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Ambigram
« on: June 20, 2010, 11:04:31 PM »
Chapter 1 Title : The beginning

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Our story begins on a sunny morning. The light shines into an average untidy room with sounds of snoring coming from beneath the bed. An alarm clock on the nightstand displays that it is 7:15 in the morning. Suddenly, a booming voice came from outside the bedroom door.

Unknown voice: Senji! WAKE UP YOU LAZY BUM! YOU ARE LATE FOR SCHOOL !

Senji: Uhh. Rai, ten more minutes please... continue sleeping

Rai (in an angry voice): Did you just call me Rai? I am your dad!

Rai is a man in his late 30's. He is considerably taller than most people and has red, spiky hair. A bit of his personality is evident in the black suit he wears. Entering the room with an angry face, Rai grabs Senji by the ankle and drags him from beneath the bed.

Rai quickly empties a pot of hot water upon the still-asleep boy. Senji jumps in the air screaming.

Senji screams: Hot, Hot!

Rai then throws a bucket of cold water at Senji while he is in the air.

Senji looking relieved: Ahhhh,...COLD!

Senji jumps again but this time Rai hit him in the head knocking him down

Rai: Go get dress!

Senji in desperate looks : Yes sir.
 
They both hear a sound coming from downstairs. it's someone ringing the bell

Rai: That's probably Makio, I'll go get it now hurry up.

Rai rushed leaving the room

Senji while getting dressed: Pfft.. I hate school.

Senji changed his clothes from bed clothes to a black t-shirt with a skull on it and a blue jeans

Rai walked downstairs and he opened the door

Rai looking at Makio: Hey Makio, how are you?

Makio is an 17 year old tanned skinny guy with a blue, small eyes and wavy hair wearing a grey t-shirt and a blue jeans he was smiling

Makio: Hey, Mr.Rai, I'm good. Where is Senji?

Rai: He's coming down, screams Senji Makio is here!

Senji in desperate looks: Coming...

Moving so slow like a zombie he takes his keys, cell phone and his bag and goes downstairs

Senji: Hey, Makio, sorry for being late.

Makio: Yea yea, let's just go...

Senji: Okay, Good bye dad.

Makio: Good bye, Mr.Rai

Rai moving his hand like gangsters: Peace out guys

Senji gives Makio a stupid look till Rai closed the door and they both start laughing in high voice

Senji: I hate when dad tries to act cool in front of my friends
Makio: Be glad that i am not your girlfriend or something (Bursts in laughing)

Senji looking away: Go die.

Makio: Today is my birthday wish me something better than dying.

Senji in evil looks: Happy birthday...now go die.

Makio looking away: Dude, chill,  by the way, did you study for today's exam?

Senji looking away: Not really.

Makio: You mean bastard, Last time you said that you got an A+.

Senji giving dirty smile and looks: hehe.. well i bet that you didn't study.

Makio: Actually i was kind of sick.

Senji: Sick?!

Makio: Yea, I think I am changing somehow...

Senji: Dude, Listen carefully to what i am going to say.

Makio: Yeah...?

Senji: Cover yourself when you're sleeping and stop watching cartoons.

Makio: Shut up !

Punches him in the face changing his face looks to a pie like @

Senji in shock: AWW ! what was that for ?

Makio giving scary looks: Next time i will kill you

Senji opening his eyes widely : Dude, you freak me out with your eyes

Makio Staring at him: Give me Answers or i will kill you.

Senji: Stop this, it's getting really freaky.

Makio: Okay, well what should i do ?

Senji: Cheat like you do in every exam smart ass !

Makio: Yes, will do.

Senji: But you should study like I do. *Same dirty smile*

Makio: I will never be a nerd like you *Mean smile*

Senji: You will never have a job either.
 
A halo appears on Senji's face then he runs

Makio: You...

Makio Runs after Senji

Senji looks at him: Haha, Catch me if you can !

They both reach the School while being tired from running all this distance non-stop

Makio hardly breathing: I...will..get...you after the exam

Senji: Sure fat ass

Makio: What ? i am not a fat ass

Senji in a sarcastic way: But you run like a one

Makio: You are abnormally mean today !

