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Re: Hikari's Random Gallery of crappy ideas
« Reply #75 on: September 20, 2014, 09:42:22 AM »
I suppose dream eaters leave the victims as husks or something? Or are they just killed off out right?

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Re: Hikari's Random Gallery of crappy ideas
« Reply #76 on: September 20, 2014, 09:49:58 AM »
Cant get anything past Lego, huh :D
That is actually a mystery of the series. Whenever people have their dreams eaten they disappear before anyone even notices so no one even knows what happens to them

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« Reply #77 on: September 20, 2014, 10:16:41 AM »
Haha actually you inadvertly revealed information there. I thought they became like victims of a Dementor's Kiss in Harry Potter, or like victims of shadows from Persona 3 Portable...

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Re: Hikari's Random Gallery of crappy ideas
« Reply #78 on: September 20, 2014, 10:32:16 AM »
I actually didnt reveal that much. Lets just say that they dont turn into dust and float away, nor do they disappear from the face of the earth

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Re: Hikari's Random Gallery of crappy ideas
« Reply #79 on: September 20, 2014, 11:44:37 AM »
Killjoy

Our main character wakes up in a dark room after a night he can’t quite remember, and hears a voice…yet he is alone. The room is bugged and the man who did this was the same person who put him in that room and who is now holding his friends captive.
Ok...these type of beginnings don't really work unless you get to see a little bit more of his life or before he got knocked out into the room. Especially if you're going to be sharing things like his friends. introducing all 6 of them would be good, and showing the main character's personal life. This also establishes a personality to follow.


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The man mentions that all 6 of his friends are locked away in the city they are in, and each friend is being guarded by a general. The main character must find out who the generals are and kill them so that his friends are freed but the big question is how is he supposed to find 6 people he knows nothing about in a city filled with people. The worst thing is that if he mistakes a civilian for a general then a toxin in his body (Rightfully named Remorse) will activate, and will show him the life of the person he killed and what that person could have done if he hadn’t killed them… kill too many and the toxin will kill him. If he doesn’t kill at least once everyday then the boss will think he has left the city and will kill the 6 captives, luckily there are plenty of the general’s men in the city. He cannot escape the city either because the boss will find out very quickly. It is the main characters job to find and kill all the generals and the boss to grant the freedom of his friends and himself.
You see, this idea sounds like a twisted game that is messing with people's lives....only problem...there's no "theme" to the twisted game. You used "Generals" in the past before. And why the use of "Toxins".

Not only that, but the idea sounds nearly impossible for the main character to succeed.

Dreameaters, are very strange creatures. No one knows where they came from but what we do know is that they are disgusting beings that feed on the hopes of humans. There are a select few who actually know the truth about them and they are the force against Dreameaters... the exterminators (name will be changed).
Could have worded this a lot better....

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These people have all been affected by dreameaters for example, a family member had their dreams stolen and they saw it happen. The main character is unique, he is the only person who has had all of his dreams stolen yet is still alive. The truth is that as soon as he lost them, he made a new dream... to get those hopes back. This signed the contract of him becoming an exterminator and he was able to kill the dreameater with the weapon he was given (not decided on what it is yet but it'll be bladed)
This raises questions....how do they literally see someones hope getting sucked away? the problem with dreameaters isn't that they aren't possible...they just don't have that physical, tangible, vulnerabaility. And the main character is interesting, but again, raises more questions.

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There are 3 types of Dreameaters recorded. The regulars that are rather easy to kill, mid levels that have their own weapons that they drop when killed. And finally the bosses who are immensely powerful and killing one of them instantly makes you a famous exterminator, meaning you will be titled and you will be given the top contracts. Exterminators don't usually fight each other as they have similar goals but there have been recorded fights and they all lead to one of the exterminators dying.
This makes it even harder to imagine what a dream eater even is. are they humanoid or are they monster-like? The titles and contracts just adds a whole different perspective...its no longer just about survival. its about reputation.
Stop playing victim....you know what you did.

