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Author Topic: Daniel The Dimension Guardian.  (Read 6207 times)

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Re: Daniel The Dimension Guardian.
« Reply #90 on: January 13, 2015, 07:21:30 PM »
By the power of Greyskull, thats a lot of characters!

Will all of those people feature in your story? It may be wise to slim down the roster a little, so you have more time to develop and give the proper amount of attention to the most important Characters. 

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Re: Daniel The Dimension Guardian.
« Reply #91 on: January 13, 2015, 09:39:41 PM »
By the power of Greyskull, thats a lot of characters!

Will all of those people feature in your story? It may be wise to slim down the roster a little, so you have more time to develop and give the proper amount of attention to the most important Characters.

Those characters are foundations of the main character due to his family problems. Also his love life. But the main characters are Daniel Den & Those characters in the other realms.

I'm having trouble describing the modern days.

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Re: Daniel The Dimension Guardian.
« Reply #92 on: January 13, 2015, 09:45:03 PM »
Here's my new version of the story:

 In the Hamilton, Ohio, USA. There was a family that was called, 'Den.' The oldest son of two but his younger brother got married and moved out to Cleveland, Tennessee. Where they met at. Daniel Den is the oldest. He is naturally skinny. If you see him without a shirt on. You could see his rips. He tried everything to get fat on him but he reaches five feet and three inches.

One day. His dad named, ''Garth Den". Daniel was tired of his dad saying, "Every lights in the house is on." Really is only 2 or three at the most. So Daniel just heard dad's car drove into the driveway. So Daniel decide to ran around the house even the basement to turn on all the lights even the lamps.

Garth was busy talking on his cellphone. When he went back to his bedroom and after he got off of the phone. He finally notices that all of the lights were on. He went to Daniel. Daniel said with smirked/smiled, "That's what every lights is on look like."

Since then. It been jokes like for example. Daniel sees two pieces of trash in the trash can and said, "OH NO! There is two pieces of trash in the garbage. Do to Dad's Math that equals up to the garbage is full. If this garbage is full. It means that all of the garbage is full. If every garbage is full. That means. The house is full. Which means."


Garth is very good at slap boxing. He teach little bit of Boxing due to one of his friends invited him to get into the ring. When he was younger and party animal. Party Monkey. After he met his new best friend at Church. Which was about to split up into two churches. Garth help build the new church. One day. He say to his fellow drywall worker that he wish that pretty girl come through the door. That's when Jeune Etats walked into the Gym. Jeune was consider a Church Mouse. When Jeune's friends find out that she married Garth Den from their rival school. They were shock.

Garth trying to teach Jeune to stand up to her big sister named, "Meri Etats". Who is jealous of Jeune's sister hood with the rest of the family. Meri is a liar the only thing she doesn't lie about is being a nurse in a school cause she's good at that. She's like to control every one and everything.

Meri even try to make her daughter's wedding her way not her daugther's way. She plays favorites between her son, Toom Norias and her daughter Circa Cerci. Circa Cerci is fed up and felt emotionally abuse by her mother. That's why when she needs to get away. She comes to Jeune for comfort.

Few months before 6 moths before her wedding after Daniel's brother named, Nate Den and Daniel's first new sister-in-law's wedding. Two more months before that wedding. Daniel and Circa Cerci tried to learn how to ballroom dance together. Now Circa Cerci is happy due to not dealing with her mother at her own house but Meri still tries to control Circa Cerci even if she's married now.

Daniel Den only wish is to find some one special like his brother and most of his cousins. Few of his cousins got remarried too. It's unfair to him. Some times he thinks that he isn't handsome enough for any girl. Most of the cute girls from his youth group days are married and have kids. The Golden Youth Group age. He calls it. When everyone was invited. Now they are married. Now Daniel is 30 years old. He never been kiss even with his ex-girlfriend, Aby Bay.

Now he be at the Grubb Gaming Extreme Entertainment almost been there for almost four years. Where is Grubball court, Laser Tag, Bumper cars, Ball pit and putt-putt with arcade games like Pinball and etc.


So sometimes Daniel wish he was the only man on the planet. But he realize the most girls would either turn gay. Cause the girls doesn't have choice in the matter. Sometimes he wish he could have the power of travel Dimensional and teleportation powers.


Hamilton, Butler Country, Ohio, USA having some problems like most towns and cities do. The atmosphere is cold since it's in winter time. That's when Grubb Gaming is most busiest time of the year. Specially on Fridays, Saturdays and Sundays but Daniel doesn't work on Sundays. He only works on Saturdays cause he goes to church on Sundays mornings.

Hamilton's rates:

Ages
under 5 : 7.0%
Ages of 5-17 is 15.6%
Ages of 18-29 is 14.9%
Ages of 30-44 is 19.2%
Ages of 45-64 is 24.64%
Ages of 65+ is 18.6%

Relationships:
Singles that never married is 25.5%
Married is 48.4%
Divorced is 13.3%
Widowed is 7.4%

Crimes:


Hamilton, Annual Crimes:
Violent is 400
Property is 3,925
Total is 4,325

Annual crimes per 1,000 residents
6.43 for Violent
63.04 for Property
69.47 in total

Males: 46.4%
Females: 53.6%

Report Total:
Murders 6%
Rape 79%
Robbery 189%
Assault 131%

Rate Per:
Murders 0.10%
Rape 1.19%
Robbery 3.04%
Assault 2.10%


Meanwhile in the Nightmare Realm. The atmosphere is creepy and ugly trees, mist fill realm. It looks like the Stone age style of living. A strong will lady was running from creatures known as Alienkies. Who kidnapped her from the 8th realm and Injected DNAs into her red hair DNA, Green eyes DNA & Freckles DNA. She was trying to get away from them. She crash the UFO into realm of Ugly. Thuya Seishi found her and help her from being taking back. Thuya saw a creature that has arms upper body of Aliens whiled it's lower body is more like Monkies' lower half. So she recuse this girl.


But unbeknownst to both to females. That they are in the forbidden woods cause of the Mage Guilds' own. Swayer saw the Troll Princess and he tried to captured the other lady but Rabenda Shai got in the way and opened the gate way to other realm for the other lady.

In the next realm The lady that was pushed in the beginning of the Bronze age realm. She found out that she got powers of limp manipulation and she could stretch her body as well. She have two other arms now she can't get rid of them either. She smiled and said, "Now I can two time the task." She starts wondering, 'How can I get back to my realm?'.

That's when the Dwarves, Elves, Fairies, Pixies, Leprechaun, Sprites and Gnome. Melissa is the leader of the Fairies and she asked the dark skin female her named. The lady said, "My name is Avril Danette. I'm trying to get back to my realm cause Alienkies kidnapped me against my will."

Gnome came up to her and gave her the bad news of the demons, alienkies and others creatures and beings ruined by killing most of earthling expect for her and one male named, Daniel Den. You two have to repopulate your kind back but now you guys have super powers now."
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