direction while Birna studies the view. In the distance is a town by a lake, the land looks dreary and is eerily silent.

Birna marches down the hill.

EXT. GRIMWALD - DAY

Grimwald town square. several buildings are abandoned and few people are present. There's signs of life in the tavern.

INT. TAVERN- DAY

At the counter a LADY BARKEEP wipes a glass while OLD MAN and FATMAN anxiously sip their drinks.

LADY BARKEEP
You're kidding. Laila too?

OLD MAN
Yeah, two days ago.

FATMAN
Poor girl. Least she's with her parents now.

The Barkeep smacks the Fatman across the head.

LADY BARKEEP
Have some respect, you idiot! They were good people!

BIRNA(O.S)
What happened to them?

Everyone turns and spots Birna.

LADY BARKEEP
You aren't from around here.

BIRNA
Whats wrong with this town?

OLD MAN
You shouldn't be here, little one.

FATMAN
Not unless you want the storm to take you.

Birna pulls up a stool.

BIRNA
Go on, I'm listenin'.

FATMAN
4 years ago, folks started vanishing. First children, then teenagers, and finally adults. Always when it rains.

OLD MAN
Last year the whole Bruge family vanished during the rain season and their house was smashed to bits.

BIRNA
The towers behind this. Why didn't ya ask a noble for help? They got soldiers to spare.

OLD MAN
We couldn't pay what the Duke of Rienhardt was asking for.

LADY BARKEEP
Best hurry to your parents before it gets late, kid. A storms on its way.

BIRNA
...I ain't a kid but I'll fix yer problems.

Everyone chuckles.

FATMAN
Get out of here while you can, kid. Go play hero somewhere safe.

BIRNA
I AIN'T a kid, fatty! The hell is wrong with you weirdos! I killed a giant crap fly that was...Twice as big as this tavern last week! I can do this!

LADY BARKEEP
A crap fly? Wait, was this the old Warick couples farm?

BIRNA
Uh...Maybe?

Everyone bursts out laughing.

OLD MAN
YOU'RE the crap diver!?

Birnas jaw drops and she blushes.

BIRNA
...NO!

LADY BARKEEP
You're shorter than what Old Man Warick said!

FATMAN
If you want a place to sleep, I've got fertilizer you can sleep in!

BIRNA
Hell with all of ya!

Birna hops off the stool and stomps out the tavern.

ext. Grimwald - day

Dusk. Birna has a small fire set up beside her tent. Arms crossed and scowling.

BIRNA
I CAN'T believe that old jackass blabbed! Oughta go back there and get my money back!

She groans.

BIRNA
Is it always gonna be like this?  No one elses doing anything about the tower. What do I gotta do to get some respect?

She lies down and watches clouds spread across the sky. Her eyes are misty.

BIRNA
Mom and Dad were tall. It's not fair, why I gotta be the only one whose short?

ext. tavern - night

The Barkeep drags out a bin of trash around the back of the tavern. Lightning flashes and she looks up, her eyes widen.

Atop the roof of her tavern a large shadowy thing with one glowing eye studies her, it opens its mouth and grumbles.

She opens her mouth to scream.

Thunder rumbles

the end.
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 15, 2023, 09:15:35 PM
CH6.
Spoiler
ext. grimwald woods - day

The sky's full of storm clouds and wide medium sized boulders surround the woods by the lake.

Birna studies the woods and spots a wide crater in the ground, then notices slime all over some of the rocks.

Her stomach grumbles.

BIRNA
Oh, shut up.

Her stomach grumbles louder.

BIRNA
No! Only place to around here to get food is that tavern!

Her stomach ROARS at her.

BIRNA
I hate you, you know that?

ext. Grimwald town square - day

Birna marches into town, covered herself up with her cloak.

BIRNA
Hope no one else knows about the crap fly. Lousy big mouths.

She notices the towns empty.

BIRNA
Where is everyone? There were a few people here yesterday.

Birna spots the tavern, a section of it has collapsed.

int. tavern - day

Inside, Birna surveys the damage. The roof hasn't collapsed, its been smashed in by something incredibly heavy.

