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Offline HiveMind

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Title - GRIM / CHAPTER SIX added
« on: November 06, 2017, 10:51:18 PM »
All work - no play. Haven't had too much time to get a lot done recently.

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GRIM (panel by panel layout)

Synopsis - It follows a teenage girl, Mia Harrison, who discovers that she is the next lineage of the Grim Reaper.
« Last Edit: June 06, 2018, 12:37:30 PM by HiveMind »

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VOLUME ONE / CHAPTER ONE
« Reply #1 on: January 14, 2018, 05:28:47 PM »
Spoiler
PAGE 1
   
        PANEL 1 – 3 : SEGMENTS OF THREE INDIVIDUALS RUNNING THROUGH A DARKENED ALLEY (ONE FEMALE, TWO MALES)

PAGE 2

   PANEL 1 : BEHIND VIEW OF THE CHASE
         
                       GIRL
      (SPEECH)
      Please! Somebody help me!

   PANEL 2 : FRONTAL VIEW OF THE CHASE
         
                       BOTH MEN
      (SPEECH)
      No one’s going to help you baby!
      -
      Yeah! Just let this happen!

PAGE 3

   PANEL 1 : THE GIRL COMES TO A DEAD END OF THE ALLEY

   PANEL 2 : THE GIRL TURNS AROUND TO THE SEE THE TWO MEN CREEPILY APPROACHING HER.

   PANEL 3 : VIEW OF BOTH MEN STARING HER DOWN.

         MAN 1
      (SPEECH)
      It’s okay, we’re not going to hurt you.

         MAN 2
      (SPEECH)
      Yeah. First thing’s first, get down on your knees.

   PANEL 4 : THE GIRL FALLS TO HER KNEES TO COOPERATE WITH THEM.

   PANEL 5 : A CLOSE UP ON HER FACE AS HER HAIR COVERS IT, A TEAR IS VISIBLY FALLING.

PAGE 4

   PANEL 1 : ABOVE THE INCIDENT, SITTING WITHIN THE FIRE ESCAPE IS ANOTHER MAN – DRESSED IN SEMI-CASUAL CLOTHING WITH OUTER JACKET.

         UNKNOWN MAN
      (THOUGHT)
      Look at these two vile human beings. They have no idea what’s in store from them.

   PANEL 2 : CLOSE IN OF THE THREE. THE GIRL’S TEARS HAVE TURNED INTO A SLOW LAUGHTER THAT HAS CONFUSED THE MEN.

   PANEL 3 : THE GIRL LOOKS UP AT THE TWO WITH FIENDISH EYES AND A SINISTER SMILE.

         GIRL
      (SPEECH)
      If you two could only see the look on your faces!

PAGE 5

   PANEL 1 – 3 : CLOSE UP OF DIFFERENT BODY PARTS TURNING INTO A MONSTROUS FORM.

   PANEL 4 : A FULL BODY TRANDSFORMATION OF THE GIRL INTO A DEMONIC CREATURE

   PANEL 5 : SPLIT PANEL / EACH MAN’S FACE PETRIFIED WITH FEAR.

         GIRL
      (SPEECH)
      I’m going to rip off your skin and devour your entrails!

   PANEL 6 : THE UNKNOWN MALE’S FEET.

PAGE 6

   PANEL 1 : FULL SCENE OF THE UNKNOWN MALE STANDING IN FRONT OF HER WITH HIS SCYTHE PLACED BEHIND HER NECK.

PAGE 7

PANEL 1 – 3 : THE THREE’S CLOSE UP VIEW ON THEIR FACES IN SHOCK.

   PANEL 4 : THE CREATURE’S POINT OF VIEW STARING AT THE UNKNOWN MALE.

         GIRL
      (SPEECH)
      You... you... you’re the Grim. Pl...please... spare me.

   PANEL 5 : THE GRIM SLICES HER HEAD OFF.

PAGE 8

   PANEL 1 : THE TWO MEN’S POINT OF VIEW. THEY WATCH HER BURN UP IN FLAMES.

   PANEL 2 : THE GRIM KNEELS DOWN AT THEM.

         GRIM
      (SPEECH)
      How unfortunate for you two.

   PANEL 3 : THE GRIM PLACES HIS PALMS ON THEIR HEARTS.

   PANEL 4 : SPLIT PANEL / THEIR EYES WIDEN.

PAGE 9

   PANEL 1 : THEIR BODIES LAY ON THE GROUND DEAD AS THE GRIM WALKS AWAY.

   CAPTION : The bodies of two men were found dead in an alley late last night. Officials are saying they both died of possible heart problems due to drug-related activity.

PAGE 10

   CAPTION : Universal Laws of Existence

   CAPTION : “In order to exist, one must be able to die.”

PAGE 11

   CAPTION : Chapter One - The Lineage of Grim / “Of all the people, it had to be her.”

PAGE 12

   PANEL 1 : MIA HARRISON, A YOUNG HIGHSCHOOLER, IS WATCHING THE VEWS WITH HER MOTHER.

   PANEL 2 : MIA WALKING TO THE BUS STOP.

   PANEL 3 : MIA ON THE BUS WITH HEADPHONES ON.
 
   PANEL 4 : MIA GETTING OFF THE BUS AT SCHOOL.

   PANEL 5 : GRACE RIVERS, BEST FRIEND AND CLASSMATE, WAVES HER ON TO JOIN THE GROUP.

PAGE 13 / PAGE 14

   PANEL 1 : VIEW OF THE WHOLE GROUP. SIX FRIENDS – THREE MALES AND THREE FEMALES (EXCLUDING MIA).

         LEAH DOYLE(FRESHMAN) / ROSE PERRY(JUNIOR) / GRACE RIVERS(SOPHOMORE)

         ZAK REYNOLDS(SENIOR) / SAMUEL HIGGINS(JUNIOR) / RYAN FITZPATRICK(SOPHOMORE)

PAGE 15

   PANEL 1 : ZAK AND RYAN ARE DISCUSSING THEIR WEEKEND. ROSE IS UNDER SAMUEL’S ARM TO ESTABLISH THEIR RELATIONSHIP. LEAH HANGS CLOSER TO RYAN. MIA AND GRACE STAND SIDE BY SIDE.

         ZAK
      (SPEECH)
      I got to say Ryan, you’re kinda light weight on the booze.

   PANEL 2 : CLOSE UP OF THE TWO; ZAK HAS HIS ARM WRAPPED AROUND RYAN’S NECK USING HIS OTHER HAND TO POINT AT HIM.

         ZAK
      (SPEECH)
      This guy had to lay down after just a couple of beers.

         RYAN
      (SPEECH)
      Come on man, I don’t drink like you do.

         ZAK
      (SPEECH)
      Gotta live a little you know? Stop acting like an Old Soul.

   PANEL 3 : RYAN WALKS AWAY FROM THE GROUP, HEADING TO CLASS, WAVING GOODBYE.

         RYAN
      (SPEECH)
      Old Soul nothing, I got a lot of life to live still.

   PANEL 4 : ZAK IS BACKING AWAY TO CATCH UP.

         ZAK
      (SPEECH)
      That guy – such a bore sometimes. Peace everyone!

PAGE 16

   PANEL 1 : VIEW OF THE REMAINING; EVERYONE SAYING THEIR GOODBYES.

   PANEL 2 : MAI AND GRACE WALKING TO CLASS.

   PANEL 3 : GRACE QUESTIONS MIA ABOUT HER WEEKEND.

         GRACE
      (SPEECH)
      So how did your weekend go?

         MIA
      (SPEECH)
      It was alright.

   PANEL 4 : THE GIRLS ARE GRABBING THINGS OUT OF THEIR LOCKERS.

         GRACE
      (SPEECH)
      Alright? I’m looking for more than that.

MIA
      (SPEECH)
      You know me, I don’t do much on my weekends besides studying

PANEL 5 : MIA TURNS AROUND AS SHE CLOSES HER LOCKER.

PANEL 6 : MUA RUNS INTO ANOTHER STUDENT IN THE PROCESS.

PAGE 17

   PANEL 1 : FULL PAGE – SLIPT PANEL.
         
         FIRST PANEL:
                        THE STUDENT FACING THE TWO.
         MALE. SKINNY JEANS. HOODIE. OUTER JACKET.
         PAXTON CLARK(SENIOR)

            PAXTON
         (SPEECH)
         My bad.

         SECOND PANEL:
         PAXTON WALKING AWAY AS GRACE COMPLAINS TO HIM.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         You’re not even going to help her up? Jerk!

            PAXTON
         (SPEECH)
         Technically was her fault.

PAGE 18

   PANEL 1 : CLOSE UP OF GRACE WITH MIA IN THE BACKGROUND, ON THE FLOOR.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         What an asshole.

   PANEL 2 : GRACE HELPS MIA UP.

   PANEL 3 : CLOSE UP OF MIA.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Thanks.

   PANEL 4 : MIA SHAKES HER HEAD.

   PANEL 5 : CLOSE UP OF A HALLWAY CLOCK GOING FROM 7:10am TO 2:00pm

            GRACE
         (OFF-PAGE)
         Thank god! School is finally over!

PAGE 19

   PANEL 1 : MIA AND GRACE GET ON GRACE’S BUS.

   PANEL 2 : MIA LOOKS OUT THE WIND AND SEES PAXTON THROUGH THE CROWD OF STUDENTS STARING HER DOWN.

   PANEL 3 : MIA GRABS GRACE’S ARM TO SHOW HER.

   PANEL 4 : A CROWD OF STUDENTS WITHOUT HIM THERE.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         What? He was right there?

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Who are you talking about?

   PANEL 5 : MIA TURNS AROUND TO LOOK AT GRACE.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         No one I guess. Just my imagination.

   PANEL 6 : VIEW OF WINDOW FROM OUTSIDE THE BUS; MIA IS STARING OUT IT.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         I swore I saw him there though.

PAGE 20

   PANEL 1 : CAPTION – HOURS LATER.

   PANEL 2 : MIA IS WALKING UP TO THE DOOR OF HER HOUSE.

   PANEL 3 : VIEW FROM THE INSIDE; DARK WITH THE LIGHT CREEPING IN FROM THE CRACKED DOOR.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Mom, I’m home; you there?

   SFX : CRASHING NOISE.

   PANEL 4 : MIA PEERS AROUND THE DOORWAY IN THE KITCHEN.

   PANEL 5 : SPLIT PANEL.

         FIRST PANEL:
         CLOSE UP OF HER HAND FLICKING THE LIGHT SWITCH.

         SECOND PANEL:
         CLOSE UP ON HER FACE IN TERRIFIED SHOCK.

PAGE 21

   PANEL 1 : A DEMONIC CREATURE IS DISMANTLING HER MOTHER. BLOOD COVERS THE ENTIRE KITCHEN.

PAGE 22

   PANEL 1 : THE MONSTER DROPS A PIECE OF THE BODY.

   PANEL 2 : VIEW FROM UNDER THE LEGS OF THE CREATURE. BODY PARTS ON THE FLOOR BUT MIA IS NO LONGER IN THE DOORWAY.

   PANEL 3 : CLOSE UP ON THE DEMON’S MOUTH WITH A SINISTER GRIN.

   PANEL 4 : THE CREATURE STEPS INTO THE HALLWAY BEFORE SEEING MIA IN THE DISTANCE THROUGH THE OPEN FRONT DOOR.

   PANEL 5 : CLOSE UP OF MIA’S FACE IN TERROR.

   PANEL 6 : FRONTAL VIEW OF MIA RUNNING WITH THE DEMON CATCHING UP.
            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Somebody! Anybody! Help me!

   PANEL 7 : SIDE VIEW OF MIA RUNNING THROUGH THE ALLEY WAY. SHE TURNS HER HEAD TO SEE PAXTON STANDING IN A SIDE OPENING.

PAGE 23

   PANEL 1 : CLOSE UP OF MIA’S FEET, TRIPPING OVER EACH OTHER.

