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Diesinglong scenarios help me out please discuss with me
« on: July 19, 2019, 11:25:47 PM »
https://diesinglong.fandom.com/wiki/Abilities_and_Powers

http://oeiji2000.forumotion.com/t468-what-andou-hamilton-should-be-like

The Golden Kingdom becomes the only magic in this world but then divided 10 magisterial espers to take place in continents in order to expand their territory. Each divided organization chooses a diversity of Magic less candidates to compete for survival as they face a captivated society and segments of humanity biggest threat.  The story takes place with Andou and other members of his family being in several exploits. Andou and friends become invaders to magisterial espers making them fugitives.  As the story moves on they predict Disasters and World Domination yet to come leading to indestructible foes and events that can bring down the Golden Kingdom.

My story is about a Ancient Civilization that has been targeted for deadly magic organizations. They need something there that can expand there territory. I'm still thinking of stuff but yeah my character Andou is one of the people to evacuate the Ancient Civilization due to threats of his fathers business called the Ancient Civilization market. So basically bad people target Andou fathers plan his name is Siegmund. However during the process of evacuating, Andou is chosen from heroes bloodline to receive a blue ocean amulet to protect himself and he must later become a member of the band of misfits. The Ancient Civilization has a borderline to cross the terrestrial territories. Andou must cross it however within this borderline there is a sewer dungeon more like a shrine and a shrine tournament this is a ordeal he must face for superior ranking. A man name Kilimanjaro organizes the band of misfits he guides Andou and Elliot to get pass the border and to live outside of the Ancient Civilization. One of the reasons why they have to leave is due to stress of these kinds of scenarios.

My problem is so far is trying figure out the sewer dungeon you can look in my file I just need scenarios. I'm thinking the candidates facing the mandarin fish knights and the final boss is already known as the heroes bloodline individual. I'm thinking of Andou facing that creature and sealing it in his amulet later on receiving training from this individual.

So far I was thinking of something feudal and modern like just like hunter x hunter and inuyasha. So what I have thought of is that these deadly magic organizations came from the history of the past that was in a plot with the Golden Kingdom somehow these individuals became immortal and now they are plotting deadly dreams. So I would call these people the dead people / deadly magic organizations. So far there is 3 organizations who are low class kingdom compared to the Golden Kingdom like Mime, Serpent Knight and Asian Lung. I'm thinking of enemies with cool outfits later in the story. I'm thinking of katastrophe levels, survival situations, tournaments, scenarios and 1 to 1 fights.

I want to introduce a couple of characters through out the story while Andou gets a manufacturing/laborer job and goes to school.

Andou characteristics: previous trauma to mental illness its in wikia link he is recovering, stupid boy, mature, funny, heroic, empathy, sometimes impulse and unpredictable such as being oblivious he is kind hearted and buds to his strength.

no link ~ my scripts chp1-2 I want to keep writing more and want to draw manga

I want to also put demons and folklore creatures in here. I want to think of lots of stuff.
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« Reply #1 on: July 21, 2019, 11:42:56 AM »
Hey there, it seems you're very passionate about this project and have already gathered a lot of resources. I know you asked for some eyes on this in the chit chat topic so I've taken a look and I'm, well confused in truth.

This synopsis is a bit muddled and its hard to make sense of it. Is this a summary of the plot, an introduction, the history of the world or an amalgamation of all three? You're also throwing a lot of names/terms that people unfamiliar with your story wont have a clue about, so I'd either leave them out or give an explanation for them. If you streamline this a bit, then it'll be easier to read and understand the narrative and plot points you want to get across  :thumbsup:

Onto the actual part you asked for help with, it sounds like the sewer dungeon is going to be a good old fashioned tournament arc? (I haven't clicked on the link, I aint taking chances on files leading away from the forum bro, sorry)

You mentioned he's part of a band of misfits but then needs to improve his ranking by entering this tournament? Does the superior ranking allow him to pass through the border uninhibited?

My advice for running this kind of arc would be;
-Establish the stakes. What does advancing and winning in the tournament mean to the characters/plot? If escaping the country is so important and he is unwilling to fight, thats an interesting conflict to include. His need to win to grant others a pass to crossover such as his friends and family would outweigh his own reluctance to fight.
 
