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My Manga Idea
« on: December 31, 2014, 07:06:15 PM »
OK so this idea i have is completed in my head. So there is a boy named Andrew who lives in a small town with 3000 people inside (dont have name for town). He is a senior in highschool (school goes from kindergarden to 12th grade) and has a sister who is in 7th grade. everyday he goes to school with his friends. as days go by he start passing out and dreams of his town up in flames and people slain all over (hope thats not to graffic). after three days of haveing these dreams , his class gets a transfer student (who is and alien sent to protect him). she never says anything to anyone but andrew and asks that she be sitted next to andrew. the next day his town becomes a war zone between 2 alien factions and he is the key to saving his planet (the new student tells him this). Blah that was alot of typeing.

So what do you think?
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« Reply #1 on: December 31, 2014, 07:26:08 PM »
I can kind of see it happening but you are going to show 3 days of the dreams (seems repetitive and makes the reader not as interested) maybe have the manga start off on the 3rd day when he has the dreams.  Then when he wakes up you can have him say "what are with these dreams I been having these past few days".  Also, how does the sister relate to this? Does she tease him about this new girl or is she a key factor in the story, etc.  You should also state why he is being protected instead of other people (not in the chapter but to explain the story to people).  I see some potential to this story but it needs more information
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« Reply #2 on: December 31, 2014, 07:48:22 PM »
theres definetly more to this i was just posted some of the plot i think im very new when it comes to writing and i have many flaws. its hard to explain for me in typeing i wish i can explain this with speaking rather typeing. i like the idea of starting it after the 3rd day of dreaming also my prolog should it be the dream he is haveing? and the sister she ties in later she becomes a very powerful combat medic that helps her brother. but thats further down the story. the reason why he is the only person being protect in that town is because theres something about the people who have these dreams, they can use the aliens technology. anyone who has these dreams can. but andrew is the first pirson in the alien history who has the strongest ability to wield their tech. thats why he is protected. there r others who can (humans and otrher lifeforms) he just the strongest. of the 9 alien factions 7 wish to kill these power wielders, the other 2 wish to protect them and the human race. and the more dreams they have the stronger ability is, humans nor the aliens understand why can have this ability, they just do. Which is why his sister becomes important, she figures out why thy can while becoming a combat medic.
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« Reply #3 on: January 01, 2015, 01:04:37 AM »
One of the things you can do is simply state he has a little sister and later introduce her in the story.  Another way is to have her in the story the entire time so like during lunch they meet up and/or when he gets home (maybe walk home together).  Try typing up the first chapter and see how it is
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« Reply #4 on: January 01, 2015, 01:25:58 AM »
in the beginning of te manga you see her abit but then after a little why you dont see her much. then she comes back later on with a bigger rule.
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« Reply #5 on: January 01, 2015, 04:55:21 PM »
 :dance: and so I'm am now excited since I've received assistance from this forum to create a manga. i shall get some work done and post it on here so you can all see and say if anything needs to be fixed or changed. Thank you all  :D
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Re: My Manga Idea
« Reply #6 on: January 01, 2015, 07:51:17 PM »
Hey I like your story very weird but original  :hmm: . You could replace your àlien by something as a god or godness. If you do that you could make thé main character related to divine. This way you could also make thé second character protecting your main character teach him use is own power hidden in himself. It ia just an idea lile that.

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« Reply #7 on: January 01, 2015, 08:38:03 PM »
Hey there dude, so had a quick read through what you've got down so far and thought I'd try to assist. Not much to go off, but thats understandable with it just being a concept, so I'll kinda just rattle off some questions and thoughts :D

First off since its not stated or immediately obvious in the story itself, what kind of Genre and tone will this be? I'm envisioning a Shonen/action type story, with some hints of School style comedy.

I see kenshin asked the same question I thought, why does he need protecting and what makes him special? So due to his dreams/premonitions, he can use the Alien tech. But as for these aliens, why are they coming to Earth? Is there a specific reason, is the war literally just about killing/saving the MC, or are they just sorta swept up in it? 

In regards to the war, what are you going to do? Massive scale battles of two armies or specialised individuals being sent to fight?


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« Reply #8 on: January 01, 2015, 08:55:17 PM »
thats some good advice, and the genre would more and likely be sci-fi, action, and romance. maybe even more just not sure yet.
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« Reply #9 on: January 04, 2015, 01:06:07 AM »
. I think i posted these pictures correctly. Im not sure if im doing this correctly, but if they are can some tell me how those turned out for my first 2 pages of my manga.
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« Reply #10 on: January 04, 2015, 01:08:38 AM »
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« Reply #11 on: January 04, 2015, 01:10:51 AM »
http://www.mediafire.com/convkey/22ce/syq2pyj9qfd90bpzg.jpg page 2 of manga. sorry it took 2 posts to figure out how to post pics of first 2 pages. please tell me how i did for trying to make manga my first time.
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« Reply #12 on: January 04, 2015, 01:15:56 AM »
Problem is that the view is so weird.  I think you should let the artist choose the perspective or study a little bit yourself.  Especially the first page should look different
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« Reply #13 on: January 04, 2015, 01:36:52 AM »
to be honest i really dont know what im doing. thats why im still learning. and what do you mean by the view?
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Re: My Manga Idea
« Reply #14 on: January 04, 2015, 02:06:45 AM »
I looked at your pages. It's normally a good idea to leave full page panels for really important events.
I hope you don't mind, but I tried to break it up roughly. It's really scribbly but hopefully you can tell what's going on.
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It's a good start though. You have to think about what you want the reader to see as well as what the character sees.
By showing some of the surrounding area burning you kind of emphasis the destruction.

*Also sorry, didn't mean to make the images so big.