   PANEL 2 : SHE HITS THE GROUND.

   PANEL 3 : THE DEMON RUSHES HER.

   PANEL 4 : MIA STARES DOWN THE DEMON AS IT HOVERS ABOVE HER, READY TO STRIKE.

   PANEL 5 : CLOSE UP OF THE DEMON’S FACE, A SCYTHE BLADE WRAPPED AROUND HIS NECK.

   SFX : BLADE UNSHEATHING NOISE.

   PANEL 6 : HE TURNS HIS HEAD AND STARES IN DISBELIEF.

PAGE 24

   PANEL 1 : FRONT, DIAGONAL VIEW OF THE GRIM AND THE DEMON. THE GRIM HAS HIS BACK FACING THE DEMON’S BACK.

   PANEL 2 : PROFILE VIEW OF THE DEMON.

            DEMON
         (SPEECH)
         Well that’s no fun. You really have to ruin everything, don’t you?

   PANEL 3 : TORSO UP VIEW OF THE GRIM’S BACK WITH HIS HEAD COCKED AROUND TO SEE, WEARING A SMILE ON HIS FACE. THE GRIM IS PAXTON.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Well at least I’ll have fun killing you.

PAGE 25

   PANEL 1 : THE SCYTHE PUSHES AGAINST THE DEMON’S NECK.

   PANEL 2 : THE FRONT VIEW OF PAXTON PULLING HIS SCYTHE THROUGH THE DEMON’S NECK.

   PANEL 3 : VIEW OF HIS FEET; THE OUTER FOOT MAKES A CIRCULAR MOTION AROUND AS HE SPINS 180.

   PANEL 4 : MIA’S POINT OF VIEW AS THE FLAMES ENGULF THE DEMON’S BODY WITH PAXTON IN THE BACKGROUND.

   PANEL 5 : MIA RUBS HER EYES TO DOUBLE TAKE WHAT SHE JUST SAW.

   PANEL 6 : SIDE VIEW OF HER FULL BODY. PAXTON CROUCHED IN FRONT OF HER.

PAGE 26

   PANEL 1 : VIEW FROM BEHIND MIA. PAXTON’S FACE LOOKS DISAPPOINTED.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         .sigh. I’m sorry I have to do this.

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON PUTS HIS FINGERTIP ON HER FOREHEAD.

   PANEL 3 : MIA’S EYES ROLL TO THE BACK OF HER HEAD.

   PANEL 4 : BIRD’S EYE VIEW OF MIA DYING ON THE GROUND.

   PANEL 5 : MIA’S POINT OF VIEW OF THE SKY TUNNELING TO BLACK.
   
   PANEL 6 : COMPLETE BLACK.

   SFX : HEART MONITOR BEEP NOISE

   PANEL 7 : MIA’S POINT OF VIEW. A BLURRY HOSPITAL ROOM.

   PANEL 8 : SAME AS LAST PANEL BUT WITH CLARITY.

PAGE 27

   PANEL 1 : DOCTOR IS STANDING NEXT TO HER. SHOCKED THAT SHE’S AWAKE.

            DOCTER
         (SPEECH)
         You're awake!? Consider yourself the luckiest girl in the world! To not only survive an aneurysm, but have no irreparable damage; I must say, I'm... I’m at a loss for words.

   PANEL 2 : THE DOCTOR TURNS TO GRAB SOMETHING OFF THE TABLE NEXT TO THE BED.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : VIEW FROM THE END OF MIA’S BED. SHE LOOKS ACROSS THE ROOM.

   PANEL 5 : THE DOCTOR ALSO LOOKS UP AS WELL.

            DOCTOR
         (SPEECH)
         Sir, you can’t be in here right now.

   PANEL 6 : CLOSE UP OF PAXTON’S HAND; SNAPPING HIS FINGERS.

   PANEL 7 : THE DOCTOR IS FROZEN IN PLACE.

   PANEL 8 : FRONTAL VIEW OF PAXTON SITTING IN A CHAIR.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Hello there Mia. I think you and I need to have a talk.

PAGE 28

   PANEL 1 : MIA RUBS HER EYES AND PAXTON IS GONE.

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON APPEARS AROUND THE DOCTOR, WRAPPING HIS ARM AROUND HIM.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         You can pretend none of this is real all you want...
   PANEL 3 : PAXTON APPEARS STANDING ON THE CEILING.
            
PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         ...but the fact of the matter is that you are a very special girl. Hence, why you’re alive.

   PANEL 4 : PAXTON DIRECTS MIA OUT OF BED.

   PANEL 5 : MIA GETS OUT OF BED, STRIPPING OFF THE OXYGEN AND IV.

   PANEL 6 : VIEW BEHIND MIA; PAXTON HOLDS THE DOOR OPEN, ESCORTING HER OUT.

PAGE 29

   PANEL 1 : MIA STEPS OUT TO THE HALLWAY OF PEOPLE FROZEN IN TIME.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : SHE LOOKES LEFT AND RIGHT DOWN THE HALLWAY.

   PANEL 4 : PAXTON SIGNALS HER TO FOLLOW HIM.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Walk and talk with me.

PAGE 30

   PANEL 1 : THE TWO WALK OUT OF THE HOSPITAL.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : PAXTON STEPS IN FRONT OF MIA.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Mia, I have a simple question for you?

   PANEL 4 : VIEW BEHIND PAXTON; MIA STARES BACK.

   PANEL 5 : SIDE VIEW OF THE TWO.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Are you an Old Soul?

   PANEL 6 : SIDE VIEW OF THE TWO.
   
   SFX : QUESTION MARKS OVER MIA TO SHOW CONFUSION.

PAGE 31

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON IS AT A LOST WITH MIA’S CONFUSION.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         You... don’t understand?

   PANEL 2 : MIA CONTINUES TO BE CONFUSED.

   PANEL 3 : MIA REMEMBERS THE POKE THAT ZAK MADE ON RYAN EARLIER.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Oh, this is some pun on what Zak said to Ryan?

   PANEL 4 : MIA GOES INTO THOUGHT, BUT PAXTON STOPS HER.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         But wait, you weren’t...

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         ...You know what? Forget I said anything.

   PANEL 5 : PAXTON APPEARS BEHIND MIA, HIS ARM HELD FORWARD AND HIS HAND IN A SNAPPING POSITION.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         But for right now, stay close to that little group of yours.

   PANEL 6 : CLOSE UP OF HIS HAND; SNAPPING HIS FINGERS.

   PANEL 7 – 8 : THE WORLD AROUND MIA BEGINS TO MOVE.

PAGE 32

   PANEL 1 : FULL BODY FRONTAL VIEW OF MIA, BUT IN STREET CLOTHES INSTEAD OF HOSPITAL ATTIRE; MIA IN SHOCK.


            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         How the hell did he do that?

PAGE 33 / PAGE 34

   CAPTION : MAIN TITLE – “GRIM”

PAGE 35

   PANEL 1 – 3 : MIA STARTS TO WALK AWAY FROM THE HOSPITAL. BEFORE GETTING TOO FAR, GRACE CALLS HER.

   PANEL 4 : ZOOMED IN VIEW OF MIA FROM ATOP A BUILDING.

   PANEL 5 – 8 : PAXTON SITS ON THE EDGE, WATCHING HER. HE PULLS OUT HIS PHONE AND CALLS ZAK.

   SFX : DIAL TONE FROM PHONE NOISE

            ZAK
         (PHONE SPEAKER)
         Yeah, what?

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         That girl in your group – Mia?

            ZAK
         (PHONE SPEAKER)
         What about her?

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         She’s about to meet up with Grace. You and Ryan should do the same. I have a theory on something.

   PANEL 9 : CLOSE UP OF THE PHONE; PAXTON HANGS UP ON ZAK.

            ZAK
         (PHONE SPEAKER)
         Wait! You think it’s her!?...

PAGE 36

   PANEL 1 : MIA MEETS GRACE AT THE LOCAL BURGER SHACK.

   PANEL 2 – 4 : BOTH SIT OUTSIDE.

                                GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         So, what’s up? Your text made it seem super urgent.

PAGE 37

   PANEL 1 – 6 : ALL PANELS ARE FLASHBACKS TO THE DEMON THAT KILLER HER MOM AND ATTACKED HER.

PAGE 38

   PANEL 1 – 2 : MIA SHAKES HER HEAD IN DISAGREEMENT.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Oh, it was nothing.

   PANEL 3 : GRACE GETS A TEXT FROM RYAN.

            RYAN
         (TEXT)
         Where are you right now?

            GRACE
         (TEXT)
         With Mia. At the Shack.

            RYAN
         (TEXT)
         Stay there. Zak and I are meeting up with you two.

   PANEL 4 : VIEW FROM GRACE’S PERSPECTIVE. THREE SETS OF FEET APPEAR IN FRONT OF HER.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : GRACE LOOKS UP AT THEM.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Can I help you guys?
PAGE 39

   PANEL 1 – 3 : THREE MALES STAND IN FRONT OF GRACE. ALL STARING AT MIA WITH AGGRESSIVE INTENT.
            
AGGRESSOR 1
         (SPEECH)
         Yeah, your friend there. She has a nice Aura.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : AGGRESSOR 1 TURNS TO LOOK AT GRACE AND GRABS HER BY THE NECK AND FORCES HER OUT OF HER SEAT.

   PANEL 6 : MIA STANDS UP.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Hey man, let her go.

   PANEL 7 – 8 : AGGRESSOR 1’S ARM TRANSFROMS INTO A DEMONIC CLAW. A TALON WITHIN RANGE OF MIA’S NECK.

            AGGRESSOR 1
         (SPEECH)
         So, tell me girl, is she what I think she is?

PAGE 40

   PANEL 1 : AGGRESSOR 1’S ARM GETS SLICED OFF.

   PANEL 2 – 4 : SEGMENTS OF GRACE’S BODY TRANSFROMS INTO DEMONIC FORMS.

   PANEL 5 : THE AGGRESSORS’ FACES.

   PANEL 6 : FULL BODY IMAGE OF GRACE NOW FULLY TURNED.

            AGGRESSOR 1
         (SPEECH)
         Thought so. The girl is a Fallen Angel.

PAGE 41

   PANEL 1 : VIEW OF MIA STANDING BEHIND GRACE.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Mia. Stay behind me.

   PANEL 2 : MIA IS COMPLETELY STUNNED BUT STILL LISTENS.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         I promise I’ll protect you.

            RYAN
         (OFF-PAGE)
         Grace! Mia!

   PANEL 3 – 6 : RYAN AND ZAK ARE RUNNING TOWARDS THEM. BOTH NOTICE GRACE HAS TRANSFORMED.

            RYAN
         (SPEECH)
         What should we do, Zak?

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         Do we really have any choice here?

PAGE 42

   PANEL 1 : ZAK STANDS BEHIND GRACE WHILE RYAN CHECKS ON MIA.

   PANEL 2 : CLOSE UP OF ZAK AND GRACE.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         Take Mia and go. We can hold them off.

   PANEL 3 : SAME AS PANEL 2.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         It’ll be an uneven fight if I do that.

   PANEL 4 : SPLIT PANEL; ZAK AND RYAN ARE TRANSFORMING.

   PANEL 5 : VIEW OF THE THREE AGGRESSORS.

   PANEL 6 : VIEW OF GRACE, ZAK, AND RYAN.

PAGE 43

   PANEL 1 – 6 : FIGHT SCENE.

PAGE 44

   PANEL 1 – 4 : INDIVIDUAL FIGHT SCENE - ZAK.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : INTERCHANGE BETWEEN RYAN AND ZAK FIGHTING.

PAGE 45

   PANEL 1 – 2 : ZAK GETS TAKEN DOWN TO THE GROUND AND BOTH ZAK’S AND RYAN’S OPPONENT DOUBLE TEAMS HIM.