-Explore your extended cast. There's a reason Tournaments tend not to happen in the first arc of a story. The strength of this kind of plot point is that it gives you a great opportunity to showcase other characters aside from your main protagonist. Have others in his group do some combat, we can learn a lot about them, their motivations, abilities and back stories over the course of their fights. It's a great way to either introduce a rival or to end a feud between characters as well.

-Don't be afraid to mix it up. I know the tried and true traditional 1-on-1 elimination tournament is a staple of the battle shonen genre, but you can always have fun playing with the formula. Fairy Tails Magic Games arc was a good example, so too was MHA's sports festival. They didn't just have battles. There were challenges where characters used their powers to overcome the challenges, each in their own way. Have a think about if there are other ways you can vary the format. Maybe there's a game you can adapt to fit the style of your world, this could showcase your world building too. As an example, when I think of sewers, I think of a maze of dark, damp tunnels. You could make the whole challenge one giant labyrinth, where the characters have to make it out alive while facing an assortment of foes and puzzles along the way. This could all culminate in a big boss battle at the end.

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« Reply #2 on: July 21, 2019, 01:58:15 PM »
water levels, other people (rivals)

elevator cage
scavenger hunt
making a cage to use an an elevator like finding random bars and melting them together
Mandarin Fish knights
Giant Mandarin Fish knight Boss..

for the sewer dungeon and yes I agree with the giant labyrinth and puzzles. So far I put 20 people in there and including 5 boat men called the trumpets who wore astronaut outfits also having lance weapons and having air tanks on their backs they are gonna be sorted in groups of 4 and later on enters the gate with a grimoire and suddenly gets separated by a multiple water falls.  A water fall is about to begin. Zero and Abraham team manage to close a floor so that It wouldn’t reach bottom. Now they are all in different groups.

Andou, Elliot and Oulu reach a pathway that led to a guessing room. This room gave out a puzzling quiz. It needed Gregorian grimoire, colorful stones. It had to be put in order. It gave out riddles to find each stone.

Turtle, Motarike and Bursey met up in underneath a pile of stone steps and cliffs leading to various caves.

There was one entrance leading to another one but it needed a grimoire and colorful rocks. First they have to get Gregorian. Gregorian is the one who used his grimoire in the slot of gate entrance of the sewer dungeon.

Ross, Gregorian, Zero, Cyanide and Avellino were all alone trying to find ways to activate a bridge leading to another bridge.

Bompensiero, Todd, Salvatore, Maud, Reiji, and Dimitri come across with 2 mandarin fish knights blocking a gate leading to a lever for water. With this lever they can enter another path. This situation will bring out terror.

Andou and the others left the room they found swinging boats. They decided to separate when they landed each pulled their own lever. The boat became a rollercoaster leading to a anonymous location. Hoping to find Gregorian and his grimoire.

for those who don't look at the link I can explain here but atleast look at the wikia

1) Start with a situation/problem
2) Character needs to find a solution to problem
3) By finding the solution the character is rewarded with a skill and/or item in the future based on how they solved the problem

To make it more interesting repeat steps 1 and 2 before going onto step 3
Example
1) Room is flooding
2) Andou/Elliot notice the airtanks on the Trumpets and ask to share
1) The Trumpets refuse
2) Andou/Elliot take the airtanks by force
1) The room is now flooded and they don't know how to get out
2) They try exiting through a doorway underwater
1) Turns out to be a dead end
2) They go back and find the real exit
3) Upon reaching the surface Andou/Elliot now have airtanks in their possession

I'm also thinking I wonder how the sacred water vase peak and other abilities can be introduce for Andou I was thinking that he gets a concussion to activate his powers. When he saves the day I want it to make it similar with like the Gantz mission when Kei Kurono vs. the tanaka alien.

I want to put a twist where Kilamanjaro helps Andou get the turf leader sealed in his amulet but something happens during the fight where he becomes an enemy and turns into this



after that there's a tunnel and a pathway leading to a shrine tournament. A Tournament to upgrade ranking could be a ordeal to rank against espers. We hope the characters get passed through. What do you mean: Does the superior ranking allow him to pass through the border uninhibited?

