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Author Topic: i need tips to improve my story  (Read 86 times)

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Offline MilanTheAuthor

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i need tips to improve my story
« on: August 11, 2018, 02:43:47 PM »
Hello, I am a manga writer a and I've been thinking about making a story mainly about powers. Here's the plot.



Beings Called Deities live in a plane different than the humans. they have no effect on the human world and can only communicate with humans through bonds called 'Contracts’.
Contracts do not only let deities communicate with humans but they give the human a part of the deities power.
There are currently only 2 ways to make a contract with a deity.
 1.Partial Contract. gives only a part of the deities power and slightly changes the physical form of the human.
2.Pure Contract . this is a contract only made when the deity fully trusts the human. This gives the human as much of the deities power as they can handle this transformation changes the appearance of the human and it can also even change their personality.
Humans all have different amounts of power so they are ranked by 3 categories
Human level- they are the weakest
Demi level- most of the humans with partial contracts have this power.
Deity level- Power to rival a Deity.
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Raizen is the main character and he has a contract with 2 deities the deities of lighting and ice. Thats al i have right now . do you have any tips?

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Re: i need tips to improve my story
« Reply #1 on: August 11, 2018, 10:59:36 PM »
Well the problem with quick little summaries like this, is that they don't really tell you much behind the base concept. And at their core, all concepts have the ability to be good if written well. So you see how it gets difficult to judge. That being said, it does sound like a good staring point. I like how the person's body changes. So maybe you can work on how that would be a drawback?

Do you have any specific questions you're looking to get answers to?

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Re: i need tips to improve my story
« Reply #2 on: August 12, 2018, 05:42:52 PM »
sounds cool. I do like stories with a heavy focus on magic or powers, but yeah too early to give much of an opinion, but sounds like a cool basis.