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[DBNext]

That's a definite improvement.
Some critiques:
The first 3 panels, while the feet and hand are dynamic and look good, it doesn't really flow right when reading.
When you imagine the scenario play out, from right to left for this example, first you'll see the feet, then the woman's face, then her hand.
Wouldn't it make for better flow and drama for us to see the limbs pinned down, and then we get to see her face?
Also, in terms of panel importance, I believe her face is the most important out of the 3 panels because it shows true emotion. So in my opinion, it would look better if her face got a bigger panel than the limbs.
Something I also noticed that can easily be fixed is the feet; in the small panel you show them closed together, but in the big panel they are far apart.

I like the big panel, the proportions of the body seem well drawn and the camera angle is dramatic. It's actually cases like this where I prefer symmetry lol.
A little tip for that panel, the one that shows the crucifying, I know that it's not finished yet but it would make it extra special if you added clouds in the background. Not just normal clouds, but ones that go in a spiral, with the center being the abdomen part of the woman.

I made a small sketch on my Note 1 to help get my point across, hopefully it helps you out:

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Always loved those critiques you do DB. I'd love to have one of those at a point if it's not too big of a problem

Lol I'd be happy to, it helps me out when I draw these sketches

[Manimal]

What DBNext said! Again it's an improvement for sure and already looks more dramatic, but like above I think the arrangement of the three panels doesn't flow very well. I personally would do just one big shot of her on the cross for the first shot but this works as well to show some upcloses first and than the big picture. Either one is good really, it's still a striking opening image. I can't beat DBNext with his picture critiques so I'll just agree with what's been said.

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Damn, your redraws make me feel so stupid. That's so much better than mine :|


Thank you both for the critiques, it helps.

[Suuper-san]

i dont know if that was just your sketch or you plan to do it for the real one , but the borders for your panel are THICK :P

getting the right flow can be hard, i often analyse mangas that i like reading, while reading them, and think which panels had to most focus and why.

but good stuff so far, i look forward to seeing more

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[Coryn]

*shivers*

Yes

[Killer B !!SAMA!!]

  whatda

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Great, thanks guys! i'll be using this shot tomorrow then. I've realised that this manga is actually going to be a little gruesome. Reading over some of the ideas i'd jotted down, i'm not entirely sure how i'd planned on making it a SOL manga. ayy lmao! :)

[Suuper-san]

yes it looks like its melting. super creepy.........well done i guess?
sometimes its good idea to draw an effect out in full detail to practice it first, it can be hard to tell with a thumbnail sketch.

whats a SOL manga?
I feel like everyone knows except me

[a]

yes it looks like its melting. super creepy.........well done i guess?
sometimes its good idea to draw an effect out in full detail to practice it first, it can be hard to tell with a thumbnail sketch.

whats a SOL manga?
I feel like everyone knows except me

Slice of Life :)

[legomaestro]

Ugh. Yes. Yes it does.

I see you're really working on this one. Keep at it Jamie

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[Killer B !!SAMA!!]

men cool where did you read perspective? her but i just notice is a little bit off

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[Killer B !!SAMA!!]

hha