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Author Topic: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery  (Read 11953 times)

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #105 on: November 12, 2017, 01:12:32 AM »
Here is my chapter 1 cover page.

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it's not official yet, so any critiques are welcomed.

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #106 on: November 21, 2017, 01:48:54 PM »
i think the top half of the character is fairly ok, but the hips need to be quite a bit wider i think. i like the bark effect on the branches. good shading though on the character. hands are very well done compared to everything else.
obviously it depends on the style of clothing, but i think the horizontal part of the neck line of the top should be more straight, as if it is stretched between the breasts more, otherwise it looks loose. that may have been the intention though. its a very minor thing though :P
maybe the moon would look nice with a bit of texture?
but good use of tones from fully black to fully white, its very balanced.

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #107 on: November 21, 2017, 03:30:03 PM »
@suupertramp thanks for the notes. But first.
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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #108 on: November 21, 2017, 04:17:07 PM »
*Whistles

That turned out pretty good Forlorn. And hahahaha welcome to the pain of critique.

Damn that's a level up on your art. Haven't checked out your stuff in a while.

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #109 on: November 22, 2017, 07:16:52 AM »
Okay. I widened the hips. I wanted to use screentones but the basic clip studio i have doesn't allow screentones and i don't want to copy paste a copy from the interet. I know. I'm lazy.

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #110 on: November 25, 2017, 08:58:01 AM »
@forlorn lol
but it does look improved in the later one. well done on making the changes! i think if i had to change a drawing of mine i would rather start again :P

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #111 on: December 09, 2017, 06:03:10 PM »
Lucine looks cute  ;)

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #112 on: December 09, 2017, 06:15:40 PM »
Lucine chan is hot as hell

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« Reply #113 on: December 09, 2017, 07:49:09 PM »
@Lego and Walter - thanks. She is suppose to be hot  :D. So I got that right. Now the problem at hand, how the hell am I suppose to maintain her character design in the manga. I can never draw a character twice.  :sadbye: let alone in countless different angles.

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #114 on: December 09, 2017, 09:18:02 PM »
Nc works there forlon i see the breast looks oversized hha looks ecchi

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #115 on: December 10, 2017, 03:33:16 PM »
@Lego and Walter - thanks. She is suppose to be hot  :D. So I got that right. Now the problem at hand, how the hell am I suppose to maintain her character design in the manga. I can never draw a character twice.  :sadbye: let alone in countless different angles.

This is a problem I can definitely relate too. The struggle is too real...

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« Reply #116 on: December 11, 2017, 05:39:25 PM »
@Lego and Walter - thanks. She is suppose to be hot  :D . So I got that right. Now the problem at hand, how the hell am I suppose to maintain her character design in the manga. I can never draw a character twice.  :sadbye: let alone in countless different angles.


Training is the best way to maintain her appearance, it will get easier to draw her twice and more if you draw her/other characters in various angles and doing various action until you familiarize to drawing her~

It's really well made btw, I like it!

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #117 on: December 13, 2017, 03:09:20 AM »
I'm creating some Holiday characters for one of my stories.




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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #118 on: December 13, 2017, 02:53:05 PM »
She looks cute!

Any christmas gifts for me?  :D

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Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« Reply #119 on: December 13, 2017, 02:58:56 PM »
It does look nice~! How come you did not tell me that you were done?