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« Reply #80 on: September 20, 2014, 12:33:27 PM »
Killjoy: I see what you mean about the beginning, and I would definately show his life before the game began. No real theme sprung to mind, so I just thought that the game master trying to inflict as much mental and physical pain would be enough... obviously not XD. I originally used Generals in this idea but then used the term for Chains because it worked better, I still havent thought of a good replacement. The toxins were added because it sounded more realistic than the character just having this problem, and I felt like remorse in this quantity (coming close to killing him if he killed too many innocent people) would be what the game master wanted. The fact that it seems impossible for him to win adds to the excitement... or at least thats what I think.

No name series: My bad, ill try and word it differently. Basically its just saying that Dreameaters are revolting creatures that eat dreams. But the only people in the world who know about them are the exterminators (who will be renamed). When dreams are being eaten its sort of like a soft blue aura being drawn out of the person. In this story, the dreameaters start off as humanoids but begin to transform (thet become bigger and their skin changes colour to a yellow or grey) until the third stage in which they are cloaked in a dark aura. You may ask questions about the main character although I might not answer some of them depending on if itll reveal too much. A lot of exterminators mainly want contracts and titles because they dont want to die, and being the strongest gives them quite the safety net. And yes, they do really care about reputation, mainly because those big contracts arent exactly badly paid and they can use that money in the real world. These contracts are sent out by the world government's sub division "Sandman" who are able to track dreameaters because of the red-black aura they emit, Sandman's men have intel all over the world in every city

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« Reply #81 on: September 20, 2014, 07:40:07 PM »
Killjoy: I see what you mean about the beginning, and I would definately show his life before the game began. No real theme sprung to mind, so I just thought that the game master trying to inflict as much mental and physical pain would be enough... obviously not XD. I originally used Generals in this idea but then used the term for Chains because it worked better, I still havent thought of a good replacement. The toxins were added because it sounded more realistic than the character just having this problem, and I felt like remorse in this quantity (coming close to killing him if he killed too many innocent people) would be what the game master wanted. The fact that it seems impossible for him to win adds to the excitement... or at least thats what I think.
The problem is this seems like a game that has no meaning. have you ever played a board game and didn't understand the theme?

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No name series: My bad, ill try and word it differently. Basically its just saying that Dreameaters are revolting creatures that eat dreams. But the only people in the world who know about them are the exterminators (who will be renamed). When dreams are being eaten its sort of like a soft blue aura being drawn out of the person. In this story, the dreameaters start off as humanoids but begin to transform (thet become bigger and their skin changes colour to a yellow or grey) until the third stage in which they are cloaked in a dark aura. You may ask questions about the main character although I might not answer some of them depending on if itll reveal too much. A lot of exterminators mainly want contracts and titles because they dont want to die, and being the strongest gives them quite the safety net. And yes, they do really care about reputation, mainly because those big contracts arent exactly badly paid and they can use that money in the real world. These contracts are sent out by the world government's sub division "Sandman" who are able to track dreameaters because of the red-black aura they emit, Sandman's men have intel all over the world in every city

Explaining it doesn't make it right....the problem is that it doesn't make sense to go that direction.....its the same direction most amateurs go, by trying to turn a real threat into some form of ranking system.
Stop playing victim....you know what you did.

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Re: Hikari's Random Gallery of crappy ideas
« Reply #82 on: September 22, 2014, 09:18:36 AM »
Fair point... I'll have to think up a good theme for Killjoy.

I guess I dont really need the contracts system to be fair. I'll not add it in

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Re: Hikari's Random Gallery of crappy ideas
« Reply #83 on: September 06, 2017, 01:41:41 PM »
New idea that just popped up:

Scavengers:
Hundreds of people live on a water locked island in 5 districts. Each part of the island have different resources and benefits to them. In each district are tribes of people, who all want to dominate all of the districts in order to control every resource. It is a war for natures assets. The main character lives in the central district that is constantly under attack due to it bordering every other district.

