Artwork is phenomenal as usual, but why with the "u" instead of "you"? Everything else is like, professional quality and then just...boom. All professionalism lost. Not to mention the entire lack of commas...The speech bubbles and what goes on in them is definitely the weakest link, and it could be easily fixed. It messes up the flow. Another one just on the previous page is how fine gets line broken into f ine. It's jarring and it snaps the reader out of the zone, kills the magic, you know? I really want to see this succeed, but it's hard to see when the little editing errors like that start piling up.