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Offline Laze Gourmets

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Eternal Sin project
« on: December 20, 2014, 11:19:38 AM »
Please skip this preface (to avoid any confusion or time wasting) and go to my update with draft of 2 chapters below.
-Preface "Eternal Sin".
The story contains supernatural and superpower content. Inhuman strength, mystical powers, colossal weapons, and fights are general parts of the plot. It is mainly about clash of two organizations as the conflict. But as the story progresses the plot tend to concern on main character live his life. I’m not a pro manga storywriter so I decide to write everything for now.
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The story begins on June 28th 2061, related to Halley, the comet phenomenon. For common people it is only an ordinary phenomenon in 76 years cycle. But for some particular people, they see it as an ark of angel soldiers’ sails from 5th sky. I'm going to recreate date and time related to another phenomenon due to my worry in put some technologies which I can imagine what will have been invented and suit the date (e.g. sophisticated cellphone). I believe the technology used will influence the story detail intact.
At the time there was a group, called House of Light, who is working on recruitment mission. They are people who can be possessed by angelic power. Not everyone has an ability to see supernatural thing. Based on pseudoscientific New Age concept you can called those with the particular ability with Indigo Children http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Indigo_children. And maybe you also familiar with myth of Nephilim http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nephilim. These are what House of Light made of. But I will describe Nephilim in my own fantasy.
Related to the mission they are working on, they will find a recruit who has different power than many other members they have. This is a part when the main character introduced. The main character can be possessed with no ordinary angelic power. He has a power of an Angel of Death or Grim Reaper or Shinigami.
From this point, the story will follow the main character progress, such take a mission and living his life. His life will be colored by doubts, life mystery, and fears of death also desperation of love. Those initial conflict will improve until House of Light face the true leaders of their opposite group named Order of Fire.
Order of Fire on the other hand also contains of Indigo Children, only they believe that world apocalypse is the only way to end everything they don't agree. They can be possessed by demonic power. Their member are not only humans but also some evil supernatural creature such as ghost and demon. But I don't simply put good and evil in common story such fairy tales. There will be dynamic changes about it, that's why I put doubts element in main character story. Epic fights will frequently be provided. Appearance of The Devil and Archangels or Seraphic Angels will be put in the story.
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Some actual places will be added to several part of story. (e.g. Bermuda Triangle Battle, and on the prologue I'll need some actual high buildings such Eiffel tower etc.)Time will be like just what I have said above, nearly present.
Characters:
I have my characters design. So here they are I would expect, also I put some details too;
Villains, only true leaders of Order of Fire who will take their biggest part on late story.
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Like what I have said, they can master demonic power, which the power itself in the story will be known as Demonic Force. They will fight with casual costume only later they will wear hellish gears. I also have made several names for their special skill. e.g. illustration in words; The Dark Prophet by the time he gains hellish gears and fiery sword Ragnarok, He will have spell "Hell Radiance" which will burn violently everything surround him by cast the spell and draw up his sword. Note: I won't make too many spells for battle, sometimes even 1 spell is too many.
Back to detail of the Order, indeed they are the main villains, but I also provide less main villain such derivative organization from the order named Scarlet Carnival. Yet I cannot post their design (unfinished).To support detail of evil spirit existence, I provide ranks to evil supernatural creatures. From lowest to highest Ghost (for evil, called Wandering spirit if neutral), Gene or Neutral Elf, Demon, Ifrit (also known as Demon king or Elite Evil Fighter) and The Devil.
Head to House of Light. There are seven houses of light. Here are my designs character
1st Hosts
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2nd Hosts
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3rd Hosts
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4th Hosts
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5th Hosts
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6th Hosts
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7th Hosts
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Host means officer that frequently stay on each 7 headquarters. Their ranks are Master Host/Leader (middle figure), Director/Vice Leader (right figure), and Marshall (left figure, this rank to below consist not only one person), instructor, members, and new recruits. There is also special team as executioners under the command of Master Host only. This team consist of people known as "they who have demonic sinned and hunt down demonic sinners". I imagine this special team always covered their eyes even in a battle.
The angelic power is gained from a contract called "Eternal Sin". Either Hell or Heaven will not accept them (human contractor) in their very end like any other human. This is what I called forfeit human destiny as the price to the contact.
The power they use named Enerlight, works by the same method as Chakra in Naruto or Nen in HxH. Enerlight multiplied someone power in several different soul mutation, also called supernatural state. 1st, state a person can extend his/her sensitivity to Evil Supernatural creature and little multiplied body power. Extension of sight range also included. 2nd state, a person receive a simple battle gear, commonly a cloak not only as protector but also camouflage. In this state the person also has a materialized weapon such sword, ax, or any magical catalyst. At this state an angel contractor is accustomed with what I call Quantum Lock move. A move with superspeed only for limited time due to noise to air will burn someone skin if they do this move too many times. 3rd state, a person can fly by angel wings. The wings are almost invisible, here is the design of Michell Evangeline at 2nd Supernatural State (she is a caster)
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And of course improved battle gears and weapon (e.g. Frost, 7th leader, at 2nd supernatural state he uses only 1 ultragreatsword then at 3rd supernatural state he will use 2 ultragreatswords, imagine two buster swords of Cloud FFVII plus doppelganger move) The last is forbidden soul mutation, supernatural state level 4. At this rate the power will still be a mystery. (I have the image already but unfinished detail)
House of light is an organization in disguise, some nations know their existence only they have agreement to be unexposed. What I mean nation means several people inside government. This organization simply like a secret service, only they bow to no government. They have missions to accomplish but the main mission is the reason they exist. They have to stop any supernatural anomaly which possibly hasten world apocalypse. They have to keep balance of the world.
Mid story, there will be an organization named Dead Light Rebel. Unlike House of Light who still have mercy to demon contractor (House of Light have their own method in spare human lives and reset memories), Dead Light Rebel has radical method to fight demon contractors. Slay every member of Order of Fire.
Same as demonic supernatural creatures, angels also has rank/hierarchy. Only fantasized ranks based on some etymologies, Lowest to Highest; Contractor/Soldier (Neutral called fairies or nymph), Guardian Angel, Dominion Angel, Archangel or Seraphim. Only contractor or the lowest rank can do a contract with human to deal Eternal Sin. Here an example of high ranks angels’ appearance
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Head to main character, here he is the design of Aiden Flores
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He lives alone and for particular reason he does not remember his parents. Not even their face. Another main character is named Iris Tsukiyomi
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A very dependable figure for Aiden due to some circumstances elaborated within the plot sequence. She wears a bow and her hair pony tailed in 2nd supernatural state. One of the Marshall of 7th.
Now for supporting character, Miyo Gemini
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Iris step sister and also the one who will trigger some conflicts in Aiden-Iris friendship, but she’s not evil anyway. Then Sierra Casablanca
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a member of 7th only she uses her angelic power to delivers her song and refuse to fight like other members. An idol I suppose. I even arrange an album of her named VII CASANOVA (kidding).
Additional information; I put detail up to blood type as a reference of what personality the character has. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Blood_types_in_Japanese_culture
« Last Edit: May 29, 2015, 12:40:10 PM by Laze Gourmets »
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Re: Eternal Sin project
« Reply #1 on: January 08, 2015, 06:56:14 PM »
Thank God finally I can draw some more pictures, only to revise my works above.
Regarding to suggestions from someone who gives feedback on it, I should make changes in drawing balloons. Fortunately fortune spares some limited time, but long enough,  to draw out some pictures to extend the very messy pages above, and please if you read this, feel free to put comments.
Here they are
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Still, I hope someone is interested lending me a hand to finish this story in drawing.  :angel:
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Re: Eternal Sin project
« Reply #2 on: January 09, 2015, 10:39:41 AM »
That is definitely a lot you've presented  :ohmy: It's good that you've given this much thought into your story, but giving all of that to us right now is extremely overwhelming! Reading through what you have here could take well over an hour  :hmm:
I suggest just showing us what you are planning for your first chapter, that should be more readable and thus attract more help/feedback for your story  :thumbsup:

