I rewrote the story and made a few minor changes, here it is:
________________, and ________________ are cousins that stumble across a ufo crash in the middle of the woods. Agreeing not to tell anyone, the two boys begin to tinker with the ship and what it contains. Before long the eldest, _____________, discovers technological power beyond any military caliber. They both agree to help people with that power, but ______________(the oldest) slowely turns away. All else is good until they are given warning of the aliens returning for their ship. As the world creeps into a nightmare, what can these two young boys do to stop this?
I still haven't chosen the names yet, but I think it's pretty good. Remember I didn't take much time on this.
This is part A, part B will be about the oldest cousin going crazy with his power and then attempting to take over the world. But the younger one will stop him. I know it sounds a bit cheesy but it'll play out different then you think.
What do you think?