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The Kaimon Tales!
« on: May 04, 2018, 11:44:59 PM »
Back from a long hiatus and starting a new story, a soft reboot of my older stuff!


The Kaimon Tales!

Story #1: Another morning!

It begins another usual morning in Japan. As the streets of Tokyo is blustering with life of the mundane, life is as normal as it can be.

Then there's the very unusual town of Kaimon...Actual location, sort of a question not many in Japan is willing to answer. Some say a tad bit close at the left of Tokyo or was it Osaka?

Wait, Kyoto maybe? ...Let's just move on.

Founded by a pirate of the Tokugawa shogunate, the town only got weirder from then on throughout its history. For most of the country, the less said about Kaimon, the better.

But of course, we're treated to a usual morning in such a place!

The Onimada household and family medical clinic...

"Uggghhhh…." A young man with short spiked hair with brown eyes groans as he pulls himself up from his pillow, revealing a scar that goes across the bridge of his nose. He turns to see his alarm clock blaring at early morning. With a fist, he slams it down to snooze and retreats back to his futon bed. "Ten minutes...Just ten extra minutes…" He mutters as he closed his eyes. Maybe his next dream would be on a trip to a sunny beach. Yeah, those ten minutes will be worth it...

Only for him to be jarred awake as his bedroom door is suddenly kicked off its hinges, a larger figure having just kicked it down!

"Rise and shine, Maxtaro!" Kenshin Onimada shouts with a grin entering the room as an annoyed Maxtaro only gave a glare in return.

"...You do know that's the fifth door you kicked down this week?" Maxtaro said bluntly as he forces himself to rise to his feet. He looked at the sorry state of his bedroom door. "Damn, you know Dad's gonna kill you.

"Oh come on, little brother." Kenshin said with that smile still on his face, his eyes beaming with enthusiasm. "You know I can't help it when we got a new job to do!"

"Right right, you and Dad found a new building to fix up." Maxtaro replies as he stretched his limbs. "But still, don't kick down the freaking door! Now get out so I can change for school!" He shouts as he walks past Kenshin to head to the bathroom. "Goddamn every freaking day now." He mutters followed by grumbling as Kenshin gave a chuckle.

"Man, I love doing that." He said with a smile.

After a routine of cleaning up and changing into his school uniform; a black gakuran outfit with a vertical blue stripe on the center of the jacket with two horizontal stripes near the sleeve cuffs. Maxtaro as always never bothered to button the jacket up, showing an untucked t-shirt underneath. He soon enters the kitchen of his house, eying at his his parents sitting at the table. "Dad, he did it again." Maxtaro said rather bluntly.

"Oh jeez, Kenshin kicked the door down again?" Maxtaro's father Hiro said as Maxtaro only nods with an additional rolling of his eyes in response. "Don't worry, I'll get him to fix it by the time you get home today."

"Yeah, and please use the stronger hinges this time." Maxtaro respond with a sigh. "I think Kenshin got even stronger...Somehow." He then grabs a piece of toast as he heads to the door. "Alright, gotta go. See ya guys later."

"Ah, Maxtaro." His mother Miki said with a slightly raised hand. "Before you go, I want you to have this." She then pulls out a smartphone, much to Maxtaro's surprise. "Hiro and I are thinking that you really need a cell phone-"

"Holy crap-Thanks Mom!" Maxtaro said excitedly as he takes the phone from her hands to her annoyance. "I never thought I've-Wait, what?" He mutters as he notices the scuff marks on the phone, numerous old text notifications, and the random medical related apps on the screen. "...Are you seriously giving me your old phone?"

"H-Hey! What's wrong with it?" Miki ask with a very defensive tone. "It's not a bad phone!" She adds to her protest, all while holding a new phone to boot. "As a clinic doctor, I need to use better equipment...Though I haven't gotten all my contacts in yet...And I haven't installed my apps at all…"

"Miki, I told ya to do it when I bought the damn thing." Hiro said with a concerned look.

"I-I was going to eventually!" Miki said with a rather embarrassed look. "...Maxtaro, can I ask for a favor?"

Maxtaro only gives a nonchalant wave as he checks out his sorta new phone. "Yeah, I guess. Just hold on, got some apps to delete. I don't think I need this rectal thermometer for dummies app-"

"W-Wait a minute!" Miki cried out. "Don't do anything just yet! I need that phone!"


Meanwhile, at another part in town, the Hino residence and it's rather barely repaired dojo stood ready for another day. A young woman and heir to the dojo itself has just finished putting on her school uniform!

"We really need a new uniform." Kyoko Hino said quietly as she adjust the black ribbon on the front of her seifuku uniform; white shirt with the Kaimon colors of black and blue adorned on the collar and cuffs with a blue skirt. It's a fine uniform...But a tad old fashioned these days. "Seriously, what kind of budget are we running to not get blazers?" She said with a sigh as she pulled up black socks that ends just below the knee.

"Kyoko, breakfast is ready!" Her mother called from below.

"Yeah, I'll be there in a second!' Kyoko shouted as she ties her long black hair to a low messy ponytail, held by a long tightly wrapped red ribbon. "Well, time to start another day." She said quietly before cracking a smile. She heads down the stairs upon leaving her room, noticing her father Yuu standing at the main hallway. "Oh, what's going on, Dad?"

"Oh, Kyoko." Yuu said with a rather depressed look, holding several slips of papers. "Well, these are the new recruitment slips that came in."

Kyoko couldn't help but give a confused look. "Really? Then why the gloom?" She asked with a raised eyebrow. "Isn't that a good thing?" She then notice her little sister Miyu walking out of the bathroom.

"You know Dad." Miyu said. "He wants new students, but he's getting rather annoyed they're mostly street punks." Kyoko confusion then suddenly changes.

"Oh! That's true!" She said with a light smacking of her palm.

Yuu then gives a scowl at this reveal "Miyu!" He cried out. "You actually want me to accept these?! You do realize we're getting a pretty shady reputation in our dojo, right?!" Miyu could only cringe as her father only grew more distraught by mere seconds.

