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Re: Candy and a Promise (Melody Box "short story")
« Reply #15 on: January 20, 2015, 10:19:03 PM »
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Yeah looks quite good! So the markings on his neck and stomach are burn scars right?
Nah, his shirt is fraying...  :push: Klaude is the one who got burned when a hot pipe fell on his arm.

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Re: Candy and a Promise (Melody Box "short story")
« Reply #16 on: January 20, 2015, 10:26:38 PM »
Oh ok ok I see it now. Can't believe I missed the shirt pocket XD
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Re: Candy and a Promise (Melody Box "short story")
« Reply #17 on: January 20, 2015, 10:28:30 PM »
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Oh ok ok I see it now. Can't believe I missed the shirt pocket XD
A patch, not a pocket.  ::)

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Re: Candy and a Promise (Melody Box "short story")
« Reply #18 on: January 21, 2015, 04:42:24 PM »
Added a poll due to my indecisiveness.  :sure:

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Re: Candy and a Promise (Melody Box "short story")
« Reply #19 on: January 22, 2015, 03:34:36 AM »
Added a few more actions to the story, will probably add more when I think of them.

Started working on a picture to go with the story, however it will probably take me a while to complete it.


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Re: Candy and a Promise (Melody Box "short story")
« Reply #20 on: January 24, 2015, 03:14:50 PM »


Crow Bandit's symbol.

It would seem that they now have an honorary member here.  ::)

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Friend or Foe (Melody Box "short story") WIP
« Reply #21 on: June 27, 2015, 07:46:12 PM »
Not finished! (just posting what I have so far before I lose it)

This takes place before the events of the other bit I wrote. I might write some more that reveals what happens in between this and that.

I'm going to put some planning and stuff in these spoiler tag(s) here. So if you don't want to be spoiled and want to just read the finished product don't open them. But if you do and want to help go ahead. I'm going to try doing the snowflake method with this and will be posting as I finish each step.





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The meeting of William and Jett and the problems that occur.




Unfinished draft - Ignore for now
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(Two figures, a woman and a young boy, arrive at a building located on the coast. It's night and storming.)

(the woman opens a door)
Woman: In here, quickly.

(The boy enters the building followed by the woman who shuts the door behind them.)
Woman: If everything goes as planned this is where you're gonna be staying from now on.

(Despite being soaked the redness of the boy's eyes revealed that he had been crying.)
Boy: ... I want to go home... I want my Mom and Dad...

(Alerted by the noise a man appeared from the next room and looked at the woman.)
Man: Gretta?
(He glanced at the boy)
Man: The Captain?

(Gretta shook her head grimly)

(The man closed his eyes disheartened.)

(Gretta turns to the boy.)
Gretta: William, this is Dax. He's my lead worker.

(Gretta turns back to Dax.)
Gretta: We don't have much time. We need to make it look as if Will is my apprentice.

???: Bit strange that you'd have two apprentices, don't ya think? Or are ya planing on getting rid of me?
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Re: Friend or Foe (Melody Box "short story") WIP
« Reply #22 on: June 28, 2015, 05:22:12 AM »
Where is 'that other bit' ? Hm, that's an interesting script style you've got there.

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Re: Friend or Foe (Melody Box "short story") WIP
« Reply #23 on: June 28, 2015, 02:45:18 PM »
Yea as lego said I'd like to see the other bit... Also is this a short story or a manga script? You said it was a short story in your title but it's written out as a script hehe so yea...

I like how it sounds so far, keep going!

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Re: Friend or Foe (Melody Box "short story") WIP
« Reply #24 on: June 28, 2015, 05:50:45 PM »
Looks like I forgot to leave a link.
http://forums.mangaraiders.com/index.php?topic=12742.0

It is a script, however since it's more of a side story/flashback of my main story I'm calling it a short story.

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Re: Friend or Foe (Melody Box "short story") WIP
« Reply #25 on: June 29, 2015, 10:51:05 AM »
Looks like I forgot to leave a link.
http://forums.mangaraiders.com/index.php?topic=12742.0

It is a script, however since it's more of a side story/flashback of my main story I'm calling it a short story.

Oh ok I see now :D will check out your story :thumbsup:

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Re: Friend or Foe (Melody Box "short story") WIP
« Reply #26 on: July 15, 2015, 11:37:10 PM »
I'm going to start working on this again. Read the first post for more information. Any help is welcome.

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Re: Melody Box
« Reply #27 on: January 26, 2016, 06:20:23 AM »
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Re: Melody Box
« Reply #28 on: January 26, 2016, 06:28:55 AM »
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Melody Box - Old Map
« Reply #29 on: January 26, 2016, 06:54:06 AM »
Old map for Melody Box (No longer entirely accurate)

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