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The Raider of Raiders!
« on: February 08, 2015, 02:39:05 PM »
Warning,  not to be taken seriously!
Chapter 1:
Spoiler
"Where is he?" Sasha wondered.  He was sitting in the VIP seats,  closest  to an empty stage.
"Shut up, Sasha" His older brother Gnash replied the usual way.  These two were the only ones sitting in the VIP seats.
"Can I go and play with my friends" Ginger asked. 
"I didn't pay you to play.  I didn't even pay you to have friends" Gnash replied with his usual tone.
"But you don't pay me at all!"
"Shut up,  Sasha."

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On the other side of the huge-ass room with a stage,  in the huge amount of people talking and even partying,  Lorenx was sitting in a chair on the corner,  watching people chatting.  If anyone would have looked at her eyes,  they would have died because of the anger she was producing into the atmosphere.
"He's late again." She sighted "Like every single goddamn time."
Lorenx looked at her watch, as if time would go slower the more she stared at it.
Suddenly,  a little girl walked up to her.
"Hey Lorenx! Watcha doin'? " The girl asked,  showing no fear of the woman in front of her.
The moment Lorenx looked at the little girl,  they both smiled and Lorenx's anger disappeared.
"Waiting for the start of the show. What about you? "
"I'm talking to you silly! " Churro giggled childishly.
"Oh of course,  silly me. " Lorenx rolled her eyes.
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These two females were being overwatched by three guys at a table eating pizza.
"That little girl is so cute... " Matsui smiled.
"Yeah, There is a rumor going on that she is a a Queen of Kawaii... " Usopp replied.
"Queen of Kawaii? She?  How? Does she burp ponies and fart rainbows? " liuxess raised his eyebrow.
"Of course not,  Don't be stupid. " Matsui shook his head gently.
"Yeah" Usopp agreed "Of course she doesn't burp ponies. They would not fit even in her mou- "
Usopp was suddenly interupted by Lego,  who sneaked up on the three.
"Woah, don't tell me you were just gonna make THAT kind of joke. " Lego looked angrily at the trio. "You know you have to keep all this Pg13+,  right? "
"Don't worry. " Matsui answered "We won't screw the rules,  we don't have money. "
"Just making sure... " Lego started backing up from the friends,  watching them while walking backwards.
Accidentally, he bumped into someone and they both fell down. 
"Uh,  I'm sorry. " Lego said,  while standing up. "I wasn't watching where I'm going"
"Welcome to MR" Coryn shouted by jumping on his feet,  as he was the one knocked down on the ground.
Lego Sighted.
"Coryn. Dude. It's the third time you greet me the same way! "
"Not true" Coryn blinked.
"You greet Everyone the same way. "
"No I don't! " Coryn denied,  but the moment his eye got a glimpse at a newbie raider,  he couldn't resist his insticts and shouted: "Welcome to MR! "
The duo stood silently for a few seconds. 
"Proves nothing" Coryn made a chibi angry face.
"I swear Coryn,  sometimes you act like you're secretly a twelve year old girl. " Lego walked away, scratching the back of his head
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"Shut up,  Sasha "
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"So yeah,  I punched him in the face and said: "They don't need a dog to stop you when they have a wolf! " " Vio laughed.  He was sitting on a sofa,  surrounded by sexy chibi girls.
"Omg,  Vio,  you're so cool! " one of the chibi girls said, and all the others started agreeing.
"Of course I am.  After all,  I am Vio,  the great! "
The moment he finished those words, a ninja star flew through the air and hit the wall next to Vio's head.  Vio's face slowly went from happy to scared,  as all the girls around him scattered and ran away.
"What the f*ck,  man? You're trying to kill me?" Vio shouted at two figures approaching him.
"Not now,  it wouldn't really change anything" Whitecrow replied.
"Yeah,  don't be such a cry baby. " Vacant pulled out the ninja star out of the wall.
"Your mom's a crybaby" Vio thought but kept silent.
"There will be a surprise tonight. Gnash finally found a way to use his money.  If you'll need help,  just come to the highest hill you can find" Whitecrow covered his eye like it would hurt.
"What?  " Vio asked,  but with a poof of smoke, Whitecrow and Vacant were gone. 
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Manimal stretched his arm towards the stage. He had a faithful view in his eyes.
"I wish I could once be on that stage... " he sighted.
"Oh really? You want to be like Hasith and gather the raiders to look on you on stage,  listening to your every little announcement? " No1sey took a sip from his drink.
"Don't be stupid! Me,  the king of Rock&Roll,  saying such things on the stage? Well,  only if some cool music would be playing before I enter! " Manimal replied
Exactly the same moment Manimal finished his sentence, John Cena's theme started playing in the room.
"I said COOL music! " Manimal angrily shouted,  while Noi1sey giggled
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With the words " Your time is up,  my time is now! " Hasith entered the stage.  There were paper signs saying : "Who Has It?  Hasith!" being held by raiders,  including Jamie and Neoraise.
The volume of the song went down,  as Hasith started talking via microphone.
"Hello dear fellow raiders. It's nice to see you all here! "
The crowd shouted with cheers.
"I know you're all eager to just hear what I have to say" Hasith made a short pause to clear his throat "But you shouldn't be that happy.  You see,  there is a problem that our family has to face.  The number of writers is far too great,  compared to artists,  and our house of "Artists wanted" has a line of writers waiting to get an artist! Most of them are 90 Years old,  but they started standing there when they were 13! "
The crowd got silent. Hasith waited a few seconds before continuing his speech:
"That's why I'm announcing a 15-people battle royale! You will slaughter each other until only one is alive!  Any raider,  writer or artist , can be chosen to participate. I don't give a damn if you wish not to compete.  Never did. The choosing will be random! ""
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"Wait a sec,  What do artists have to do with all of this? "
"Shut up Sasha "
"Oh, bugger"
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"The computer will choose a random name!  " Hasith shouted,  as a huge computer screen started glowing behind him.  "When you hear your name,  please come and choose a weapon out of these 15 and go through the door! " Hasith pointed to a table with weapons,  and a door behind them.  There were 14 knives and an assault rifle on the table.
