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Author Topic: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn  (Read 1286 times)

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #15 on: June 24, 2018, 09:00:41 PM »
Maybe it is Mahlua! Maybe it is...

Spacing issue? You'll have to point that out. Is it like, something the forum's formatting got weird?



Slight spoiler I guess, but taking people to another dimension is the expressed purpose of the gargantas. You didn't get super far in to Bleach right? Did you get around to the arrancar stuff?

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #16 on: June 24, 2018, 09:06:34 PM »
I literally stopped at the end of the Bount arc when the main crew were making their way to Hueco Mundo. :sure:
Good news is that I literally do not give a single dolphin flip through a flaming ring of f*ck about spoilers. Spoil me all you want. Major character deaths. Plot twists. History reveals. Hit me with all of it.


as for the spacing issue
here's where it is:
But, it was entirely possible they could have been taken by surprise, as         Lego had. Whatever was going on, Noisey was going to need that knife.

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #17 on: June 24, 2018, 09:08:22 PM »
Huh, yeah that is weird.

I'll be sure to at least keep up with referencing the basics then.

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #18 on: June 29, 2018, 08:11:15 AM »
Man Vacant and Coryn know their Kidou. No1sey too. What the hell have I been doing, just swinging my sword around? Wait a minute, that totally makes sense considering.

Oh gawd will there be a Nnoitra fight for me? And if there's an Uluqiorra kind of dude around... You can miss me with that. Dude was deadly as hell.

Nice show of action as always. And I can't help but think Corycaly's response to the whole thing is perfect: Her captains are vanished by some mysterious enemy and she's like 'Hm. Hope I know what they're doing.' Totally not concerned at all haha.

Your killing streak is ongoing man with the writing. Great stuff to see. Nice chapter. Looking forward to more!

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #19 on: June 29, 2018, 08:56:22 AM »
Thanks Lego! I got a smattering of ideas for what we'll face. Although give me some credit, I'm not just going to recycle Kubo's designs.

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #20 on: August 16, 2018, 01:50:47 AM »
I like it!

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #21 on: August 16, 2018, 07:41:32 AM »
Thanks Soul! I hope you'll continue to follow along!

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #22 on: August 16, 2018, 05:42:13 PM »
Any ETA on the next chapter?

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #23 on: August 16, 2018, 10:59:55 PM »
It's third in tge rotation, so next Sunday is the plan. The chapter is already written, it's just waiting for its number to come up.

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #24 on: August 26, 2018, 05:47:17 PM »
And here is the promised chapter three. I hope y'all like it!