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« Reply #3 on: January 12, 2015, 08:37:22 AM »
 :angel: thanks for the suggestion GingerShasa, but firstly I need to ask you about the plan. Does the plan refer to first chapter story or refer to something else such a selling or competition?
if you were referring to the story, I think I'll develop the script into draft of drawings soon (depend on free-time I get) and the rest, after someone collaborate with me finishing it several plans will come up.
now here are some development I have entering first chapter
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According to kinre's suggestion, which is very helpful, I tell you what I need.
Those drafts above are the least expectations I wish for the manga. Here the lists of help I need most:
-digital art.
-background.
-better action illustrator, as what I really consider, drawing panels seems less creative and tend to be repetitive.
-details, I can draw several details only it will waste too much time. That's why I draw only a draft.
-improvisation, I realize that the draft may only be a basic imagination of what the manga will be. I mean the artist can put additional panels to make the manga looks better and interesting.
-style, I think I love the style like "DeathNote". I learn to make some boring panels pattern from my sister deathnote comic (I borrowed it) since I'm lack of panels imagination. But I have made some changes about the panel even it is still lame. Thus, anything is good if the artist can follow my draft.
 :angel: so if you please, have comments here.
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Re: Eternal Sin project
« Reply #4 on: January 12, 2015, 08:40:22 AM »
YOu're revealing a lot of information, most of it makes absolutely no sense to us readers because you're not positioning the information.
Stop playing victim....you know what you did.

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« Reply #5 on: January 12, 2015, 10:08:24 PM »
According to kinre's suggestion, which is very helpful, I tell you what I need.
Those drafts above are the least expectations I wish for the manga. Here the lists of help I need most:
-digital art.
-background.
-better action illustrator, as what I really consider, drawing panels seems less creative and tend to be repetitive.
-details, I can draw several details only it will waste too much time. That's why I draw only a draft.
-improvisation, I realize that the draft may only be a basic imagination of what the manga will be. I mean the artist can put additional panels to make the manga looks better and interesting.
-style, I think I love the style like "DeathNote". I learn to make some boring panels pattern from my sister deathnote comic (I borrowed it) since I'm lack of panels imagination. But I have made some changes about the panel even it is still lame. Thus, anything is good if the artist can follow my draft.

for now what i see, your main job should be making the panel and story, and it will be easy if other don't need to change the panel. ( if there is 2 or more artist. )

and for now you need some 1 to do a char design and people can copy it in your manga.

and now i let you know i will help you in your manga, but  i will just take simple order , etc doing some drawing, or design a char.

so if you want my help it is best to find me on skype as kinre/kinrean.
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« Reply #6 on: May 29, 2015, 12:40:06 PM »
This is the development of the manga, well I'm sorry for too long delay in updating the story. Pictures illustrate my story better than my description so I made manga drafts to tell my idea.
Main character design
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Chapter 1
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Chapter 2
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additional spoiler, sketch into digital art from artist I'm trying to collaborate with
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Please give me comment, suggestion, or anything to improve the manga project before I convert them into digital art.
« Last Edit: May 29, 2015, 12:46:39 PM by Laze Gourmets »
"The Power of Imagination is What Changes Everything"
Watanabe Saki