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Author Topic: Protector Number Thirteen  (Read 51 times)

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Offline Canislupus54

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Protector Number Thirteen
« on: November 26, 2017, 11:46:29 PM »
Spoiler
Young Aldus stands in his father’s lab. They’re looking at a girl resembling Thirteen inside a tube.
Aldus’s father: One day, this girl will protect you and your siblings. Just always remember the number when you need her.
Voice: Aldus. Aldus! Alduuuus!
Aldus awakens in his bed with Aria shaking him.
Aria: Aldus!
Aldus smacks Aria’s hands away from him and gives her a cold look.
Aldus: Don’t touch me. What is it?
Aria smiles cheerfully.
Aria: Bryce says it’s time to go hunting. If you’re early, you might even squeeze in some training!
Aldus jumps out of bed and starts gathering clothes.
Aldus: Crap, I totally overslept!
Cut to Aldus running out of the house to meet Bryce.
Aldus: I’m here, let’s go get some food and beat each other up!
Bryce laughs. He looks at his wrist watch.
Bryce: You just made it. We should have time for both.
Cut to Aldus and Bryce standing, holding wooden swords, facing each other. Bryce smirks. Aldus narrows his eyes. A leaf falls from a nearby tree. It hits the ground, signalling Bryce and Aldus to charge at each other. Aldus raises his sword overhead.
Aldus: Ha!
Aldus brings his sword down, but Bryce turns it aside without much effort. Aldus is thrown off balance, but recovers and slashes horizontally at Bryce. Bryce blocks the blow and punches Aldus in the face. Bryce taps Aldus on the head.
Bryce: Not bad. A little more practice and you’ll catch up in no time.
Bryce glances at the setting sun, then at his watch.
Bryce: It’s getting late. We should get home.
Bryce picks up a bag and starts walking home. Aldus glares at his back.
Aldus: Geez, to think you’re only two years older than me.
Aldus runs to catch up to Bryce.
At the house, Bryce, Aldus, and Aria sit around the table eating a stew.
Aria: Hey, Aldus, do you want to see a portrait I made of us?
Aldus glares at Aria.
Aldus: No. Don’t talk to me.
Aldus quickly finishes his stew and stands up.
Aldus: I’m going to bed.
Cut to Aldus sleeping in bed. The sound of an explosion awakens him. He sits up and looks out his bedroom window. Outside, people are running in fear as hooded figures chase them. Buildings are on fire. One running couple is hit by a stream of fire from a hooded figure’s hand.
Bryce bursts into the room with Aria. Bryce is holding a sword
Bryce: Aldus, we have to go, now! Aria’s barrier won’t hold much longer!
Aldus: Can we really trust her? She’s one of them!
Bryce: Not now, Aldus. Let’s get going!
Aldus stands, grabs a sword,  and the three run out of the house. Three hooded figures are standing outside, shooting fire at the house, but it’s stopping just short of contact.
Bryce: Take Aria and run!
Aldus: Where?
Bryce: You know where, to the caves! Dad was on Number Thirteen!
Aldus: What about you!?
Bryce smiles. Then, he turns to the hooded figures and scowls. He runs at the center one and stabs them. Glowing arrows appear around the other two and launch at Bryce. Bryce deflects one set, but gets pierced by the other.
Aldus looks on in horror. Aria is crying. Aldus shakes his head, grabs Aria by the arm and starts running.
Arrows fly at Aldus, but they shatter against a barrier.
Aldus(thinking): Damn it, now I have to rely on the little monster.
Aldus reaches a large cave and runs inside.
Inside is some kind of console connected to a tube of liquid with Thirteen suspended inside, unconscious.
Aria: What is this place?
Aldus: Shut up!
Aldus presses a button and the liquid drains out. The tube opens up and Thirteen falls out, but doesn’t wake up.
Voice: He went in here!
Three hooded figures enter the cave. They float up into the air on chunks of earth.
Aldus: Come on, wake up!
Arrows appear around the hooded figures.
Aldus: What number did Bryce say? Wake up, Number Thirteen!
Thirteen’s eyes snap open.
The arrows fly at Aldus and Aria.
Thirteen is suddenly standing and throws Aldus and Aria behind her. Her arms blur and the arrows change trajectory, hitting the ground beside Thirteen.
Aldus(thinking): A barrier? No, she’s moving, I just can’t see it.
Center hooded figure: What the hell? Burn her!
The hooded figures shoot streams of fire at Thirteen. Thirteen performs a roundhouse kick. The air pressure, blows back the fire and knocks the mages off their perches.
Thirteen flash steps to the center falling mage and her arms blur again as she punches him several times, finishing with a powerful blow that sends him flying out of the caves.
Right mage: Physical enchantments!
The mages’ bodies start glowing. They run at Thirteen and start punching at her. She dodges every attack. Thirteen jumps into the air and kicks both mages in the faces, sending them flying into the cave walls.
The mages stand up.
Aldus tosses his sword at Thirteen.
Aldus: Thirteen, sword!
Thirteen catches the sword by the hilt. She flash steps to the mage on the left and cuts him in half horizontally, then to the center one and beheads him, then to the final one and stabs him in the heart.
Aldus: Great! Thirteen, your job is to get us to Ladleton unharmed!
Thirteen looks at Aldus. She scowls.
Thirteen: Yes, Master Aldus.
Aldus: Good, let’s go!
Thirteen peaks outside of the cave. The area is clear. End with her, Aldus, and Aria, running off into the night.