CHAPTER 3
CHAPTER 3

This garganta trip was not like any the captains had experienced. Normally you had to form your own path through, hardening reishi into a solid surface. This time however, it was as if some great and unseen force had taken hold of them. Together with the arrancars, the four captains whipped through the dark space between worlds at a frightening speed.
   Coryn and Vacant still grappled with the male arrancar, although it was clear they were making no headway. Whatever was pulling them across the darkness was also constructing their movements. Even the arrancar was bound by the force, although he seemed to accept its grasp. After fighting it for a time, the two captains ceased their protestations, and relaxed into the flow. Their time would be better spent resting until their inevitable arrival. Little did they realize, they would not have to wait long.
   Much sooner than expected, the far side of the garganta opened before the trio. This maw followed the slower pace that the captains were accustomed to, but they were spit out into the open night air long before the aperture reached its full extent. And suddenly, they were where no shinigami wished to tread: Hueco Mundo.
   The moon was out, the sand was white, the sky was black. It was the singular state of existence in the world of the hollows. But that tranquility was being disturbed, and neither captain was prepared for what that would bring them.
   Coryn grabbed the arrancar, and came to a grinding halt mid air with an invisible layer of reishi. Vacant, on the other hand, continued falling for a little while longer. His gaze was focused on the now closing garganta. He couldn't be sure, but Vacant could have sworn he saw a large, black shape moving against the void within. He had heard rumors of menos that lived within the void between Hueco Mundo and the rest of existence, but he had never believed them. Even now, he doubted his own eyes, and pushed the thought from his mind. There were more important matters to attend to.
   They landed in a shallow, sandy canyon. Rock outcroppings rose on either side of them. With luck the cliffs would hide the captains’ location to any wandering hollows. Both knew that their presence would be sure to set off the senses of brave, or foolish hollows looking for a meal. They got down to business.
   The arrancar’s face hit the ground with astounding speed, although Coryn made sure that he would be able to speak. “Alright arrancar, it's time to tell us what's going on.”
   The young man seemed ready to speak, but before he could, the blade of a sword delved into the sand next to his neck. It wasn't close enough to actually cut, but more than close enough to discourage resistance. Vacant and Coryn moved their eyes up to see Lego standing amongst them. “I felt you two nearby. Don't tell me this punk got the better of you?”
   “It's our fault is it?” Replied Vacant. “You don't look like you escaped our fate either. How did you get here?”
   Lego leaned back and crossed his arms. “There were two of them. I thought this one was her, but now that I'm up close, he's not as pretty.”
   Coryn said. “So was it just you?”
   “Nah,” Lego shook his head. “Noisey was there too, but I don’t know what happened to him after the garganta swallowed me.”
   The three captains were about to turn their attentions back to the arrancar who was still patiently waiting in the sand, but were stopped from doing so as Noisey’s own voice rang out above them. “Perhaps I can shed some light on that then.”
   Above them, Noisey was gently descending from another closing garganta. The female arrancar was in his custody, her hands bound by a kido spell. Noisey had additionally confiscated her zanpakuto. He did not release the girl upon landing, but was not keeping too tight a grip on her either. Instead of waiting for anyone to ask, he began speaking. “She started to explain on the way across, but I thought it would be better if we were all here for this. I think we all need to come to a consensus on our course of action.”
   Then, to everyone’s surprise, he released her. The spell around her hands remained though, and Noisey neglected to hand back her katana. She yelled. “We’ll tell you everything! But first, release my brother!” The arrancar motioned to the one Coryn held against the ground. Reluctantly, Coryn released the boy, although he snatched the arrancar’s zanpakuto off of him as he scurried up next to what was apparently his sister.
   Once they were both next to each other, it became clear that there were several marked similarities between them. They both had the same dark hair, the same eyes, and most interesting of all: their mask fragments seemed as if they could come together to form a single whole. Past encounters with arrancar had shown that they did at times portray themselves as siblings. Although since the very idea ran counter to how hollows produced, it was ultimately decided that these bonded hollows either did so out of the circumstances of their lives, or by splitting one soul into two or more pieces. In either case, the assembled shinigami did not have the time, or in some cases willingness, to delve further into the subject. Especially, after what they were told next.
   The girl spoke. It was hurried, and frantic. “My name is Netra Krogh, and this is my brother, Nurul. Please, there isn’t much time!” The two bowed in unison, and spoke as one. “Please, destroy the Espada for us!”
   That, was not what anyone had expected to hear.
   A few anxious seconds passed. The arrancar siblings were still bowed, still staring at the captains. Even if their words weren’t, the fear in their eyes seemed real. Despite that, the first words out of Vacants mouth were: “First of all, there are no Espada! Soul Society wiped them out generations ago. And second of all, even if there were, why should we believe that this isn’t some trap you’re setting us up for?”
   The twins didn’t seem to know their response. They slowly returned to a standing position, but as everyone had once again fell silent, Coryn stepped forward. “Before any of that, run me through just exactly what you’re plan was. If there are any more of you wreaking havoc in Soul Society right now, one of us has to go back and warn them.”
   Nurul responded. “There aren’t, and even if there were, there’s no way you could get back in time.”
   Coryn cast him a quizzical look. “Why not just use those daggers again? They got us here pretty quickly.”
   Nurul hesitated before responding. “I dropped it in the garganta. And even if I hadn’t, it wouldn’t be of any use. They were only good for so many trips. We each used one to sneak in, and the extra got used when you dragged us back with you.”
   Noisey spoke. “I think I can confirm that.” The group turned, and he presented the dagger he had captured in his now bandaged hand. While the weapon had started smooth and solid, it was now visibly porous, and bits of its surface were floating away in the breeze like specs of ash. “It looks like he’s telling the truth. This thing is turning to dust in my hand.”
   Nurul said. “That’s why I’m telling you it’s impossible.”
   His sister followed on his heels. “We were supposed to send back as many captains as we could. Four is more than we had  hoped for anyway.”
   “And who sent you in the first place?” Asked Vacant.
   Netra said. “It’s like you said. The Espada were wiped out a long time ago, but the arrancar weren’t. We aren’t all battle crazed lunatics. There are enclaves of arrancar all across Hueco Mundo. But recently, they’ve been getting wiped out, raided. Whoever is doing it is killing them down to the last warrior. The one that survives, they’re taking to Los Noches…”
   Coryn said. “Ah, and that’s where you’re coming up with Espada. But to me it sounds like you actually haven’t seen them for yourselves. Are you sure you aren’t jumping to conclusions.”
   Netra came across as genuinely offended. “You don’t understand! Los Noches has been taboo ever since the time of the old Espada. Every hollow in Hueco Mundo knows what that place means. They couldn’t have announced their intentions louder if they tried.”
   Nurul said. “The other settlements have tracked them, after every few raids, another pair of tracks appear, and they always lead back to Los Noches. At the rate they’re going, they’ll either rebuild the Espada and enslave the rest of us as fracción, or kill us all trying.”
   Finally, Netra finished their proposal. “That’s why we need you to destroy them for us. There aren’t any warriors capable of standing up to them left. At the rate they’re going, it won’t be long until they’ve completed their goal. If you destroy them now, while they’re still at half strength, then it will be better for both Soul Society, and to those of us who want to live in peace.”
   The captains looked each other over. Mixed emotions were spread across their faces. The Kenpachi just shrugged. “Sounds pretty simple to me. We let them build up their strength, wipe out a bunch of hollows that we aren’t friendly with anyways, and then get to have a much better fight later on.”
   Noisey scolded him. “Killing hollows is our territory, but letting them come to full strength will put a lot of innocent souls in danger. Protecting them is also your responsibility.”
   Vacant said. “He’s got a point Lego. Those other arrancar haven’t been causing us trouble. There’s no need to start a war.”
   While the others continued to argue, Coryn spoke to Netra and Nurul. “Did I hear that correctly when you said ‘half strength’? Am I to understand that there are already five of them?”
Netra shook her head and said. “The scouts have only reported seeing four tracks at most. But we can’t deny the possibility there’s more.”
   Coryn went into thought with a subtle humming noise, but behind him the other three were reaching their consensus. Lego threw his hands into the air with a huff, and crossed them. “Alright alright! You know my self control is already low. And I would be a liar if I said I didn’t have an itching to bash their heads in. I say we do it now.”
   The commotion had awakened Coryn from his thought process, and he turned to his fellow captains. “I concur with moving now. If we can cut this threat off at the pass, we will save ourselves a lot of hardship later. But I still don’t feel comfortable leaving the rest of the Gotei out of the loop.”
   Vacant was all smiles. “Right-o! Guess that means one of you is going back to deliver the news for us!” It was clear that he was addressing the two siblings, but neither were prepared for the suggestion.
   Netra yelled. “You can’t be serious!” But Vacant was not deterred.
   “If the Espada are rising again, then Soul Society needs to be warned. And past that, they need to know where we are. They’ll believe you if you tell them...I think.”
   Nurul said. “It will take one of us a while to get there, and they will definitely capture us before we even get near your commanders.”
   Vacant’s reply was: “I’m counting on it!” He snatched the confiscated zanpakuto’s from Noisey and Coryn, and returned them to their owners. “But it’s like I said. Just one of you is going back. We need the other to guide us to Los Noches. Hueco Mundo geography is not a required course at the Academy you see.”
   Both arrancars looked lost, but Netra managed to snap out of it long enough to catch an object thrown her way. She traced its arc back to Coryn, who was shuffling some papers back into his kimono. She looked down, and saw that it was an envelope hand addressed to Captain Corycaly. Netra looked back up for an explanation, and Coryn provided. “I was supposed to have that delivered tonight. She’ll know what it’s about, and more importantly: she’ll know there’s no way you forged it. It will at least get you an audience.”
   It took a moment for it all to sink in. Netra stepped back, and tapped the air before here. A garganta opened before her, this one at the regular speed. She stepped inside, and gave one last worried glance to her brother before it closed. “Be safe Nurul.”
   “I will.” Was his only reply.
   The garganta closed, and the remaining party took off in what the captains presumed to be the direction of Los Noches. It would not take them long to find out, as Los Noches shows itself long before you ever reach it.

