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Offline bobby

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my own manga novel
« on: April 15, 2008, 11:55:18 AM »
my storie is about a kid who falls from the sky to blow up the whole world because he decides to but gets hit by his own blast from a rock a midnight.

He then wakes up and finds himself in the middle of a desert with no food or water but spots a resterant far away and while he's running he gets more excited.

while he's in there a cow boy with tons of armor on him comes along with a machine gun. the cowboy shots the living hell out of the resterant and breaks all the walls down but when he see's someone standing by the table with a little scratch on his arm he thinks he missed the kid suddenly disappears out of knowhere and beats the living *censored* out of the guy and in the middle of it all they start talking and the cowboy says you fight so well JB then the kid known as JB says are you talking to me and is that my name the cowboy is then suprised. then they start fighting again and JB has the cowboy cornered but suddenly releases his eye. the cowboy the has wings coming out of his back with rips in it but beats the *censored* out of JB. suddenly JB releases a huge power from his body in to his hand and arm and kills the cowboy.

When sunrise comes hes all beat up but he's healed he's about to die and finds a city he then goes into an all you can eat! place. Mean While a guy comes on the hill and sees him he then blows a huge shake of wind and waits for JB to come out when he does . He makes a surprising entrenace by blowing up a building and walking through smoke and Introduces himself he say hello JB its very nice to meet you in person my name is the Iron Mask it a pleasure to meet you. then he packs a punch behind JBs back without him seeing. The Iron mask kicks JB into the wall and cracks the whole building. By the way JB stands for Jake Blade. anywho The iron mask speaks again and says Ha I knew it your not strong enough to defeat me you never kill me with that kind of skill your a waist of time and if you can't beat me I guess i'm gonna have to kill you. suddenly JB explodes of anger and kicks him in the air starts kicking him every where and elbows him into the back to the ground now tell me thats not action because it is. now JB lands on the ground and the iron mask is head first into the ground. He suddenly gets up and JB says well how about that looks like its switched. Then the Iron Mask says I guess I underestimated you But you'll never kill me if you don't know who you are because I do. JB says who the hell are you. Then the Iron mask says I'll tell you if you can catch me first an runs off. Now JB is chasing him and past glowing trees suddenly the iron mask pops out and is about to leave until JB realizes that he past a trick a yells WHAT ARE YOU GONNA DO RUN AWAY LIKE A COWARD. After the iron mask heard that he challenges JB to a duel. Chapter 3 then starts.

The Iron mask and JB are just standing there 2 feet away then they start sprinting and then they punch right in each others fists and hands JB does a slide and kicks him right into the face but the iron mask grabs his arm and throws a punch into the stomach. goes behide his back and kicks him into some rocks he the crumbles the rock and JB falls on the ground but the iron mask isn't done yet he then appears from the sky and just before he can hit him he does two flips and lands on his feet and jumps and kicks him. The iron mask is then standing there gasping for breath until JB pops out of knowhere and kicks him in to the rocks and JB also breaks into the rocks and traps The iron mask. they then talk JB ask who are you and why are you here! The iron mask responds I'm here to kill you and the other you don't need to know suddenly he grabs JBs neck and starts strangling him then he say Well now where's your anger now you stupid son of a B****! He then starts raising him higher choking him but just then JB grabs his arm and starts twisting it then the iron mask jumps out of the sky and lands on his feet and JB does the same thing once again they just stand there but all of a sudden JB picks up something and throws it on the ground he makes tons of smoke runs and punches the iron mask in the face. the iron mask goes flying and goes through three huge rocks then JB releases a huge wave of energy to him blowing him away an in to a rock then the iron mask speaks I guess I underestimated you then he disappears. now JB is just standing there all beaten up and goes to town to find a hospital. finally he finds one and when he's done a gang challenges him to a fight JB gets ready until hes sees them dead on the ground he is then frightened but then he sees who did it you would of guessed it the iron mask. he goes behind him and charges up to him but JB suddenly say I know this trick you did it when we were fighting the last time. The iron mask suddenly says your right but not this he then puts a sign on JB's forehead and it absorbs his power but something goes wrong when they fight agian JB is trapped in his head causing choas can JB get out of this Situation you'll see when I get to know you guys better where you guys live and you can ask where I live and sometime I'm gonna make and sell my own manga and you guys get to read it. Its called JB the kid of mystery say some compliments and how great my novel sounds if you want oh and thanks for reading.
« Last Edit: April 17, 2008, 11:51:48 AM by bobby »

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Re: my own manga novel
« Reply #1 on: April 15, 2008, 12:57:48 PM »
Cool! keep it up. post the next part.

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Re: my own manga novel
« Reply #2 on: April 18, 2008, 10:59:32 AM »
thanks for posting it!
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Re: my own manga novel
« Reply #3 on: June 17, 2008, 11:38:20 PM »
You guys are very modest, you pots those same word in all the other forum threads...are you sure your not brainwashed?....and nice story by the way but you have to learn to stop using run-on sentences.
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Re: my own manga novel
« Reply #4 on: June 18, 2008, 06:21:34 PM »
I liked the story but when you post the next part please use punctuation. I couldn't understand some parts of it.

P.S.- why the hell is everybody trying to kill this kid?
« Last Edit: June 18, 2008, 06:25:41 PM by Coryn Sken »

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Re: my own manga novel
« Reply #5 on: June 18, 2008, 11:37:14 PM »
I liked the story but it was abit difficult to read