Its not much yet since I don't have an idea about the characters yet, it's mainly just a concept

Whaddya think y'all?

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« Reply #84 on: September 06, 2017, 08:58:37 PM »
I like the concept but you'll need to come up with a better reason why they are locked in war. For example, why don't they just all work together and combine their resources? This is probably the more realistic outcome for a situation like this.

You might argue that there aren't enough resources for every person, if that's the case then how are the individual districts surviving right now?

If each district holds a resource crucial to survival, the districts would have to TRADE instead of fight each other for the resources they need in order to survive (because war would just make survival even more difficult and the district that chooses war also risks the most, which given the situation is illogical). This concept seems like the survivor's trial situation blown up to a larger scale.

Imagine a bunch of people trapped on a ship with a limited amount of resources, they would have to ration what they have as a whole rather than divide into 5 groups specifically targeting each resource to hoard. Doesn't make a whole lot of sense right?

Maybe you could try creating a reason for those resources to exist, like maybe these people are trapped on this island and in order to escape it they need ALL 5 resources to build a ship to escape, but their own district has access to only 1 resource. Then go further and explain that there are only enough resources to build 1 ship big enough to evacuate 1 district.

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« Reply #85 on: September 06, 2017, 10:42:38 PM »
You make a good point. The resources would be things that aren't necessarily essential but they make living easier and allows them to become more advanced as at the start they would be primitive. I was thinking they would be: an extremely efficient fishing area (Id probably make it a breeding zone for the fish so there are more there), a forest allowing the tribe to hunt, a mine for minerals, a fresh water spring and the final one would be a Zone that creates the best area for farming.

The reason would be that they were always cautious around each other but tried to work together, however things happened between each tribe (this would possibly be what the main character tries to figure out) and because of this they now fight for each other's land.

Little convoluted I know, Ill try to think of some other ideas for it.
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« Reply #86 on: September 11, 2017, 03:55:50 PM »
wow cool plots

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« Reply #87 on: September 11, 2017, 06:55:05 PM »
Thanks Bandile ^^

Workin on some new chapters so I'll keep em updated  :sheep:

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« Reply #88 on: March 14, 2018, 10:53:07 AM »
Back at it again. Aight so Jump’ll prolly do another international comp and I wanna enter. Last time I posted about it I got “maybe next year” so here goes. I’m gonna post this on my library topic so that it’s easy for anyone who’s interested to see my works. Right now all of them listed will only have the synopsis and nothing else but I’ll upload some chapters. I’m fully open for critique, give me anything no matter how harsh as long as I can improve it. I’ve been on this site since 2012 and have only ever talked about doing it, I’m sick of waiting around. If anyone is interested lemme know. To everyone else thanks for reading and have a nice day

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« Reply #89 on: May 25, 2018, 01:08:22 AM »
Modified version and a name change (was EWZ, now is Teikoku or Empire) Criticism is welcomed, be as harsh as possible. If you do not wish to give critique no worries, thanks for checking it out