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"That's smart" Lorenx thought to herself "The first person to enter gets to choose the best weapon,  but won't know his opponents....  The last person will get the worst weapon,  but will know all his opponents... "
"Why do they need weapons?" Churro asked. "Hugs are way better"
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"You will participate in an area that reminds a jungle,  that we secretly built behind this house,  with the financial support of mr.  Gnash! "
Gnash stood up waiting for applauses. But everyone was silent. Hasit pressed a button on his watch,  and a soundtrack of people clapping played.  Gnash sat back at his seat happily.
"The winner will be called the raider of raiders! While the losers' heads will be hanged on the gates of MR,  so every newbie would see,  this is serious! "
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"This sounds like a bad MR fanfic" liuxess yawned
"Yeah,  like a one YOU would write" Usopp highfived Matsui.
Chapter 2:
Spoiler
"Now the computer will start choosing people,  and they'll enter one by one!" Hasith walked to the side,  so everyone could see the computer screen.
The screen was all blue,  and just in the middle,  random names of raiders were popping up.  They were changing with each other so fast,  you couldn't even understand which names had been shown.
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"Isn't it a little unfair? I mean,  the first person WILL choose the rifle,  and everyone else wil be left with bloody knives" Ginger protested out loud. "
"Shut up,  Sasha" Gnash answered without a single emotion on his face.
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Hasith pressed a button on his watch and the names stopped changing.  The computer screen was now showing only one name,  the name of the first contender. 
It showed "Gnash-sama"
Gnash stood up smiling.  Ginger was shocked. It was the first emotion his brother showed in years!
"How?!  " Sasha shouted
"Shut up,  Saaaaasha! " Gnash laughed.
"Ya know,  that phrase is really naff'... " Ginger said in a scared voice.
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Lorenx was standing on her toes,  just to see the stage through the people's heads.  Everyone was shocked.
"It can't be..." Austa suddenly appeared near Lorenx.
"But it just happened... " Lorenx said in a confused and shocked voice. "Gnash really laughed just now. "
"World went mad,  huh?" concluded Robin Ryu,  who just was following Austa around.
"I don't even want to know who will be chosen next... " Lorenx mumbled in a terrified voice.
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"So... "
"Yeah... "
"What's wrong guys? " liuxess asked finishing up his pizza,  while Hasith asked what weapon will Gnash choose.
"Oh I don't know liux...  Maybe there's this little problem that GNASH just received an ASSAULT RIFLE" Usopp sarcastically answered.
"Yeah,  aren't you even a little worried liuxess? " Matsu wondered.
"Me?" liuxess replied watching as Gnash walks through the door with a rifle. "Not really.  I mean,  just as Usopp said just a bit earlier,  Only I would be stupid enough to write this kind of fanfic...  So... " liuxess stood up from the table. "I am able to do anything in this story!"
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The computer screen started skimming through the names again.
"Now,  let us choose another raider to join Gnash in this epic fight to the death! " Hasith shouted,  as the screen stopped.  The name it was displaying was "Whitecrow. "
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"So this is what Whitecrow meant? hm... Meet him in the hills huh? " Vio thought,  as The ninja Crow jumped on the stage,  grabbed a knife and ran through the door.
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"Prove it" Matsui said "Prove that you're a god in this story! "
"Yeah,  you shouldn't go around saying stuff like that without proof! " Usopp agreed.
"Okay" liuxess smiled "You will be the third contender,  Usopp! "
The moment liuxess finished his sentence,  the computer screen showed "God Usopp" as the third contender.
"Lucky guess! " Usopp shouted angrily.
"Yeah,  sure, Usopp,  whatever you say...  Of course I'm lucky-guessed that it would be you out of more than 200000 raiders!  Of course I did!" liuxess laughed as Usopp headed to the stage.
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Fourth contender: "No1sey "
"Dammit! " No1sey shouted.
"Don't sweat it,  man,  I'll watch your back!" Manimal said.
"You're going in too? " No1sey suddenly became full of hope
"Of course not. But I can bet Hasith installed some cameras inside! "
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Fifth contender: "Vio"
"Here goes nothing! " Vio said out loud,  putting his badass black sunglasses on.
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Sixth contender: "Coryn"
"Too late to say 'screw you guys,  I'm going home!',  right? "
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Seventh contender: "Miss Churro"
"What? Even her? " Lorenx started searching for Churro with her eyes,  but the little girl was already on stage,  choosing a knife.
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Eighth contender: "liuxess"
"Sorry,  but it looks like you won't make it in,  Matsui! "  liuxess smiled at his friend while heading towards the stage. 
"You're talking like I want to! "
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Ninth contender: "Robin Ryuu"
"What?! But I wasn't even introduced in the first chapter! "
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Tenth Contender: "Vacant"
"Common! I just want a normal school life!"
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Eleventh Contender: "Legomaestro"
"And he said 10 grand will be enough to keep me out"
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Twelfth Contender: "Lorenx"
"Ohhhhh,  he's gonna get it! "
" You go girl! " Austa shouted when Lorenx went towards the stage.
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Thirteenth Contender: "Austadophilus"
"Looks like I go too! "
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Fourteenth Contender : "Matsui Kenshin "
"Fu*k you,  liuxess!!!"
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Last Contender: "GingerSasha"
"What? I'm in too? Oh, bugger. " Ginger got surprised.
He walked up on the stage.  There was only one  old and rusty knife left. He put it in his back pocket and entered through the door.
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Of course, We could follow every character's detailed storyline,  but nor I wanna write it,  nor You wanna read it,  so why don't we just do what's important?