   PANEL 3 : RYAN FIGHTS BOTH OFF AND KEEPS ZAK FROM GETTING INJURED.

   PANEL 4 : CLOSE UP OF THEM SIDE BY SIDE.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         Thanks man! I owe you one!

            RYAN
         (SPEECH)
         You can owe me by getting me drunk!

   PANEL 5 : BOTH CHARGE AT THEIR OPPONENTS.

   PANEL 6 – 8 : THEIR FIGHTS CONTINUE ON.

PAGE 46

   PANEL 1 – 4 : INDIVIDUAL FIGHT SCENE – GRACE.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : SAMUEL AND ROSE FINALLY SHOW UP AND PULL MIA FURTHER BACK.

PAGE 47

   PANEL 1 : MIA STARES AT THE TWO.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Samuel, Rose. Are you two like that as well?

   PANEL 2 – 4 : SAMUEL AND ROSE LOOK AT ONE ANOTHER BEFORE COMFRIMING WITH MIA.

   PANEL 5 – 8 : GRACE, ZAK, AND RYAN COME BARRELING IN, BADLY BEATEN.

PAGE 48

   PANEL 1 : THE THREE AGGRESSORS SLOWLY APPROACH.

   PANEL 2 : SAMUEL AND ROSE STEP IN BETWEEN THEM AND MIA.

            ROSE
         (SPEECH)
         Mia. Run. We’ll keep them at bay!

   PANEL 3 – 6 : SAMUEL AND ROSE TRY TO FIGHT THEM OFF.

PAGE 49

   PANEL 1 : MIA IS FROZEN.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         Why? Why is this happening?

   PANEL 2 – 6 : CLOSE UP VIEW OF HER FRIENDS.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         My friends are risking their lives for me. But why?

PAGE 50

   PANEL 1 : MIA’S FACE. TEARS BEGIN TO FALL DOWN HER FACE.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         But why hide all of this from me?

   PANEL 2 – 4 : SAMUEL AND ROSE ARE BEATEN DOWN.

PAGE 51

   PANEL 1 : SAMUEL AND ROSE FLY BACKWARDS TOWARDS THE GROUP.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : ROSE STRUGGLES TO LIFT HER HEAD.

            ROSE
         (SPEECH)
         Mia, please... run.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : CLOSE UP OF MIA; SHE SHUTS HER EYES AND REOPENS THEM.

   PANEL 6 – THE SETTING AROUND HER IS NOTHING BUT WHITE.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (OFF-PAGE)
         You know what you must do Mia. Now it’s time to show them.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Paxton?

PAGE 52

   PANEL 1 – 3 : THE THREE AGGRESSORS MOVE TOWARDS MIA BUT STOP SUDDENLY.

            AGGRESSOR 1
         (SPEECH)
         Now that your friends are out of the way. I think it’s time you... What the hell?

   PANEL 4 – 6 : SEGMENTS OF MIA; HER POSTURE MORE CONFIDENT.

PAGE 53 / PAGE 54

   PANEL 1 : FULL VIEW OF MIA STANDING IN FRONT OF THE INCAPACITATED GROUP. CRESTED ON HER SHOULDER IS A MYSTICAL-LOOKING SCYTHE. (MORE EXTRAVAGANT THAN PAXTON’S)

PAGE 55

   PANEL 1 : THE THREE AGGRESSORS HESITATE AS THEY REALIZE WHO SHE IS.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : CLOSE UP OF MIA’S FACE; PANEL TWO WITH HER HAIR IN HER FACE – PANEL THREE WITH HER FACE SHOWN AND HER EYES ARE FILLED WITH SERIOUSNESS.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
          What you’ve done to my friends... is unforgivable!

   PANEL 4 – 6 : MIA PREPARES TO ATTACK THEM.

   PANEL 7 : VIEW OF THE THREE AGGRESSORS AS SHE ATTACKS THEM.

   PANEL 8 : SUPER CLOSE UP OF THE AGGRESSOR’S EYE; BARELEY VISIBLE TO SHOW THE IMMERSE POWER IN HER ATTACK.

PAGE 56

   PANEL 1 – 2 : ZAK’S BLURRY VISION; SEEING MIA’S BACKSIDE IN FRONT OF HIM, HOLDING HER MYSTICAL SCYTHE.

   PANEL 3 : ZAK LAYS HIS HEAD TO THE SIDE TO REST.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         You knew the whole time, didn’t you?

   PANEL 4 : PAXTON KNEELS BESIDE ZAK.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Like I said, I had a theory.

   PANEL 5 : PANEL 3 VIEW; ZAK SMIRKS.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         You sadistic bastard.

   PANEL 6 : ZAK’S FACE TURNS SERIOUS.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         So, what happens next?

PAGE 57

   PANEL 1 – 4 : MIA’S SCYTHE DISAPPEARS AND SHE FAINTS TO THE GROUND.


PAGE 58

   PANEL 1 – 3 : PAXTON STARES AT HER BODY AND THEN BACK AT ZAK.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Unfortunately, even I don’t know.

   PANEL 4 : CLOSE UP OF MIA PASSED OUT.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (OFF-PAGE)
         But we know one thing. She’s the next Grim.

PAGE 59

   CAPTION : Universal Laws of Existence

   CAPTION : “Death – itself – cannot die. Therefore, death does not exist.”
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VOLUME ONE / CHAPTER TWO
« Reply #2 on: January 14, 2018, 05:30:06 PM »
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PAGE 60

   CAPTION : Chapter Two – The Wraith of Grim / “It takes one to know one.”

PAGE 61

   PANEL 1 : OUTSIDE MIA’S HOUSE, POLICE ARE PRESENT BUT FROZEN IN TIME.

   PANEL 2 : INSIDE THE KITCHEN, THEY EXAMINE THE CRIME SCENE.

   PANEL 3 : PAXTON, ZAK, AND RYAN WALK INTO THE KITCHEN.

   PANEL 4 : ZAK COMPLAINS ABOUT BEING BROUGHT ALONG.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         Seriously though, what are we doing here?

PAGE 62

   PANEL 1 : VIEW OF THE THREE IN THE KITCHEN.


            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         We’re looking for evidence.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         For what?

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Where to go to next.

   PANEL 2 : ZAK AND RYAN LOOK CONFUSED.

            ZAK AND RYAN
         (SPEECH)
         You lost me.

   PANEL 3 – 5 : PAXTON POINT AT THE POLICE IN THE ROOM BEFORE TAPPING THE COUNTER TOP TWICE.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         We’ll be able to gather a little more information than these guys.

   PANEL 6 : THE ROOM GOES DARK.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Ryan, can you get the light?

PAGE 63

   PANEL 1 : SPLIT PANEL; CLOSE UP ON RYAN’S FINGERS ON THE SWITCH IN THE OFF POSITION TURNED TO THE ON POSITION.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : ZAK AND RYAN’S FACE IN SHOCK.

            ZAK AND RYAN
         (SPEECH)
         What the hell...?

   PANEL 4 : PAXTON GLARES TO THE SIDE OF HIM.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (THOUGHT)
         I had a feeling it was him.

PAGE 64

   PANEL 1 : THE DEMON EATING MIA’S MOTHER, FROZEN IN TIME.

PAGE 65

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON BEGINS TO PULL OUT A PIECE OF PAPER AND HANDS IT TO ZAK.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Take this. Find anything you can on that name.

   PANEL 2 : CLOSE UP OF THE PAPER; WRITTEN ON IT: Evan Blackburn.

   PANEL 3 : VIEW LOOKING OF AT ZAK WITH RYAN OVERHANGING HIM.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         So why even bring us?

   PANEL 4 : PAXTON SHRUGS HIS SHOULDERS AT THEM.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Figured you’d want to get a look at what we’re dealing with here.

PAGE 66

   PANEL 1 : SIDE OF THE THREE.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         What’s that supposed to mean?

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         You think that I’m the only one who knows about your friend now. Or even before.

            ZAK AND RYAN
         (SPEECH)
         Wait... what?

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON HAS A SMUG LOOK ON HIS FACE.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Why the hell would a Demented randomly show up in her kitchen, huh? Especially after all the trouble you guys went through to keep her hidden.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : ZAK AND RYAN SHARED EQUAL AMOUNTS OF DISCOMFORT. BOTH TURN TO LOOK AT EACH OTHER.

   PANEL 5 : BOTH LOOK BACK AT THE DEMENTED.

            RYAN
         (SPEECH)
         So what you’re saying is that someone...

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         ...Outside the circle knew Mia was the next Grim.

PAGE 67

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON LEANS ON THE COUNTER.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         I want complete honesty from you two here. How long have you all known?

   PANEL 2 – 4 : ZAK GIVES RYAN A LOOK, RYAN LOOKS BACK WITH GRIMACE. ZAK TURNS TO PAXTON.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         Honestly, it’s been a couple centuries now.

PAGE 68

   PANEL 1 : MIA PASSED OUT IN A CHAIR, TIED AT THE HANDS AND FEET.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : CLOSE UP ON HER EYES; THEY OPEN UP AS SHE REGAINS CONSCIOUSNESS.

   PANEL 4 : SHE IS SHOCKED BY THE SITUATION.

   PANEL 5 : THE DOOR TO THE ROOM BEGINS TO OPEN.

   PANEL 6 : MIA IS ALERT TO IT.

PAGE 69

   PANEL 1 : PROFILE OF GRACE IN THE DOOR WAY WITH FOOD AND WATER.

   PANEL 2 : VIEW FROM BEHIND MIA; GRACE CLOSES THE DOOR.

   PANEL 3 : GRACE SETS DOWN THE FOOD AND WATER IN FRONT OF MIA.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Good, you’re awake. I brought you something to drink and eat.

   PANEL 4 : MIA DEPRESSINGLY STARES AT THE PLATE.

PAGE 70

   PANEL 1 : GRACE SCRAPS SOME FOOD ONTO A FORK.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         How are you feeling?

   PANEL 2 : SIDE VIEW OF THE TWO; MIA STARES BLANKLY.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         You look okay; I’m glad. – you know, I was really worried about you.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : SHE HOLDS THE FOOD WITHIN DISTANCE OF MIA, BUT SHE DOESN’T EAT THE FOOD.

   PANEL 5 : PANEL 2 VIEW.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Please. Just say something to me...

PAGE 71

   PANEL 1 : MIA SNAPS BACK INTO FOCUS.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Why?

   PANEL 2 – 4 : GRACE LOOKS DISAPPOINTED AS MIA’S FACE LOOKS FURIOUS.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Every single one of you are monsters!

   PANEL 5 : CLOSE UP OF GRACE’S HAND; CLINCHING HER FIST.

PAGE 72

   PANEL 1 : PROFILE OF MIA.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Tell me why you hid this from me!?

   PANEL 2 – 4 : GRACE PUTS THE FOOD DOWN AND SLAPS MIA.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         It isn’t like... I wanted to but...

   PANEL 5 : GRACE GRABS MIA BY THE SHOULDERS.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         I just wanted us to live a normal life for once.

   PANEL 6 : MIA’S SCYTHE STARTS TO MATERIALIZE.

PAGE 73

   PANEL 1 : VIEW OF BOTH IN ACTION; MIA’S RESTRAINTS RIP APART AS GRACE BECOMES ALERT.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : MIA BEGINS TO SWING AT GRACE.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         What the hell is that supposed to mean!?

   PANEL 4 – 6 : PAXTON APPEARS BETWEEN THE TWO OF THEM, BLOCKING MIA’S SCYTHE WITH HIS OWN.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Mia! Stop! She isn’t your enemy!

PAGE 74

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON HOLDS GRACE BACK EVEN THOUGH SHE TRIES TO GET PAXTON TO DESIST.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Please Paxton! Don’t hurt her; she’s just terrified and confused!

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         You say that as she was trying to kill you?

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         She just needs time to understand!

