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Offline Miles Montgomery

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Melamin (discussion board)
« on: January 03, 2015, 04:31:13 PM »
Feel free to give your thoughts, opinions, critiques, and feedback on Melamin here. The story is already done. Just have to post all 17 chapters I have up.

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Re: Melamin (discussion board)
« Reply #1 on: January 19, 2015, 05:04:27 AM »
Anybody?

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Re: Melamin (discussion board)
« Reply #2 on: January 19, 2015, 06:26:19 AM »
I'll try and give it a view later when I finish lessons  :hmm: this might be more useful to you however;

http://forums.mangaraiders.com/index.php/topic,9013.0.html

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Re: Melamin (discussion board)
« Reply #3 on: January 19, 2015, 06:33:54 AM »
O.o I can't even find the story XD. Maybe a link either in your signature or on this topic??

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Re: Melamin (discussion board)
« Reply #4 on: January 19, 2015, 01:14:17 PM »
DOH!  :push:

It's now in my signature.
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Re: Melamin (discussion board)
« Reply #5 on: January 19, 2015, 01:39:03 PM »
My friend is reading it with me right now, and so she sent me some of the feedback from it:

"Okay soo I just read chapter called history in the book and can I say, that is the absolute awkwardest way of telling back stories I have ever seen. Like melas was pretty well mentioned but what was with kensui just breaking down? You've known this girl for three days(literally I'm pretty sure it was three days) and now you're breaking down in an elevator after she's done telling you how she got thrown off a cliff fifteen times as a child? I'm sorry, but that's kinda comical to me. And then there's the fact that hey after breaking down in a stuck elevator lets decide to tell him you love him. Literally, girl you've know him again. Three days. You've pretty much stalked this apathetic kid and forced yourself upon his apartment. There has almost been NO substantial character development that indicates to me that, hey these two can be a great couple. I don't see very much chemistry. They barely know each other and she claims she loves him. And he takes it. And they kiss. AND THEY KISS. WHERE THE HECK DID THAT COME FROM?!?!? It literally went from falling off cliff, breaking down in elevator, making out in elevator." ~the skittles :read:

So the characters are a bit awkward it seems. She is obviously very opinionated ^^'
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Re: Melamin (discussion board)
« Reply #6 on: January 27, 2015, 02:15:41 PM »
You know, after the several hundred reviews I've gotten from both incarnations of this story, on the other sites it's on, your friend is the first person to comment on the elevator scene like that.

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Re: Melamin (discussion board)
« Reply #7 on: January 27, 2015, 04:57:00 PM »
Really? Huh. She was very adamant about it. (She is also know for not being able to keep her mouth shut though..)
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