The corridor behind the door was really long. Gnash would have ran for several hours,  if there wasn't a motorcycle inside waiting for him.  He paid some money for it to be standing here,  of course.  Exactly the same way he paid Hasith so he could be first and get a rifle.  Exactly the same way,  he paid for a map where the support boxes with weapons,  food and other stuff are marked.
He sat on his bike and drove off.  He knew almost everyone on the list.  It was just a fun killing spree,  where he will be able to get rid of his enemies and,  most importantly,  his little brother.
He spent some time gathering resources.  But he was even able to find a grenade,  not to mention the food.  He threw most of it out in the river,  so others couldn't make much use of it.
Gnash had his strategy planned.  He had calculated that most of his opponents have already entered this ring of doom,  so it won't be too sad if he would camp near the entrance and kill everyone who comes in with his rifle.

He found himself a comfortable position,  where he could clearly see the entering point. Since it was near a forest he was afraid of using his grenade, so a wildfire wouldn't start.

Gnash was camping maybe for half an hour,  silently counting how many billions of dollars is he left with,  and finally he noticed the sounds of steps coming from the corridor.  He readied the gun,  waiting for the target to come out.
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A flat area,  where ground consists mostly of rocks.  A river is flowing by.
Churro is sitting near a freshly made campfire,  cooking a bloody rabbit. Her knife is laying on the ground near her. It has blood on it,  which is probably from the rabbit.
"Welcome to MR,  Churro! " she heard a shout from the other side of the river.
When she lazily turned her head towards the shout,  she saw Coryn, waving with his hand as a greeting.  In his other hand he held his knife,  but immediately put it inside his backpack,  that must have been dropped somewhere.
"Don't  worry, I won't hurt you! " he shouted "But you're not safe in this plain area! I'll be there in a second,  just you sit tight and comfy!"
Coryn was going to simply pass through the water,  but then he noticed that the flow of water is really strong.  If he would have entered the water,  Coryn would be carried away by the river in a matter of seconds.  Luckily,  the were some rocks sticking outside the water,  so he could jump across the river through them.
"One,  two,  three..." Coryn,  counted his jumps,  and as he was going to do the last jump to land on the other riverside,  something heavy hit him in the head and caught him off-balance.  Coryn fell into the water,  but luckily was able to grab on of the rocks with his right hand.
He quickly returned to his senses and looked at Churro,  to see if she was okay.  The first thing he noticed, was that the rabbit was missing.  The second thing...  it was horrible.  Churro was standing with her knife in hand,  laughing...
With the last hope,  Coryn begged: "Churro,  help me! "
Churro cutely smiled,  raising her knife.
"Damn,  she's kawaii! " Coryn thought just a moment before Churro threw her knife.
It hit Coryn's right hand,  cutting off his index and middle fingers. The pain was too great to control and Coryn couldn't hold on anymore, letting the rock go,  being washed away by the river while screaming in fear and pain.

End of Chapter 2!  Who will die first?  Place your bets!

Chapter 3:

Spoiler
"You're sure this will work?" Matsui asked in a disbelieving voice.
"Of course I am... " liuxess assured. "Remember all those pranks that I played on you and they worked?"
"Well yeah...  but... Have you seen Usopp? "
"Yeah...  he went for...  a walk...."
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Coryn woke up.  The river had thrown him out of the water somewhere near the end of the forest,  where somekind of a desert  started.  Coryn couldn't see the end of it,  but he noticed somekind of a box not far away.
"This is crazy" Coryn mumbled to himself when he opened it.
It was a support box,  with lots of food inside,  also some smaller weapons. He took some ninja stars,  cooked meat,  and,  if Coryn understood correctly,  a molotov.  He didn't have a way to light it up,  but if he found out a way,  it would become a dangerous weapon. He also took a huge hammer with him. 
"Okay Churro, we'll play rough! " Coryn thought.
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Gnash put his finger on the trigger.  He was trying to guess who it was based on how heavy the running steps were,  but couldn't work out anything.
The moment Lego entered the arena,  the light from the ceiling, made to look like a natural sky with clouds, blinded him for a few secs.  The moment he recovered,  he heard shooting and felt how small bullets were hittin him from the left side.
"Sorry,  Lego. Had to be done. " Gnash smiled,  lowering his gun.  He walked up to Lego,  who had fallen on the ground.
"Hm? " Gnash got confused "Where's the blood? "
Suddenly, Lego jumped on his feet and grabbed Gnash's neck. He started choking him,  by lifting Gnash into the air with one hand.  Gnash dropped his rifle trying to free himself.
Lego smashed Gnash into the ground, making the guy spit blood from the surprisingly very strong hit.
Gnash,  pumped with adrenalin, kicked Lego in the face with both his feet. Lego backed up a little from the hit,  and Gnash used the chance to open and throw the grenade at his opponent,  while running away.
The grenade hit Lego's chest,  and before he could understand what it was,  exploded.
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Adonis wa-
I mean, Vio was walking down the forest,  with no troubles in mind.  He was heading towards a mountain-hill,  in search for Crow. 
His knife was long and not really sharp,  but it was enough slice through someone's neck,  and that was the whole reason behind weapons in Vio's mind - to be able to kill opponents. 
Vio stopped,  as somekind of noise was getting his attention.  When he listened more carefully,  he understood that it was someone whistling a simple rhythmical melody. The sound was getting closer,  and Vio decided not to hesitate, and after dropping his glasses on the ground,  climbed up the tree, ready to jump on anyone who would stop by the glasses.
The whispering got really close and then stopped.  Vio couldn't see through the leaves who it was.  He saw the person stepping near the bait,  and without waisting any time,  jumped on it with his knife in hands.  But he couldn't get even close.  The person reacted,  and while Vio was still maybe a meter in the air,  he was hit by something to the right side and flew into a tree. He bumped and landed.  His mind was giving orders to move,  get to safety,  but his body got knocked out, he could only feel pain of some bones broken in his chest.  Luckily,  Vio heard his opponent backing up,  maybe even retreating.  His body started moving again,  so Vio stood up and looked at his opponent.  3 meters away,  Usopp was standing with a metal bat in his right hand,  and a small rock in his left.
Vio was waiting for his opponent to do a move.  He was suspecting what Usopp might do,  so he couldn't attack head on. 
Usopp realized that Vio won't attack and smiled.
"Hope you're ready,  my friend! " Usopp shouted and threw the rock in a straight vertical line up.
Once the rock started falling down,  Usopp swung and hit it like baseball ball,  sending it flying in super high speed towards Vio. Vio anticipated that kind of an attack and was able to move just enough to not be touched by the rock,  which hit the tree and got stuck in it.
Both guys understood their situation.  If the rock would have hit Vio in the head,  he would be dead.  Vio,  not waiting for Usopp to pick up another rock from the ground,  charged head on.
Usopp smiled like a maniac and pulled out another rock out of his pocket.  Vio slowed down,  but there was nowhere to hide,  as Usopp repeated his previous attack,  sending the rock towards Vio. 
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Churro was slowly walking by the riverside,  sad and hungry. Sad,  because her knife fell into the river. Hungry,  because she didn't kill anyone yet.
But the kawaii,  as always,  was on her side,  as she noticed someone sitting in front of her.  They had a box.  As Churro looked closer, she recognised Austadophilus.
She made a cute face and ran towards her,  waving her hand and shouting:"Austa-chan! "
Austa looked her way and waved back, smiling.
Suddenly,  Churro tripped and fell down on her face.
"Churro!" Austa shouted,  standing up and running towards the girl. 