Match 1 – The Proving Ground
We begin in a stadium. In this venue are thousands of people of all shapes and sizes. They are shadowed, lacking detail. The roar from the crowd drowns out all other sounds. In the centre of the arena is a squared circle, inside are two men who are also shadowed, all that can be seen is two figures. A bell rings and the two rush towards each other and the crowd becomes louder, cheering out at this violent ballet. The camera spins around the two into a close-up shot of one. This then changes to a close-up shot of a young man. He is sat underneath a rather large tree, in the distance is a building that looks recently built. The man has small plasters on his face and some bandaging can be seen below his shirt. A feint voice of a young man catches the attention of this stranger, he opens his eyes.
Voice: Yuzu?
Yuzu looks to his right to see the source of the voice. Stood there is a male around the same as Yuzu. He has a metal crutch in his right arm, as well as a brace over his left knee. He is looking down towards Yuzu
Yuzu: Ichiro (he replies in a soft tone, still trying to wake up from his nap)
Ichiro: What are you doing dozing off over here? Hana’s match is starting
Yuzu: It’s that time already? (starts to slowly get up) Sorry, the last match took it out of me and before I knew it I was already asleep.
Ichiro: Good job I got here then, huh? I don’t even wanna imagine what torture she’d put you through if you missed her big match
Yuzu: (Laughs nervously at the thought of his punishments) Yeah, probably a good idea to head out asap
Ichiro grins and the two begin to walk together
Yuzu: So how are you feeling?
Ichiro: Great, doctor said that I should only have a couple more rehab sessions until I can get back to training. Although he said if I try to train before he gives me the all clear like I did last time he’ll glue the crutch to my hand
Yuzu: Ahaha, I won’t tell if you won’t
Ichiro: It’s Hana I’m more worried about. She’s been babying me ever since we were kids
Yuzu: She likes to worry. Which is weird considering she’s the most likely to cause damage
Ichiro: Hopefully she saves that for the next fight. Your fight is after that right?
Yuzu: Yeah. There’s a 10-minute break in between so I should be able to get backstage in time. He’ll be a tough one to beat though
Ichiro: (turns to look at Yuzu who is at his right side) Hey. We made a pact, remember? I won the tournament I was in, now you and Hana gotta do the same, doesn’t matter who it is, this is our big chance, right? (Holds his fist towards Yuzu)
Yuzu: (Smiles) Yeah (Hits Ichiro’s fist with his own)
The two arrive at a wrestling ring and move into the crowd eagerly awaiting the action. They take their seats; the crowd are vibrant with the odd cheer thrown in
Yuzu spots a girl in the ring already
Yuzu: Looks like we made it in time (to Ichiro)
Announcer: Ladies and Gentlemen, this is the Final of our annual Female break-out talents tournament. This match is scheduled for one fall. Introducing first, from Kobe, she is the winner of last year’s tournament Sakuraba Kimi!
The crowd cheers as one of the competitors raises her arms
Announcer: And the challenger
Yuzu: (To Ichiro) so how long is she lasting?
Ichiro: Oh? Against her? Champ won’t last 5 minutes
Announcer: She is the dark horse of this tournament. Hailing from Tokyo, Koizumi Hana!
Yuzuru and Ichiro stand and cheer loudly. There are a few cheers and claps from the others in the crowd. New shot is behind Hana, a relatively tall girl wearing a dark-grey vest and black wrestling tights with similarly coloured boots. She is warming up but is distracted by the loud cheers from Yuzu and Ichiro which is catching the attention of the rest of the audience.
Hana: (Whispering to herself) Making too much noise…. (visibly getting angrier as Yuzu and Ichiro get louder)
The champion walks towards Hana and stretches out her hand
Kimi: Hana, is it? Well done for making it this far. Not many newbies even get past the prelims