"Hey, I'm just saying." She said, with a shrug and sigh. "I mean, either take them in or watch the dojo be empty like the last few months…" The three altogether could only grimace at the past memories of a very very empty dojo. It wasn't long for Kyoko to speak up.

"Dad, I hate to say this, but you probably need to accept those applications." She said with a gloomy tone. "It's getting kind of sad we're not getting new students if you're too picky…" Yuu simply gave a long winded sigh.

"You...You are right." He said quietly...Before returning to a pleading tone. "Which is why, I'm entrusting this to you, Kyoko!"

"That's the spirit-Wait, what?!" Kyoko shouted. Her mother then shouts from the kitchen once more.

"I really hope you guys like breakfast, because I burnt the rice again!"


Elsewhere, at the Mori Household and metalworks, Baku Mori prepares his day. Preparing his day while not wearing a shirt of all things.

"...Baku, you are going to school wearing a shirt, right?"

Baku could only give his little sister a bewildered look as he packs his school bag. "Kana, I'm not an idiot. You know the air conditioner is broken." He only gave a frown as he notices her looking away as if she's trying to choose the right words. "Y-You're scaring me…" It wasn't long for her to finally say something.

"I know, but I've been noticing something...Have you been shirtless the last few days at home, just to send selfies to your girlfriend?"

"Kana!" Baku blurts out in shock.

"I-I'm sorry! Kana said with an embarrassed look. "It's just that Maxtaro said-"

Baku only gave an irritated growl. "Why am I not surprised? Look, just because Maxtaro said that doesn't mean he's serious."

Then a shout from outside is heard. "Hey Baku! Stop taking selfies and put a damn shirt on! We leaving or what?" Baku could only give a small pause.

"...Kana, do me a favor while I get dressed. Get me a hammer...And look away the moment I head outside." He mutters before leaving the kitchen. It took Kana several second to register that.

"...W-What?!" She said with shock.

Moving on, Maxtaro stares at his new sorta phone! Still his mother's mind you! He notices Baku, hastily buttoning a dress shirt as his uniform jacket is loosely hanging on his shoulders, heading out to meet him. "Hey, why the long face?"

"Yeah, give me a reason why I shouldn't knee you right in the jewels." Baku said bluntly as he puts on his jacket.

Maxtaro only gave a smile. "Cause you love me like a brother." He notice Baku giving a dry chuckle.

"Hoho, you're just really testing how far that excuse works." He said as the two give a bumping of fists. "Seriously though, give my sister ideas, I will kill you."

"Whatever man, can we just go already?" Maxtaro ask as he points to the scrapyard entrance. "Your mom is beating the crap out of your uncle for selling food around here again."

They heard a crash followed by high pitched wails. The two then hear the voice of a woman clearly in an unforgiving mood. "What did I tell you bout selling crap at my place?! I oughta shove those durian shells up your-" Followed by even more crashing noise much to the cringing reaction from Maxtaro and Baku.

"...I seriously don't know how your old man can sleep through all that noise." Maxtaro mutters.

"It's a thing of his." Baku replies bluntly. "Let's go." The two then quickly walk away. Not long after, the two walked in the mostly empty streets. "Say, I noticed you got a phone." Baku said with a chuckle. "Bout time."

Maxtaro gave a frown. "Yeah...Too bad I'm keeping this phone for today until my Mom gets all her junk outta her old phone."

"Wait, your Mom is making you take her old phone?" Baku ask with much confusion. "Ain't that kind of awkward? I can get if she bought ya an older phone, but this?"

Maxtaro didn't paid attention as he begins to ready his temporary phone for a selfie. "Right, so going to take a selfie for a wallpaper on my actual phone for tomorrow." Baku then grabs Maxtaro by the arm.

"Whoa Maxtaro. I know you can be a lot of things, but narcissist ain't one of them." He said, right to the point. "Come on, a selfie of yourself as the wallpaper? That's sad, man."

"What, I'm getting this from the guy who sends topless selfies to the pervy girl?!" Maxtaro responds incredulous.

Baku could only stammer at...That rather harsh truth. "Can you get off my back about that-agh!" He growls before calming himself down. "Look, single person selfies as a wallpaper is...Just too depressing in my opinion." He replies with a growing calmness. "This is more like a group thing with that kind of stuff."

Maxtaro gave a pause but soon nods. "Huh, never thought of it that way. Come on, let's do one together. Best buds count, right?"

"Right." Baku said with a returning nod. The two then set the phone pointing at them, only to hesitate. "...This is too awkward with just us."

"Y-Yeah…" Maxtaro said back as the two chuckle nervously as they place the cell phone away. "I think we need more people. How bout Kyoko and Nagase?" Baku then pulls out his phone.

"Good thinking, I'll call Nagase and see-" Suddenly, a thrown rock hits him square in the hand. "Agh! Son of a-" He gasps as his dropped phone hits the ground hard. "Oh crap!"

Maxtaro looked at the direction the rock is thrown. "Who did that-Oh." He grew baffled at the sight of street punks...An army of them in fact, all led by some multi-colored mohawk wearing weirdo holding more rocks. "Well, never thought I start my morning like this. What the hell do you guys want?"

"Aw hell, my phone…" Baku mumbles as he looks at his dropped phone. The mohawk thug then raises his voice.

"Onimada and Mori! I, Mohawk Jim, declare war because of your-" He never finished as Baku in a fit of annoyance, hurls a trash can that smacks Mohawk Jim right in the head, knocking him out cold. How very anti-climatic! "Boss!" The small army of punks cried out as they tend to their wounded leader. "Mori, what the hell?! He wasn't even done talking!"

"Shut up! You assholes better pay up for this phone!" Baku cried out only to be confused. "Wait, who the hell is Mohawk Jim?"

Maxtaro shrugs. "I'm just as lost as you are. Didn't we ran into someone of that name recently? I'm hitting blanks here."