PAGE 75

   PANEL 1 – 4 : PAXTON PUSHES GRACE BACKWARDS; THE DOOR TO THE ROOM OPENS AS GRACE IS FORCED OUT. THE DOOR SHUTS BEHIND HER.

   PANEL 5 – 7 : PAXTON THEN GRABS MIA BY HER COLLAR AND DISAPPEARS.

   PANEL 8 : GRACE BUST THROUGH THE DOOR TO SEE THEY’RE NO LONGER THERE.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         That son of a bitch!

PAGE 76

   PANEL 1 – 2 : A MOUNTAIN SIDE VIEW. THE ENTIRE CITY AND SUBURBS IN THE DISTANCE. PAXTON AND MIA REAPPEAR WITHIN FRAME.

   PANEL 3 : PAXTON DROPS MIA TO THE GROUND.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         .scuffs. Dick.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : MIA SCRATCHES HER HEAD UNTIL SHE NOTICES PAXTON HOLDING HIS SCYTHE AT HER.

   PANEL 6 : VIEW FROM BEHIND MIA; SAME SCENE FRAME.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         I’m curious, what would you have done after you killed her?

PAGE 77

   PANEL 1 : MIA COCKS HER HEAD TO IGNORE HIM.

   PANEL 2 : TORSO UP VIEW OF PAXTON.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Your little group of friends would rather me keep this hush-hush with you, but we need to go over the risk and responsibilities of your powers.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : MIA GETS OFF THE GROUND.

   PANEL 5 : MIA’S FACE LOOKS SERIOUS.

   PANEL 6 : SHE CHARGES PAXTON.

PAGE 78

   PANEL 1 – 4 : MIA SWINGS HER FIST AT PAXTON WHO EVADES AND DODGES.

PAGE 79

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON CATCHES HER FIST.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         For starters – you might want to place that pride aside long enough for you to tell who’s on your side...

   PANEL 2 – 3 : PAXTON SWINGS MIA AROUND TO PLACE HER IN A CHOKE HOLD.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         ...Like your gang of misfit toys, for example.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Shut your mouth!

   PANEL 4 : MIA PUSHES AWAY FROM PAXTON, MAKING HIM RELEASE HIS GRIP.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         How about I put it in a different sense. – for a couple of monsters, they seem rather attached to you. Enough to throw their lives on the line.

PAGE 80

   PANEL 1 – 6 : FLASHBACKS TO THEIR FIGHT WITH THE AGGRESSORS. EACH PANEL FOR EACH FRIEND.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         .sigh. He’s right...

PAGE 81

   PANEL 1 : MIA LOOKS LOST IN HER OWN WORLD.
   
   PANEL 2 : SHE LOOKS UP TO SEE PAXTON STANDING IN FRONT OF HER.

   PANEL 3 – 5 : MIA REACTS, CAUSING HER SCYTHE TO APPEAR.

   PANEL 6 : PAXTON BARELY BLOCKS HER ATTACK.

PAGE 82

   PANEL 1 – 2 : PAXTON COUNTERS, SENDING HER SCYTHE OUT OF HER HANDS.

   PANEL 3 : MIA HITS THE GROUND.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : PAXTON STANDS OVER HER WITH HIS SCYTHE READIED AT HER NECK.

   PANEL 6 : HER SCYTHE FALLS THROUGH THE SKY.

PAGE 83

   PANEL 1 : MIA’S SCYTHE LANDS WITH THE BLADE INTO THE GROUND RIGHT BEHIND PAXTON. PAXTON POINTS WITH HIS THUMB AT IT.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Your first responsibility, make sure this... never comes into contact with those you consider a friend.

PAGE 84

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON GIVES A SARCASTIC LOOKING SMIRK.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         I told you already that you were a special case. Now unfortunately for you, not just your circle of friends knows about it.

   PANEL 2 : MIA STARES DOWN PAXTON, KNOWING HE’S HIDING INFORMATION.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         You knew that demon would be at my house, didn’t you?

   PANEL 3 – 4 : SIDE VIEW OF THE TWO; MIA MAKES HER SCYTHE REAPPEAR IN HER HAND. BOTH HOLD THEM AT THE OTHER’S THROAT.

   PANEL 5 : SWEAT SETS ON THE SIDE OF PAXTON’S FOREHEAD.

   PANEL 6 : FRONTAL PROFILE OF PAXTON. HIS FACE UNEASY EVEN THOUGH HE TRIES TO HIDE IT.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         .scoffs. you still got a lot to learn.

PAGE 85

   PANEL 1 VIEW OF THE CITY.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         But let’s start with that weapon of yours... “the ultimate consequence: The Wraith of Grim.”

PAGE 86

   CAPTION : Universal Laws of Existence

   CAPTION : “Existence is a two-part system. The physical [the Body] and the spiritual [the Soul]; one cannot thrive without the other.”
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VOLUME ONE / CHAPTER THREE
« Reply #3 on: January 14, 2018, 05:31:10 PM »
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PAGE 87

   CAPTION : Chapter Three – A Curse that is the Grim [part one] / “More than the monster you are.”

PAGE 88

   PANEL 1 : MIA AND PAXTON REMAIN IN A STAND STILL.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         So, you wanna get that out of my face?

   PANEL 2 – 4 : PAXTON’S SCYTHE VANISHES.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         You said I shouldn’t point it at a friend, right? I wouldn’t consider you one.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Fine with me; can’t say I didn’t warn you.

PAGE 89

   PANEL 1 : MIA HESITATES WITH CONFUSION.

   PANEL 2 PAXTON EXPLAINS.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Like I said before, it’s the ultimate consequence, even for its user.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : MIA FINALLY STANDS UP, STILL HOLDING PAXTON WITHIN STRIKING DISTANCE.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         The Wraith of Grim is a mystical weapon once held by yours truly, at least before I...

   PANEL 5 – 6 : PAXTON HALTS BEFORE BREAKING OUT IN RIDICULOUS LAUGHTER.

PAGE 90

   PANEL 1 : MIA GETS PISSED AT HIM.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : AS HER SCYTHE DISAPPEARS, SHE CHARGES PAXTON.

   PANEL 4 : HER FIST NAILS THE SIDE OF HIS FACE.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : PAXTON HITS THE DIRT, STILL LAUGHING ON THE GROUND.

   PANEL 7 : MIA GRABS HIS COLLAR TO HOLD HIM FACE TO FACE.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         What the hell is so funny, huh? My whole life has turned inside out because of this!

PAGE 91

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON HOLDS HIS HEAD WITH HIS HAND, WEARING A CALMER SMILE ON HIS FACE.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         You’re wrong. This outcome was predetermined. It’s been your destiny to gain this power.

   PANEL 2 : MIA’S FACE STUNNED BY PAXTON.

PAGE 92 / PAGE 93

   PANEL 1 : SIDE VIEW OF MIA AND PAXTON.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Your whole reason for existing... is to kill me.

PAGE 94

   PANEL 1 : MIA LIFTED HIM UP ENOUGH TO HIT HIM AGAIN.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Do you think you’re *censored*ing funny!?

   PANEL 2 – 4 : MIA SWINGS AT PAXTON BUT HE COUNTERS BY HEAD-BUTTING HER.

   PANEL 5 : MIA FALLS BACK ENOUGH TO FREE HIM.

   PANEL 6 : CLOSE UP OF MIA’S NECK BEING GRABBED BY PAXTON.

PAGE 95

   PANEL 1 : FULL VIEW OF BOTH OF THEM. PAXTON HOLDS MIA OFF THE GROUND.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         What do I gain by lying, huh!? I mean after everything you’ve seen. It’s your friends who have been lying to you.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         .chocking. Don’t you dare bring them into this.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         It’s their incompetence that cause this.

PAGE 96

   PANEL 1 – 3 : A CLOTH-LIKE SHADOW WRAPS AROUND THEM AND FLATTENS TO THE GROUND.

   PANEL 4 – 6 : THEY REAPPEAR BACK AT THE HIDEOUT.

            THE WHOLE GANG
         (SPEECH)
         Mia!!

PAGE 97

   PANEL 1 : GRACE BEGINS TO STEP FORWARD.

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON’S SCYTHE SWINGS AROUND.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : EVERYONE DISTANCES THEMSELVES FROM THE TWO.

PAGE 98

   PANEL 1 : ZAK BEGINS THE CONFRONTATION.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         What the hell man? What are you doing?

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON DOESN’T LET HIS GUARD DOWN.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         The hell is what you all are doing. So this little pow-wow is going to come clean... now!

   PANEL 3 : EVERYONE IN THE GROUP LOOKS UNCOMFORTABLE.

   PANEL 4 : GRACE LOOKS AT ZAK.

            ZAK
         (SPEECH)
         .sigh. Tell her.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : PAXTON DROPS MIA IN FRONT OF EVERYONE.

PAGE 99

   PANEL 1 : EVERYONE SITS DOWN.

   PANEL 2 : GRACE LOOKS AT PAXTON WITH DISGUST.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         So question before we start. - How long has this whole group been having these little get-togethers?

   PANEL 3 – 4 : PAXTON’S SMILE CAUSES GRACE TO STARE ANGERILY.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         We’ve been together for roughly three hundred years now.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : PAXTON GIVES A DISTRUSTING LOOK AND GRACE RESPONDS.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Don’t act like you didn’t have a clue.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Uh, hello? Someone want to fill me in?

PAGE 100

   PANEL 1 : EVERYONE LOOKS AT MIA. GRACE STARTS TO EXPLAIN.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         You sure she doesn’t remember anything?

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         If she did, we wouldn’t be here.

   PANEL 2 – 6 : ZAK AND RYAN, SAMUEL AND ROSE, LEAH, PAXTON, AND GRACE – VIEWS OF EACH IN THAT ORDER.

            GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         The first time you and I met. – it was around the sixteenth century.

PAGE 101

   PANEL 1 : FLASHBACK BEGINS; INSIDE A SMALL MOUNTAIN VILLAGE.

   PANEL 2 : GRACE SITS ASIDE A LARGE ECLECTIC WAGON; SHE’S OLDER THAN PRESENT DAY (MID TWENTIES).

            GRACE
         (OFF-PAGE)
         I was a daughter of a travelling merchant.

   PANEL 3 : THE DOOR HANDLE TO THE WAGON JIGGLES.

   PANEL 4 – 6 : SIGNS AROUND THE WAGON POP UP, MUSIC PLAYS, A SMALL STAGE ROLLS OUT.

PAGE 102

   PANEL 1 : GRACE’S FATHER BUST OPEN THE DOOR. HE IS A SHORT, FLAMBOYANT MAN DAWNED IN HIGH FASHIONED CLOTHES.

            GRACE
         (OFF-PAGE)
         He was... uh, how you say, a bit egocentric.

PAGE 103

   PANEL 1 : A CROWD GATHERS AS GRACE’S DAD TRIES TO SELL WHAT HE HAS ON DISPLAY.

            GRACE’S DAD
         (SPEECH)
         Folks! Why travel all the way to the capital when the capital can come to you! Everything you see here is legitimate my friends!

   PANEL 2 : GRACE HAS HER HAND IN HER FACE, IN ANNOYANCE.

            GRACE
         (OFF-PAGE)
         Unrelated to the story, it was never legitimate... but I digress.

   PANEL 3 – 5 : GRACE’S DAD WAVING AWAY THE PEOPLE WHO BOUGHT FROM HIM. THE DAY IS ENDING AND HE’S PACKING UP.

            GRACE’S DAD
         (SPEECH)
         Come by whenever we’re in town!

   PANEL 6 : HE TURNS AROUND TO WALK TO THE DOOR.

            GRACE’S DAD
         (WHISPER)
         Suckers.

PAGE 104

   PANEL 1 – 3 : AS HE PASSES BY GRACE, SHE HUFFS IN DISAGREEMENT.

            GRACE’S DAD
         (SPEECH)
         Oh whatever, I don’t want to hear it today.

   PANEL 4 : HE SLAPS MONEY INTO HER HAND.