Hana: Oh, (smiles) thank you, it was difficult but here we are
Kimi: Its unfortunate that you couldn’t win however
Hana: (She grins) I sure look forward to making you eat those words.
The referee joins them and tells them to go to their corners and begins the match. Both walk towards each other in a defensive stance and lock up in a collar and elbow tie up. Hana can manoeuvre into a side headlock, but Kimi pushes Hana into the ropes and pushes her away using the momentum of said ropes. Hana bounces back and ducks Kimi’s clothesline, follows through with the momentum off the ropes again and hitting Kimi with a shoulder block dropping her to the ground. After about a second Hana bounces off the ropes again, Kimi moves so she is lying in front of Hana forcing her to jump over her. Hana continues to run to the ropes and back while Kimi stands and attempts to leapfrog Hana. Hana stops in front of the airborne Kimi and catches her into an inverted atomic drop then quickly transitioning into a suplex.
Cut back to Yuzu and Ichiro who are watching the match go on as Kimi holds her back in pain.
Yuzu: Since when did she get so good at collar and elbow tie ups?
Ichiro: Eh? She’s been good at that for ages. Although whenever we train you end up in your own world. (Folds his arms proudly) Believe me if you think that is good, you’re gonna be picking your jaw off the floor by the end of this
Yuzu: (With a bewildered look on his face as he stares at Ichiro) Why do you look so proud when you haven’t done anything (He thinks)
Just after this it is a full panel of Hana catching a moving Kimi in a Step-Up Enzuigiri (basically a jumping kick to the back of the head), Kimi falls limp onto her knees and slumps, so her head falls to the ground.
Ichiro: Nice Hana! Finish her! (He shouts out to Hana)
Hana picks Kimi up in a front headlock and suddenly falls to one knee, driving Kimi’s head into the other. Before Kimi falls, Hana hooks both of her opponent’s arms so they are back to back in a sort of backpack position
Ichiro: And like that, its over. Her favourite move…
Yuzu: (Close up of a grinning Yuzu) The Widow’s Peak
Hana has her hands under the chin of Kimi. She sits out the move smashing Kimi’s knees into the mat but also causing a sort of reverse stunner on Kimi. She then covers Kimi, the referee counts
Referee: 1,2…3!
The bell rings. The crowd stands and cheers. The announcer enters the ring again with a trophy. He hands Hana the trophy and a medal
Announcer: Ladies and Gentlemen the winner of the 7th annual women’s break-out talent tournament, Koizumi Hana!
Ichiro and Yuzu stand and cheer. Hana smiles and lifts the trophy proudly
Skip to a large tent behind the stage. This is where the talent wait to step into their next match. Yuzu and Ichiro walk towards the entrance but stop when they see Hana talking to two suited men.
Ichiro: Wonder what that’s about (He says to Yuzu whilst still looking towards the trio)
Yuzu: Who knows?
Yuzu and Ichiro walk towards Hana. As they do the suited men notice the approaching fan section (Yuzu and Ichiro) and finish off their conversation with Hana, give her a card and bow to her. As the suited men walk past the pair they bow, Ichiro and Yuzu return the gesture then continue to walk towards Hana
Hana: Oh! Ichi! Yuzu!
Sakurai: Yo
Yuzu: What was that about?
Hana: Oh, those guys? They are from a modelling agency. Apparently, they come to events like this to find the next big star for their brand
Yuzu: And they chose you? (in a mocking tone)
Hana: (Staring at Yuzu with intensity that would match that of a Yakuza member) Ah???? You pickin’ a fight kid?
Yuzu: Sorry…
Sakurai cracks up
Hana: So, how you feeling?
Yuzu: Better than before. I just wanna get out there already
Sakurai: That’s good cause you haven’t got much prep time.
Hana: You better win! Lose and there’ll be hell to pay
Yuzu: (nervous laugh, imagining his gravestone) I’ll do my best.