Baku nearly open his mouth only to pause. "Yeah, I'm getting nothing too…Really, you'd think this would be obvious." Maxtaro nods as the two ponder, ignoring the roaring of the punks close by as they scream various things.

"Boss, get up! Oh god, he's frothing at the mouth! You two are dead, you hear?! Stop ignoring us dammit!"

Baku then snap his fingers. "Got it, we made fun of his mohawk a few nights ago!"

"Yeah, that's right! It just look so stupid, we-Ohhhhh." Maxtaro mutters as he soon looked at the bloodthirsty group. "So Baku, should we fight or should we run?"

"Get those bastards!" The group roars out as they charge towards our heroes!

"Yeah." Baku said before suddenly running off to the other direction. "Totally run!"

"Damn right!" Maxtaro shouts as he follows suit.

"Kill em!"


Not too far off…

"Who the heck is Mohawk Jim?" Kyoko ask herself as she sorts out one of the many applications she's been checking since leaving her house, walking the way to school. "Who names themselves after a hairstyle?" She sighed as she moves on to the next application. "This is ridiculous. Five applications already rejected." Kyoko couldn't help but feel dejected at such pickiness on her part. "This suuuuccckkks." She bemoaned herself as she buried her face with these slips of paper. "No wonder why Dad couldn't decide, these guys so far are lame." She let loose a long sigh. "I'm going to need some help sorting this out...Well, Nagase's is just by the corner, maybe she can-"

"Aghhh! Go down already!"

Kyoko, shocked and confused, rushes to the voice. "Eh?! Was that Nagase?! What's going on-" She nearly trips out of seeing that Nagase is in no real trouble, the bespectacled brunette merely arm wrestling against her older brother on a worn out tree stump in their yard.

But it's an epic arm wrestling match mind you!"

"Gaaaahhh!" Nagase cries out as she puts all her strength only to see her brother Akira barely moved an inch. "Why won't you go down?!"

Akira rolled his eyes. "Just give up already!" He said with a lot of irritation in his tone. "Are you seriously going to do this for a donut?!" He then spots Kyoko, too baffled to make a response. "Oh, hey Kyoko."

"Kyoko!" Nagase shouts with excitement followed by more straining. "Good timing! Help me win this!"

Kyoko only stood in silence. "...Uh, how exactly?" She notice Nagase pointing towards her with her free hand.

"Like, hit him with that fold up chair next to ya!" Nagase replies.

Kyoko only raised an eyebrow. "...In an arm wrestling match?"

Nagase quickly gave an exasperated look. "Can't you see I wanna win this?!" She screams out in frustration before her phone close by gave a sudden vibration. "What-" She is then rocked by a sudden jerk as Akira suddenly slams her hand down, winning the match.

"Akira wins!" Their father Renji shouts in booming joy. "Sorry Nagase, rules are rules!"

"N-No fair!" She cried out. "I was distracted I tell ya!"

"Jeez, take your loss like a real adult, Nagase." Akira mutters as he snatches the last donut from the box on the table before walking to his moped. "Nobody likes a sore loser!"

"Hey!" Nagase shouted with a growl. She then stares at Kyoko with teary puppy like eyes beneath her glasses. "Why is life unfair?"

Kyoko gave a sigh. "...If it makes you feel better, I bought a pastry for you-"

"Bye Dad, love ya!" Nagase said, back to sudden joy in her tone as she walks up to Kyoko to the latter's surprise. "C'mon, gimme some of that sweetness!" She followed up with a wave of her hand like a dog begging for a treat.

"Please, stop that." Kyoko said, growing red in the face. "This is getting awkward…

The two then walked back to the streets of Kaimon, as Kyoko took a look of envy at Nagase. The taller girl wearing the Kaimon uniform but her legs were of focus. Long slender legs that wears long dark colored socks that reached just mid thigh and red sneakers.

"...How in the world did you get that height?" Kyoko mutters.

Nagase gives a grin, pastry between her teeth. "I probably got some neat genes."

"Whatever, just help me out with these." Kyoko mutters as she hands Nagase a few applications. "Bet you don't have being too picky as a gene."

Nagase then finishes her treat with a big bite as she looks at the applications. Her usually expressive green eyes suddenly gave a rather baffling look. "...Please tell me you didn't pick Mohawk Jim."

Kyoko instantly shook her head. "Nope, didn't even consider it once." She then gave a surprised expression. "Wait, you know him?"

"Well, not really." Nagase said. "I heard he came by the wrestling gym and asked my Dad to train him...He got mad when Akira laughed at his hair and stormed off."

"Ugh, that's your brother alright." Kyoko said with a frown. "He can't hide brutal honesty the way you can't really control your strength." She then gave an intriguing look upon recollection. "Say, what happened back there? It looks like you got distracted." Nagase couldn't help but giggle as she pulled out her phone.

"Turns out Baku just sent me a picture!" She said with a smile. "Shirtless during the morning, how bold! Totally forgiven even though that made me lose!"

"...You can't be serious." Kyoko said bluntly. "I thought Maxtaro was kidding when he mentioned about that selfie game you two are playing last night."

"Hey, it doesn't hurt to try new things in our relationship." Nagase retorts. "Besides...I send him pictures of my legs in return. I'm in the lead too!"

Kyoko only shook her head in disbelief. "Why am I listening to this?! Just be quiet and sort these applications out!"

Nagase then gives a smirk. "...And at times, I send pictures of my midriff." She snickers upon seeing Kyoko's cringing reaction. "Haha, you really need to loosen up a bit!"

"While I say you should rein in it once in a while." Kyoko replies with a sigh. "I guess I'll have to wing it and get...Whoever seems the least crazy in these slips."

Nagase gave a shrug. "We can always try drawing out names in a hat." She then bit her lip. "...I'm sorry, that really sounds stupid, even for me."

"No...To be honest, I was thinking about that myself." Kyoko said with a tone of shame. "Why is this so hard-"

"Those two are around here somewhere! Let's find em and kill em!"