            GRACE’S DAD
         (SPEECH)
         Take this and go be someone else’s pain in the ass for a while.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : HE ENTERS THE WAGON, SHUTTING THE DOOR BEHIND HIM.

            GRACE’S DAD
         (SPEECH)
         As for me – I’ll be in this wagon, drinking myself into a stupor.

PAGE 105

   PANEL 1 : GRACE STARES AT THE MONEY HANDED TO HER.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         .scoffs. Yeah, what else is new?

   PANEL 2 – 6 : GRACE ENTERS THE VILLAGE, TRYING TO FIND SOMETHING TO EAT. SHE ULTIMATELY FINDS NOTHING. CATCHING HER INTEREST HOWEVER IS THE SOUND COMING FROM THE CHURCH.

PAGE 106

   PANEL 1 : GRACE STANDS THE OUTER EDGE OF A MASS OF PEOPLE.

   PANEL 2 – 4 : SHE MOVES CLOSER INTO THE CROWD, BEING ABLE TO SEE A MAN STANDING ABOVE EVERYONE ELSE.

   PANEL 5 : FULL BODY VIEW OF A PRIEST.

            PRIEST
         (SPEECH)
         My fellow brothers and sisters. We need to take action on this plague before anything else horrible happens. Crops are dying, animals are dying. And we all know who’s to blame for this.

   PANEL 6 : THE VIEW OF THE CROWD; CHANTING

            CROWD
         (SHOUT)
         It’s the witch! – burn her! – burn the witch!

   PANEL 7 – 8 : GRACE STARES IN AGONY AS AN OLDER WOMAN HANGS ABOVE A MASSIVE PILE OF STICKS AND BRANCHES.

PAGE 107

   PANEL 1 : THE PRIEST BEGINS THE PURGING.

            PRIEST
         (SPEECH)
         This woman conspires with a spawn of the devil! She takes care of that abomination within the mountains!

   PANEL 2 – 3 : PEOPLE BEGIN TO THROW DIFFERENT OBJECTS AT THE WOMAN.

            CROWD
         (SHOUT)
         Die! – Burn in hell, you bitch! – You traitor!

   PANEL 4 : VIEW OF THE WOMAN TIED UP; HER FACE BLOODY FROM THE OBJECTS BEING THROWN.

PAGE 108

   PANEL 1 : THE PRIEST HOLDS A TORCH CLOSE TO THE KINDLING.

            PRIEST
         (SPEECH)
         Anyone who chooses to defy God by supporting the path of the devil deserves to burn!

        PANEL 2 : HE TOUCHES THE KINDLING WITH THE TORCH.

   PANEL 3 : THE BASE OF THE PILE BEGINS TO BLAZE.

   PANEL 4 – 6 : PEOPLE CHEER AS THE WOMAN SCREAMS IN PAIN. THE PRIEST TAKES PRIDE IN WATCHING HER BURN.

            GRACE
         (OFF-PAGE)
         I learned that day, how fear is the things we just don’t understand.

PAGE 109

   PANEL 1 : GRACE IS OFF IN A SIDE ALLEY OF THE VILLAGE, PUKING.

   PANEL 2 : SHE WIPES HER MOUTH OFF.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Disgusting.

   PANEL 3 – 8 : GRACE BUYS MULTIPLE ITEMS THAT WOULD MAKE A MEAL.

PAGE 110

   PANEL 1 : HIGHER UP THE MOUNTAIN SIDE, GRACE TRAVERSES UPWARD.

   PANEL 2 : A LARGE CAVE SITS NEAR THE TOP AS GRACE COMES TO A PLATEAU.

   PANEL 3 : VIEW FROM BEHIND GRACE; THE MOUTH OF THE CAVE HANGS OVER HER.

   PANEL 4 : GRACE STARTS TO STEP FORWARD.

PAGE 111 / PAGE 112

   PANEL 1 : A YOUNG MIA APPEARS AT THE ENTRANCE OF THE CAVE. THE YOUNG GIRL IS DRESSED IN RAGGED CLOTHING. A HEADDRESS OF THORNS AND A NECKLACE MADE OF RODENT SKULLS. SHE LOOKS PHYSICALLY ILL AND MALNOURISHED.

PAGE 113

   PANEL 1 : THE YOUNG MIA SMILES AT GRACE.

   PANEL 2 : SHE INSTANTLY APPEARS IN FRONT OF GRACE.

   PANEL 3 – 5 : GRACE IS SURPRISED BY HER BUT DOESN’T SEE HER AS A THREAT.

   PANEL 6 : GRACE HOLDS OUT A CONTAINER FULL OF FOOD AND OFFERS IT TO HER.

PAGE 114

   PANEL 1 - 2 : BOTH SIT BY A FIRE WITH THE FOOD, EATING AND ENJOYING EACH OTHER’S COMPANY.

   PANEL 3 : MIA’S FACE BRIGHTENS WHEN SHE TAKES A BITE.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Wow! This is really good; did you make this?

   PANEL 4 : GRACE SMILES BACK.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         I did, thank you!

   PANEL 5 – 6 : MIA DEVOURS HER FOOD

PAGE 115

   PAGE 1 : MIA STARTS TO DESCRIBE THE WOMAN WHO WAS BURNED ALIVE, ASKING GRACE IF SHE HAD SEEN HER IN HER TRAVELS.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Have you seen a woman (description)?

   PANEL 2 : GRACE’S FACE GROWS DISTANT.

   PANEL 3 : MIA NOTICES GRACE’S CHANGE IN ATTITUDE.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Are you okay? You look sick.

   PANEL 4 – 8 : MIA TOUCHES GRACE; A VISION OF THE WOMAN PLAYS IN MIA’S HEAD, CAUSING HER TO FREAK OUT.

PAGE 116

   PANEL 1 - 2 : GRACE STEPS FORWARD, SHOWING CONCERN FOR MIA.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         What!? What happen?

   PANEL 3 : MIA IS TERRIFIED OF HER AND JUMPS BACK.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Stay away! Don’t touch me!

   PANEL 4 – 6 : MIA SNAPS HER FINGERS AT GRACE; A SOUNDWAVE RIPPLES PASS GRACE

   PANEL 7 : GRACE’S VISION GOES BLURRY.

PAGE 117

   PANEL 1 – 4 : GRACE FALLS TO HER KNEES AS SHE WATCHES MIA FADE AWAY. SHE FALLS TO THE GROUND AND PASSES OUT.

PAGE 118

        CAPTION : Universal Laws of Existence

   CAPTION : “The Soul will reset infinitely.”
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VOLUME ONE / CHAPTER FOUR
« Reply #4 on: January 14, 2018, 05:33:01 PM »
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PAGE 119

   CAPTION : Chapter Four – A Curse that is the Grim [part two] / “A weird way to make friends”

PAGE 120

   PANEL 1 - 3 : GRACE REGAINS CONSCIOUSNESS BUT IS TOO WEAK TO STAND.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : GRACE TURNS HER HEAD TO THE SIDE AND SEES SMOKE BILLOWING UP.

   PANEL 6 – 8 : GRACE STRUGGLES TO CRAWL TO THE EDGE OF THE PLATEAU.

PAGE 121 / PAGE 122

   PANEL 1 : VIEW OF GRACE STARING OVER THE EDGE WITH THE ENTIRE VILLAGE BURNING.

PAGE 123

   PANEL 1 – 2 : GRACE LOSES CONSCIOUSNESS.

   PANEL 3 – 5 : GRACE REGAINS CONSCIOUSNESS INSIDE THE CAVE.

   PANEL 6 : MIA LEANS OVER HER TO PLACE A WET RAG OVER HER HEAD.

PAGE 124

   PANEL 1 : GRACE GRABS HER HEAD IN PAIN.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         What did you do to me?

   PANEL 2 : MIA HOLDS HER FINGER OUT IN THE AIR.

   PANEL 3 : CLOSE UP OF HER FINGER; THE AIR AROUND HER FINGERTIP BEGINS TO SPARK.

   PANEL 4 : MIA EXPLAINS WHY HER FINGER IS ON FIRE.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         I can manipulate the corporeal world. – what happened to you is that I changed the frequency of the snap to knock you out.

   PANEL 5 : GRACE SEEMS IMPRESSED YET TERRIFIED.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         So, I assume the village was your doing?

   PANEL 6 : MIA SHOWS NO EMOTION TOWARDS BURNING THE VILLAGE.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         When I touched your arm, I saw her in her last moments.

PAGE 125

   PANEL 1 - 2 : MIA CLINCHES HER FIST IN ANGER. HER HAIR HANGS OVER HER FACE.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Everyone... treated her like dirt.

   PANEL 3 – 6 : DUE TO HER ANGER, DARK ENERGY EMANATES OUTWARD.

PAGE 126

   PANEL 1 : GRACE’S POINT OF VIEW; MIA STARES HER DOWN.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         And it’s all because they thought she was a witch.

PAGE 127

   PANEL 1 : GRACE QUESTIONS MIA ABOUT WHY SHE DIDN’T KILL HER.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         So why spare me then?

   PANEL 2 – 4 : MIA STICKS HER HAND OUT TO GRACE TO HELP HER UP.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         When I touched you, I relived your memories. I saw your disgust with what they did.

PAGE 128

   PANEL 1 – 4 : MIA HELPS GRACE TO A SEAT.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         More importantly, you didn’t see me as a monster. Just like she did.

PAGE 129

   PANEL 1 : GRACE LEANS WEAKLY INTO HER SEAT. MIA FOLLOWS WITH HER OWN QUESTION.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Why come up here with the intention of helping me?

   PANEL 2 – 3 : GRACE SHOWS AN UN-NERVING CALMNESS; SHE EXPLAINS TO MIA WHY THE WOMAN WAS CAPTURED.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         I traveled with my father, you see. – I had noticed a woman being brought into the village when we first got here. Her crimes were that she killed a group of clergymen.

   PANEL 4 : GRACE LOOKS DIRECTLY AT MIA.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         They were heading up here to “purge the mountain”.

PAGE 130

   PANEL 1 : A VIEW OF THE OF THE CAVE WITH THE TWO SET CENTERED IN IT.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         The church deemed her actions as an act against God and burned her. – my thought is that she must have known from the beginning her fate if she helped you.

   PANEL 2 : MIA TURNS HER BACK ON GRACE TO GRAB SOMETHING FROM HER MOTHER’S BELONGINGS.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         What are you trying to get at?

   PANEL 3 : GRACE BRACES HERSELF IN HER CHAIR, AS IF READY TO MOVE QUICKLY.

   PANEL 4 : MIA BEGINS TO PULL A KNIFE FROM HER MOTHER’S BAG.

PAGE 131

   PANEL 1 – 3 : MIA SWINGS AROUND AND THROWS THE KNIFE AT GRACE’S DIRECTION.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : GRACE PUSHES BACK, FALLING TO THE FLOOR.

   PANEL 6 : SHE KICKS THE CHAIR UP INTO THE KNIFE; THE KNIFE PUNCTURES THE CHAIR.

PAGE 132

   PANEL 1 : MIA CHARGES GRACE SINCE SHE IS DISTRACTED.

   PANEL 2 – 4 : GRACE ROLLS OUT OF KICKING THE CHAIR TO SEE MIA ABOUT TO ATTACK HER.

   PANEL 5 : MIA HAS HER ARM BEGINS TO SWING BACK AS HER SCYTHE APPEARS.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Try to dodge this!

PAGE 133

   PANEL 1 : MIA’S SCYTHE BEAMS TOWARDS GRACE.

   PANEL 2 : GRACE STICKS HER ARM OUT TO BLOCK IT.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : GRACE’S ARM TRANSFORMS TO STOP MIA’S ATTACK.

   PANEL 5 : GRACE’S OTHER ARM LUNGES FOR MIA’S NECK.

   PANEL 6 : GRACE PINS MIA DOWN ON THE GROUND.

