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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #15 on: February 10, 2015, 09:15:51 AM »
I was going to make him do that inside the ring,  but you ruined thatjoke -. -
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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #16 on: February 10, 2015, 09:54:43 AM »
I will edit my post so it won't be spoiling then XD
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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #17 on: February 10, 2015, 10:51:48 PM »
NINJA!!!!!!... wait...


ninja  ... sneaky...

I will do the Eric Matthews and SNEAK ATTACK EVERYONE!!!!

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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #18 on: February 11, 2015, 12:28:58 PM »
Chapter 3 is out! And so is one of the contenders!
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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #19 on: February 11, 2015, 01:36:51 PM »
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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #20 on: February 11, 2015, 04:26:08 PM »
Comments on Chapter 3:

1) Vio, come at me bro!!  8)
2) Does Lego's afro give him superhuman strength or something?  :hmm:
3) I do not want to cross paths with Miss Churro  :sadbye: She's...KAWAII~~
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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #21 on: February 11, 2015, 04:43:02 PM »
Fear the kawaii, ladies and gentlemen~



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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #22 on: February 11, 2015, 04:51:36 PM »
Read chapter 3 moments after watching this so the second section made me laugh :P (Check your spelling!)

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« Reply #23 on: February 11, 2015, 11:59:58 PM »
What has filled you with such poison Churro? What happened to the sweet young girl I used to know?

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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #24 on: February 12, 2015, 12:18:16 AM »
Usopp- Lego has a much more dark secret than you think...

English is confusing man... recognize and recognise,  adrenalin and andrenaline,  orange oranges,  arrived should be arrove...

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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #25 on: February 12, 2015, 08:32:20 AM »
Desert and Dessert  :tongue:

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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #26 on: February 13, 2015, 02:27:31 PM »
Dat first chapter had me like...


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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #27 on: February 14, 2015, 10:15:00 AM »
Chapter 4 is out!
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Re: The Raider of Raiders!
« Reply #28 on: February 14, 2015, 11:23:30 AM »
that's some katanagatari *censored* right there man.

some grammatical issues you might want to proofread for. they're getting more common place. so don't let your drive to get these produce let you slack on the other stuff. also when you first introduce lego going into the house you use Vio's name, so that was a little confusing.

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« Reply #29 on: February 14, 2015, 11:29:57 AM »
It's a little hard for me to express myself in English,  but I try as hard as I can.  I'll tryto make some sentences more clearer :/
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