Offline Canislupus54

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Re: Protector Number Thirteen
« Reply #1 on: November 28, 2017, 12:34:12 AM »
Now with paneling, minor changes to the story, and a note describing the characters.

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Characters:
Aldus: Aldus is a fifteen year old Caucasian boy. He has shaggy brown hair. He wears a white button up shirt, a brown vest, and brown pants and shoes. He is six feet tall
Bryce: Bryce is seventeen years old. He resembles Aldus but two inches taller and with shorter hair.
Aria: Aria is ten years old. She has mid-back length brown hair  and wears a knee length brown dress. She is four foot five
Thirteen: Thirteen appears fifteen years old, with a Caucasian complexion. She has shoulder length white hair, pink eyes, and is five foot three. She wears a mid thigh length black dress, mid-calf length black socks, black shoes, and a white hair ribbon.
Robert the Ripper: A large, six foot five, thirty year old man. He has the stubble of a beard and mustache on his face. He wears a black vest lined with white fur inside, white shorts, and black boots. He wields a large, one edged sword.
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Page 1
Three Panels
1.1 A girl resembling Thirteen floats in a tube full of liquid. She is clothed in a white dress as opposed to Thirteen’s black.

1.2 Zoom out to show a young Aldus and his father looking at the girl. They are in a cave. The ceiling has stalactites but the floor is smooth and tiled. A high-tech looking console is in front of the tube.
   Aldus’s father: One day, this girl will protect you and Bryce.
   Aria’s voice(From off panel): Aldus. Aldus! Alduuuus!

1.3 Current Aldus awake in his bed, dressed in a pair of boxers. Aria is shaking him by pushing him with both hands.

Page 2
Five Panels
2.1 Aldus looks at Aria. He’s still waking up, so his face is curious.
   Aria: Aldus!

2,2 Aldus smacks Aria’s hands away from him. Aria’s eyes are wide with surprise.

2.3 Aldus scowls at Aria, who is off-panel
   Aldus: Don’t touch me. What is it?

2.4 Aria clutches her hands close to her body in pain, but gives Aldus a cheerful smile.
   Aria: Bryce says it’s time to go hunting. If you’re early, you might even squeeze in some training!

2.5 Aldus springs out of bed, grabbing a shirt as he does so.
   Alus: Crap, I totally overslept!

Page 3
Two panels
3.1 Aldus, now fully clothed and holding a wooden sword, runs out of the house to meet Bryce. Bryce is standing just outside the door with an empty sack slung over his back and a wooden sword at his hip..
   Aldus: I’m here, let’s go get some food and beat each other up!
   Bryce laughs

3.2 Bryce looks at his wristwatch with a friendly smile, showing that he enjoys his brother’s company.
   Bryce: You just made it, we should have time for both.

Page 4
Six Panels
4.1 Bryce sets down the sack, now full of dead rabbits, his hand on the hilt of his sword. He’s in a clearing in the middle of a dense forest.

4.2 Aldus holds his sword ready in front of him

4.3 Close up on Aldus’s eyes, which are narrowed in concentration

4.4 Bryce stands in a relaxed stance with his sword at his side, the tip facing the ground.

4.5 A leaf falls off of a nearby tree.

4.6 The leaf hits the ground.

Page 5
Three Panels
5.1 Aldus launches forward with his sword raised over his head. He shouts in determination
   Aldus: Ha!