The two girls pause as they notice not too far are several thugs looking around the area, paying no mind to them. Well, more like too busy focusing their bloodlust on a certain pair but whatever!

Kyoko then finally began to speak up. "...They better not be talking about-"

"Onimada and Mori are dead for messing with the Mohawk Jim Gang!"

"Ugh...Unreal." Kyoko quickly mutters.

"Say wha?" Nagase said with disbelief. "He actually calls his gang that? He's terrible at names!"

"Who said that?!" The two then froze stiff as it wasn't long for the man himself to show up. Bandages covering his face...Yet that mohawk still stands out. "Wow, I should have known you of all people would mock me after that embarrassing rejection." He mutters before pointing an accusing finger at Nagase, much to her confusion. "What, your brother laughing at my hair ain't enough, Omiko?!"

"Hey!" Nagase said with a frown. "Don't lump me with my idiot brother!"

"Shut it!" Mohawk Jim cried out. "For all I know, your stupid boyfriend is probably in cahoots with you, wrecking my face with that trash can!"

"Baku did that?!" Kyoko and Nagase said with shock. Nagase then ponders, a hand on her chin. "You'd think Maxtaro would have done that to be honest."

"Whatever! You two are coming with us!" Mohawk Jim said with authority. "So you can watch us beat down Onimada and Mori by force!"

Kyoko simply pause before nonchalantly ripping up Mohawk Jim's application. "Well, you just made my job easier."

"W-Wait Hino! M-Maybe I was a little too hasty!" Mohawk Jim said with a nervous chuckle. "I totally forgot about applying to your pop's dojo! Forget what I just said there!"

Kyoko gave a very frustrating sigh. "Okay, you already manage to be one of the most annoying person today, but I'm going to be blunt." She took a deep breath. "My Dad and I are pretty sure we're not teaching some violent jackass in a rainbow mohawk! Get a damn haircut, you're embarrassing to look at!"

There was a full minute of shocked hesitations upon those words leaving her mouth. Even Kyoko herself is in a state of awe and horror.

"...Pretty please?" She sheepishly said.


Few minutes later…

"Get those two!"

Kyoko and Nagase could do nothing but flee in terror as the Mohawk Jim Gang gave chase. Never knew a man with a mohawk would be so grudging!

"Geez, couldn't you say that when he doesn't have an army?!" Nagase shouted.

"I didn't think he'd be growing that big of a grudge!" Kyoko snapped back as the two took a sharp turn into an alley. "Besides, how in the world did he get like forty guys?!"

"I'd rather run away than find out!" Nagase responds as they bemoan their very lousy start of a morning! "Do we even know where we're going?!"

"Of course!" Kyoko cried out only to bite her lip. "...Sorta?!" She shook her head. "Just trust me-gahh!"

A pair of hands suddenly took hold of the two, as they are dragged to a small open corner. Both then react quickly, as Kyoko slams her elbow right at her assailant's side while Nagase smashes hers at the wall.

Only then did they notice that they notice Maxtaro and Baku, the former holding his side while the latter rubs his sore head.

"Agghhh…" Maxtaro groans in pain. "Jeez Kyoko, didn't even bother to check?"

Baku simply gave a frown. "Ow."

"Oh my god, I'm so sorry!" Nagase exclaims quietly.

"Maxtaro, what did you do with that guy?!" Kyoko ask, with an accusing look. "He was already looking like he was going tear your head off! Now he's after me and Nagase!"

"Excuse me?!" Maxtaro said incredulously. "How was I supposed to know mohawk idiot there has a short fuse?! Besides, I bet you said something to tick him off too!"

"...Okay, you got me there." Kyoko finally admit, biting her lip. "Seriously, he's that thinned skin…We seriously aren't going to wait this out right?" The four then stood in silence as it slowly dawns upon them that no, Mohawk Jim isn't going to stop hunting them down.

"...Never thought this would happen." Baku mutters. Maxtaro only gives a glare.

"You didn't need to throw a trash can at him, ya know!"


Some time has passed, as our main four could only be at their dark corner, weary as they heard the distant of shouting thugs.

"Ughhhh, this is insane…" Maxtaro said as he decided to lay on the concrete floor in exhaustion.

"I know Maxtaro…" Kyoko mutters as she lean her back against the wall. "Can't take much more…"

"Ugggghhhh." Nagase moans as she kneels on the ground, head looking up at the skies. "How long has it been since being trapped here?"

Baku simply looks at his watch in annoyance. "It's been three minutes." All four could only fume in sheer utter silence upon knowing this fact. Maxtaro then sits up.

"Alright, enough of this! We gotta get out of here!" He shouted. "I don't know bout you guys, but I'm not going to be late because of this idiot!"

"You're right, Maxtaro!" Kyoko replies with similar fervor. "I mean, we've gone through worse as a team!"

"Huh, I never realize how many times we've gotten ourselves in trouble." Baku said with a pondering expression.

"Yeah!" Nagase said with a nod before looking at Maxtaro and Kyoko. "So, fearless leaders, what shall we do?!"

Instantly, both Maxtaro and Kyoko gave shrugs. "No clue." They both said bluntly, their fiery edge suddenly shimmer down to near coldness. Kyoko then snaps her fingers.

"Wait Maxtaro, we can call your brother!" She said quickly. "I mean, he was a delinquent warlord before he graduated!"

"Yeah, right!" Maxtaro pulls out his phone only to pause. "...I rather not call him." He then gives a nervous chuckle. "If I told him, I'm gonna say this section of town is going to be a wreck by the time he's done."

The four couldn't help but gave a audible gulp, already visualizing the aftermath of destruction only Kenshin Onimada can create. It is something words alone can't describe."

"Please, don't call him." Nagase pleads. "I get night terrors just thinking about what he did last year!" She then notices Maxtaro's phone. "Wait, you finally got a smartphone?"

"It's his mom's." Baku said bluntly.

Nagase frowns. "Really?"