Yeah I mean like other parts of the story I would like to put stuff like similar in championship unreal like capture the flag, catch the ball, or team death match. Stuff like that but for now will just have these situations that lead Andou and some people leave the Ancient Civilization and then I want to introduce a couple of characters through out the story while Andou gets a manufacturing/laborer job and goes to school. I could also put delinquents in other parts of the city having their own turf in a abandon school and can put mafia and hitman in there. Some random esper can target Siegmund sons just get into Siegmunds plans. Later on these individual have there own exploits facing deadly magic organizations having there own situation. Btw Siegmund is deaf and dumb due to a accident to his physical well being.

Trying to figure out the sewer dungeon and its scenarios
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« Reply #3 on: July 21, 2019, 06:58:02 PM »
So, have to agree with Vacant up top there. You are pretty all over the place here Evan. It's pretty hard to follow what you're asking for here. Our of curiosity (and don't take this the wrong way), but what is your native language? I just want to get a grasp on where you're coming from here. I understand that working in a language that isn't your native is pretty daunting, and my utmost respect goes out to all that do.

I'm going to give some general advice: When asking for help on a story like this, always reduce the information you're presenting to prospective helpers to the absolute bare essentials. We don't need to know all of the character names and the jargon. Break things down into concepts. Main character, side character, antagonist, primary antagonist, evil empire, father, best friend, the main character's weapon, the mc'guffin, etc. These are the kind of words that you should stick to. It makes it so that anyone can understand you without having to go into intensive research to learn your world first.

It's also going to be useful to you to think of things in these terms. Stories are made of building blocks. Think of them like legos, or your plastic toy brick of choice. Individual bricks are understandable to anyone who comes across them, but if you scribble unique names onto all of them first, it's going to be a lot harder to understand you when you say "the flat 4x4 piece attaches to the top of the 2x6 brick". But once you are also thinking of them in generic terms, you will have learned something fundamental about all stories. They're all unique once fully assembled, but broken down to their essentials, they are the same as every other one.

As to what Vacant said about the links: We ask that if you have stories, that you post them directly to the forum. No offense, but we don't really know you at all yet. Trust like that takes time to build. It's easier for everyone if you just post your stories directly if you want the help. That goes for posting things like the wiki you've built. It's cool that you've done that, don't get me wrong, but flat out, no one is going to take the time reading it to try and piece together your characters and world. A piece of writing should always stand by itself. Wikis are not there to help people understand your story. If a person can't understand the story from the 'published' material, then you have failed as a writer. It doesn't matter if you're the most accomplished author in the world or just another nameless kid on the internet with an idea. Plus, giving us the actual material in an easily accessible format will help us give you better information than any summary possibly could. Back to the lego metaphor above, the blocks  will always be the same, it's how you put them together that matters.


Now, with that out of the way, let's get onto this arc of yours.

You definitely seem to have a bunch of ideas swarming around your head. I don't think what you need is for us to actually feed you specific scenarios. That's just going to lead to clutter. Clutter is the bane of the story writer my friend. You need to again, reduce things to their bare essentials. In this instance, ask the question: What is this sewer dungeon providing to the overall story? What purpose is served by your characters going through it? Who of those characters needs to benefit from having gone through the dungeon? Who does not need to be there? If that character doesn't need to be there, why do you have them there? Is that a good reason? What are the events of the story leading us here? Do they make sense logically? Is that reason contrived? Does the situation fit into the natural flow of the narrative? Is there an appropriately long rest from the action of the story before and after the dungeon? What do the characters ultimately hope to gain by entering the dungeon? (Not just the main cast, but every character we encounter). Does it make sense for those characters to be there? How are the events of this section of story going to impact the very end of the story? Is there any other way that those ends could be met? Would it be better if the results of this arc come from a different arc?

If you're having trouble answering any of the above questions, then you're trying to do too much. As the faithful acronym tells us: K.I.S.S., "Keep It Simple Stupid". Don't over complicate things that you don't have to. The reader will thank you for it.

Again, those aren't questions I'm asking you to answer here and now. They are questions I want you to ask yourself. They are also not an exhaustive list.