Austa helped Churro stand up.  Both females sat up on the ground near the box.
"There's lots of food in here! " Churro shouted,  starting eating everything that looked eatable.
 "Yeah... " Austa replied,  a little bit confused what she should do with the little girl in this deadly game.
"Say,  Churro... "
"Hm? "
"Have you met anyone besides me yet? "
A short silence.  Churro made a sad chibi face and answered:
"No...  Should I had? "
"Maybe it's better this way. " Austa sighted.  "This isn't a game Churro. You can only leave by killing everyone or being killed... "
Churro kept silent.  She was just picking food up from the box.
Austa laid on her back and closed her eyes.
"If anything happens to me,  Churro,  you should run away. Find Lorenx...  She might help you... "
Anf with the end of the last word, a knife was stabbed through Austa's neck.  She opened her eyes trying to scream,  but the knife was inside her throat.  The last thing Austa saw before closing her eyes,  was Churro,  saying:
"Don't worry...  I'll find Lorenx! I'll find her soon~ "
Chapter 4:
Spoiler
Lego took a deep breath.  His head was spinning. All he saw was smoke, he couldn't hear anything like he was deaf. Slowly,  the sounds returned to him and as well as his other senses  and he started coughing.
He stood up from the ground,  where he was laying and looked around. The grenade wasn't strong,  but it did burn out all the grass a meter around Lego.
"What the hell ? " he thought,  but his mind was kinda drowzy so it took some time for him to recall what happened.
"Gnash threw a grenade... But how did I survive that? " He sat on the ground once again,  in disbelief of his survival. 
The moment he looked at his arms,  his eyes widened from shock.  About a centimeter of his skin was burned off,  reavealing an solid steel inner-skin. Not only his hands were like that,  but about 90% of his body's skin was burned off,  revealing Lego's real steel body.
"Don't panic Lego... Everything's gonna be okay... " He thought,  and to calm himself,  he took a deep breath.
He started slowly moving towards the forrest,  not feeling stranger than ever.  Luckily,  his eyes noticed the rifle Gnash dropped.
"Better take this. With the steel body of mine,  and a gun like this, I'll be a real life Terminator! "
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Vio was able to maneuver his knife fast enough to hit the flying rock and change it's trajectory.
"Not bad,  Vio! " Usopp shouted cheerfully "Let's see how much more of these can you deflect! "
Usopp took out another rock,  and repeated the process of throwing it into the air and hitting it with a swing of his metal bat. 
"I have to keep moving! " Vio tried to motivate himself by taking a step forward and hitting the projectile with his knife to block the attack.
"Come at me bro!  " both guys shouted at the same time,  and Vio rushed towards Usopp.
Usopp started hitting his rocks at a 1 rock per 2 seconds speed,  but Vio was able to block them all,  with every block getting closer to Usopp.
Once the distance between these two opponents became nothing more than two meters,  Usopp laughed and threw three little rocks into the air,  hitting them with his swing at once.
"Home-run!" Usopp shouted as he swung.
Vio was only able to knife-block one rock.  The second one missed,  but the third hit him in the knee,  probably breaking it.
He fell on the ground screaming in pain, dropping his knife and grabbing his knee.  Usopp stood just in front of Vio victorious, raising his bat for a final blow.
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After some wondering through the forest,  Lego found a small house,  probably belonging to a somekind of forester.  It had only two rooms,  a bathroom and a living room. Lego entered the bathroom and went straight for the sink. He washed his face and rose his eyes up to the mirror above it.
"Well...  Now I really look like a terminator... " Lego thought staring at his own face.  The right side of it was burned off,  revealing a cyborg like red glowing eye.  Even his afro was metal. 
"Hope I don't rust after washing myself! "
He checked a chest he found in the house. There were some cans of soup,  but nothing more serious.  He found some jeans in the closet and tried them on,  since his clothes torn up in the explosion. The jeans fitted him perfectly,  so he felt like he's ready to go. 
But once Lego stepped near the door,  he heard somekind of swearing outside.  The person, who was cursing the world,  was coming towards the house.
Lego stepped back a little with fear.
"Wait a second" he thought "I'm a terminator with a fu*king assault rifle! "
He kicked the door open,  scaring the person outside so much,  that they fell on the ground.
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Something sharp flew through the air and cut through Usopp's hand with the bat before he could finish Vio off.
"I like your game,  Usopp.  Too bad I don't play games."
It was WhiteCrow. He was wielding an interesting weapon. It was a long metal chain tied around his right arm,  with a kunai at one end.  The kunai was the one who cut through and got stuck Usopp's hand,  making him drop the baseball bat.
"Thank god, Crow! " Vio shouted cheerfully.