5.2 Aldus brings his sword down at Bryce. Bryce parries the blow with little effort, redirecting Aldus’s sword to Aldus’s left.

5.3 Aldus is on one foot, waving his free hand in the air, thrown off balance by Bryce’s parry.

Page 6
Three Panels
6.1 Aldus slams his foot down, recovering from his off balance state and swings his sword horizontally at Bryce.

6.2 Bryce blocks the blow with his sword and punches Aldus in the face.

6.3 Aldus is covering his face with one hand in pain. There’s no blood, however, and it’s clear he’s not seriously hurt. Bryce gently taps Aldus’s forehead with his sword.

Page 7
Five panels
7.1 Bryce is picking up the sack. His head is turned to look at Aldus, who is off panel.
   Bryce: Not bad. A little more practice and you’ll catch up in no time.

7.2 Bryce walks past Aldus, back towards their house, glancing at his watch as he does so.
   Bryce: It’s getting late, we should get home.

7.3 Close up on Aldus, glaring at Bryce’s back.
   Aldus: Geez, to think you’re only two years older than me.

7.4 Aldus runs to catch up to Bryce.

7.5 Aldus and Bryce are walking side by side. Both are smiling warmly.
   Aldus: We have an extra rabbit, right? We should sell it to Old Man Jay.
   Bryce: Haha, if we give Old Man Jay a rabbit every day, he’ll overeat.

Page 8
Four Panels
8.1 Aldus, Bryce, and Aria are seated around their wooden kitchen table. They each have a bowl of stew in front of them, while a pot of stew sits in the middle. Aria is holding her bowl in one hand, eagerly spooning out the stew. Aldus is resting his arm on the table. Bryce is eating with one hand in his lap, sitting perfectly straight.

8.2 Aria looks at Aldus, smiling.
   Aria: Hey, Aldus, want to see a portrait I made of us?

8.3 Close up on Aldus glaring at Aria.
   Aldus: No. Don’t talk to me.

8.4 Aldus stands up and walks towards a door, his room.
   Aldus: I’m going to bed.

Page 9
Five Panels
9.1 Aldus is asleep in bed.

9.2 Aldus hears an explosion outside. His eyes snap wide open.
   SFX: Boom!

9.3 Aldus sits up and looks out the window.

9.4 Out the window, the town is in flames. People are running away from figures wearing black hooded robes, rebel mages.

9.5 One mage shoots fire out of his hands at an elderly couple, incinerating them.
   Elderly couple: AAAAAH!

Page 10
Three Panels
10.1 Bryce bursts into the room, holding a sword in one hand. Aria is right behind him, holding his other hand.

10.2 Bryce is shouting at Aldus.
   Bryce: Aldus, let’s go! Aria’s barrier won’t hold for long!

10.3 Aldus scowls
   Aldus: Can we really trust her? She’s one of them, after all.
   Bryce: Not now, Aldus! Let’s get going!

Page 11
Five Panels
11.1 Aldus stands and grabs a sword.

11.2 Aldus, Bryce, and Aria run out of the house. Three mages are standing in an arc in front of the house, shooting fire at it. An invisible barrier turns the flames away just before contact.

11.3 Close up on the three.
   Bryce: Take Aria and run!
   Aldus: Where?
   Bryce: You know where! The caves! Dad was on Number Thirteen!

11.4 Aldus’s eyes are wide and full of fear. There are tears in his eyes.
   Aldus: What about you?

11.5 Bryce smiles.

Page 12
Five Panels
12.1 Bryce draws his sword and takes off running towards the mage on the far left. Aldus and Aria are running in the opposite direction. Aria is reaching a hand out to Bryce and looking back, but Aldus is dragging her along.

12.2 Bryce stabs the mage in the heart.
   Mage: Gah!

12.3 Arrows of light appear around the other mages and fly towards Bryce.

12.4 Bryce deflects the arrows as he runs towards the next mage over.

12.5 The mages shoot fire at Bryce. He shouts in pain
   Bryce: Ah!

Page 13
Three Panels
13.1 Aldus looks back in horror, tears starting to run down his face. Aria is openly crying hysterically.

13.2 Aldus looks away and keeps running.
   Aldus: There’s nothing we can do. There’s nothing we can do…

13.3 Arrows of light fly at Aldus, but they shatter against a barrier.
   Aldus: Damn it, now I have to rely on the little monster.

Page 14
Three Panels
14.1 Aldus and Aria reach the mouth of a large cave and run inside.