Now, some questions I do want you to answer:

        - When in the story do the events of this dungeon/tournament take place? (A rough percentage of completion is fine)
        - How many characters are involved? Grand total, and how many of that grand total are part of the main cast of character?
        - In a single sentence, what is the result of this arc going to be? If you can't sum this entire thing up using a single sentence, then I can tell you just from that that you have over complicated the whole thing.
        - What do you want your readers to feel during this arc? If you can, sum it up in a single word.
        - Now tell me what makes that word different from the word you would chose for the arcs on either side of this one.


I hope that isn't too big of an ask. But we need to set a baseline here if you wan't meaningful help. You need to be simple and direct to get the most benefit from a topic like this. I can make up scenarios for your heroes to find themselves in all day, but if I do, then I have failed you, because I wouldn't have helped you better the foundation of your story. A strong foundation is everything Evan. If you take nothing else from this whole thing, I want it to be that.

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« Reply #4 on: July 21, 2019, 08:15:16 PM »
I speak only English i'm Filipino and 12.5% Chinese I'm just not good with comprehension and cognitive but I can understand well. Thanks for the meaningful questions I'll have to ask myself those ones when I can. Yeah I agree with you I'm over complicating things when I should simplify things segment by segment I just don't know how to do that. Hope I can later on.

 - When in the story do the events of this dungeon/tournament take place? (A rough percentage of completion is fine)

Well its a borderline to get to the other side the terrestrial territories. So at the beginning Main character is being evacuated from the Ancient Civilization like trouble is coming. So Kilimanjaro the organizer of the band of misfits is going to get him to the other side with Elliot. The band of misfits is chosen from family blood just like katekyo hitman reborn mafia family.

 - How many characters are involved? Grand total, and how many of that grand total are part of the main cast of character?

There are deadly magic organizations but I wouldn't say kingdoms 3 of them are low class kingdoms compared to the Golden Kingdom. Mime, Serpent Knight and Asian Lung.



There is Andou, Elliot, Oulu, Motarike, Irugin Andou brother and Dimitri there could also be girl characters and younger characters some of them could help but others are not a part of the help they just support characters.

Variety of characters clash like hitman, demons and dead people but I would like it to be somewhat a one man show and for some characters to have there own individual exploit. There could be death involve scenario to scenario also good for character development.

Andou, Elliot and Oulu are mainly the main cast but I also like a group of people just like Ueki and his team in the law of ueki or like tokyo underground anime I also like soul society in bleach and hunters association in hunter x hunter.

Irugin I like to based of of anime characters such as Hibari Kyoya from KHR anime, Nishi from Gantz but not personality like him, Sai from naruto, Kurei from flame of recca. Kinda want to make him like sesshomaru in inuyasha or like a Jellal character in fairy tail. Motarike Pisuke can be around but I'm trying to figure out his character to my own liking.

Oh yeah there is Lchiv one main antagonist villain in the 10 most deadly magic organization. Ancestor to Andou and Irugin. Lchiv possesses the power of the pterodactyl. Lchiv can transform into a pterodactyle and can be a Asian Lung combined with pterodactyle. He is also known as Mame Puteradakuchiru his ethnicity was forwarded to Andou and Irugin when they were born. I could figure out outfits later I like Marie Antoinette clothing and Mythology for the villains some could look like ninja or whatever.

Siegmund Hamilton involved with Ancient Civilization market, enemies are after Ancient Civilizations and plans rarely not heard. Father of Andou and Irugin he becomes deaf and dumb due to a accident to his physical well being.

Other than that trying to figure out characters

 - In a single sentence, what is the result of this arc going to be? If you can't sum this entire thing up using a single sentence, then I can tell you just from that that you have over complicated the whole thing

Escaping Corruption of the Ancient Civilization so that Andou can live life from being not being a fugitive. I want to get around what What Vacant said: Does the superior ranking allow him to pass through the border uninhibited? Between Ancient Civilzation and Terrestrial Territories. A High Spirits license could be involve like

Ranking system 5 tiers like one punch man

S class
A class
B class (Top 5 in tournament)
C class (Have to go to the tournament and get top 10)
D class (Everyone starts off here by doing a test at their organization)

 - What do you want your readers to feel during this arc? If you can, sum it up in a single word.