Usopp fell on his knee for the pain,  but he was able to pull the kunai out,  saying:
"I'm not finished yet! "
WhiteCrow pulled his chain strongly,  making the kunai slip out of Usopp's hand and return to Crow.
"You want to play, boy? " Crow asked with a calm face.
"I want to fight! " Usopp answered,  taking his bat into his left hand, while blood was dripping from his right.
Crow didn't waste a second for more talking. He jumped towards Usopp,  ready to use his kunai as a short range weapon.
"Not gonna work! " Usopp shouted by swinging his metal bat at Crow before he got too close,  but the ninja stretched his chain with both hands and blocking the hit with it.
"Too bad" Whitecrow said, punching Usopp in the stomach with his left hand and with his right hand hitting the bat out of Usopp's hand..
Usopp fell on his back and rolled to the side before Crow attacked again.
Crow was standing in defensive position while Usopp got up.  Usopp started backing up,  but WhiteCrow didn't move.  In a matter of seconds,  Usopp was gone.
"Thanks man,  I would dead without you!" Vio thanked while trying to stand up.
Crow calmly looked at Vio, who was trying to put all his weight on his good leg. Crow picked up the bat.
"You came here like I asked you to? " Crow asked.
"Yeah " Vio answered
"And exactly what for?"
"Well" Vio got silent for a second "I was searching for help "
"So you're searching for help in a battle where anyone can backstab you?"
"That's why I came to you,  not anybody else"
"Wrong choice! " Crow shouted,  swinging the bat and hitting both Vio's knees at the same time,  breaking them,  and making Vio fall on his face.
Vio screamed with a painful voice:
"NO! NO! NO! "
"It's sad,  but yes! " Crow replied by cutting Vio's throat with his kunai.
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"Welcome to...  MR" Coryn said, while sitting on the ground after his fall from seeing Lego.
"This is the second time I made you fall on the ground" Lego said while Coryn stood up.  "The third time will be your last fall, Coryn! "
Coryn was just staring at the metal Lego,  like he didn't hear what his opponent just said.
"Wow" Coryn mumbled "I have never seen a shiny Legomaestro before. I must catch it!"
"Was that a pokemon reference? " Lego got angry and raised his rifle,  pointing at Coryn.
"What if I say no?"
Lego stood a few seconds in silence, thinking.
"I'll kill you... in a fast way? "
"Oh no,  thanks" Coryn answered,  Raising his right hand that was missing two fingers. "A person has already tried to kill me off. Since I survived that,  I just can't possibly let YOU kill me!
"And how are you going to destroy my steel body?" Lego smiled
"I'll bet on something" Coryn said "I'll bet that you still have your normal organs under that steel...  And if I break through that skin,  your organs will be wide open for me!"
Suddenly Coryn pulled out a huge hammer from his back. Lego understood that it must have been tied to Coryn's back in a way that no one would notice from the front.
"So Lego...  Will you fight me like a man,  or will you cowardly hide behind this rifle? "
"You ask me to fight like a man while you wield a weapon? " Lego closed his eyes and smiled " I accept! "
He threw his rifle to the side and charged towards Coryn. Coryn swung his hammer,  trying to knock Lego's head off,  but Lego was able to fall down in time to dodge the attack. Coryn spinned a little from the hammer's momentum,  and when he tried to do a second swing, it was too late. Lego punched him in the stomach,  making Coryn let go of the hammer and crouch a little. Lego kicked with his left foot the back of Coryn's left knee.  Coryn fell on his knees and arms, moaning in pain.
"I fought like a man,  but you just weren't manly enough! " Lego laughed, grabbing the back of Coryn's neck and starting to crush it.
"You're just an onix compared to my steelix! " Lego raised Coryn's head and then crushed his face down to the ground,  breaking both the skull and the neck.
Lego stood up victorious. He picked up his rifle and walked away like a champ.
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Churro was just jumping from rock to rock in the forest,  shouting "Lorenx! " from time to time. She hid her knife in her boots,  so it couldn't be noticed from further away.
She  found a box in a plain area inside the forest.  It reminded the box Austa had,  so she laughed and ran towards it. Churro suddennly tripped on a somekind of a wire, and about three arows flew above her head.
"Damn it Churro! " Somebody shouted from the tree next to the girl.
It was Vacant. He was crouching on a tree's branch,  looking down on Churro.  He had a backpack with arrows and some knifes,  shurikens inside. His was holding a bow.
Churro looked up,  confused.
"This boobytrap wasn't crafted to kill little girls...  If only you were half a meter taller" Vacant  spoke more to himself than to Churro.
Vacant was even more confused than Churro.  He was facing a dilemma: he could easily kill his opponent,  but his opponent was just a harmless little girl.
"Hey,  mister Vacant,  can I go and eat some food from the box? " Churro cheerfully shouted.
Vacant kept silent. Churro,  since her request wasn't denied,  headed towards the box.
