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[Cache]

I like the way that although you're not sure about some angles you go ahead with them anyway. Although I can't tell what's happening without the dialog (which could be a flaw, it's very important that pictures be able to convey story without words) I still really like the way everything is coming together. Woo! This will be good when the dialog is added!

(P.S.) For the top view watch the perspective on the horses and the trees they should all match to the same vanishing point.

[kinre]

yea i know the tree and the horses thing the horses is not done have to remake it too small hard to draw.
i know the pic is hard to understant with out word because i cut alot of pic and story, and so the story will not be good, untill now i still doing cuting at some point needed more page. for the unsure angle thing hahahaha yea alot of angle i not too sure what to draw and i draw it but it because i don't want to draw the background or because of something the pic have to change. in the end this story is not really have a good planing when makeing it that why become like this, but well still learn alot of thing from it.

[animeABC]

Kinre's improving

[kinre]

improving? in?

[animeABC]

I don't know which one sir,
but I think you have a great story~~

[kinre]

it been  a while from my last post i will post the last few page few day later changeing some word on it for now.
just 1 Q how do u get the file of the page ?

[kinre]

ok is done although is not good... and not easy to understant .... well gived my best hope u guy will understant it lol
oh and by the way is 19 page only
and again .... how do u get the file?

[[aero]]

art aside i think you should have posted the scrip so some of us could look over it, english is obviously not your first language and that made the story kinda hard to follow

as for the art there were some pics that i really like though theres also a few anatomy things you should look into, the most prominent would be the thickness of your necks and the size of hands

another thing to mention is the backgrounds, the panels that have backgrounds are great, but at points they disappear leaving rather blank panels, its kind of a shock to the eyes when reading through, so either try fading in and out the amount of details on the backgrounds, or stick with a more consistent level

[kinre]

hmmmmm will take note of it for next time and thx for reply

[Coryn Sken]

pretty much what aero said. but how many pages do you have here?

[kinre]

haaa i did say 19 page... u missed that

[Coryn Sken]

oh snap i guess i did. the reason i bring it up is cause i think the page limit for anthology three was 15 pages O.o it could be twenty though.

scratch that it is 20

[Corycaly]

Kinre: I am currently formatting your pages but they contain a lot of grammar mistakes. Did you send your pages to Kite or Coryn for grammar correction as they had suggested? Please correct and send the corrected pages before 31st september or the project won't be included in the anthology.