"Wait a minute." Maxtaro then positions his phone for a picture. "May as well do it here. Everyone pose." The four then smile and make peace signs, until Kyoko shook it off in shock.

"Wait, why are we taking selfies?! We need to get out of here!" She cried out. "I mean, we're not seriously thinking about just fleeing, right?!" The others then look at her with a blank stare. "...Right?"


"I can't believe we're resorting to this."

Kyoko continues her grumbling as our main four sneaked their way back to the streets, using a rather large cardboard box as a cover. "This is ridiculous, Maxtaro. Why the cardboard box?"

"Don't rag on the box." Maxtaro sharply replies. "I've seen this work in a video game...And several military operations."

"He ain't kidding." Baku added. "There's a documentary about it on TV."

"...The more I learn." Kyoko mutters to herself. "Can't even ask for a normal morning-Nagase, can you please stop fiddling around with your phone and move?! I know you're taking selfies behind me!"

"Sorry, but since Baku's phone is broken, I'm so taking this advantage!" Nagase said with a grin. "No offense, Baku."

"Looks like I'll be paying for lunch next time." Baku said quietly. "...Screw it, can we just beat up this asshole-"

"No!" Everyone said sharply.

"Dude, it's a cracked screen." Maxtaro said with annoyance in his tone. "Let it go!"

"It's my phone, Maxtaro!" Baku sharply replies. "Because of that, I'm like five images behind Nagase!"

"Six actually!" Nagase added, much to Kyoko's grunt of displeasure.

"Baku, keep your cool cause this cardboard box is keeping us from getting wrecked out there unless you won't-"

"Hey Boss, did that moving box just talked?"

The gang stood still, blood freezing over. An awkward sight sight arose as various class skipping punks now swarm around the gang in hiding, civilians looking in confusion. How in the world did these punks didn't notice the box till now is a mystery!

"Wait, maybe they'll think it's nothing!" Kyoko whispered.

"Wait, wasn't there a documentary about the qualities of boxes in military stuff?" The voice of Mohawk Jim ask in confusion. "...Should we check it out?"

Maxtaro gave a frustrating sigh. "Damn. Looks like we'll do plan B! Nagase, flip something!"

"Got it!" Nagase shouts as she busts out of the box, shocking the group of punks. "Gaaahhhh!" She roars as she heads to the closest car and with a burst of sheer strength, flips it onto its side with a loud crash. The crowd is stunned at the sight. "Alright, what's next-Hey!" She cried out as she chases her friends, having used the distraction to flee. "Wait up!"

The thugs simply gave a glassy stare until Mohawk Jim shakes his head. "What the hell, get em!" It wasn't long for the Mohawk Jim Gang to suddenly give chase as the four made a mad dash through town!

"Oh man, they're gaining on us!" Kyoko shouts with a look of worry on her face.

Nagase gave a groan. "I know...there was that food truck nearby! I should've flipped that!"

"Cut the chatter, there's a bus!" Maxtaro cries out as he points to a moving bus nearby. "Hey, stop the bus!" He could only fume as he is ignored. "Baku, get his attention!" Baku nods as he took a sudden sprint...To bash his fist against the window."

"Hey driver!" Baku shouts. "Stop or I'm gonna break something, pronto!" The bus then takes a screeching halt much to the surprise of Kyoko and Nagase.

"That actually worked?!" They cried out only to get on the bus in a huff. "Driver, step on it!" Kyoko roars.

"Eh?" The driver ask. "B-But don't you know-"

"Please!" Nagase pleads as she notice the large mob heading towards the bus. "Just do it!" The driver gave a frown but proceeds to push the gas. "Oh thank you, thank you, thank you!"

"Haha!" Maxtaro laughs with an air of arrogance as he stares at the window, looking as the gap between the bus and the mob is getting bigger. "Good luck chasing us, you mohawk wearing prick!"

"Yeah!" Kyoko says with a evil grin as she proceeds to rip up what remains of Mohawk Jim's application. "Reap what you sow, chasing us with that bad temper-"

Suddenly, with barely a minute having been passed, the bus takes a stop. "Alright, last stop for the morning commute, everyone!" The bus driver calls out. He then notices the shocked looks of our four heroes. "...I-I'm just d-doing my job…" The four then turn to see Mohawk Jim slowly catching up, then turn back to the confused driver with glares. "S-Sorry?"


Five minutes later...At another part of town.

"...Why did I even bother going to school today?" Ryo Hondo mumbles to himself, his group of friends looking at him with surprise.

"Why it's obvious!" His best friend, Gen Saito said with a optimistic smile. "Cause school is part of that spice we call youth!" With that, it wasn't long for an annoyed Ryo to put Gen in a full nelson hold. "Gah! I'm just saying!"

"Stop smiling bout it then!" Ryo snaps back as he keeps his hold. "This is stupid, I should just skip class. At least I won't look like an idiot there." His childhood friend, Tae Yamanashi, gave him a sad look.

"Don't say that, Ryo." She said, before giving a small smile. "Besides, there's more to school than just classes...Like me."

Zoey, Ryo's sister simply raise an eyebrow. "Uhhh, it's not like you can help him study, since you got similar test scores." With that, it wasn't long for an annoyed Tae to put Zoey in a sleeper hold. "W-Wait, what did I say?!"

"Shut it!" Tae shouts as she gave irritated growls. "Talking bout my grades like that, I oughta!" But what truly fuels Tae's anger is far more than her lousy test scores. It's the fact no one in town will ever realize she's dating Ryo, no matter the obvious clues.

It's kinda sad really.

"Wait, what do you mean anyway?" Ryo ask in confusion as he kept his hold on Gen. "Tae, that's stupid reason to keep going to school-"

"Gah, idiots!" Tae shouts in response to Ryo's lack of foresight. "You Hondos are idiots!"

Gen gives a chuckle. "Idiots gotta stick together-Ow, that hurts."