"The minefield...  " Vacant thought,  but still kept silent,  observing the little girl's moves.  He knew every mine he placed,  and where he placed. And to his surprise,  Churro stepped on a few of them,  but somewhy they didn't activate.
"It must be because of her weight. She's too light" the man stood up "Either that,  or her kawaii diactivates mines. "
Churro opened the box,  but there was nothing inside. She made an angry  chibi face and shouted at Vacant.
"Vaaaaaacaaaaaant! There is nothing in here!""
Vacant pulled an arrow and placed it in his bow, getting ready to shoot.
"Mister! Can't you hear me! "
"I might have to kill her in the future anyways,  so it's just better to ignore my feelings and kill her quickly.  It will still be better than a torturing death from a creep like Matsui... "
He shot his arrow,  aiming straight for her head. The arrow crossed the air,  but at the last second,  the arrow suddenly changed it's way and flew to the side of Churro's face.
"What?! " Vacant's eyes widened in surprise "I'm sure I was gonna hit her! "
He readied another arrow and shot. But just as the last time,  the arrow changed it's direction just before hitting Churro.  The girl got really mad and started shouting at Vacant.
"What are you doing?! "
Vacant started shooting arrows one after another until he had no more, but every single one of them didn't reach the target.
"It can't be... " Vacant thought taking a shuriken into his hands.
He threw it.  Shuriken flew spinning,  but just before hitting Churro into her face,  it changed direction and hit the ground like the arrows.
Vacant jumped down on the ground and dropped his backpack.
"It seems she has somekind of a shield against projectiles...  or maybe all weapons?"
Vacant kneeled and pulled out a long green spear from the ground,  which was impossible to notice because of the grass.
Churro laughed looking at the serious Vacant.
"What are we gonna play now, mister? " she asked.
"Kill the girl" Vacant answered dashing forward her,  carefully placing his feet so he wouldn't touch a mine.
"Wut? " Churro closed her eyes in fear of Vacant,  like a puppy who fears it's master.
That sight made Vacant hestitate.  He stopped right in front of Churro,  confused about what he should do.
Churro crouched and started crying,  hugging her legs.
Vacant put a step back,  unwilling to do anything.
Suddenly the little girl's cry turned into a furious battle cry mixed with some laughing,  as Churro jumped on Vacant with her knife in hand. She stabbed him in the stomach and blood spilled on her face.  Vacant tried to scream,  but his lips didn't make a noise. He used his spear a long stick to defend himself,  hitting Churro with the wooden side so hard, that the spear broke and the girl was sent flying backwards.
He threw his spearhead before the girl could stand up.  The spike pierced through her right bicep.  Churro screamed angrily in pain.
Vacant kneeled,  trying to hold in the pain.  But Churro stood up with an angry face,  like she wasn't feeling any pain. Her eyes were red from anger.
The ground started shaking.
"It can't be an earthquake, can it? " Vacant wondered.
But everything exceeded his expectations.  Thousands of rainbow colored ponies started running out of the woods behind Churro. It was an unstoppable force,  ready to squash Vacant. He jumped back,  trying to run away,  but he stepped on a mine and it exploded.
Vacant didn't see anything. His body was unconscious,  while his mind wasn't. It felt like he was flying in space.
"How did she materialize or even summon so many ponies" he thought,  but the answer hit him in a mere couple of moments
"My traps! They didn't activate! It must have been all an illusion of some sort.. "
Slowly he awoke.  He felt huge pain on his chest and couldn't feel his legs.  Once his consciousness fully returned,  Vacant understood that there was a rope tied on his neck.
He looked around.  His legs and half of his stomach were blown up.  A road of blood showed that he was dragged from the explosion to...  where?
Vacant looked around again and got terrified. He was near the tree he was previously hiding before. The rope,  that has been tied on his neck,  was thrown over a big fat branch,  and on the other side of the rope,  it was Churro,  getting ready to tie it around the tree.
"Churro" Vacant mumbled,  trying to reach out for the girl,  but she didn't react,  like she didn't hear him.
Churro said something quietly and giggled.  She started pulling the rope,  raising Vacant's body into the air.
"Can't... breathe... " the man said as the rope tightened around his neck.
Churro fastened the rope to the tree and then screamed. She ran to Vacant and shouted:
"Mister! Mister,  what happened?! "
Vacant stared at her with the eyes of a man who still has will to live,  as he tried to loosen the rope with his own hands.
"Wait here,  Mister! I'll get some help!" Churro shouted,  running away,  leaving Vacant hanging.
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« Reply #1 on: February 08, 2015, 05:02:55 PM »
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« Reply #2 on: February 08, 2015, 06:43:08 PM »
So, I'm the crude, immature one...Nice!! :dance:

