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Untitled
« on: April 13, 2009, 12:01:17 AM »
sorry, i don't really want this story up right now.
« Last Edit: May 28, 2009, 08:11:12 PM by h_musick »
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Re: Untitled
« Reply #1 on: April 13, 2009, 12:02:53 AM »
ok well, here is what i have so far. I am reall bad with spelling and grammar. so please tell me how i can improve.
also i have more but i am a slow typist, so it may be a bit before i can add it.
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Re: Untitled
« Reply #2 on: April 13, 2009, 03:49:11 AM »
I like the flow in diolog but there should be a plot right ? did you created it or haven't yet ? Post it too !  ;)


And Good to see you have started doing stories ! Keep it up 1
« Last Edit: April 13, 2009, 03:51:59 AM by Hasith »

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #3 on: April 13, 2009, 09:15:56 AM »
Heeh, If ya only take the dialoges, it's becoming very naughty (In a wierd way)  :hmm: haah, Have u found about more?
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Re: Untitled
« Reply #4 on: April 13, 2009, 11:22:41 AM »
I hope she will post about it when she is gonna be online here. lol

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #5 on: April 13, 2009, 01:05:51 PM »
yes, there is a plot. This just a bit of a "chapter". but yeah, i should go ahead and get on with it already!  :laughing11:
thanks ill post more soon.
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Re: Untitled
« Reply #6 on: April 13, 2009, 03:39:28 PM »
Yeeeeah :laughing11:
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Re: Untitled
« Reply #7 on: April 13, 2009, 05:20:14 PM »
not bad. i want to see a plot! XD but no real problems biggest thing to do is make sure you capitalize all your sentences and such. one thing in particular it should be "slung" instead of "song"

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #8 on: April 13, 2009, 05:41:23 PM »
ops... i had to do spell check and i must have missed that one. ill fix it. thanks!! and i will go back and capitalize right now.
thanks so much!
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Re: Untitled
« Reply #9 on: April 13, 2009, 08:55:57 PM »
You haven't decided a Name yet for your story ?


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« Reply #10 on: April 13, 2009, 09:05:54 PM »
no not yet. :Embarrassed: i always think of a really awesome name and then find out someone else already thought of it. :'(
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Re: Untitled
« Reply #11 on: April 13, 2009, 09:19:56 PM »
no not yet. :Embarrassed: i always think of a really awesome name and then find out someone else already thought of it. :'(

that's a pity  :laughing11:

Maybe when you post the plot others can suggest keywords or keyword phrases for a topic so you can decide.

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #12 on: April 14, 2009, 12:02:03 AM »
Plot:

OK!
The story follows a group of people trying to survive in a police state. Eventually they all join an underground ...um...i forgot the word for it. but for now ill go with "rebels"(oh, i sound so dumb!)
anyway! Things start getting sticky when one of the members discovers that the leader of this "rebellion" is actually one of the bad guys.

ok that's as far as i got so far. i would be better off if i wrote a plot before i started a story. :laughing11: But i usually get this far and make the rest up as my mind drifts.

let me know what you guys think i would like to know how i can improve! :JC_cheesy: :JC_cheesy: :JC_cheesy:
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Re: Untitled
« Reply #13 on: April 14, 2009, 05:00:52 PM »
well if the stories strictly about the rebels you could could name the story the same way you name the rebels (if you give them an actual title not just rebels) or you could name the story the same as the police state that they're in

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #14 on: April 14, 2009, 05:06:54 PM »
ok, ill have to do a bit of research... *sigh* i have like 7 of these Alix Jones (spelling) tapes that someone gave me...so that should help :laughing11: :laughing11: :laughing11:

Thanks for the ideas!
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