   The doors to the captain’s meeting room opened for her, and Corycaly stepped inside. Per usual, she was greeted by two rows of captains, and the Captain-Commander at the front. Four captains were conspicuously absent, and the mood was incredibly tense, but that was not unexpected from what she had already known. What set off alarms in her head, was the arrancar she saw shackled to the floor with irons and kido in the middle of the room.
   Corycaly cast quick glances around at the other captains as the doors closed behind her. All the eyes she could see were trained on the girl, who was visibly uncomfortable, and gagged. She could not blame them, but even from her vantage point, it seemed overzealous. Still, given the circumstances, Corycaly did not disagree.
Up ahead however, she saw Hasith, whose eye was kept firmly on her. “Captain Corycaly, please approach. There is something I want you to see.”
   She complied, and stepped around the restrained Netra. As she got past the arrancer, she noticed the extra zanpakuto at Hasith’s feet, presumably taken from the girl, and in his hand, an envelope.
   Hasith said. “It is addressed to you.” And handed her the envelope.
   Corycaly stepped to the Captain-Commander’s side, opened the letter, and began to read. Her brow knitted, and addressed the assembled captains once she had fully processed the note. “It’s a letter from Captain Sken, from an ongoing series of correspondence I’ve had with him over using troops from Squad 13 as test subjects in a project he is putting together.” She dropped the letter to her side. “There is nothing relating to the captured arrancar, but I can confirm it was written in his hand.”
   A dull murmur broke out amongst the captains, which Hasith had to silence with a bang of his sword. “Silence!” He turned his head towards Corycaly. “Are you sure?”
   She nodded. “Nothing out of the ordinary. Did she say anything before she was muzzled?”
   Captain Sherbet of Squad 4 said. “Told the gate guard that she had somethin’ to tell the Captain-Commander. If you want mah opinion, that’s just what she’s sayin’ she’s daein. Dinnae believe her.”
   All eyes turned to Hasith, and he closed his eye in thought. If that arrancar girl was there to trick them, then hearing what the trick was would be more beneficial than not hearing it at all. If on the other hand, she told them the truth, then it would be doubly important to hear her out. After settling his mind, Hasith reopened his eye. “Let her speak.”

