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Hybrids (Story Idea, need help to develop it)
« on: November 28, 2017, 04:13:20 PM »
This is an idea under process, I want to write a novel and hopefully draw it afterwards.

Synopsis: Angel, a woman that was said to be the bearer of justice, the will of god, even so, she long disappeared from the kingdom of Tartarus during the Red War that occured from the year 674A.V to 677A.V, with the empire failing to defend itself, falling under the kingship of Leonard Asylum. Peace, the feeling of being safe, all of that vanished with the Tartarus kingdom's hero, Angel



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After the Red War that had been named as such because of the unforgettable bloodbath that was created, citizens seeing their family and friends die, unable to save them, powerless against the invasion of the new king, Leonard Asylum.

Hundreds of citizens had manage to get in the capital city within the kingdom, it was less dangerous than in the contours, if not dangerous at all.


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Butterfly effect: Occurring when a person's cell are transformed after an emotional breakdown, thus, opening the door to an amount of power. The ability to gain a new found power.

Aura: There are four category of Auras; Plus, Minus, Equinox and Phoenix. An Aura is when one control their soul to the fullest and their dreams are unshakable.

Plus: A type of aura that enhance the physical strenght of a person, such as power upgrades and high jumps.

Minus: A type of Aura that enhance the mental strenght of a person, for example, telepathy to a certain extent and decipher an amount of information at incredible speed.

Equinox: A type of Aura that give an element base ability to the user, fire, water, wind and earth.

Phoenix: A type of Aura where one is gifted with a completely different ability than the Equinox, invinsiblity, acids, ect.


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Re: Hybrids (Story Idea, need help to develop it)
« Reply #1 on: December 13, 2017, 11:59:03 AM »
What areas do you need help developing?

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Re: Hybrids (Story Idea, need help to develop it)
« Reply #2 on: December 13, 2017, 01:07:36 PM »
What areas do you need help developing?


Developping characters, expand the story and the world it has, I am not sure if the lookout is good yet.

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Re: Hybrids (Story Idea, need help to develop it)
« Reply #3 on: December 13, 2017, 03:00:37 PM »
What areas do you need help developing?


Developping characters, expand the story and the world it has, I am not sure if the lookout is good yet.

It's hard to help you develop those if I don't know what kind of story you are trying to tell

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Re: Hybrids (Story Idea, need help to develop it)
« Reply #4 on: December 13, 2017, 03:30:40 PM »
It's hard to help you develop those if I don't know what kind of story you are trying to tell


This is a story of betrayal and yet the importance to trust the people near you.

There will be a hero (The MC), that will be in a slumber but, after a decade finally awaken and as she woke up, her memory is gone, at her bedside, two teenagers were there and had been nursing her.

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« Reply #5 on: December 14, 2017, 12:26:52 AM »
It's hard to help you develop those if I don't know what kind of story you are trying to tell


This is a story of betrayal and yet the importance to trust the people near you.

There will be a hero (The MC), that will be in a slumber but, after a decade finally awaken and as she woke up, her memory is gone, at her bedside, two teenagers were there and had been nursing her.

You defenitely have a interesting story and world. I'm more of a worldbuilder than writer (I usually create worlds and then stories for them instead other way) so I can help you with your world. Why is the capital safer than other cities? Is it well defended? What are the cultures like? Why did the other kingdom attack? Do you have reason why Angel disappeared? Why was she there in the first place?

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Re: Hybrids (Story Idea, need help to develop it)
« Reply #6 on: December 14, 2017, 10:57:53 AM »
The capital city is where the high-class peoples will live, with the guards around to keep it safer and to be seperated from the less fortunate that lives away from it.

They were a group of mercenaries leaded by the current king Leonard Asylum,they attacked Tartarus kingdom because they wanted to own their own kingdom, it was well known that Tartarus had wealth and land.

There are no reasons behind Angel's disappearance, she was the guardian angel of the kingdom but, as she mysteriously vanished, the mercenaries raided the kingdom.

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Re: Hybrids (Story Idea, need help to develop it)
« Reply #7 on: December 14, 2017, 11:45:32 AM »
Does every kingdom have a guardian angel?

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Re: Hybrids (Story Idea, need help to develop it)
« Reply #8 on: December 14, 2017, 11:53:06 AM »
Does every kingdom have a guardian angel?


That was not the case but, I like this suggestion a lot, I think that I might do that! Maybe will Leonard Asylum will be an Ex-Guardian angel?
I love the idea!

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« Reply #9 on: December 14, 2017, 12:14:22 PM »
That sounds like a great idea!

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Re: Hybrids (Story Idea, need help to develop it)
« Reply #10 on: December 14, 2017, 02:02:15 PM »
You have some interesting ideas going on here. However, there are few things  you can elaborate on and play with.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of each aura? Does one aura have overwhelming advantages over the others or are they fairly balanced? Also, what are auras are the most common in certain kingdoms and regions?

How advanced is technology in this world. Is it strictly a magic based medieval style of world or does science play a part in your story?

Are there any remnants of warriors from the old Tartarus regime?  Is there a brewing revolution to overthrow the new king?

Just a few questions that you can ask yourself. Try to explore and expand this world as much you can. You may never know what you may come up with.

Keep writing!
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Re: Hybrids (Story Idea, need help to develop it)
« Reply #11 on: December 14, 2017, 04:06:18 PM »
Thank you!

I will write abd elaborate on auras, I just need to sort them out a little.

The story is pretty much mediaval fantasy, I don't think science will be a part of it, I want to be able to go freely with the creative POV.

Yes, I will have to think more about the story!