PAGE 134

   PANEL 1 : SIDE VIEW OF THEM; GRACE NOTICES MIA IS IN DISBELIEF.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Look, I don’t want to hurt you.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : GRACE SLOWLY TRANSFORMS FURTHER.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         But I can tell you from personal experience what it’s like to be labeled an outcast.

   PANEL 4 : CLOSE UP OF MIA; SHE’S FROZEN.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         Her body...

PAGE 135

   PANEL 1 : GRACE’S HALF TURNED BODY HANGS OVER MIA.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         I can also see why she risked her life for you.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Is it because I’m a monster?

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Ha, ha, ha. No, it’s because you’re someone much more.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         And what would that be?

PAGE 136 / PAGE 137

   PANEL 1 : AN ELEVATED VIEW OF THE WHOLE VILLAGE, MOSTLY BURNED AWAY BUT STILL IN THE FINAL PROCESS OF SMOLDERING.

            GRACE
         (OFF-PAGE)
         A Lord of Death.

PAGE 138

CAPTION : Universal Laws of Existence

   CAPTION : “Due to decay, the Body is limited to one Soul.”
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VOLUME ONE / CHAPTER FIVE
« Reply #5 on: January 14, 2018, 05:35:45 PM »
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PAGE 139

CAPTION : Chapter Five – Revelations / “The Faces of Both Sides are Revealed”

PAGE 140

   PANEL 1 : FLASHBACK ENDS; GRACE STICKS HER ARMS OUT AND SHRUGS.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         And that’s pretty much it. Everyone else tagged along slowly – Leah being the last one.

   PANEL 2 - 5 : MIA LOOKS AT PAXTON WHO IS LOOKING PONDERED. SHE LOOKS DOWN AT HER HANDS, THINKING ABOUT THE POWER GRACE MENTIONED IN THE FLASHBACK.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         If I touch someone, it’ll reveal their memories?

   PANEL 6 : SHE LOOKS BACK AT PAXTON.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         But when he touched me, I died...

PAGE 141

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON CATCHES MIA LOOKING AT HIM AND SMIRKS.

   PANEL 2 : VIEW OF MIA; PAXTON APPEARS BEHIND HER.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         What do you want?

   PANEL 3 – 4 : MIA JOLTS BACK FROM HIM, QUICKLY LOOKING BACK AT THE GANG, WHO ARE ALL FROZEN.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         He’s fast. I didn’t even see him move.

   PANEL 5 : MIA’S TURNS BACK AROUND TO FACE HIM.

PAGE 142

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON HAS A FULL MEAL (INCLUDING DRINK, FRIES, AND BURGER) FROM THE BURGER SHACK.

   PANEL 2 : MIA IS BLOWN AWAY.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         Seriously!?!!?

PAGE 143

   PANEL 1 – 3 : PAXTON FINISHES HIS FOOD, CRUMBLING UP THE WRAPPER, BURPING, AND TOSSING THE BALL OF PAPER AT MIA’S HEAD. MIA JUST STARES BLANKLY AT HIS BLUNT ATTITUDE.

            MIA
         (THOUGHT)
         What a dick.

   PANEL 4 : PAXTON PRETENDS AS IF NOTHING HAPPENED.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         So you want figure out how this all works, am I right?

PAGE 144

   PANEL 1 : A VIEW OF THE NIGHTSKY.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (OFF-PAGE)
         It makes sense you’d come to me. I figured it’d only be sooner or later.

   CAPTION : “Later on”

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON STANDS ON A ROOFTOP, STARING DOWN AT HIS PHONE.

   PANEL 3 - 4 : ROOFTOP DOOR BEGINS TO OPEN, AND GRACE WALKS OUT.

PAGE 145

   PANEL 1 : GRACE STOPS JUST OUT OF STRIKING RANGE.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Well I’m here; so what’s up?

   PANEL 2 : VIEW IN FRONT OF PAXTON; HE DOESN’T TURN AROUND TO GREET HER.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         What’s your plan with that girl?

   PANEL 3 : GRACE LOOKS CONFUSED.

   PANEL 4 : PAXTON TURNS AND REPEATS HIMSELF MORE STERNLY.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         I’ll ask again, what is your plan with this girl?

   PANEL 5 – 6 : A CLOSE UP OF HIS PHONE, THE NEWS ARTICLE SAYS “Gruesome Mass Murder Now Shows Signs to Missing Person.”; GRACE NOTICES HIS PHONE.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         .sigh. Well, what are we dealing with?

PAGE 146

   PANEL 1 – 3 : BRICKS PILE UP AS AN ENTRY WAY. DOORS SET THEMSELVES WITHIN THE OPENING, CLOSING BETWEEN PAXTON AND GRACE.

   PANEL 4 : WALLS AROUND THE DOORWAY ARE FULLY BUILT. PAXTON TURNS HIS HEAD TO LOOK INTO THE ROOM.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (OFF-PAGE)
         .scuffs. Gruesome barely describes it.

PAGE 147 / PAGE 148

   PANEL 1 : THE INTERIOR OF THE CHURCH IS LINED IN PATTERNS WITH BODY PARTS; THE CEILING AND FLOOR AS WELL. THE PRIEST HAS BEEN DISMEMBERED AND PINNED UP ON THE CROSS WITH A PICTURE OF SOMEONE CLENCHED SHUT IN HIS MOUTH BEHIND THE ALTAR.

PAGE 149

   PANEL 1 – 3 : VIEW OF PAXTON; PAXTON WALKS TOWARDS THE ALTAR. THE POINT OF VIEW DOESN’T CHANGE.

   PANEL 4 : THE CHURCH DOORS BUST OPEN WITH A RANGE OF DEMENTED POURING INTO THE ROOM.

   PANEL 5 : A SIDE VIEW OF THE ROOM; AN OUTLINED SHADOW OF THE DEMENTED KILLING THE CHURCH GOERS INSIDE.

PAGE 150

   PANEL 1 : GRACE FOLDS HER ARMS IN AND FORMULATES HER OWN THOUGHT ON THE SITUATION.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Organized.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : PAXTON PUTS HIS PHONE AWAY AND QUESTIONS GRACE AGAIN.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Exactly. So I need to know why you’ve held on to this girl for so long?

   PANEL 4 : GRACE LOOKS ALMOST SMUG AS SHE EXPLAINS HERSELF.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Isn’t it obvious? That girl’s got a gift and we could use as much as an advantage as we can get.

PAGE 151

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON SMIRKS AS A RESPONSE.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Don’t give me that. You and I both know the only real advantage you have is that only I know who you really are.

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON’S DISPOSITION CHANGES INTO SERIOUSNESS.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         You know, it’s not impossible for someone to live as long as you have without a soul reset, but it is rare.

   PANEL 3 : CLOSE UP OF PAXTON AS HE HOLDS UP TWO FINGERS.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         So rare, in fact, that I know of only two people who could ever even achieve that.

   PANEL 4 : GRACE LOOKS INCREDIBLY UNEASY.

PAGE 152

   PANEL 1 : PROFILE OF GRACE.

   PANEL 2 : PROFILE OF PAXTON.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         So tell me Elah, what are you true intentions?

PAGE 153

   PANEL 1 : GRACE’S EYES SHOW SERIOUSNESS.

   PANEL 2 : SHE STICKS HER ARMS OUT AS IF HER INFORMATION IS AN OFFERING.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Milord, you and I share a common enemy – you must know that.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : DISTANT VIEW OF GRACE. DISTANT VIEW OF PAXTON.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         You have something that protects you, and now – so do I.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         And you think that Ms. Amnesia is capable of doing that?

PAGE 154

   PANEL 1 : GRACE POINTS AT PAXTON.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Well I guess it’s convenient that she came to you for help.

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON LOOKS FRUSTRATED.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (THOUGHT)
         So, she’s able to do it too.

   PANEL 3 – 5 : GRACE GETS BACK ONTO TOPIC. SHOWING GREAT CONCERN TO THE SITUATION.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Milord, I know it has to be him. Only he is capable of such an organization.

PAGE 155

   PANEL 1 – 4 : POINT OF VIEW BEHIND PAXTON AND ENDS IN FRONT OF HIM. THE SETTING CHANGES FROM THE ROOFTOP TO THE CHURCH AS THE VIEW CHANGES.

   PANEL 5 : A MAN STANDS BEHIND THE ALTAR, FROZEN IN TIME.

PAGE 156

   PANEL 1 : DIAGONAL VIEW OF PAXTON. A SLENDER YOUNG MAN STANDS BEHIND THE ALTAR IN THE DISTANCE.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : CLOSER AND CLOSER VIEW OF THE UNKNOWN MAN.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : CLOSE UP OF HIS MOUTH. THE MAN SMILES.

            UNKNOWN MAN
         (SPEECH)
         It’s been a long time, Milord.

PAGE 157

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON’S FACE IS IN SHOCK.

            PAXTON
         (THOUGHT)
         How?

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON COCKS HIS HEAD AROUND TO LOOK.

            PAXTON
         (THOUGHT)
         How is he able to break my Chronokinesis?

   PANEL 3 : GRACE EXPLAINS HER THOUGHTS; SHE ISN'T WITHIN A PANEL.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         I know of only one person who could commit such a horrible crime.

   PANEL 4 : PAXTON STARES DOWN THE YOUNG MAN.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         My brother.

PAGE 158 / PAGE 159

   PANEL 1 : REVEALED IDENTITY OF THE YOUNG MAN. SICKLY LOOKING AND SKINNY. RELAXED DEMEANOR.

   CAPTION : (STYLIZED ON PAGE) Lucifer.

PAGE 160

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON LOOKS AT LUCIFER, ALMOST IN WONDER.

   PANEL 2 – 5 : INTERNAL VIEW OF LUCIFER’S HEART, EFFECT TO SHOW AN IRREGULAR HEARTBEAT. INTERNAL VIEW OF HIS LUNGS, HEAVILY DAMAGED. VIEW OF HIS FACE WITH HIM SLIGHTLY PANTING.

   PANEL 6 : VIEW BACK TO PAXTON.

            PAXTON
         (THOUGHT)
         His body...

PAGE 161

   PANEL 1 : LUCIFER APOLOGIZES SARCASTICALLY.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         My apologies that I can’t greet you in my former glory.

   PANEL 2 : SIDE PROFILE OF LUCIFER.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         But I’m sure you can tell, I’m not at hundred percent these days.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : PAXTON DIRECTS THEIR ATTENTION TO THE BODY PARTS LINING THE WALLS.

            PAXTON
         (SPEECH)
         Is that why you got other Demented to do this for you?

PAGE 162

   PANEL 1 – 3 : LUCIFER BEGINS TO LAUGH BUT COUGHS BLOOD MIDWAY THROUGH.

   PANEL 4 : HE WIPES THE BLOOD FROM HIS MOUTH.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         That – that was nothing more than to get your attention.

PAGE 163

   PANEL 1 : LUCIFER’S EXPRESSION GROWS MORE SERIOUS.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         Can you feel it, Milord? That change on the wind?

   PANEL 2 – 4 : PAXTON’S SCYTHE APPEARS AS HE POINTS IT IN LUCIFER’S DIRECTION.

            PAXTON
         (SPEECH)
         “To kill a snake, you have to cut off the head.”

   PANEL 5 : PAXTON READIES HIS WEAPON.

            PAXTON
         (SPEECH)
         Can your rebellion withstand without its leader?

   PANEL 6 : LUCIFER IS UNFAZED BY PAXTON’S THREAT.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         And you really believe that I won’t walk out of here tonight?

            PAXTON
         (SPEECH)
         I’ll make sure of...

PAGE 164

   PANEL 1 : SIDE VIEW OF PAXTON WITH LUCIFER STANDING BEHIND HIM.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         Even as I am now, I think you highly underestimate me.

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON’S FACE IN SHOCK.

            PAXTON
         (THOUGHT)
         This makes no sense, how is he?