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Re: Bleach MR: Memories Unto The Dawn
« Reply #25 on: August 28, 2018, 06:45:27 PM »
Nice twist towards the middle there. Though I'm a little confused with the sibling arancars approach' to asking for help, considering that they attacked captains initially. I mean sure, even though a pair of arancars waltzing into the soul society and casually asking Captain level shinigami to eliminate some rouge Espada probably isn't the greatest of ideas, but causing tension via sneak attack and then requesting a favor later doesn't sit well either. Then again, now that I'm thinking about it more, obviously it's clear their intentions were to bait the captains by luring them into Los Noches first, and then force the group to accept their request by putting them into a uncomfortable position. Ah, I feel like I'm way too much thought into this lol.

Anyways, solid chapter. I'm looking forward to what kind of  Espada you got cooking up to reveal later. Reading this makes me wanna waste my time on watching old Bleach episodes again. You know, the episodes when Bleach was actually fun to watch...   
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« Reply #26 on: August 28, 2018, 11:05:10 PM »
Haha, yeah. It was more of a "they'll have to help after we kidnapped them" kinda plan. I mean, if you're already in Hueco Mundo, yah might as well kill some espada.

I hope they will impress too! I've been working on them for a while now. If only I could pull off the Kubo design style myself. Alas, you'll have to make due with text descriptions.

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