"Please just shut up." Ryo mutters before hearing a loud crash. "The heck-" He could finish as Maxtaro suddenly zooms right past him. "Onimada-" He is cut off again as Kyoko suddenly zips past him. "Okay, what's-" A crash is heard as Ryo and pals turn to see both Baku and Nagase suddenly throwing various items lying about, from trash can to sign fixtures, onto the open street before rushing past the other group.

"Wait!" Nagase shouts as she heads back...To grab the nearest largest sign only to hurl it right into the junk barricade before running back to Baku. "Let's go!" The two then leave in a full rush, as Ryo and gang grew baffled at those events.

"...That can't be good." Tae mutters as she release her hold on Zoey. "What's with them?"

"Tch, typical for Onimada." Ryo said bluntly as he lets go of Gen. "Probably did something stupid again-" Then the pile of junk suddenly explodes as the Mohawk Jim Gang bursts through the masses.

"Gaaaahhh!" Ryo and crew scream in horror and confusion as they fell victim to the stampede. As the dust clears, the four are seen lying on the ground twitching.

"...Again, why bother going to school again?!" Ryo roars out as he lies face down on the street floor.


"Oh god yes, I can see the gate!" Maxtaro shouts in joy. He is right to be as he saw the school gate not too far off. With that said, the gang finally took a massive breather. After all, they did nothing but run all morning! "I didn't think we make it!"

"Damn straight!" Baku said between gasping for air. "I think we threw enough junk to block them off-Nagase, we don't need to keep doing that! Leave the car alone!"

Nagase gave a pout. "W-We don't know that!"

Kyoko gave an exasperated sigh. "Nagase, just calm down and-Ahhh!" She cried out in shock as she is suddenly grabbed from behind from Mohawk Jim. "Son of a-"

"Aha!" He cried out in glee. "Thought you four can escape from me?!"

"Oh good grief!" Maxtaro shouts in annoyance. "How the hell did you catch up to us, you freaking dropout cockroach?!"

"Simple, I called a cab!" Mohawk Jim replies with a haughty laugh. "Bet you didn't see that coming!" The four are shockingly caught off guard of something so ridiculously simple.

"Seeing how that's mundane...Yeah, we didn't see that coming." Baku admits with a blunt tone. "How did we not see that at all?"

"Well, it's too late! I got your girl, Onimada, and unless you give yourself-"

Mohawk Jim was quickly silenced as Kyoko slams the back of her head at his bandaged face, followed by a elbow to the chest. As he lets go, she turns and knocks him flat on his ass with a spinning back kick. She ain't assistant instructor and heiress of the dojo for nothing!

"Whoa, remind me not to make you mad." Nagase said with a surprised expression.

"Geez, he's a total wimp!" Kyoko cried out while feeling the need to shudder. "Still gives me the creeps touching me like that!"

"Owww!" Mohawk Jim shouts in pain as he slowly got up. "You bitch-" Again he is knocked down his ass as Maxtaro simply came up and landed a punch right at his chin.

"Please, just shut up." Maxtaro mutters. "Such a cockroach. You okay, Kyoko?"

"Y-Yeah…" She answers with a frown. "He's still twitching…"

Baku then smashes a trash can right at Mohawk Jim's twitching form. "Not anymore he's not."

"Baku!" Everyone cried out.

"What?!" Baku protests. "He totally deserve that-" A crash is heard as the Mohawk Jim Gang destroys the various junk barricades.

"There they are! Get em!" They roar out as they rushes towards our heroes!

"...I should've flipped more cars." Nagase bemoans as Baku grabs her by the arm as the gang ran to the school gates. Upon closer inspection, they spotted the teacher in charge, their own homeroom teacher, standing close by smoking a cigarette.

"Tao!" Maxtaro shouts out. "For the love of god, help us!"

Jin Tao only gave a sigh while other students nearby grew more baffled at the sight. "Son of a bitch, this again?" He then presses a switch as the gate begins to close. "You kids get your butts over here pronto before this closes!"

"...Leave it to Tao-sensei." Kyoko said dryly before her school bag suddenly bursts open as her various application forms flew right out to her horror. "Oh no! My applications!" She could only watch and cringe as the sea of papers are soon trampled by the bloodthirsty gang...So bloodthirsty in fact they just unwittingly trampled their boss!

"Oh god!" Mohawk Jim cries out being drowned out by the footsteps of the mob.

"Ugh! I'll never get those back again…" Kyoko bemoans.

"Forget about it, Kyoko!" Maxtaro shouts as they continue their rush. "It's not worth it!" Then he heard a clatter as his phone, still his mother's, suddenly fell out of his pocket to his absolute shock. "Oh hell! My mom's phone!"

"Maxtaro, no!" The gang cried out in horror as the moment they slip past the gates, they finally notice Maxtaro turning right back to get his sorta phone back. "You idiot!" It wasn't long for Maxtaro realize upon picking up his phone that yes, he's in between a rock and a hard place.

...For someone who isn't too bad of a student, he is dumb at times.

"I regret everything!" Maxtaro cries out as he narrowly avoids attack after attack, phone in hand.

"Die Onimada!" A random thug in the background screams out.

"Hell no!" He reply back as he continues to dodge everything thrown at him. "I need some freaking miracle here-"

As if he cast a spell, the rear of the mob suddenly explodes as bodies flew in the air.

"Yeah, that's right!" Ryo roars out as he and his merry group of angry friends have long succumb to pure vengeful spite, attacking every member of the Mohawk Jim Gang like a shark on a pack of fish. "See how you like being trampled on!"

Maxtaro simply gave no words. "Uhhh, I guess I should thank him later…" He mutters in disbelief as it appears the sudden distraction has gotten the thugs off his back!

"Maxtaro, come on!" Kyoko shouts out, as she climbs to the school gate, extending a hand out. "Grab my hand!"

Maxtaro then runs and makes a leap. Upon grabbing Kyoko's hand, a large explosion rocks the background to the shock of many.

"What was that?!" Nagase shouts with bafflement.

"Hondo family fireworks." Baku mutters. "Enough to make an action flick."