Skip to the ring again.
Announcer: Our next match is the main event! The finals of the men’s tournament. This match is scheduled for ONE FALL!
The crowd shout out “one fall”
Announcer: Introducing first. Like in our women’s final we have a relatively unknown entrant in the finals. He has impressed many here and beat veterans to get this far but here he faces a well-versed star. Hailing from Tokyo… Yamato Yuzuru!
Yuzuru walks onto the stage and towards the ring. The audience cheers as he approaches one of the biggest fights of his career. A few moments pass to allow the audience to cool. Yuzu stretches after appealing to the crowd. Music begins, and the audience explodes into noise.
Announcer: And his opponent! Quite the opposite to his foe, he is a veteran of this competition with experience competing everywhere from Kagoshima to Hokkaido as well as experience overseas in the biggest industry brands. He is the odds-on favourite to take it all! From Hachinohe, Aomori… YARAI!
Yarai walks out with black and purple gear. He has a sleeveless black shirt with the words “Freelancer” in purple. He walks down the ramp smiling and waving. He enters the ring by rolling under the bottom rope then climbs up on of the turnbuckles and raises his arms. The crowd quiet down as the two fighters approach the centre of the ring.
Yarai: I saw your matches before, you’ve got a lot of talent for someone your age. Your teacher must be proud
Yuzuru: Thanks, I’ve seen some of your matches too. Sorry to say that I knew that you were going to be in this tournament when I entered, so I made sure to check out some of your work.
Yarai: Scouting the opposition, smart. I’m looking forward to seeing how you use that info. May the best man win (stretches out his hand towards Yuzu)
Yuzuru: (Shakes Yarai’s hand) Yeah. Looking forward to it
The two begin to walk to opposite corners. Yarai stops
Yarai: Oh! I noticed you and another guy in the crowd making some ruckus during the women’s match
Yuzuru: That’s because Hana is a good friend of mine. The other guy is a wrestler too, though he’s injured at the moment
Yarai: Ah, it’s good to see such talented prospects. Let’s me know what I need to do to stay on top
Yarai reaches his corner. Ichiro and Hana reach their seats in the crowd
Hana: He’s gonna be okay, right?
Ichiro: Yeah. This is his big chance, there’s no way he’d lose here. Cause Yuzu is…
Shot changes to the referee starting the match. As soon as he does Yuzu flies out of his corner in an instant, kicking off the ground. He catches Yarai off guard and hits a massive flying clothesline
Ichiro: a genius (Shot is still the clothesline)
The crowd roar in surprise. Yarai sits up looking at Yuzu, he wipes his lip with his wrist and smirks. He anticipates a boot to the face and spins out of the way and uses the momentum to stand. Yarai hooks his arm around Yuzu’s neck from behind and pulls to hit a sort of reverse snapmare takedown, in the same motion that Yuzu lands on his stomach Yarai moves into a crossface wrenching away at Yuzu’s head. Yuzu quickly repositions to put Yarai in a pinning position but Yarai kicks out at 1. Both stand and stare at each other, wracking their brains trying to think of the next move and all the different counters
Yarai: Not bad kid, looks like you are sound technically. Let’s test those strikes
Yuzu: Bring it!
Yarai rushes forward and jumps aiming both feet at Yuzu to hit a shotgun dropkick, but Yuzu side-steps and attempts a double stomp which is evaded. Yarai tries to hit a strike from behind but Yuzu predicts it and hits a backwards heel kick which connects, he then spins to hit an Enzuigiri. Yarai dodges and hits a running knee strike to the now grounded Yuzuru. Now it is Yuzu grounded whilst Yarai stands above him
Yuzu: (Thoughts) Gotta predict the next move. Can’t get caught behind!
Yarai fakes a shotgun dropkick, Yuzu falls for it and tries the same evasion spin Yarai used earlier but is caught in a stunner by Yarai
Ichiro: Not good!
Yarai stands. Yuzu took significant damage from the stunner and a little shaky. Yarai underhooks Yuzu’s arms in a butterfly hold but lifts him off the ground. Yarai keeps Yuzu in the air for theatrics then drops Yuzu so that he would land on his feet but quickly lifts his knees to connect with Yuzu’s stomach
Ichiro: Damn it, he hit it!
Hana: What?
Ichiro: A move that he made his own, the Butterfly Gutbuster. Yuzu’s in trouble!