BIRNA
Anyone here!?

Her stomach grumbles.

BIRNA
Shaddup stomach!

There's dribbles of slime that coat some debris.

BIRNA
More of this stuff?

EXT. GRIMWALD TOWN SQUARE - DAY

Birna sits beside an old well deep in thought.

BIRNA
K...storm comes, people vanish, Gotta be a monster. What kind?

A bird flies past Birna and poops in front of her.

Birna pauses.

BIRNA
Naw...If it was a bird there'd be poop. I'll bet even the tower can't stop birds from pooping everywhere.

VOICE(O.S)
You the crap diver?

She spins around.

BIRNA
Shut up, ya-

ALDON(13) anxiously peaks from behind a building.

A bird poops on her. She sighs defeatedly.

BIRNA
...Yeh.

ALDON
You really killed a giant crap fly?

BIRNA
Yeh.

ALDON
Thats AMAZING!

Birna stares wide eyed at Aldon, then scoffs.

BIRNA
Wasn't a big deal. Killed it in one sword swing! Was twice as big as that tavern.

ALDON
I TOLD my mom the monsters weren't that tough! I knew we could kill em'!

BIRNA"We?"

ALDON
You know, kids.

Birna scowls.

Her stomach roars again.

int. aldons home - day

Birna munches on a sausage in a small kitchen as Aldon  washes dishes.

BIRNA
Thanks, Aldon.

ALDON
No problem, how you gonna kill the monster?

BIRNA
Gotta find it first. Ain't sure what it is yet.

ALDON
I think its a lizard.

BIRNA
How ya figure?

ALDON
I saw it last night, it was attacking the tavern. I only saw it for a moment...It was eating Marla, the bar keep and then it was gone.

BIRNA
Hmm...That could be it. I don't know whats happened to it. The tower could have turned it into a remnant or an abomination.

ALDON
Whats an abomination?

BIRNA
Its BAD. But neither of these options are good. Remnants are strong enough to wipe out villages.

ALDON
You can really kill this thing, right Birna?

BIRNA
Course! Killing monsters is my thing.

Aldon looks sad.

ALDON
Thats what the last group of hunters said.

BIRNA
It'll be fine. They just weren't as good as I am. How many of them were in this group?

ALDON
Nine.

Birnas enthusiasm vanishes and her expression saddens.

BIRNA
Bad luck. Never know when its gonna hit ya.

ALDON
Tell me about it, my folks were part of the group.

THE END

                                                                           
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: Coryn on January 16, 2023, 10:44:25 AM
Argh! Two chapters up already?! Your speed exceeds my free time the last few days, lol. I will get these read soon.
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on January 16, 2023, 12:15:34 PM
Lol, thanks for reading. I'm about the halfway point of the first story arc now. I'm thinking its gonna be at least 12 chapters. Once I finish that off I'll post less and draw more. I'm still sorting out Birnas design a tad as well as drawing some of the landscapes and establishing an interesting look to the world.
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: wrathborne on May 14, 2023, 02:13:19 AM
I'll be getting back to writing this story. Had to take time off due to taking care of my father as he had a terminal cancer diagnosis last June and sadly we just lost him 1 month back and I've been sorting out his estate with my sister as well as dealing with the grief as this situation was incredibly *censored*ed up.

But I've been sorting out the end game for this little series and the rules of the world as well as how to sort out the worldbuilding so there are moments to breathe between the lore and character growth while trying to write out Birnas first real fight with the monster so its something kind of unique if not fun.
Title: Re: "Birna and the tower of death"
Post by: Suuper-san on May 14, 2023, 02:26:05 PM
So sorry to hear about your loss.
It's never easy to lose a family member and the paperwork just makes it worse on top of all the emotions.
I'm sure your father was glad to have you around to help and to spend time together.



Glad you're making progress with your story, I'll have to get around to reading it properly.
Oh just noticed that I didn't see the character art a few posts back, that's a really cute style and nice design.