Senji smiling: Well, wish me luck

Makio: I will be the one needing it

They open the class door surprised by the angry face of the class teacher dressed in red who is a hot brunette in late 20's*

Ms. Umi furious at her students: You two are 15 minutes late for your exam!

Both of them: Sorry Ms. Umi, We won't be late again.

Miss.Umi: Okay, this is your last chance hurry up and go inside.

Senji smiling: Now let's do our best!

Makio: Good luck!

Senji: Same to you!

They both seated on their chairs to answer their exam. The clock displays the time as 8:16 then at 11:00 exactly the school bell rings!

Ms.Umi: Time's up, Pens down everyone.

Senji: Wow, what a test!

Makio: I answered it all.

Senji in desperate looks: Lucky! I ended up leaving 6 questions.

Makio : And you said u studied?

Senji smiles: I did my best?

Makio: Anyway, I am not feeling well at all. I am going home. I can't stay at school like this.

Senji: Aren't we going to celebrate your birthday tanned hottie ?

Makio: Maybe tomorrow i am really tired

Senji: Okay, i will call to check on you tonight

Makio: Ok..

Senji looking to Makio's side: By the way i need you to...(He finds no one)

Senji: That idiot he left so fast

3 Meters from Senji there were 2 girls looking directly at him and whispering

Natsu: Makio is odd today, is he sick?

Mai: Makio is odd everyday, chill Natsu.

Natsu smiling: And Senji is cute as always!

Mai smiling: Yeah, wait...WHAT (she turn her eyes) Why are you talking about my future boyfriend ?!

Looks at Natsu but she wasn't beside her

She looks across the room till she find Natsu fall over Senji and acting like it's an accident

Senji look at Natsu surprised

Natsu Winks: Oh, hey Senji.

Senji: Hi..Natsu O_o

Natsu: My top is hurting me so much do you mind helping me getting something out of it Wink?

Senji: uhh... i am not sure about this..

Mai runs and interrupts the chat

Mai:You little bitch !

Mai then jumps on Natsu knocking her on the floor and they both start fighting

Senji: Mai, stop it please? =? Uhh girls...?

They ignore him

Senji: Uhhh...

Senji runs away

Both: Senji, wait up!

Senji bumps into the pink haired gay Haruhi while getting out of the hall door

Haruhi winks: Hello, Senji, want to do something tonight?

Senji: What the hell is happening to this school !?

Senji pushes him away and continue running to the school playground

Haruhi falls on the floor

Haruhi with devil looks: I'll get you sometime..

Senji Reaches to the school gate and start walking home and suddenly when he was in front of his home some wind blows very hard to him that he can't see anything so puts his hands on his face and close his eyes

Senji in surprise: what the hell is that ?!

Unknown sound: there is no doubt you look just like him

Senji: Huh ?!

The wind stops so Senji opens his eyes and looks away but he can't find anyone

Senji: That was so creepy right no.. suddenly he feels like something went piercing his heart then it's dark and someone says

Unknown person: hehe..

Nothing can be seen except an evil smile of an unknown guy appears

At the same time Rai was inside the kitchen and hears some noise of a bike falling on the ground he then looks from the window saying

Rai: Senji !!

He runs at Senji's fainted body at maximum speed and grabs him getting him inside the house he put him on a sofa then he leaves the house and run towards his neighbor knocking on the door voilently

A sound comes from inside the house, if that were you kids then I'm going to kick your asses!

A guy in pajama open the door in an angry face and he is surprised by Rai's troubled face saying

Aron: Hey Rai, why are you breathing hard..

Before he can even continue his sentance Rai grabs him and run toward his house showing him Senji's body laying on the sofa

Aron: What happened ?!

Rai: I dont know please check him, I found him just now laying on the ground infront of the house

Aron: He's okay nothing wrong with him maybe he was just alittle tired just get him in the bed and he should be fine

Rai: Thank god!

Aron: Get him lots of sweet drinks

Rai: Thank you Aron

Aron: Anytime Rai

Aron Leaves the house and closes the door behind him

Rai: Senji what happened to you...

