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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #30 on: April 29, 2018, 05:13:29 PM »
565 day since last post. That may be a new record for my stories that have dropped off the cart.

But ohohoho! I am not done! I am so far from done! Life At Sea lives on to die another day! Of course, I was always going to finish this story, I just thought we were going to have more anthologies to publish it in. But ah well, you take the good, you take the bad. Time to finish this thing for reals like.

I should also mention that this ends the cycle of 'stories I'm currently writing'. So that's 4 stories y'all should look forward to seeing updates for as write on them from week to week thanks to the magic of clouds and smartphones.

anyway, without further ado, let's get on to chapter 4

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CHAPTER 4
CHAPTER 4: WATCHING THE WINDS

They had been under way for two weeks. For the first few days, Coryn had been given map coordinates, and in turn had supplied their captors with a heading. But there had been no sign of progress after that point. On the fourth day they had weighed anchor somewhere, but having remained locked in the brig, none of the pirates knew neither where nor why.
   The resulting boredom lead to the invention of a wonderful new song: Infinite Bottles of Beer On the Wall. Wonderful in the sense that it was a literal endless source of entertainment. Not so wonderful in the sense that that entertainment was rubbish. “Infinite bottles of beer on the wall, infinite bottles of beer…”
   “Take one down, pass it around…”
   “Infinite bottles of beer on the wall…”
   And so it went.
   The monotony was finally broken by the sound of heavy boots descending the wooden stairs nearby. The prisoners had long grown use to cabin boys and the occasional sailor coming down for supplies or to empty their bucket, but this was a different sound altogether. These steps were moving in time, with purpose. Something was finally going on. A voice rang our before they could see who was calling. “Get up you scum! You're going above deck!” His voice gave him away, and by the time Captain Willis’s mousey looking first mate appeared around the stacked crates, the three pirates had roused themselves.
   'Mister O’Connell’, as he had become known to them upon being brought onboard, did not strike the Raiders as a hardy, sea-going type. More of the bureaucratic type, who had potentially annoyed someone he shouldn't have. That at the very least, would explain why he had ended up assigned to a privateer ship, instead of a more standard ship of the fleet, or other such position. One could reasonably describe him as being tall and thin, (although he was neither of these things to an extreme), with a mess of mussy brown hair. Perhaps in another time and place, with a little more care given to his appearance, he could have been considered handsome. Alas, the life of a 16th century sailor took no prisoners, and he reflected this reality. Ultimately, the three captives had taken to referring to him as 'Percy’. They had never learned his first name, and he looked like a 'Percival’, in any case. Percy was yet to be let in on the joke, and they silently contemplated what would be the best time to do so.
   O’Connell took stock of them for a few moments before gesturing to the guard on his right. As the guard moved to unlock the door, he spoke. “The Captain has ordered you be brought to the main deck. Attempt to resist, and you will be shot. Attempt to escape, and you will be shot. Show any signs that you intend to do otherwise than explicitly ordered, and you will be shot.” There was a sharp click as the lock disengaged. O’Connell took a quick step forward and jammed the gate tight with his arm. “Do I make myself clear”
   “Abundantly.” Hasith replied.
   O’Connell sneered. “Good.” He stepped back and released the pressure on the gate. “Up the stairs, single file. We'll be right behind you.”
   The sun assaulted them upon stepping through the top hatch. A few bands of clouds floated overhead, but the seas were calm and the mid-morning sun was yet to fully bake the crew. Willis stood mid-ship, surveying the horizon with a small spyglass. He closed it with a look of irritation, and turned towards his guests. “I see Mister O’Connell has roused you successfully.”
   “He has, and what a lovely day for sailing to be roused on.” Coryn quipped. “And may I ask for what purpose we have been roused? I’d also like to inquire as to why you’re so interested in this treasure, why we’re anchored in the middle of nowhere, and how you came upon-” He was cut short as Willis smacked him across the face.
   "You have not been given permission to speak, pirate.” He glared down at him with his good eye as Coryn straightened back up. “We have orders to link up with another privateer vessel under contract with the crown. They will be assisting with this mission under my overall command. Additionally, one of you will be transferred to their brig.”
   This caused the pirate’s ears to perk up. “Transfer?” Asked Lego. “Who? Why?”
   “Errand. He was never meant to be on my ship in the first place. You two, on the other hand, are under my direct charge. The ‘why’, is because I am well aware that the more brigands are in one place, the more scheming there will be.” There was about to be a list of follow-up questions as to who exactly their were to meet, but those questions were squashed with a cry of ‘Ship ho!’ from the crows nest. Captain Willis turned his eyeglass back out to sea, and narrowed his gaze on a dark speck to the southeast. “Bring us alongside her!” The crew accelerated into action at the order. Chains clinked as the anchor was pulled up, masts groaned as wind filled the sails. Within the hour they were pulling up into a parallel course with the vessel. The pirates could make out individual figures on the deck. In the meantime they had been ushered up onto the quarter deck. O’Connell had taken control of the spyglass, and was peering at the ship. A look of confusion crossed his face however as they drew closer. “That’s peculiar. Their captain appears to be a woman.” This caught the attention of everyone within earshot, but before Captain Willis could address the matter, Coryn make a break for O’Connell.