PAGE 165

   PANEL 1 - 3 : LUCIFER GRABS PAXTON’S SCYTHE AND KICKS HIM OUT OF RANGE.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : PAXTON SLIDES ACROSS THE FLOOR.

   PANEL 6 : LUCIFER HOLDS THE SCYTHE AS A CRUTCH.
            
LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         All these years of structure has...

PAGE 166

   PANEL 1 : LUCIFER KEELS OVER, COUCHING UP BLOOD.

   PANEL 2 : LUCIFER WIPES THE BLOOD FROM HIS MOUTH.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : PAXTON’S ANTAGONIZE LUCIFER AS HE GETS UP.

            PAXTON
         (SPEECH)
         .huffs. It’s only a matter of time, my shadow will loom over even you. 

   PANEL 5 – 6 : THE TWO STAND UP AS THE SAME TIME.

PAGE 167

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON ASK ABOUT THE SURROUNDING.

            PAXTON
         (SPEECH)
         Did you really need to line the walls with Placebos just to get my attention?

   PANEL 2 : LUCIFER CALMLY EXPLAINS.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         All this attention isn’t for you. – for you, all I had to do was come out of hiding.

   PANEL 3 : LUCIFER CONTINUES.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         My intentions are on a much grander scale.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : LUCIFER FLICKS A PICTURE TO PAXTON.

PAGE 168

   PANEL 1 - 2 : PAXTON LOOKS DOWN AT THE PICTURE AND BACK UP.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Why do you have this?

   PANEL 3 : LUCIFER PLACES HIS HAND FORWARD (AS IF HE WAS HOLDING THE PICTURE TO PRESENT IT TO PAXTON)

   PANEL 4 – 6 : THE PICTURE BURNS AWAY FROM PAXTON’S HAND AND REAPPEARS IN LUCIFER’S IN THE SAME MANNER.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         It’s the final piece I need.

PAGE 169

   PANEL 1 : VIEW OF LUCIFER.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         And using Placebos benefits me in my search for it.

   PANEL 2 : ANOTHER VIEW OF LUCIFER.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         You’d be surprised how much they can accomplish when driven by anger and fear.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : FRONT VIEW OF LUCIFER.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         From what I’ve heard, it’s currently in the possession of my sister. – how unlucky for her to be holding on to the person whose considered missing.

PAGE 170

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON PIECES TOGETHER LUCIFER’S PLAN.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         I see. Everyone will be glued to this case which means its only a matter of time till they flush her out into the open.

   PANEL 2 : CONTINUED VIEW ON PAXTON.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         But how are you so sure you’ll find her?

   PANEL 3 – 4 : LUCIFER LAUGHS HIM OFF.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         I have eyes and ears all over this city.

   PANEL 5 : FIRE BEGINS AROUND LUCIFER’S FEET.

 PAGE 171

   PANEL 1 : FIRE STARTS TO ENGULF HIS BODY.

   PANEL 2 : CLOSE UP OF LUCIFER’S FACE.

            LUCIFER
         (SPEECH)
         Tell Elah I said hello, and that I’ll be seeing her shortly.

PAGE 172

   PANEL 1 : PAXTON LOOKS AT THE CROSS.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (THOUGHT)
         I guess desperate times call for desperate measures.

   PANEL 2 – 6 : THE CHURCH DISSOLVES BACK INTO THE ROOFTOP.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         You understand what this means, don’t you?

PAGE 173

   PANEL 1 : GRACE LOOKS ANNOYED BY PAXTON ASKING.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         You know I can’t ask that of her. She’s upset as is.

   PANEL 2 : PAXTON SNAPS BACK AT HER.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         I don’t give a damn!

   PANEL 3 : CLOSE UP STRIP OF PAXTON’S EYES. A SERIOUS LOOK IN THEM.

   PANEL 4 : SIDE DYNAMIC OF PAXTON.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         She can’t control her power. She’ll be spotted in a crowd instantly.

PAGE 174

   PANEL 1 – 3 : PAXTON SWINGS HIS ARM OUT WHILE A BLACK HAZE FORMS AROUND HIS ARM.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : THE HAZE REVEALS HIS SCYTHE.

PAGE 175

   PANEL 1 : VIEW FROM BEHIND PAXTON. STAND OFF BETWEEN HIM AND GRACE.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         And if it has to come to that...

PAGE 176

   PANEL 1 : SAME SCENE. VIEW BEHIND GRACE.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         ...then I will intervene.

PAGE 177

   PANEL 1 : SIDE VIEW OF PAXTON. NO PANEL BOX; OTHER PANELS SIT AROUND HIM.

PANEL 2 – 6 : VIEWS OF THE GROUP.

         PAXTON/GRIM
      (SPEECH)
      Think about the others. Their lives must mean something to you. Why else would you keep them around?

PAGE 178

   PANEL 1 : GRACE GETS ANGRY.

            GRACE
         (SPEECH)
         Are you threatening them?

   PANEL 2 – 3 : PAXTON SHRUGS HER OFF AND LAUGHS.

   PANEL 4 : PAXTON REGAINS COMPOSURE.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         You got me all wrong. What I’m saying is that everyone is your enemy now.

PAGE 179

   PANEL 1 - 3 : VIEW OF A RANDOM SCENE OF EMERGENCY VOLUNTEERS ASSISTING IN AN ACCIDENT, POLICE STOPPING A CRIME, CITIZENS HELPING ONE ANOTHER.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (OFF-PAGE)
         Emergency personnel, authority figures, even ordinary citizens...

   PANEL 4 : DISTORTED SHADOWY OUTLINES OF A CROWD AROUND GRACE.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Lucifer has anyone and everyone in this city looking for you. From this point on, you can’t trust anyone.

PAGE 180 / PAGE 181

   PANEL 1 : VIEW OF THE ENTIRE CITY.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (OFF-PAGE)
         So I hope you’re ready Elah, because you’re about to be in an all-out war with this city.

PAGE 182

        CAPTION : Universal Laws of Existence

   CAPTION : “Existence is vain.”

PAGE 183

   PANEL 1 : SIDE PROFILE OF GRACE AND LUCIFER STARING EACH OTHER DOWN IN THE BACKGROUND WHILE PAXTON AND MIA SIT ON THE GROUND BACK TO BACK (BOTH OF THEIR SCYTHE BLADES SLAMMED INTO THE GROUND, CRISSCROSSING EACH OTHER.

   CAPTION : -To Be Continued-
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VOLUME ONE / BONUS ENDING
« Reply #6 on: June 06, 2018, 12:01:20 PM »
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PAGE 184

   PANEL 1 : LEAH STANDING IN FRONT OF A CHALKBOARD THAT HAS SCHOOL AND NONSENSE WRITTEN ON IT.

            LEAH
         (SPEECH)
         Alright class, today’s lesson will be the three separate phases of the Soul: Placebo, Fallen Angel, and Demented.

   PANEL 2 – 4 : LEAH TURNS TO THE BOARD AND SIGHS AS SHE SEES THERE’S NO ROOM FOR HER.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : LEAH INSTEAD PULLS DOWN THE PROTECTOR SCREEN.

PAGE 185

   PANEL 1 : LEAH ONCE AGAIN STANDS IN FRONT OF THE SCREEN WITH THE SCREEN DISPLAYING A SOUL (LABELED “Placebo”) DESCENDING DOWN A BRANCH THAT SPECTRUM OUT. ONE END LABELED “Fallen Angel” AND THE OTHER END LABELED “Demented”.
            
                                LEAH
         (SPEECH)
         Let’s first discuss the key difference that separates Placebos from the other two.

   PANEL 2 : A CLOSER VIEW OF THE PICTURE ON THE SCREEN.

            LEAH
         (SPEECH)
         Assume the spectrum is the array of power one has when a Fallen Angel or Demented. Every single person’s spectrum shares both quality with each individual’s moral deciding to favor one side or the other.

   PANEL 3 : A CROWD OF EVERYDAY PEOPLE.

            LEAH
         (OFF-PAGE)
         Most of the population are Placebos, meaning they haven’t unlocked this power. So their spectrum is compressed.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : ONE PANEL TO SHOWING A FALLEN ANGEL AND ONE TO SHOWING A DEMENTED.

            LEAH
         (OFF-PAGE)
         But once this power is unlocked, the capabilities are nearly endless.

   PANEL 6 : CLOSE UP SPECTRUM.

            LEAH
         (OFF-PAGE)
         Just like a spectrum, if one is morally more a Fallen Angel than a Demented. They can use their powers in a certain way that a Demented cannot and vice versa.

PAGE 186

   PANEL 1 : VIEW BACK TO LEAH.

            LEAH
         (SPEECH)
         It’s important to remember that these powers aren’t permanent. Get caught in Death’s Shadow, and your Soul resets. – this ultimately means that the power resets too!

   PANEL 2 – 4 : VIEW FROM THE BACK OF THE CLASS. SHADOWED OUTLINE OF STUDENTS, A COUPLE RAISING THEIR HAND.

            STUDENTS
         (SPEECH)
         What about these Universal Laws?
         -
         Or how does one unlock these powers?

PAGE 187

   PANEL 1 : CLOSE UP OF LEAH IN A TEASING LOOK.

            LEAH
         (SPEECH)
         Then stick around for another lesson!
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VOLUME TWO / CHAPTER SIX
« Reply #7 on: June 06, 2018, 12:34:15 PM »
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PAGE 1

   PANEL 1 : View of Mia’s house, police surrounding it.

PAGE 2

   PANEL 1 : View of the kitchen; forensics mapping the crime scene.

PAGE 3

   PANEL 1 : Two detectives stand disgusted by the sight.

               DETECTIVE 1
            (SPEECH)
            God damn dude. This is just something else.

   PANEL 2 : A closer view of DETECTIVE 2 deep in thought with his finger wrapped around his chin. His partner continues.

               DETECTIVE 1
            (OFF-PAGE)
                                I mean, I’ve heard of rage, but this is just complete mutilation.

   PANEL 3 : A view behind DETECTIVE 1, his partner looks down at the floor.

   PANEL 4 – 5 : The same view, DETECTIVE 2 looks in the direction of the doorway, then looks back at DETECTIVE 1.

               DETECTIVE 1
            (SPEECH)
            I need to make a phone call.

PAGE 4

   PANEL 1 : DETECTIVE 2 walks away as his partner looks on confused.

               DETECTIVE 1
            (SPEECH)
            Hey, were you even listening?

               DETECTIVE 2
            (SPEECH)
            No, not really.

   PANEL 2 – 3 : Exterior of the house, DETECTIVE 2 is walking out and searching through his phone.

   PANEL 4 : He begins to call someone.

PAGE 5

   PANEL 1 : A dynamic view of him on the phone.

               DETECTIVE 2
            (SPEECH)
            It’s me
                                –
                                This kid did a number on the mom, but from the look of it, he chased the girl out into a nearby alleyway.
                                -
                                Only problem now is that both went missing that night as well, so I’m with no leads.
                                -
                                Some kid, small-timer, name is Evan Blackburn.
                                -
                                Yeah, no one’s claimed him either. So, either he’s rouge, or there’s an unknown party at work.
                                -
                                I will, sir. Thank you.

PAGE 6

   PANEL 1 – 3 : On the other end of the call, the man hangs up and puts his phone away. An UNSEEN BYSTANDER accompanies him.

               UNSEEN BYSTANDER
            (SPEECH)
            Anything sir?

   PANEL 4 : View pointing at the man who is LUCIFER.

                                        LUCIFER
            (SPEECH)
It appears there are other players in the game.

PAGE 7

   CAPTION : Chapter Six – White Elephant / “Lesson One: Hiding Your Shadow”

PAGE 8

   PANEL 1 - 3 : Mia sits alone in the hideout playing games. She sighs from boredom and looks at her watch.

   PANEL 4 : Paxton appears behind her.

            PAXON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Yo.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : Mia jumps from being startled, breaking her device as it hits the ground.