"Next day"

Rai wakes up to the sound of the alarm then he walks to Senji's room lookin at him still sleeping, Rai sits on the bed beside Senji then he notices something on Senji's backneck so he moves senji's alittle then he screams

Rai: W..What how can this be happening !?

Rai rushes downstairs, grabs a book and start flipping pages saying

Rai: He's my son, this cannot be happening!

The book drops due to Rai's shaken hands and the book title shows up "The Ambigrams"

Chapter 1 Ends

« Last Edit: July 28, 2010, 06:33:24 PM by Senchi »

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Re: Time Essences My own Manga "New Topic" Please Delete the old one
« Reply #1 on: June 20, 2010, 11:59:34 PM »
Senchi, We don't delete topics after members add comments.

So we can do 2 things. We can Add this to the topic. or Put this in open post of the old topic.

Which would be better ?

Also Topic name has to be the Name of the story.

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Re: Time Essences My own Manga "New Topic" Please Delete the old one
« Reply #2 on: June 21, 2010, 12:18:43 AM »
he asked me to just lock the old topic but i was going to consult you before i did that. this really hasnt happened before so i wasnt sure

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Re: Time Essences My own Manga "New Topic" Please Delete the old one
« Reply #3 on: June 21, 2010, 12:41:10 AM »
Can't u just lock the other one...? and sure i will edit the topic name

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Re: Time Essences "New Plot"
« Reply #4 on: June 21, 2010, 01:01:18 AM »
its possible yes but i'm unsure if its the right procedure

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Re: Time Essences "New Plot"
« Reply #5 on: June 21, 2010, 01:22:37 AM »
Ok for this time I ll lock the old one and let it get buried. Each story can have only one Topic in this section. If the story is not finalized yet better post in story development board.

So should keep this topic here to move to story development ?

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Ambigram
« Reply #6 on: June 21, 2010, 09:04:16 AM »
Okai, no problem i agree with that
« Last Edit: June 22, 2010, 11:28:13 AM by Senchi »

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Re: Ambigram
« Reply #7 on: June 22, 2010, 03:57:59 PM »
well over all its much better than the first version. lets see what you do with the rest of the story

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Re: Ambigram
« Reply #8 on: June 22, 2010, 04:32:49 PM »
Awesome glad that you like it =)

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Re: Ambigram
« Reply #9 on: June 22, 2010, 06:43:10 PM »
Here's the example of consistent line breaking.
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Our story begins on a sunny morning. The light shines into an average untidy room with sounds of snoring coming from beneath the bed. An alarm clock on the nightstand displays that it is 7:15 in the morning. Suddenly, a booming voice came from outside the bedroom door.

Unknown Voice: Zero!! WAKE UP YOU LAZY BUM! YOUR ARE LATE FOR SCHOOL!!!!

A young 18 year old boy with a medium build was snoring from under his bed while someone kept calling him from outside his room. He answered the person and continued snoring.

Zero: Rai~ Ten more minutes, please...
Rai (in an angry voice): Did you just call me Rai? I am your dad!

Rai is a man in his late 30's. He is considerably taller than most people and has red, spiky hair. A bit of his personality is evident in the black suit he wears. Entering the room with an angry face, Rai grabs Zero by the ankle and drags him from beneath the bed.

Rai: Ten more seconds and i will be kicking your ass out of this house!

Rai quickly empties a pot of boiling water upon the still-asleep boy. Zero jumps into the air screaming.

Zero: Hot! Hot!

Rai then throws a bucket of cold water at Zero while he is in the air.

I'm back~~~

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Re: Ambigram
« Reply #10 on: June 22, 2010, 06:47:51 PM »
good point Sai

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Re: Ambigram
« Reply #11 on: June 22, 2010, 06:56:31 PM »
Ehh, it's good.
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Re: Ambigram
« Reply #12 on: June 22, 2010, 06:59:07 PM »
It has some grammatical, easily fixed though. I have no idea what Sai was saying...I'm really slow, someone explain to me please?
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Re: Ambigram
« Reply #13 on: June 22, 2010, 07:00:35 PM »
sai is saying to change the formating

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Re: Ambigram
« Reply #14 on: June 22, 2010, 07:03:25 PM »
Oh, got it. Thanks for the explanation [aero]. I'm pretty slow today.
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