   “Give me that thing!” With his still manacled hands, Coryn tore the spyglass from the First Officer’s hands. He leaped down the stairs to the main deck to put some distance between himself and the fuming O’Connell, and zeroed in on the other ship. The first thing that came into view was the name emblazoned on the back of the ship: ‘The Siren’s Lament’. Next, he swung his field of view up to the wheel, and hopefully, the captain. By now, his comrades had joined him, and they were doing their level best to calm and hold back the guards while Coryn got his look in. Unfortunately, the figure steering the ship was partly obscured by rigging. From what he could tell however, O’Connell’s initial assessment was correct. Female figure, red coat, well worn, tied tightly around the waist with a sash. Tall boots, brown, scuffed. Tricorn hat, shocking red hair beneath. One final feature caught his eye however, which he could not immediately place given his dehydrated state of mind. They bounced as he looked on, moving with the swells. A sound came into his mind. “Pafu...pafu…”
   This drew the attentions of both Lego and Hasith about as far away from protecting their friend as an attention could be drawn. “What do you mean ‘pafu’?”
   “Show me the goods!”
   They struggled with the blonde one for the eyeglass, but were soon drawn apart by guards. Willis was now present on the main deck, and looked ready to throw the lot of them overboard. But, the new ship was too close at hand now, and he ordered them moved away from the railing so that a boarding ramp could be lowered.
   With the two ships in spitting distance, and floating along smoothly with the current, a plank went down. The pirates were faced away from the ongoings, so Hasith and Lego craned their necks to see what Coryn had spied. Soon, they realized that what he had in fact saw was indeed plumage, if only in the very literal sense. Fuzzy, multi-colored feathers bobbed up and down at the captain descended the steps from the quarter deck of her ship. Finally, she turned to cross over, but stopped short of stepping across. Her voice rang out loud and clear through the air, simultaneously putting the Raider’s minds at ease, while raising a whole new list of questions. “Permission to come aboard?”
   Apprehension was palpable in Willis’s voice, and the crew grew quiet around him. No doubt, the superstition of having a woman on the ship’s deck while underway was well ingrained in them. “Permission granted. Captain…?”
Her boots clapped loudly against the precariously balanced board. She kept her eyes on her task even as she strode confidently across, which hid her face until finally setting foot on solid deck again. “Andmilk” The captain rose her head, met Willis's gaze, and smirked. “Captain Mahlua Andmilk, at your pleasure.”
   An awkward moment passed over the deck as the crew of the Charity processed their response. It was one thing to have a woman on deck, that could happen in emergencies, and could be accounted for. But a female captain? That was unprecedented, at least in their minds. But that problem was only for the ship's crew. Behind them, three prisoners were about ready to literally jump for joy right there on the spot. A single Raider pirate was a dangerous entity, even unarmed. Four were downright invincible, even if three of them currently in irons. And soon, it would be an even split between free and captive. Things were finally looking up.
   Not allowing the crew to regain their composure, Coryn broke free from his guards and hurtled himself across the deck. Before anyone could stop him, Coryn shoulder barged into Mahlua and pinned her against the ship's railing. They spoke quickly and quietly. To anyone watching, it looked for all the world that Mahlua struggled with the pirate for a moment before slamming him into the deck by his collar. That was what happened of course, but in that moment, the winds of fortune had shifted.
   As Mahlua regained her composure, Coryn smiled up at her from the sun drenched boards. “A pleasure to meet you, Captain.”
   Her gaze could have melted steel, but instead of letting it linger on Coryn, she turned it to the guards surrounding Hasith. “Load Captain Errand aboard my ship. I want to get under way as soon as possible!” She turned to Willis. “If you are amenable Captain, I'd like to discuss our course with you. We can inquire with Sken after he has cooled off some.”
   Finally, Willis snapped out of his stupor, and gave a curt nod. “Of course, Captain Andmilk. Please,” He beckoned behind him. “My charts are laid out in my quarters.”
   The assembly broke. Coryn shared a wink with Hasith as he was taken across the gangplank. He winked (or perhaps blinked) back. Together, Lego and Coryn were taken back to their cell. This time however, they did not go down dreading an uncertain fate. This time, they knew it would only be a matter of time before they were breathing free air. For all of Willis’s bluster about separating the ‘brigands’, he had just come across quite a few more brigands than he was counting on.

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #31 on: May 03, 2018, 08:20:13 PM »
Dun Dun Duuuuun.

And dude, that is quite a record. Dammit now i'm terrified of seeing how many days I abandoned my own projects. Hoping to catch up on them in the next 2 years though for sure. So much fun left along the way.

Infinite Bottles of Beer On the Wall. Manimal-san please make a song or I will. Haha dude you pulled out your narrative swagger (meant in the old school correct sense of the word) for this one! I think writing pirate fiction puts you in a pirate-tale writer sort of mind, and writing something fast paced like the Coryn Sken Saga puts you into an action packed anime style and stuff. I should've noticed this ages ago but yeah noob editor = noob eye for this sort of thing. Now that I think of it you're a freaking engineer too, so you're definitely set for when it comes to being technical and objective. This is an overall comment on your writing: You've got a great ability to switch up the style and make things appropriate to the script. Of course it still sounds like you, but it's pretty cool. Heck jump between your Bleach fan fics with those micro and fast chapters and this and you'll notice what I mean immediately.