"Oh." Nagase said bluntly. "How could I forget-"

"Can you please help us?!" Maxtaro and Kyoko scream out in annoyance. After pulling Maxtaro in, the four collapse and stare at the smoke in front of them.

"You know...I think we're in the clear." Maxtaro said with awe at the sight. Then as if life wants to defy such a simple sentence, the battered mob of the Mohawk Jim Gang crashes against the gate.

"Aaahhhh!" The four cry out as they back pedal away from the gate.

"Oh come on already!" Kyoko cries out in exasperation. "What does it take to get rid of them?!" Then Tao walked up to the closed gate.

"Alright, you all aren't supposed to be here!" Tao said sternly. "Go home and wait till your suspensions are done! And leave those kids alone, this is pathetic!"

"Oh yeah, so what?!" One of the thugs cries out. "What can you do anyway?!"

Tao gave a sigh. "Well...I can call the cops, for starters." As if magic has been cast, the gang suddenly disperse, everyone having dropped their grudges!

"Sorry bout that Onimada! We're just playing! Please don't tell your bro about this!" Various voices of all kind were nothing but this kind of spiel. It appears even in Kaimon, nobody wants to mess with the cops!

"That was anticlimactic." Maxtaro admits with the others slowly nodding.

"So?" Tao said before turning away. "Get your asses in class already. We're gonna start in ten minutes." With that said, life resumes as always. That's Kaimon alright!

"Thank god." Kyoko said with relief. "But this is going to be hard to tell my dad the news…"

"I wonder if Mohawk Jim is going to drop this." Nagase said with a pondering expression.

"Who cares?" Baku said bluntly. "I'm just glad we kicked his sorry ass."

"Right…" Maxtaro said feeling annoyed. "He better not show up."


Outside the school grounds…

"Wait...Don't leave me…" Mohawk Jim groans, still prone, as his gang walked away, some limping or carrying the injured. One of them then approaches him, giving a nervous chuckle.

"Yeah boss...We all kinda had this thought and we all decided to go our separate ways. Having a gang named after a hairstyle is...Kinda lame."

Mohawk Jim gave a shocked expression. "W-Wait, we can talk this out-"

"Oh sorry man!" The ex-member quickly said, looking at his exposed wrist. "I'm late...For stuff! Talk to ya later!" He then leaves.

"...Son of a bitch." Mohawk Jim mutters until he notice the feet of Ryo and his pals right in front of him. He looks up, seeing a very pissed off Ryo. "Uh, no hard feelings, Hondo?"

"Tae," Ryo said bluntly. "Got a knife?" She then pulls one out.

"Always." She reply to the point.

"Well then, looks like you need a haircut." Ryo then said with an evil smile as he takes the knife in hand.

"Noooooo!" Mohawk Jim cries out that can be heard many blocks away...Yikes.


In Kaimon High School, class numbered 12-K…

"Yes!" Maxtaro said as he slumps onto his seat. "Finally, we can get this morning behind us!"

"You said it, Maxtaro." Kyoko said as she laid her head down the desk. "Anything to forget those last hours."

"Aw man, the camera is busted!" Baku mutters as he fiddles with his broken phone. "Guess I gotta pay ya lunch."

"Yeah!" Nagase said with a burst of joy. "Best news, ever!"

"Hang on." Maxtaro said as he grabs his phone. "Get together guys, we're going to do this right." The four then gather and gave smiles as he takes another group selfie. Having genuine selfies not fueled by peril is actually refreshing! "Now, just need to send that to my actual phone and-"

"Hey!" Tao shouts as he walks to Maxtaro and yanks the phone from his hand. "No phones when class is starting!" He then puts it into his pocket. "I'm holding onto this till the end of the day!" Maxtaro and gang look on with bafflement as Tao walks back to the front.

"...God damn, this morning blows." Maxtaro mutters.

"Yeah…" The gang mutters in sadness.

And we end another morning in the town of Kaimon, hate to see how the full day goes!

To be continued!

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Re: The Kaimon Tales!
« Reply #1 on: May 06, 2018, 04:42:54 PM »
Omake Chapter! Enjoy!

Story #1 Omake: End Day!

End Day: Maxtaro.

Late afternoon, Onimada household and family medical clinic.

"I'm home!" Maxtaro shouts out as he enters the house. His mother quickly then approaches him near the front as he takes off his shoes.

"Good, now you know the drill." Miki said, quick to the point. "I finally listed down all the necessary junk in my old phone. So give me my actual phone, Maxtaro. Deals a deal." She then notices Maxtaro looking away nervously. "...What did you do?"

Maxtaro only grimace at her quick intuition. "Busted by mom." He mutters quietly before giving a loud sigh. "Okay mom, funny story happened this morning and...Yeah, long story short…" He finally pulls out Miki's new phone, marked heavily with scuff marks. A long silence arose as Miki gawks at the sight, glasses nearly slipping out. "Mom, I'm sorry. I really should have-" He is cut off as Miki reaches out and pats him on the head.

"No, I admit I'm kind of mad...But you confessed...That's good enough for me, Maxtaro." Miki said rather softly. "Unlike your brother."

Maxtaro only beams up in confidence. "So am I off the hook then-"

"Heck no!" Miki said sharply, quickly changing her tune. "I said I'm mad! Don't think I'm like your father!" She then swipes the phone from Maxtaro's hand and walks away. "Just be glad I'm grounding you for the next few days, no phone or TV while I'm here!" She then walks off in a huff, leaving Maxtaro in stunned silence.

"...I knew I should add duct tape before showing it to her…" Maxtaro said with a pondering expression.

Cause duct tape solves most of everything!

End Day: Kyoko.

Late afternoon, at the Hino dojo.

"Well, I got to admit I'm impressed." Yuu said with genuine surprise over the few badly makeshift applications Kyoko handed to him. "You actually got some people to take lessons here."

Kyoko only gave a nervous chuckle. "Yeah, it took some begging to get those filled out." What she didn't tell her father is that by some...She meant a lot. "N-Not that I was desperate!"