PAGE 9

   PANEL 1 : Side view of Paxton and Mia.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Bummer.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         You seriously need to quit doing that...

   PANEL 2 – 6 : Paxton freezes time and loops it back to before, positioning himself to catch her device.

PAGE 10

   PANEL 1 - 5 : As the old version of them repeats, Paxton catches her device.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         You seriously need to...

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Quit doing that – I know.

   PANEL 6 – 7 : Mia looks greatly displeased , Paxton looks indifferent.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         How many times have you done this already?

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         I don’t know – seven... eight times.

PAGE 11

   PANEL 1 – 2 : Mia waves him off, frustrated by his actions.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Well, what do you want?

   PANEL 3 : She points at him in disappointment.

            MIA
         (SPEECH)
         Shouldn’t you be at school right now?

   PANEL 4 : Paxton shrugs her off.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         I’mma Lord of Death, school seems pretty trivial.

PAGE 12

   PANEL 1 : Dynamic view of Paxton.

            PAXTON/GRIM
         (SPEECH)
         Besides, your little group of friends are currently being investigated at school, seeing that your still technically “missing”.
         -
         Since it’ll be awhile before they return – give or take a few days – I figured it would be a perfect time for us to bond a little over some lessons.

PAGE 13

   PANEL 1 : Mia’s thoughts on him teaching aren’t too pleasing.

   PANEL 2 : View of her thoughts of him with a tie and nice clothes (the whole panel X’ed out).

   PANEL 3 : View back to Mia sitting on the floor.

               MIA
            (SPEECH)
            Ha. I highly doubt your “teaching” abilities.

   PANEL 4 : View of Paxton with a sarcastic, smug look.

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            That’s fine – I rather you rot away in this sketchy-ass building anyways.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : Paxton begins to walk away but Mia stops him because she is curious to what he means. He turns back to her with the same look as before.

               MIA
            (SPEECH)
            Wait, wait, wait. What exactly are you going to teach me?

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            Nothing too fancy... just a way to go undetected out in the real world.

PAGE 14

   PANEL 1 – 2 : Sudden temptation takes over Mia as the thought of being able to leave the hideout peaked her interest.

   PANEL 3 – 4 : She grabs a hold of Paxton.

               MIA
            (SPEECH)
            This better not be a joke.

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            Now why would I do something like that?

   PANEL 5 : Side view of them. Mia growls in anger as Paxton continues.

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            Even better, I’m going to show you what I mean when I say, “the Shadow of Death”.

PAGE 15 / PAGE 16

   PANEL 1 : View of the room they are in. Normal settings as Paxton and Mia sit down in front of one another.

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            Now I’m only going to show you a sliver of it.

PAGE 17 / PAGE 18

   PANEL 1 : The same view but Paxton is gone and all around Mia are disturbing images of Paxton’s “shadow”, torturing her and tormenting her. (this being the Grim Reaper itself).

PAGE 19

   PANEL 1 - 3 : Mia gasps in pure terror at the sight of it. She jumps back but only to see that whatever nightmare she was a part of, had disappeared.

               MIA
            (SPEECH)
            Wh... What... What the hell was that?

   PANEL 4 : Paxton appears to enjoy her moment of fear as he laughs her off and explains.

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            Ha, ha, ha. I told my dear – it’s the Shadow of Death.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : Both of them go back and forth.

               MIA
            (SPEECH)
            That much I got, I mean what is it exactly?

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            Never really thought about it before. I guess if I had to put a label to it – I would say it’s an essence... like a force of nature.

PAGE 20

   PANEL 1 – 2 : Paxton gets up and directs Mia to follow.

   PANEL 3 – 5 : The two stand in the center of the room. Paxton discusses the first steps.

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            Stand still and focus around my body.

PAGE 21

   PANEL 1 : Profile of Mia.

   PANEL 2 – 4 : Views of Paxton with more detail than the one before, slowly exposing the Reaper behind him.

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            Do you see it?

               MIA
            (SPEECH)
            Yeah, barely.

PAGE 22

   PANEL 1 – 3 : Three views of Paxton from right, center, and left. The right-angled view shows him and the reaper. The center view shows the reaper behind Paxton (giving his figure and aura like outline). The left shows the reaper is gone.

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            With enough control, I’m able to hide it
                               
                                (THOUGHT)
                                but...

   PANEL 4 : Strip panel of Paxton’s eyes.

PAGE 23
 
   PANEL 1 : Dynamic view of Mia with her version of the grim reaper behind her. In comparison to Paxton’s, Mia’s is greatly intensified.

               PAXTON’S PREDECESSOR
            (OFF-PAGE)
            Alright – listen to me cause this is really important.
            
PAGE 24

   PANEL 1 – 2 : Two profile views of a young Paxton and his predecessor. A woman who would appeared a couple years older. She wears a hood over her head with a mask representing the culture of the setting. The setting is of an ancient civilization.

PAGE 25

   PANEL 1 – 4 : His predecessor sits him in a mediation pose and explains what he has to do to control his shadow.

               PAXTON’S PREDECESSOR
            (SPEECH)
            Stay just like that and relax.
            -
            Now close your eyes and try to envision the room we’re in as if you can physically see it.

   PANEL 5 : Side view of Paxton with his eyes close.

               PAXTON’S PREDECESSOR
            (SPEECH)
            Once you feel like you see it – open your eyes.

   PANEL 6 : Same view but with his eyes opening.

PAGE 26 / PAGE 27

   PANEL 1 : Paxton sees the room from a different position then he was before. He can see his predecessor standing by his physical body.

PAGE 28

   PANEL 1 - 5 : Paxton’s predecessor discusses that Paxton must give her a sign by touch for her to know he did it right. Paxton gets a naughty idea and grabs her boobs. Though his predecessor can’t see him, she feels him groping her. Embarrassed and mad, she grinds her teeth in anger before punching his head.

               PAXTON’S PREDECESSOR
            (SPEECH)
            If you did it right, you should see me and your body in the room with you. I can only see your physical body, so for me to know if you did it right – I need to feel your presence. A simple touch will do.

            AFTER HE GRABS HER
                               
                                (SPEECH)
            When I said touch... I didn’t mean my tits you little prev!!!

PAGE 29

   PANEL 1 : Paxton’s predecessor awaits for him once again but this time with her arms crossed so he can’t do the same thing again.

   PANEL 2 : A close up of her arm with Paxton tapping it.

   PANEL 3 : Front view of his predecessor.

               PAXTON’S PREDECESSOR
            (SPEECH)
            Good. Now mirror yourself almost exactly. I need to tell you something important first.

PAGE 30

   PANEL 1 : Angled dynamic view of his predecessor.
               
               PAXTON’s PREDECESSOR
            (SPEECH)
            You’ll essentially be playing rounds of question and answer with Death itself. When you’re ready to begin, you’ll exactly mirror yourself – allowing for a connection between the both of you.

PAGE 31

   PANEL 1 : A mirrored view of last panel.

               PAXTON’S PREDECESSOR
            (SPEECH)
            Understand this – if you answer incorrectly or if Death ends the conversation and breaks the connection, you’ll experience a side effect known as EgoDeath.
                                -
                                It’s a state of consciousness where you lose all sense of identity. Your mind will go insane to the point it will create a complete new reality within itself.

PAGE 32

   PANEL 1 : Side view of Paxton.

               PAXTON’S PREDECESSOR
            (SPEECH)
            Every minute in this world feels like a year there. You can live lifetimes in the matter of a day. But your mind will greatly age as your will not. If or when you do realize the illusion and come back to this world, your soul will have paid a heavy price.

   PANEL 2 : Mirrored view of last panel.

               PAXTON’S PREDECESSOR
            (SPEECH)
            You will experience these multiple times if you plan on controlling your shadow. So make sure you get back sooner rather than later.

   PANEL 3 – 6 : Paxton syncs with himself and follows the movements of his physical body as it slowly adjusted itself into position for an Ouija board. As they set up, in the world Paxton is in – an elaborate game board appears in front of them. Paxton’s predecessor explains as everything goes.

               PAXTON’S PREDECESSOR
            (SPEECH)
            When you sync with your physical body, it will become a medium for Death and it will take control of your body. Follow the movements exactly until you see board appear.
                                -
                                You must start the conversation simply by sliding the view-plate over to it.

PAGE 33

   PANEL 1 – 2 : Paxton’s predecessor watches Paxton’s physical body begin to move.

   PANEL 3 : top down view of the board. Both versions of Paxton have their hands on the view-plate, the view-plate sits on the word “Hello”.

   PANEL 4 : Multiple small close-up views of the letters that spell out the sentence – “Are you afraid to die?”.

PAGE 34

   PANEL 1 – 4 : Mia’s physical body begins to fall back, lifeless when it hits the ground.

   PANEL 5 – 6 : Paxton starts a timer and sits down.

               PAXTON/GRIM
            (SPEECH)
            Alright girlie – time to see if you prove me wrong.

PAGE 35

   PANEL 1 : Top down view of Mia on the floor.

PAGE 36

   PANEL 1 - 3 : Side view of her face when her eyes closed. She opens them to see she’s back in her room.

               MIA
            (SPEECH)
            I’m back in my room? Was that all just a dream?

   PANEL 4 – 6 : She sits up on her bed and rubs her eye. Her mom’s voice is hear from downstairs.

               MIA’S MOM
            (OFF-PAGE)
            Mia! Are you up? You’ll be late for school if you sleep any longer!

   PANEL 7 : Mia’s hair hangs over her face and a tear is seen running down her face.

               MIA
            (SPEECH)
            Mom...?

PAGE 37

   CAPTION : Universal Laws of Existence

   CAPTION : “ haven't thought of one for here yet.”

PAGE 38

        CAPTION : Chapter Seven – EgoDeath [part one] / “The First Attempt is Always a Failure”

        COMING SOON... MAYBE.

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Re: Title - GRIM / CHAPTER SIX added
« Reply #8 on: June 07, 2018, 01:12:43 PM »
Phew well I wish I had the usual time I did to give a step by step review but I had to skim, so I'll be mentioning things off the top of my head.

My first ever concept was for reapers and the like inspired by Bleach. At the time I felt a bit ashamed of it but I learnt - along with seeing this now - that it's a concept that's so rich for storytelling there's lots of opportunities for unique spins on the idea.

I feel though that after the mothers' death Mia not reacting to her demise in a proper emotional manner and rather settling for being angry, attacking, being played around with by Paxton and then basically sitting in for some lessons in being a Reaper took away from that sense of 'My normal life is totally upturned right now and my friends are strange supernatural fighters?' A bit.

Other than that though pretty cool concepts here! Love the Universal Laws of Existence theme, and the character powers are really cool. Love time freezing and teleportation and all that jazz. The last chapter explaining Ego Death was particularly interesting too.

I felt a little lost in the flashback. Was it that Mia has been living for thousands of years and lost her memories before the mordern day? Was she already fated to be a Grim? Why does she have to off Paxton instead of just inherit the powers?

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Re: Title - GRIM / CHAPTER SIX added
« Reply #9 on: June 07, 2018, 09:53:34 PM »
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Thanks for the comments! It's nice to get some feedback on this one. To be honest, this idea was really hard to get going at first. The topic was so broad, I wasn't sure how I wanted to proceed with it for a while.

As for the reaction to the Mom's death, you're right - she doesn't react in a realistic way. I think I was more worried about getting a basic back story of Grace and Mia going and getting all the major characters developed but I do plan to touch on it kind of heavily here in the next couple of chapters to come. Also with the flashback, I feel like it would be a bit easier to follow once it's drawn and you can actually see a switch between Paxton/Mia and Paxton/his Predecessor. Maybe I'm a little hopeful on it - I'll probably mark it as a flashback like I did with an earlier one so people know.

I'm glad you like the concepts of this story otherwise, I've really enjoyed writing this one now that I have it together. Again, I always welcome feedback - it let's me know that I'm developing a good story!