HYPE and feeling the suspense.
 
 - Now tell me what makes that word different from the word you would chose for the arcs on either side of this one.

There isn't a belonging seems like the character is lost he wants to do something about it. He wants to have a enjoyable life.

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Right Now I want to understand the Sewer Dungeon story and how I could build it so that the characters can go to the shrine tournament and gain access to the terrestrial territories.
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« Reply #5 on: July 24, 2019, 11:56:51 PM »
It seems like you're struggling to fit this sewer dungeon into the story. We cant tell you what to write, we can only help you along the way.

One thing I do when I'm struggling to plot a chapter/arc is I make a couple of lists. I list the objectives that I the writer want to achieve, the goals and motivations of the main characters involved and any major events/developments I want to happen.

From there, I bullet point the arc. It gives me a rough skeleton of the plot and helps figure out which pieces go where and what scenes will be pivotal. It also helps with hammering out any major inconsistencies or plot holes. 

My advice for the arc in question would be to put it in the second arc of your plot. Spend the first introducing the characters, setting up the world and showing the reader the conflict that happens that tears his life apart and requires him to flee.

The Sewer could be seen as a last resort perhaps and referred to as they attempt other routes. Perhaps the culmination of the first arc would one such attempt. They regroup and then try the sewer to cross the border and into the other territories.

Ultimately though, write it. You'll figure so much out when you start putting pen to paper (or typing). As the creator, you're in the best position to decide when events happen on the timeline of your story and getting it written down does wonders for helping you make sense of it.

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« Reply #6 on: July 25, 2019, 01:11:43 AM »
- I agree with that

One thing I do when I'm struggling to plot a chapter/arc is I make a couple of lists. I list the objectives that I the writer want to achieve, the goals and motivations of the main characters involved and any major events/developments I want to happen.

From there, I bullet point the arc. It gives me a rough skeleton of the plot and helps figure out which pieces go where and what scenes will be pivotal. It also helps with hammering out any major inconsistencies or plot holes.

 - I don't agree with that. I would like to make it the first arc because it is exciting with a thrill and when the scenarios pop in then the viewers could figure our how they can be introduce to the characters and it could be explained later. I could set up the world and the conflict, i'll see what I can do

My advice for the arc in question would be to put it in the second arc of your plot. Spend the first introducing the characters, setting up the world and showing the reader the conflict that happens that tears his life apart and requires him to flee.

 - The Sewer Dungeon is the first part of the story because I want it to make it look like to the viewers to try to figure out whats going on. There isn't any other routes but there could be one route though that would be introduce further in the story which is forbidden for the characters or something like that.

The Sewer could be seen as a last resort perhaps and referred to as they attempt other routes.

 - Yeah that seems ok but there would be trials, twist and deaths. Dramatic stuff but not too dramatic I'll have to see what I can do. It would be like not a regroup but entering a alliance with foes and allies where they all have to trust each other. Idk how to explain it but Andou is the only one who really needs to evacuate the Ancient Civilization and about the others i'm trying to figure that out as well. As explain Andou Dad Siegmund has plans from the Ancient Civilization Market and enemies are after it so they can expand their territory but there could be other corruption in the Ancient Civilization but I want to make it clear that the Ancient Civilization is not a bad place. 

Perhaps the culmination of the first arc would one such attempt. They regroup and then try the sewer to cross the border and into the other territories.



Yeah and I want to know what this means I like the sound of it I can use it: Does the superior ranking allow him to pass through the border uninhibited? What you said earlier remember?
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« Reply #7 on: July 25, 2019, 11:17:41 PM »
What I meant by that was if the sewer passage can only be used by people of a higher rank. Say in the example you gave, they only allow b class or above through.

It would then make sense for why he needs to enter the tournament if the tournament winner is promoted a rank.

Youd have to explain  in universe why only higher ranked warriors can pass through an underground sewer but so long as the explanation makes sense in the story and world it's set in, then it should be fine.

