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Re: Writer Discussion Table
« Reply #1830 on: May 28, 2018, 06:36:08 AM »
Been kinda obsessed with figuring out how to write a well paced fight scene lately. I reread a little of my past attempts and absolutely hated what I wrote. I know I can do better.

Anybody know any good books or light novels I can use as a reference? Should I watch more shonen anime and take inspiration from that? Is it even possible to translate a shonen fight onto paper and have it read well enough so that it makes sense to the reader?

                 When writing battles I look at them using the framework of a wrestling match. These are after all scripted battles, so a lot of elements translate. A fight is its own self contained story, with its own ebb and flow. That's what I always do first, I write the skeleton for the fight. The peaks of action, the breaks in it, the key plot points covered, the false finishes and then the big finale.
                  Having this skeleton helps me see how long the battle will be. If its going to feel like its dragging on too long, then I can trim the fat. Or if its a major battle that doesn't feel epic enough, I can always see wheres best to add more.
                  As Mahlua mentioned, be mindful of the length of paragraphs and sentences. Too many bloated paragraphs can slow the action down and make readers lose that adrenaline rush. Make every word count, make it punchy. Use the characters, express their pain, their emotional state, the fatigue, the intent behind their attacks.
 
                  One thing I always liked when reading action is the things I never really thought of. I can't recall the story, but it was two people fighting with swords. One was weary already, after helping defend a castle and the author noted how numb his arms were from the impact of each sword strike and how slippy the handle was from blood streaming down the blade.
                    Sounds stupid I know, but those little details were effective to me and really putting myself in their shoes. It added that detail of holy *censored* this dudes tired and he's gotta face the big boss. He's in trouble.
 
                  Hope some of that was usable :P
                     

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Re: Writer Discussion Table
« Reply #1831 on: May 30, 2018, 08:56:00 PM »
Ah yes, good analogy, Vacant. Wrestling, if you can get past the fact that's it's fake, is a real beautiful form of storytelling when done right. Two good wrestlers can tell an entire story through their actions in the ring, especially if they both have good chemistry. A great wrestling match has a good flow to it, much like a great fight scene, which was something I didn't think about until you brought it up.

And man the smallest details really do count, both in wrestling and written fight scenes. I always love it when a guy injures a limb and sells that injury throughout the match. Gotta apply those smaller details more often in my writing. 
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Re: Writer Discussion Table
« Reply #1832 on: July 12, 2018, 11:01:37 AM »
Some weird ish has been occurring with one of my google files recently.

Yesterday as i began to work on Drifter, I noticed that one of the paragraphs I wrote were missing some words and in their place were an assortment of random letters that i didn’t remember adding in. I figured it was some sort of accident on my end and paid it no mind. I then went ahead to finish the scene I was working on.

However this morning on my way to work, i decided to read i what wrote yesterday and discovered that literally whole sections have been randomly rearranged, which completely threw me the hell off. There were some missing words from paragraphs again, which leaves me scratching my head.

I’m not sure if it just a bug with the program or maybe some mishap on my end. Either way it’s definitely strange. I can easily fix the problem with some editing, but i don’t want to keep dealing with this. Anybody got any ideas as to why this may be happening?
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Re: Writer Discussion Table
« Reply #1833 on: July 12, 2018, 11:39:35 AM »
Are you writing on your phone or on a computer? Maybe the app needs updating.

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Re: Writer Discussion Table
« Reply #1834 on: July 12, 2018, 01:31:00 PM »
The majority of the writing is done on computer. I use my phone to make small edits and additions when I’m on the go. I do remember yesterday that I left the google docs file open on my computer while I went to the bathroom, and then proceeded to make small changes with my phone while I was in there. That may have triggered some sort of confliction or something.

I’ll see if it’s an update issue later on and report my findings.
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Re: Writer Discussion Table
« Reply #1835 on: July 12, 2018, 09:50:20 PM »
So the app on my phone is already updated, so that possibility has been ruled out.

The only logical explanation I can think of is that I think when I highlight my text on my computer I may have accidentally switched the text around by mistake and didn't notice. So yeah, I'm gonna chalk this up as another "Fro moment" and leave it be.
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« Reply #1836 on: July 13, 2018, 10:43:51 AM »
Maybe. I'll let you know if I get anything weird, since I do the same kind of thing.

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Re: Writer Discussion Table
« Reply #1837 on: July 13, 2018, 01:16:10 PM »
I avoid using the google docs phone app. It does plenty of weird stuff. Like I go to remove a word by hitting back space and it turns it into some mutant combination where it merges several words and copies a different word from somewhere else and adds it to the mix.

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« Reply #1838 on: July 13, 2018, 06:09:12 PM »
It definitely gets wonky at times, but I've never had too many problems with it until now. Probably gonna find a new writing app to have as a backup soon.
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