14.2 Aldus and Aria are inside the cave. It is the cave from the opening dream, but the floor is cracked and dirty.
   Aria: What is this place?
   Aldus: Shut up!

14.3 Aldus and Aria reach a console, behind which is a tube of liquid. Thirteen is suspended inside, unconscious.

Page 15

15.1 Aldus presses a button on the console.

15.2 The liquid begins draining out of the tube.

15.3 The tube opens up and Thirteen falls out.

15.4 Thirteen hits the ground, but doesn’t show any sign of waking up

15.5 A shot of the opening of the cave with three mages standing in it.
   Center mage: They went in here!

Page 16
Six panels
16.1 Aldus kneels beside Thirteen, shaking her shoulder in an attempt to wake her up.
   Aldus: Come on, wake up!

16.2 The mages stop several yards away from Aldus.

16.3 The mages float up into the air on platforms of earth. Arrows of light appear in the air around them.

16.4 Aldus is still kneeling besides Thirteen, now he’s holding his head in his hands, desperately trying to remember what Bryce said through the adrenaline.
   Aldus: What number did Bryce say? Wake up, Number Thirteen!
16.5 Close up on one of Thirteen’s eyes, closed.

16.6 Close up on the same eye, open.

Page 17
Three Panels
17.1 The mages point at Aldus and Aria and the arrows fly at Aldus and Aria.

17.2 Thirteen shoves Aldus and Aria behind her.

17.3 Thirteen’s arms blur in front of her and the arrows impact the ground beside her. She’s actually catching every arrow and throwing it aside.

Page 18
Five Panels
18.1 Aldus stares incredulously at Thirteen.
   Aldus(thinking) What? A barrier? No, she’s moving, I just can’t see it.

18.2 Close up on the center mage
   Mage: What the hell? Burn her!

18.3 The mages shoot fire from their hands at Thirteen.

18.4 Thirteen performs a roundhouse kick. The air pressure diverts the flames.

18.5 The air pressure from Thirteen’s kick knocks the mages off their perches.
   Mages: Wah!

Page 19
Four Panels
19.1 Thirteen is suddenly in mid-air, in front of the center mage.

19.2 Thirteen’s hands blur in front of her as she punches the mage over and over again.

19.3 Thirteen delivers a powerful final punch, sending the mage flying away from her, back towards the mouth of the cave.
   SFX: Crack!
   Mage: Agh!

19.4 Thirteen lands in a crouch and examines her hands.

Page 20
Five Panels
20.1 The other two mages glare at Thirteen angrily.
   Mage on the left: Physical enchantments!

20.2 The mages’ bodies start glowing. They launch themselves at Thirteen.

20.3 The mages punch rapidly at Thirteen, but none of their blows connect. Thirteen appears to be standing still with all of their blows missing, but is actually moving just barely out of the way of each one.

20.4 Thirteen jumps into the air and kicks both mages in the face by doing the splits.

20.5 Both mages go flying and hit the cave walls.

Page 21
Five Panels
21.1 All three mages stand up.

21.2 Close up on the center mage.
   Center mage: We are not losing to this girl!

21.3 Aldus tosses his sword to Thirteen.
   Aldus: Thirteen, sword!

21.4 Thirteen catches the sword by the hilt.

21.5 Thirteen is suddenly in front of the mage on the left, slashing through his waist and bisecting him.
Page 22
Four Panels
22.1 Thirteen beheads the center mage, whose head still has a shocked look on its face.

22.2 Thirteen stabs the final mage in the heart.

22.3 Thirteen withdraws her sword and kicks the mage up into the air.

22.4 The mage is impaled on a stalactite.

Page 23
Six Panels
23.1 Aldus runs up to Thirteen with Aria.
   Aldus: That was incredible, Thirteen!

23.2 Aldus has a relieved smile on his face. Aria is looking at him curiously, not used to seeing him smile around her.
   Aldus: Thirteen, your job is to get us to Ladleton unharmed!
   Aria: What about Bryce?

23.3 Aldus frowns.
   Aldus: We both know Bryce is gone. Take us to Ladleton, Thirteen.

23.4 Thirteen stares at Aldus silently with a scowl on her face.

23.5 Thirteen’s face is neutral once more.
   Thirteen: Yes, Master Aldus.

23.6 Thirteen, Aldus, and Aria, run out of the cave.

Page 24
One Panel
24.1 A shot of Robert the Ripper standing over the mouth of the cave, his massive sword resting on his shoulder. He has a massive grin on his face.