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Author Topic: MRverse: The Return of the Drifter  (Read 1930 times)

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Re: MRverse: The Return of the Drifter
« Reply #45 on: April 26, 2018, 12:22:21 PM »
Admittedly I'm not usually down for the screamo stuff either, but this one's more screamo lite

https://open.spotify.com/album/6jlcbJCorkiPoM8DuKAggY?si=RDRrwXQ5Srq9-CdxRyu6rw

Main vocals are pretty smooth actually, so they balance each other out.

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Re: MRverse: The Return of the Drifter
« Reply #46 on: May 03, 2018, 08:20:49 PM »
*Looks at Frono suspiciously*

Bro you better not be thinking about taking a break from writing this.

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Re: MRverse: The Return of the Drifter
« Reply #47 on: May 03, 2018, 09:24:50 PM »
*Casually sips kool-aid while wearing sunglasses and chilling in a hammock*

Of course not! 8) I got this far, why stop now? :sure:

Truthfully my lazy cycle is in effect, but it shouldn't be too hard break out of it. It's on my mind though, so mostly I'm writing it in my head at the moment. Still gotta get those PM's out too.

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Re: MRverse: The Return of the Drifter
« Reply #48 on: May 11, 2018, 11:03:15 PM »
Closing thoughts: Your writing is coming out a little more fluid now. I think the use of simple sentences helps you show instead of tell. Kinda like cutting out the fight worked in your favor.

Just gonna point out: "Didn’t Coryn dropped the ‘Sken’ in his name?”--there's no need for the -ed conjugation since the sentence is a question type.

I assume that I am to be one of the ones in this lovely little pyramid scheme of yours? (It's not always super suspish to use the word scheme...) I do enjoy knowing how to not get myself killed.

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Re: MRverse: The Return of the Drifter
« Reply #49 on: May 12, 2018, 12:05:03 AM »
You're right. Sometimes it's just regular 'suspish'.

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Re: MRverse: The Return of the Drifter
« Reply #50 on: May 15, 2018, 02:59:36 PM »
Thanks Mahlua. Admittedly, I've always wanted to write super fancy, extremely detailed and intelligent sounding sentences. Raplh Ellison and his book "Invisible Man" was the inspiration behind that goal because the descriptive writing skills he displayed in that book really stuck with me. But naturally over time I realized that a much more simple and straight to the point kind of style was something I was much better at, and decided that it would be best to cultivate that skill tree instead.

And silly Mahlua, I already got you written down as assistant coach of the fighters division in my notes. However, I've held off on the idea as I was unsure if you were returning to the forum or not. But now that you're here we can get the ball rolling. All that's left is the paperwork. *Slams a mountain of paperwork on Mahlua's desk*

Besides, there's not much I can teach a raider who went toe to toe with a tan and lived to tell the story. Still gotta check that off on my bucket list.

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Re: MRverse: The Return of the Drifter
« Reply #51 on: May 15, 2018, 04:23:15 PM »
As always, assistants are left with the paperwork. :glare:

Welp, I'm looking forward to the job anyway.