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« Reply #8 on: July 27, 2019, 11:24:33 PM »
Sounds like a great idea I'm gonna be writing and see this thread if I get anymore community feedback

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« Reply #9 on: August 04, 2019, 04:48:48 PM »
Vacant had definitely laid out some good points. Actually sitting down and doing the writing is the single most important part of the story creation process. You gotta do it, or you're not actually a writer.

I'm glad to see you doing this, but I'll throw in a few more cents in regards to plotting out the actual dungeon.

As we've covered before, we can sit here and talk all day about interesting ideas of things that they could experience in the dungeon/tournament. But those things will always need some order, so here's my advice on that.

If you've learned literally one thing about story telling in your life, it's probably the plot curve. Y'know, this guy:



We set everything up with some exposition, then we have our point of no return (in which the protagonist accepts their quest and can no longer go back to the normal life they had before). Then we have a long sloping rising action, and then a climax. That's your moment of highest passion. The most intense and real the story is ever going to be. Afterwards we have falling action and resolution, which is basically the deescalation of the final conflict to until you set the protagonist back on neutral ground. The story is over, and the credits roll.

That is the case for the story as a whole, but each of your arcs should follow this exact same pattern. Every part of your story should be a fractal of the whole. In other words: Each building block of the final narrative resembles the complete story in microcosm.

So think of the arc in these terms. Things have to start out normal, and then the point of no return comes (the protagonists realize they must enter the tournament). Then you have to build and build and build and build. Hype is good, but a reader will get burnt out with just hype (You wouldn't want to eat the same thing for dinner every single day). Eventually they'll grow tired of it and want something different. So for every big bump in action, you have to given the reader (and the characters), a moment to rest. They need a little time to collect their thoughts. Think of these moments of stillness like little plateaus on the rising action line. The story is still moving along, but you aren't increasing the intensity yet. The reader has a moment to adjust to the new level, and then you can crank things up even further. So between every big action set piece, give everyone a moment to relax before moving on to the next one.

More importantly, it will give you as the writer a little time to collect your thoughts and discover the best place to go from where you currently are. Think it out logically. If you know you're universe well, you'll know what's on the other side of that door already. It will be the natural next thing for the characters to face. You won't have to think about it too hard. The right thing will come to you.

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« Reply #10 on: August 13, 2019, 02:26:07 PM »
I changed the prologue to make it more simpler

The Ancient threat levels are contracted with the secrets of learning the true terrestrial power. 1 of the Ancient threat level called the Giant Mandarin fish becomes implanted in the world of coma and death. This only plays a role in one of the characters name Andou a boy who needs to evacuate the Ancient Civilization due to the valuable secrets of the Ancient Civilization Market. As he reaches outside of the border. The world he carries one day affects other people. Andou and the others plot to subdue every Amalgamation event due to the Dead People who brought history and magic in the world of modern society.

I got some ideas for the tournament after the sewer dungeon

S class
A class
B class (Top 5 in tournament) Andou, Elliot, Oulu, Dmitri and Motarike
C class (Have to go to the tournament and get top 10)
D class (Everyone starts off here by doing a test at their organization)

After passing the tournament each class gets a contract a golden letter. This golden letters reveals the Ancient threat level to able to be a Ancient Threat Conqueror you have to learn the true terrestrial power you have to subdue the world of the Ancient threat level.

This is one of the Ancient threat level which is connected with the secrets of the Ancient Civilization Market. This Ancient Threat Level will bring the ones who are involve to do missions like for example the clan war waves or the wilderness of hell. There will be a Magisterial Esper there to fight you plus train you and he will tell you when you can exit the world. This is the Ancient Threat Level called the Giant Mandarin Fish. I can explain it. The whole world becomes a small area leaving just a house and caves around it below it is a big pit all around you can imagine it to be just like Zathura and there you will find the Giant Mandarin Fish that everyone scared about.

Then you have the Asian Lung Period and The Mimes which is the low class kingdom having also a Ancient Threat Level a world of their own. As I can say it will be different in how the characters will encounter them. They might have their own individual exploit around these type of situations. I have many ideas as well but I think i'll focus presently on what I have and reveal later.

They'll have many different situations I want to make it epic like fate stay night and hunter x hunter plus katekyo hitman reborn and a certain magical index etc..