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MR Reading Binge
« on: July 07, 2017, 03:53:39 AM »
So I'm about to read everything that I can that has been uploaded in the manga creation and develop your story. By that I mean like the latest 2 pages. I have a lot of free time today so I'll read your story until I get a good feel of it or it becomes a pain to keep on reading it.

Good news! I'll submit a feedback through PM.

There is No need to respond to my critique.

I'm going to first start out with those without comments.
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Re: MR Reading Binge
« Reply #1 on: July 07, 2017, 08:02:46 AM »

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Re: MR Reading Binge
« Reply #2 on: July 07, 2017, 11:31:01 AM »
good luck!

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Re: MR Reading Binge
« Reply #3 on: July 07, 2017, 01:38:21 PM »
Oh, best of luck. I apologize for some of my older works before my writing was a little more...refined. I look forward to hearing what you think.
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Re: MR Reading Binge
« Reply #4 on: July 08, 2017, 06:47:50 AM »
Some things that I keep seeing.

1. Excessive dialogue.
2. Info dumps that are not needed.
3. No clear theme.
4. Not allowing the audience to follow the MC in his/her journey.

I'm not saying I don't suffer from this too. You know it's always easier to see other people's writing mistakes than your own.
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Re: MR Reading Binge
« Reply #5 on: July 08, 2017, 03:44:04 PM »
Just based on when I do poke around, hell yes to the first three. All the time.
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