Yuu gave a relieved sigh. "You did good, Kyoko. After all, none of the people you did pick seem to have a bad record-"

"Wait!" A voice cried out, a voice familiar enough to make Kyoko twitch in sudden irritation. "I've come to make a case!"

"Oh god." Kyoko mutters as she sees Mohawk Jim, now lacking any hair on his head, approach inside. "Wait, what happened to his-" She is cut off as the larger man suddenly bows in such a groveling manner.

"...Kyoko, is he on the forms we didn't take?" Yuu ask in confusion.

"Look, I know I am a man who has made one too many mistakes." The thug said in a rather calming tone. "I lost everything. My gang, my respect, hair. But it taught me a lesson, that being a foolish punk with no respect towards others is a wrong path! So I, Bald Jim, would ask for you to take me-"

"Dad, he tried to take me hostage this morning." Kyoko said rather bluntly.

"Yeah, no." Yuu said with a nonchalant wave for Bald Jim to leave. "Just leave."

"Oh come on!" Bald Jim said in shock.

It took a few days before Bald Jim left the Hino residence alone...Sad.

End Day: Baku

Late afternoon, Mori Household and metalworks.

"Oh, Baku's home already." Kana said surprisingly as she notice his shoes by the doorway. She then frowns. "He's going to take his shirt off again, right?" She sighs as she enters the house. "Dad said the AC is fixed so there's no excuse this time-Wha?!" She gasps as she sees Baku, wearing a shirt at home, watching TV.

"Oh hey Kana, how's school?" Baku ask before flipping the channel.

"I should ask why you're still wearing a shirt!" Kana said shockingly. "What about that thing you're doing with Nagase?" She notice Baku giving a frown.

"Yeah, bout that…" Baku then couldn't help but put a palm over his face in shame. "Thanks to my phone being broken, I lost…"

"...Are you actually crying?!" Kana exclaims.

"She has 30 selfies by now! How can I beat that?!" Baku cried out.

He bought Nagase lunch for a week since.

End Day: Nagase

Late afternoon, Omiko household.

"Nagase, you can't just flip cars like that!" Nagase's mother, Anko, said sternly. "You know your father and I raise you to do better!"

"I know, I'm sorry." Nagase said with a bow of shame. "Won't happen again...I hope."

"You better hope." Anko said, sighing until Renji and Akira enters the room.

"Hey, what's going on?" Renji ask with a smile.

"Bet Nagase did something dumb again." Akira bluntly said while returning a glare that Nagase gave him for that remark.

"Renji, our daughter flipped a few cars over!" Anko said in exasperation. "Say something to her."

Renji instead...Then grows terribly excited. "Oh my god! You flipped a car Nagase?!" He quickly takes a seat at the table. "How large was it? I knew you can be as strong as your old man!"

"Uhhh, mom, am I supposed to be scolded here?" Nagase ask her mother in confusion as her father continues to sprout more praise, much to Anko's only shrugging in bafflement. She then notices Akira giving a thumbs up. "Whoa, even Akira's impressed?! Whhhaaaa?!"

It took a good hour before Nagase gets a proper punishment.

End Omake Chapter! See ya next story!

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Re: The Kaimon Tales!
« Reply #2 on: June 02, 2018, 04:27:04 PM »
Hmm, I admit I do need to do a few addons.

But feedback is much appreciated!

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Re: The Kaimon Tales!
« Reply #3 on: June 16, 2018, 10:23:30 PM »
I think the big thing with this particular piece is that it hovers in a weird limbo between being a script and being straight prose. That could be completely intentional, or could just be a personal preference of mine that I like it one way or the other, but everything feels a little bit lilted and awkward because of it, I think. There's a notable lack of transitions between scenes, and especially setups for new scenes, and it's a little dialogue-heavy, like a script would be, but the dialogue is often described well, such as it being blunt or dull etc, which almost makes it sound like prose.  Again, it could be some weird personal preference. I think that this could more easily and naturally fit into the writing style of prose or script with tweaking.

Don't take any of my feedback to heart, really. I'm not much of a writer myself, so I probably have no idea what the hell I'm talking about haha.
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« Reply #4 on: June 21, 2018, 07:44:22 AM »
I think the big thing with this particular piece is that it hovers in a weird limbo between being a script and being straight prose. That could be completely intentional, or could just be a personal preference of mine that I like it one way or the other, but everything feels a little bit lilted and awkward because of it, I think. There's a notable lack of transitions between scenes, and especially setups for new scenes, and it's a little dialogue-heavy, like a script would be, but the dialogue is often described well, such as it being blunt or dull etc, which almost makes it sound like prose.  Again, it could be some weird personal preference. I think that this could more easily and naturally fit into the writing style of prose or script with tweaking.

Don't take any of my feedback to heart, really. I'm not much of a writer myself, so I probably have no idea what the hell I'm talking about haha.

Thank you, the feedback is much appreciated!

I'm still striving to improve so this will get me thinking. Also, is the story entertaining in any way? I'm trying to improve on my mini plots as well.

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Re: The Kaimon Tales!
« Reply #5 on: June 21, 2018, 12:46:09 PM »
It's very slice of life-ish, which definitely attracts me, but I think the biggest thing you have to keep in mind is that with slice of life, it's literally about a set of characters going through everyday life, so your characters have to be the things that stick out, whether it be through their differing traits, dialogue or actions. I really, really don't want this to come off the wrong way or to be overly harsh or anything like that, but right now, while the actual things that are happening in the story are fine, your characters don't feel defined enough. I don't exactly know how to put it... But it almost feels like the characters are their dialogue rather than anything else. They don't feel like they have much depth or their own differing quirks much, other than their families and their relationships with each other (like the difference between the brother-like relationship and the romantic one), and in a story where the events happening are supposed to be everyday life, or something close to it, the characters are going to be the things that grab the audience, which is why slice of life can be so difficult.

Hopefully that wasn't too mean or anything. It's just my opinion anyway, so take it how you will.
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