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Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« on: September 13, 2013, 04:24:50 PM »
After moving to a new town, Alice, the daughter of a successful game designer and gamer, walks into her room to unpack to find one extra chest that does not belong to her... upon opening the chest, she sees a young boy sleeping..

(mystery, fantasy *may contain some inappropriate content*)
« Last Edit: September 13, 2013, 10:51:54 PM by ghoti »

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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #1 on: September 13, 2013, 04:43:40 PM »
Hmmmm... now how did he get there?  :heart:
What kind of story will this be? adventure? mystery? I wonder?
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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #2 on: September 13, 2013, 04:51:34 PM »
a perv boy :P
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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #3 on: September 13, 2013, 09:04:04 PM »
Sounds like a gender reverse of Rozen Maiden. Maybe you could expand a little more?
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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #4 on: September 13, 2013, 10:49:14 PM »
After a major success of her fathers ground breaking 3-D gaming platform engine(or 3DGPE), Alice and her father move from London to the united states. After a long voyage by ship, they finally arrive at the Saint Cloud Estate, which was given to Alice after the death mysterious relative. Upon going to her bedroom, she notices an extravagant chest covered in dust and cobwebs. Cautiously, she opens the chest to find, not treasure, but rather a boy asleep wrapped in cloth. Alice screams as the boy awakens and jumps out of the chest towards her...

« Last Edit: October 07, 2013, 04:11:37 PM by Andrew Ryan »

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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #5 on: September 13, 2013, 10:51:26 PM »
Hmmm....yeah, that's not too different from rozen maiden where a boy finds a suitcase with a living doll inside. But what else do you have other than the beginning?
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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #6 on: September 13, 2013, 10:58:08 PM »
i have a good portion of the plot finished already actually, however there are some plot holes, continuity and certain scenes i may want to edit out, im thinking of illustrating it myself but may need some help

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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #7 on: September 13, 2013, 11:00:46 PM »
But is it different or at least original enough? I suggest looking up rozen maiden or outlaw star to see if you might accidentally just be rehashing one of those plots.
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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #8 on: September 13, 2013, 11:27:32 PM »
ive never read (or watched) rozen maiden, ill look it up. Thank you for the heads up! maybe you can help me fix the story

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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #9 on: September 13, 2013, 11:31:58 PM »
Maybe. Since its develop your story section, I could offer some suggestions.
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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #10 on: September 14, 2013, 12:02:25 AM »
please and thank you!

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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #11 on: September 14, 2013, 12:16:01 AM »
Ill wait until you add more info.
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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #12 on: September 14, 2013, 03:28:34 PM »
hmm.. so i read up on Rozen maiden but my story isn't much like that, i want to tell you more but im afraid ill give to much away. I may just message you with details

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Re: Alice and Zero (name pending...)
« Reply #13 on: September 14, 2013, 05:12:21 PM »
ok...i'll just wait then.
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