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« Reply #30 on: June 11, 2010, 04:39:00 PM »

JAFA WEAKER THEN A WOMEN AND HER PET

As Rytu began to walk down the mountain heading towards Lord Goteru of Nor he was thinking of his next encounter with the one man he could not beat Jafa! Little did Rytu know Jafa was about to once again equal in power and might.
   Back at the Forest of Kira Jafa laid still in a deep sleep only to awake in sky standing on a cloud looking at a beautiful women. Standing ready to fight Jafa exclaims, "Who are you?" "I am the Mother of Light Kira!" exclaims the beautiful women. Jafa looks are the figure and says, " There is no way you are her and I will prove it. There is no one who can stop my strength!" Before the beautiful l women could reply he charged at her swinging are her head with all his might. Roar... his might and power make the wind around his fist rumble like a lions roar. As he completes his swing he notices that the lady is not there but she is behind him. She says to him, "Jafa I am the reason your power and might have never failed to protect this land. To prove it I will fight you with my magical powers within this sword." As petite women pulls out a large wide sword with a bluish yellow fog inside of it Jafa laughs. "You expect me to believe that such a small person can wield that weapon?" Jafa says laughing.  As Jafa laughs the figure comes at him and slaps the sword across his chest cracking all his ribs. Jafa begins to pant saying, "What did you do to me you used something else besides that sword!" Grinning the figure says, "I told you I was stronger here meet my pet he is stronger then you also." As the women lifts the sword and drives it into a cloud a massive bulldog with an armored body comes out huffing and puffing. " Attack!" yells the women. As the pet rushes Jafa grabs it and slams into the cloud only to find that he was missing an arm and it was in the dogs mouth. As the Dog began to eat the arm Jafa says, " So if you're a goddess why don't you kill me?" Kira answers' "I am Kira and I am here to help you save the world. I am trapped inside this sword with my pet and we need your help. Without him my magic is useless and without me his power is incomplete. My sisters sword is somewhere and someone will find it and she will use them to do evil and control all in the land killing anyone who will not worship her." Jafa nods in agreement. The lady smiles and Jafa wakes only to find two tattoos on his chest. One of a dragon head and one of a Bulldog. As he goes to pick up the tree he notices he has his arm back and the tree is in the pets mouth with the Sword laying on the ground. Jafa says' " I will call you Kiro after your master." Kiro barks in agreement as him and Jafa head back to Garu with the tree.
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« Reply #31 on: June 20, 2010, 09:47:37 AM »

http://gi148.photobucket.com/groups/s27/NWNCCHGG1J/page-17.jpg

i didn't draw this pic well so sorry about it, this pic is from the idea from the story line from legomaestro,
(A beautiful woman in white. She has long pure white hair hanging over her back, and holds a sword in a professional two hand grip.

Her opponent is in black revealing clothes, and has pure black hair. She holds her blade in a casual one hand grip.)

wanted to make it better but something come out and i have to stop it.... for now...for a long time...and sorry for the bad drawing.
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« Reply #32 on: July 02, 2010, 03:09:07 AM »

Thanks for the picture anyway, kinre. It's greatly appreciated.

 Faith, i'm back online. Before i read this segment i need it paragraphed, i can't quite read it. As i'm comfortably swamped with things to do, i can't do that myself for the moment.
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« Reply #33 on: July 05, 2010, 09:31:02 AM »

I will break it up a bit more if you need it that way. mainly left it the way it was because it was all one scene but i will have my wife who edits my books look at it.
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« Reply #34 on: July 05, 2010, 10:55:55 AM »

never mind, at the time i was busy, but now i have time to look at it.
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« Reply #35 on: July 05, 2010, 03:42:58 PM »

THE TWO GROWING LEGENDS

Large groups of people of all sorts arrived wounded in various ways in Norian homes . (The Village of Nor was by now The Kingdom of Nor) .

The refugees ranged from bandits to corrupt officials. The wounded criminals came telling all sorts of stories about a divine god in the form of a large bear-like man, who wielded a thin and tall katana and walked a large monstorous dog. This god judged every wrong doer with solid justice.

 The criminals who had not arrived at Nor had been executed according to their sins. One of the refugees, a corrupt official who had lost an eye, both hands and a leg sobbed as he told,

“He looks into your soul, see’s every deep sin and pays you accordingly.”

Even the villagers of Garru suffered punishment, so that no one could laugh at the other saying,

 “Look at him! At least I am better…” Everyone in Garru by the end of the year had at least a tiny scar because of the mysterious ‘god’.

There were two attempts at rebellion, but these ended badly for the ringleaders, who all suffered excecution.

 A tense peace came to the land, but it softened as the people began to understand this ‘god’s’ wishes.

 They threw away their terrible lives and lived together even more, and without soughting it, The Village of Garru became an Empire, with the small defenceless villages appointing it as their ruling Empire. They attempted to praise the 'god', but he firmly refused. They wanted him to be emperor but he refused as well. This 'god' said,

“I am only a man, my name is Jaffa. I desire nothing but peace. I will appoint you you're emperor, but shall watch over everything to control evil.”

So Garru became an Empire.



The village of Nor told a different story. Their armies multiplied, and all forms of violence and madness seeped into them. People were scared of Rytu to the point they despised him as a soldier of their army. They called him a devil and tried to enlist the help of Jaffa to get rid of him. (They didn’t make it out of the city, as other people scared of Rytu’s wrath for letting this happen, arrested them and executed them on the spot.)

Rytu did nothing but continue his slaying and taking of power, so that he found himself the King of Nor.

“I desire nothing but respect.” He said in his new voice.

Respect was given to him, but the people were still bitter.

However only a month in his reign, the competitive nature of his kingdom bore fruit. Scientists, philosphers and magicians emerged, and Nor became a super kingdom over two months. They researched technologies of all sorts that made Garru look completely primitive. They had strict military, and built an advanced, closed off society, so that Garru had no knowledge of the sudden wealth and intelligence Nor had gained.

Rytu came to his throne, wearing what looked extremely strange to the people. He had a high collared black shirt (silver buttons )and black jeans, with white canvas sneakers. He wore sunglasses as well and his hair was large fiery. He had demanded these be made, and they had been made.

The people did not understand, but Rytu smiled at them with his secret knowledge: His magicians had gained the power of seeing futures of all kinds.
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« Reply #36 on: July 10, 2010, 07:55:15 PM »

cool idea. i like it you will have to give me a moment to finish the story. I dont know how much longer you want to take this into story, just let me know. I am very busy now with the army, my Novel, and my three sons. But we will finish this just let me know how many more passes you want to do.
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« Reply #37 on: July 11, 2010, 08:20:22 AM »

Wow, you sound extremely busy.

What Novel is this that you're working on?

Well, we could just wrap it up with you posting one last chapter and me doing the same. I guess we know the eventual end is Jaffa vs. Rytu.

It's been interesting while it lasted, though. This was a nice idea.
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« Reply #38 on: July 12, 2010, 06:03:54 PM »

Busy just a little. we can end it however and when ever. I am just buys with work. the novel i am trying to sorta read a writing book to help me a little bit so i can finish it. It is call Seed.
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