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« Reply #3 on: February 08, 2015, 10:30:03 PM »
Somehow I feel like there are just enough of us lined up to be chosen.


and man, Ginger being called Sasha, weird.


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« Reply #4 on: February 08, 2015, 11:11:11 PM »
Thanks guys! I'll try to post a new chapter as sion as possible!

And btw,  Coryn,  not all characters were introduced in this chapter,  since I felt like I was jumping from scene to scene too much
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« Reply #5 on: February 09, 2015, 12:00:42 AM »
and our house of "Artists wanted" has a line of writers waiting to get an artist! Most of them are 90 Years old,  but they started standing there when they were 13! "


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« Reply #6 on: February 09, 2015, 01:42:53 PM »
Chapter 2 is out!
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« Reply #7 on: February 09, 2015, 01:55:59 PM »
O-Oh my... Sorry, Coryn... It seems the inner kawaii yandere was released. ::)

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« Reply #8 on: February 09, 2015, 07:13:18 PM »
What would a friendly dragon do with a knife?  :hmm:

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« Reply #9 on: February 09, 2015, 09:23:44 PM »
Seriously, that's not the ONLY welcome message I post. It's just the most convenient. Am I just a horrid fleshy version of frosty the snowman in this fic?




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« Reply #10 on: February 09, 2015, 09:27:17 PM »
O-Oh my... Sorry, Coryn... It seems the inner kawaii yandere was released. ::)

Coupled with your profile image it's just too much ;D



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« Reply #11 on: February 09, 2015, 09:42:06 PM »
Between the maulings, the deaths, and the shipping, no, not really.

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« Reply #12 on: February 09, 2015, 11:48:11 PM »
What would a friendly dragon do with a knife?  :hmm:

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Seriously, that's not the ONLY welcome message I post. It's just the most convenient. Am I just a horrid fleshy version of frosty the snowman in this fic?




I suppose my one consolation is that you still asked who the first to die would be, so at least I know I'm not dead yet.




Well,  I really needed different characters to make this story interesting,  so I hyperbole-ed some features of every person to make a bigger difference and a more sarcastic story
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« Reply #13 on: February 09, 2015, 11:52:59 PM »
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« Reply #14 on: February 10, 2015, 01:58:05 AM »
At first my character seems like a creeper o.o. It got better (liked the we are too poor)

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