Yarai moves into a pinning position, the referee begins to count
Referee: 1,2…
Yuzuru just kicks out in time, saving himself from losing the match. Yarai stands while Yuzu holds his abdomen
Yarai: Come on kid, get up!
Yuzu struggles to his knees. As he does Yarai puts Yuzu in the same Butterfly hold he used before
Ichiro: Come on Yuzu, you can’t let him hit that!
Hana: Get out of it Yuzu!
Yuzu gets a sudden burst of motivation and pushes forward so that he spears Yarai into the turnbuckles. The hit forces Yarai to unlock the hold giving Yuzu an opportunity. He sets Yarai up in a suplex position and lifts. Yarai reverses it by shifting his body weight so that Yuzu loses grip. Yarai lands behind Yuzu and attempts to catch Yuzu in a waist lock but Yuzu hits a back elbow then hits a falling pele kick (overhead kick). It catches Yarai in the temple, Yarai doesn’t fall however. He is slightly stunned by the move. Yuzu quickly stands and lifts Yarai into a suplex holds for about half a second and transitions it into a falling spinebuster
Hana: Graveyard Smash!
Ichiro: He got him!
Yuzu lands the move at Yarai’s feet and uses his own to cover Yarai’s arms. This is a pinning position that is difficult for many to escape. The referee begins the count
Referee: 1,2…
Yarai kicks out. Yuzu begrudgingly accepting the kick out and standing. Yarai stands, just about staying stood. He furrows his brow getting obviously irritated from almost losing. He quickly rushes towards Yuzu
Yuzu: (Smirks and thinks) Caught you!
Yuzu hits a huge Superkick, Yarai backflips onto his front after taking it
Yuzu: (Thoughts) You really do have a bad habit of losing your cool in bad situations and rushing your enemy. Let’s finish this
While Yuzu thinks this, he lifts Yarai into a headscissor position and lift him for a powerbomb.
Ichiro: Powerbomb! If he hits it, he wins!
At the apex of the hold Yuzu feels a sharp pain in his stomach from the Gutbuster earlier. He drops Yarai because of this and Yarai takes the opportunity to lock in the butterfly hold and brings Yuzu’s head crashing into the mat. Yarai instantly pushes Yuzu so his shoulders are down and covers him
Hana: NO!
Ichiro: Kick out, kick out, Kick out!
Referee: 1,2…..thr-
With merely hundredths of a second Yuzu lifts his shoulders. Yarai is shocked, fully believing that the match was over. He has both hands on his head then looks at the referee
Yarai: That wasn’t three?! (He looks as if he had seen a ghost. Completely dazed at how much damage Yuzu took yet still managed to escape the pinfall)
Referee: The left shoulder lifted before the three count. Two count (He holds up two fingers to signify the count)
Yarai sits in shock for a few seconds but soon that shock changes to a smirk, he slowly gets to his feet, the match has taken its toll on the two and Yarai seems to sway slightly as he stands.
Yarai: Gotta hand it to you kid, I’ve taken out better men with that move. You’ve got guts. But I’m stopping this now
Yarai climbs through the ropes and then up the turnbuckle, taking his time
Hana: (Still holding her wrist against her temples, almost grinding her teeth in anxiety) oh god what now? (she says to Ichiro, her voice wavering slightly)
Ichiro: He like a lot of veterans realised early on that sometimes one finishing move wont work, they use an alternative finisher for situations like this. His just happens to be from the top rope… Yuzu is in serious troub-
Ichiro stops as he sees Yuzu stumble to his feet
Yuzu: I… Won’t go down that easily
Ichiro: That’s it Yuzu! You can do this!
Hana: He can’t pin you when you are stood! Don’t back down!
Yarai smiles
Yarai: I’m really starting to like you and your friends, kid.
Hana: Wait…
Ichiro: What?
Hana: Yarai went to the top rope to hit his finisher, right? Whenever you use diving moves you hit a prone target. So, if Yuzu stands up, then Yarai can’t hit the move, right?!
Ichiro: Usually you would be right
Hana: wha?
Ichiro: His finisher is…
Yarai: Unfortunately for you I can still end you!
Yarai leaps from the top rope towards Yuzu with his elbow aimed at his heart
Ichiro: A Flying Elbow
But Yarai notices at the last second a change in Yuzu’s stance and a look of pure concentration in the eyes of his foe
Yuzu: LOCK… ON
Yuzu had expected the Elbow and set a superkick in Yarai’s flight path. It connects, almost completely knocking Yarai out. The crowd are stunned but they erupt in awe