Also random song I stumbled upon: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=94dY-QxjDiE


Also I'm looking forward to seeing the end of this story. You'll need to do something to stick the 'This is Canon' landing and I'm all for it.


And dammit I wish I was a fresh new mangaraider so that I'd have at least half as epic an entrance as Mahlua... Speaking of Mahlua, where is she? Does she know I'm addressing her as -san even?


Dude you've just gotta make a YT video about this writing hack you've developed for being productive while busy. Or a forum post. Either way teach me your ninja ways.

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #32 on: May 03, 2018, 08:36:30 PM »
Ha! Well, it may sound stupidly simple, but to be honest, the greatest trick I've got going is A: download Google docs and write on your phone whenever you have free time and instead of tweeting or whatever and B: yes that includes while *censored*ting. We all know your on your phone anyway, and it's not like you got anything better to do.


I think it's easier to switch between this and the bleach stuff because they are two very different settings I'm flashing between. It helps to have that diversity so things don't get muddled, and if you have a certain energy going for yourself in that moment, you'll have an appropriate place to direct it. But to tell you a secret, all of my chapters feel like quick blitzes to me when reading them.

Mahlua is, as ever, at college. I'd expect her return at the end of the month. I don't know about the san bit. Who knows.

Don't forget I already got the canon bit covered. It has been some years (as evidenced above), so I'd recommend rereading the first three chapters (and trying not to cringe at the difference in skill)


And yeah! Where's kingfisher these days?

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #33 on: May 03, 2018, 08:41:38 PM »
And yeah! Where's kingfisher these days?

Low blow bro, low blow.


I'm actually quite prepared to finish up all of my works in one mad blitz, so it doesn't interest me as much as the canon I've left around hanging. Canon is fun as hell man, canon is vital. We've got to get the ship dusted down of all incomplete MR canon and get her ready for some new oceans.

I'm actually doing the comic thing right now in hopes that when I finally get my process down to a science, I can jump into making MR based stuff even faster. Ah, I'm so looking forward to that.


It puts things into a whole new light when it turns out the 'ish you write is written while you're 'ishing.



You planning on topping your record for longest canon again with this sequel?

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #34 on: May 03, 2018, 11:22:04 PM »
Hah... who knows? I didn't exactly expect the first one do go so long either. It was all a fluke, so let's hold off our anticipation for now.

Quest! may be a contender though. It'll run until I run out of zany ideas to throw the characters in to. So that one has some staying power as well.

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #35 on: May 10, 2018, 07:36:06 AM »
Gonna have to read the previous chapters to figure out what's exactly going on, but I think I got general gist of the situation from reading this one.

Really good stuff man! Mahlua's introduction was pretty sweet, and I'm curious as to how big of a role she will play later on. And seriously Coryn, props to you for working on four stories at one time! That's gotta be at least a little taxing on the brain for sure.

Also, just thought about this: Mangaraiders. Pirates.  Mangapirates. PirateRaiders. I see the connection...

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #36 on: May 10, 2018, 11:30:49 AM »



Raiders gotta raid. You probably do get a pretty good idea yeah.  Obviously of you've read the first LAS then you'll know things are a little different this time around.

The four stories thing really isn't that bad as of yet. It's just determining the release schedule that's got me scratching my head. At this point, I think I'm content to go on a release streak once I have the next chapter for each story at least written, if not necessarily edited. Gives me time to contemplate any changes. But I just finished the second Question! chapter yesterday, so it's just Bleach and LAS:FC that need working on.

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #37 on: May 22, 2018, 05:24:10 AM »
Coryn flexing his serialization skills. MR-Jump

Will be looking forward to whatever releases first regardless.

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #38 on: May 22, 2018, 07:43:05 AM »
The order is pretty well set at CS, Quest!, Bleach, then FC for now. And I'm now into writing the next FC chapter. So releases will start again soon.

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #39 on: May 31, 2018, 08:56:19 PM »
Yes I'm going to be 'that guy'. Any update on FC chapter by any chance? Looking forward to dat update chain with everything haha

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #40 on: May 31, 2018, 09:08:53 PM »
I'm about halfway through the next one, and then the update chain will begin. What with the holiday and all, it hasn't been an overly productive week, but the gears are grinding along. Rest easy knowing that I am at least making continuous progress.

Reread the first three chapters from like, 4 years ago to catch up on the details and kill time.

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #41 on: May 31, 2018, 09:10:49 PM »
That's actually not that bad of an idea tbh. Roger roger

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Re: Life At Sea: Fortune's Chance
« Reply #42 on: May 31, 2018, 09:11:06 PM »
I'll be looking forward to it. I know the feel, though. That's why I've decided to focus on my one writing project for the time being, and even that can be difficult to squeeze in a chapter a day at my "just over 1000 word" chapter style.