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Author Topic: Fate From Zero (My still developing light novel)  (Read 508 times)

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Fate From Zero (My still developing light novel)
« on: November 12, 2017, 07:40:32 PM »
? Synopsis ?
Genre: Drama, Psychological, Sci-fi, Action, Mystery, School life, Game
A lonely young boy Theremin suffered a unique trait. Children at his age becomes scared at him even if doesn't do something. Also her sister is defective as well; She can't show any expressions. Instead, she draws emoticons to show her feelings. The siblings struggled through life by using their great intellect. However, what keeps them being sane was playing chess.

Is this good? help me guys :D
« Last Edit: November 13, 2017, 04:55:29 PM by Lewd Cat »


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Re: Fate From Zero (My still developing light novel)
« Reply #2 on: November 13, 2017, 08:18:02 PM »
I’ll start reading tonight.

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Re: Fate From Zero (My still developing light novel)
« Reply #3 on: November 16, 2017, 04:18:18 AM »
I recently came up with this idea. Is this good?

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? Chapter X ?

There are pillars everywhere. A room made for physical test purposes only. It changes form depending on the mode of environment.
“Nii… We’ll have a lots of fun here.” S.N. whispered to her brother’s ear as she gently touch his brother’s arms to hands.
“A lots of fun? What do you mean?” Theremin gulped his saliva out of curiosity.
“Here take this!” S.N. handed something to her brother’s hand.
“A gun? Real gun or something else?”
S.N. didn’t hesitated to fire directly to Theremin. However, she purposely missed the shot to warn Theremin that they are going to be serious.
“*censored*! I just recently died and I’m gonna die again!?”
“Don’t worry this is just a simulation but you will feel the pain as if it were real.”
Intense dual guns fight of Theremin and his sister began. They both run and evaded each other’s attacks. Series of bombardment fired from S.N.’s pistols and Theremin barely dodged it.

“I will aim for her head if I able to make to a feint and make her jump. There’s a chance that she will predict it. I will throw my other gun to block her field of vision. Then I will fire with a curved trajectory to her blind spot.”
“What is he doing? Coming straight at me?”
Theremin charged and throwed his gun to S.N. while she is in the air. It made S.N. caught off guard and she was corned by Theremin’s plan.
“Just kidding~” S.N. fired away the gun that was blocking her vision and couldn’t find Theremin.
“The trajectory of the bullet is going to 18 y axis and -35 x axis at the speed of 30mph. Aiming for the side of my head huh? Wait something is strange-”
“Yes, you are still you my lil’ sis. You’re still always like that!” Theremin slide towards S.N. while covering his action when he threw the gun. Then he fired the bullet that aims for her sister’s chin.
“Too bad nii...” S.N. deflect the bullet going to her right. The 1st bullet fired by Theremin changed directions and its velocity doubled and a chain reaction of deflection began. Theremin didn’t expect it and he had no time to react and he lost.
“Nii… Do you remember our promise?”
“Promise?”
“We’re going to defeat papa. But I can’t do it if you are weak.”
“This is what happens after dying for 2 years?”
“Geez, you drowned into one of your delusions… Nii, You’re in coma recently.”
“Well, I need to learn as fast as possible. I didn’t imagine that you would become like this my lil’ sis.”
“Yay! Praise me more!”
“You’re the best sister in the world! Here is your reward…” Theremin patted his sister’s head and her sister was charmed by it.


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Re: Fate From Zero (My still developing light novel)
« Reply #4 on: November 16, 2017, 08:04:19 PM »
Flashbacks to NGNL.

While I'm not against the idea of taking inspiration from other stories and writers, I highly suggest that you be wary of where the line should be drawn.
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Re: Fate From Zero (My still developing light novel)
« Reply #5 on: November 16, 2017, 08:11:46 PM »
How come? is it how should I approach the story? I'm still not yet done with my character's synopsis including their health conditions that's why the flashback there /\ is like a ripped off from NGNL hahaha

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Re: Fate From Zero (My still developing light novel)
« Reply #6 on: December 11, 2017, 05:24:42 AM »
It's been awhile since I didn't update this but guys are this good to become a part of my novel? ( I've been thinking things thoroughly about how to connect my ideas with sense )

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Fate from Zero Origins

Meios

Failed humans where they are blinded to their own truth- Why are they born?
Humans who started to cannibalize their own kind. It is fixated in their brain that it is better to eat others to make you stronger. The drive that urges them to do is fear. Once they commit Cannibalism they must continue it. Their bodies can last for a month and 10x stronger than Advance humans. The only way to defeat them is to gouge out their hearts.

The reason why they need to do Cannibalism is because the unlocked Gene cannot be replaced and therefore, It needs to be freshen up. Every time they eat Pandora’s Box, The unlocked gene hesitates to overcome the whole being of a human. Once, it became distorted or freed, humans will become an mindless monsters who eats others for pleasure.

Demi Human Demi Meios

Meios who became a monster regained their human essence. They are far more superior than the Meios and possess keen eyesight and their movements becomes clearer as they blow heavy damage.

AoM ( Arts of Materialization )

Ordinary humans who suffered an unknown plague caused by the Fate’s Moon and it was greatly increased due to Adaranth Stalin efforts. A certain DNA gene was unlocked and the power that can materialize their own weapon became active. Humans were able to wield this freely, some take form of a weapon and some take form ordinary things.

Henceforth, they are called as Advanced Humans. They evolved that they are no longer fragile and sharp objects doesn’t kill them. They are faced with the new reality where their own kind can easily kill them. Old Human weapons and technology doesn’t work to them. Despite all of that they are still human and they can’t withstand a bombardment from old human weapons.

Pandora’s Box

Due to that fateful night “Fate’s Moon”, humans were able to store a special box inside their bodies. The box contains their whole life and takes form into a weapon to the chosen one. Pandora’s Box has no time limit when it came from the human’s corpse. It can be served as a power up for weapons that humans possesses but the rarity of it becoming a weapon is very low. It seeps the human’s essence that gradually becomes faster until it vanishes.

Greater Understanding

Only selected individuals who either achieved enlightenment through intense training or the importance of cannibalization. They can alter, modify, add or lessen their weapon. For instance, they can change the atomic properties of their weapon and use it as their advantage during a fight.   

Absolute Dominator

A power that surpasses everything. He is in the form of Godhood but remains human’s qualities. Its death can be faced with his own humanely actions but disregarding this, he is the most omnipotent being.

Michaelis is the first one ever in human history to achieve this. This effect can be achieved through special conditions: A failure, experience tremendous fear and traumas, Immense training to keep up his human essence, Preventing himself from becoming a mindless Meios, consumed Demi Humans, Withstanding the after effects of the experiments, and at least seen directly the Fate’s Moon twice.


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Re: Fate From Zero (My still developing light novel)
« Reply #7 on: December 11, 2017, 05:31:34 AM »
Updated Plot:
Theremin suffered a unique trait, Children at his age becomes scared of him even if doesn't do something. Also her sister, Sylvia is defective as well; She can't show any expressions. Instead, she draws emoticons to show her feelings. The siblings struggled through life by using their great intellect.

No one knows when it first happened. A strange phenomenon that appears suddenly in the form of the blood moon. It was the “Fate’s Moon”. Our hidden desires become a reality but it is different; What’s inside you will shape your entire life.