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Author Topic: No-Named Story Idea (Critque/Adivce Seeking)  (Read 520 times)

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No-Named Story Idea (Critque/Adivce Seeking)
« on: July 08, 2020, 12:04:17 PM »
[* = 'WIP']

TITLE: *WIP*
GENRE: Action, Slice-of-Life
SYNOPSIS: Various races live on the planet of Gaia*, ranging from humans to other various 'beastfolk'. Each race and region harbor traits of, what is known as the 'Three Sacred Gifts Of Gaia': Strength, Knowledge, and Magic. And while many use various combinations of these gifts; many tend to focus on one in particular.

This story begins a few years ago from the main story on the 'Isles Of Sonata'; home to the Lutra race. Otter-like in appearance and aquatic by nature; the Lutra's were bestowed the gift of magic with skills in strength.

Known as one of the friendliest races upon the planet; they have lend their aid to many ships sailed by humans and help prevent nautical accidents and catastrophes.

Their main signature trait is their one of a kind 'Music Magic'. With hand crafted drums, flutes, and other instruments; the Lutra's weave sound for not only recreation but for offensive and defensive purposes. It is said that the energy they use is called 'Rhythm'; a force located in all beings that only a few can harness.

The Isles are made up of three main lands; each an essential part of the Lutras lifestyle. One for hunting and gathering. One for living. And another for Agriculture.

Unbeknownst to many non-Lutra is a hidden city located below the three islands. The City Of Allegro and the resting place of the 'Planets Heart'; an ancient, formless artifact said to have been gifted to them by the gods.

The tribal chief in days of old held the Lutra tribe together and was; at time, an ambassador between human and Lutra relations as they traveled across their waters. While they both agreed to lend aid each other on the seas; it was forbidden for either to step foot on the opposing persons land. Despite that, relations between humans and Lutra were often peaceful if not brief.

Fast forward to the birth of the tribal chiefs son, Treble. Upon being born; it was made clear that the boy was dangerously ill. A virus that robbed him of his fur pigmentation and rendered him deaf; a death sentence for the musically inclined race. All medical attempts on their behalf proved inconclusive and the chief grew desperate. Treble wouldn't survive the season at this rate.

Taking a risk; the chief gather a squad of men and carrying his sickly son, traveled to the human region; New Eden*.

Human are known to hold the gift of knowledge with a skills in strength. Their technological wonders range from medical and transportation to smaller applications like drones and security systems. All smacked dabbed within a bustling city that never sleeps.

Fear struck those who witnessed the band of Lutra on human lands. Many have never seen races like their before. Begging and pleading for them to care for his son; the group was swiftly taken to the heart of New Eden*; Naomi Industries*: The leading company of technological wonders spanning the city and then some.

The company head; Mr.Naomi, listened to pleas of the chief and agreed to help... under one condition.

Trebles race has never been fully studied before and to say they had the means to cure what ailed his son was a stretch without further understand the biology of the Lutra's. Under the condition that his race would submit themselves for study over the following years; Naomi Industries will house Treble and stabilize the virus within him until a cure was created.

Out of fear of losing his son if he declined; the chief had little choice but to agree to the terms and from there, the expansion of human studies traveled to the Isle of Allegro.

The tribal chief; as much as he wanted to stay by his son, needed to return to his kingdom along with the researchers. Placing his faith in the humans and leaving one skilled warrior behind, the chief was off back to the island to regain order.

As time past; a breakthrough was found through an invention called the 'SYNC' hearing device. Fitting the young otter with it; slowly his hearing would return and his natural link to magic energy;'Rhythm', was found. Further testing; to check for side effects, were place but after a long and tedious battle; Treble was now curious of the strange world in which he resided.

Stories of the massive metal city of New Eden, the lights and sounds of the various machines within facility, and strange food given to him; the young otter took it all in as the ever watchful eye of the warrior kept track.

Trebles favorite past time was listening to the radio. Music made by humans was very different from the natural rhythm his tribe felt. Nevertheless it was catchy and always put a smile on his face when DJ Jet Stream's smooth and snarky voice spoke. Speaking to warrior, named 'Beat', Treble confided his dream to one day be a DJ like her; Beat simply humoring him and becoming a close friend with the younger otter.

However; word quickly began to span the ocean.

The tribe chief was found deceased. Killed by the same virus that Treble was stricken with.


~MORE LATER~
« Last Edit: July 11, 2020, 09:07:16 PM by Kata_Misashi »

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Re: No-Named Story Idea (Critque/Adivce Seeking)
« Reply #1 on: July 23, 2020, 05:33:47 AM »
Gaaah cliffhanger! The moment I saw 'deaf son' I already immediately thought: That's a terrible thing to have in a musically inclined race.

This is a concept that just jumps out at you really, it almost writes itself. Definitely interesting and potential for a lot of interesting scenes and emotionally moving moments. Strange enough, I'd actually be more interested in the character stories rather than any action scenes. It seems like that kind of story from my first impressions.

Also, long time no see Kata. Hope you're doing good

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Re: No-Named Story Idea (Critque/Adivce Seeking)
« Reply #2 on: July 25, 2020, 12:55:08 AM »
Gaaah cliffhanger! The moment I saw 'deaf son' I already immediately thought: That's a terrible thing to have in a musically inclined race.

This is a concept that just jumps out at you really, it almost writes itself. Definitely interesting and potential for a lot of interesting scenes and emotionally moving moments. Strange enough, I'd actually be more interested in the character stories rather than any action scenes. It seems like that kind of story from my first impressions.

Also, long time no see Kata. Hope you're doing good

Lego! It's good to see you! Been far too long!

As for the story; that was the idea. The action is few and far in between and captures the struggles 'Treble' face being thrown into leadership at a young age. Throw in the mystery of the origin of the virus, keeping ties with the humans strong, ordering the city and handling the mental trauma of it all... I aim to make fairly interesting.

With that being said; I wanted to pitch a few ideas on how to actually start the story without 'revealing' as much as I have already. That being in three ways...

1] Through the eyes of his father; racing desperately to the human city. Hearing his thoughts of how confusing everything is and the reaction from the humans upon them arriving.

2] Through the eyes of the doctor working on Treble. Starting off on a medical review that seems 'normal' at first before the reader begins to realize the patient isn't human.

3] Through the eyes of Treble. The 'dream cliche' start of Treble 'suffocating' in silence. A full description of what the virus is doing to him before... 'waking up' to the doctor preparing for a checkup.
« Last Edit: July 25, 2020, 12:56:44 AM by Kata_Misashi »