Ichiro: HE GOT HIM!!!
Hana: ONE LAST PUSH!!
Yuzu picks up the prone Yarai into a powerbomb, he feels the same pain as he did earlier
Yuzu: (thoughts) This is my chance, I WON’T GIVE IN!
With a warrior roar, Yuzu powers through the pain and plants Yarai with an emphatic Powerbomb
Ichiro & Hana: PIN HIM!!!!!
Yuzu covers the downed Yarai
Referee: 1,2…3
The audience explode with noise though two distinct voices are much louder. Yuzu rolls onto his back trying to catch his breath, work through the pain and deal with the emotions
Announcer: Ladies and gentlemen, here is your winner and the new reigning competition champion… Yamato, YUZURU!
Yuzu stumbles to his feet, using the nearby ropes to help him stand. Hana rushes into the ring Ichiro stands in the crowd smiling at his friend
Hana: You did it! (bearhugs Yuzu)
Yuzu: (breathing clearly impeded by the almost sobbing Hana) Hana… can’t… breathe
Hana: (lets go of Yuzu quickly) Ah, sorry (smiling away)
Ichiro walks over to the two of them. Yuzu looks up and smiles
Ichiro: Nice win, champ (holds out his fist)
Yuzu hits Ichiro’s fist while the two smile at each other. Yarai collects himself, looks over at the three, smiles and quietly leaves the ring to allow Yuzu to soak in the glory.
Skip to after Yuzu leaves the ring and has had time to relax and get changed. The three are leaving the event with two major wins. As they are walking they hear a voice behind them
Yarai: Yuzuru!
The three turn around and see Yarai. He, like Hana and Yuzu is taped up with bandages and other healing applications.
Yuzu: Yarai. Where did you go after the match? I wanted to thank you
Yarai: Can’t be stealing the champ’s limelight, you should know that wrestlers only ever do that for people they respect. You put on one hell of a show kid. My people were right about you it seems
Yuzu: What do you mean?
Yarai: Well. I wasn’t being completely honest with you… I knew who you were. Same for you, Koizumi Hana, Sakurai Ichiro
The three are taken aback
Yarai: You see I don’t enter that tournament to win. Oh, but don’t worry I didn’t go easy on you at all, in fact I got way too into it. I enter the tournament to be a test dummy
Ichiro: Test dummy?
Unknown voice: For us
The three look to the left to see a man in a white suit
Suited Man: The name is Yukinori Miura, perhaps you’ve heard of me?
Hana: Are you another one of those modelling company guys?
Miura: Not quite, though you could say it’s a similar role
Ichiro: If I’m not mistaken… you are a scout for Teikoku (Empire)
Miura: Empire, ULW, JCPW, APW… it’d probably be more accurate to say I’m a scout for all of Japanese wrestling.
Yarai: I’ve been working with Miura for a few years now, I’m sort of the contact between Empire and him, so any talent Empire wants will be seen by me. This is kind of like my second job. We’ve been aware of you three for about 6 months now and have been in most of your big matches.
Yuzu: I thought you were with Empire
Yarai: I’m a freelancer. Technically I’m not under only one contract. I have good ties with Empire and my contract states that I can appear in other promotions as much as I like as long as I help bring new talent in. The owner’s shopping list is long and you three are on it
The three are speechless once again
Miura: If you do decide you want to join Empire, you’ll be signed to the developmental system. Do well there and you have an entire company to dominate.
Yuzu: This- this is crazy. I dunno what to say
Yarai: Oh, believe me I’ve been there. Kids your age don’t get to the big leagues this quickly but for the boss to personally name you as talent he wants on his payroll, it just goes to show how good you are. So, what do you say? Think you are ready to join the biggest brand in Japanese wrestling?
The air is heavy and the three are silent. Ichiro lifts his hand up towards his head, looking down at it as it stops at waist height
Ichiro: A plethora of the world’s greatest wrestlers all in one company? I’m getting fired up just thinking about it… I’m in
Hana: (grinning with excitement) Empire’s women’s division only started a couple years ago, and now they’re showing the world what we can do… I’d be an idiot to not want to be a part of that
Yarai: Good, that’s two. What about you, Yuzuru?
Yuzuru stays silent. He lifts his head up and looks to the sky and closes his eyes. The scene at the beginning of the chapter plays. Then, darkness and we hear the voice of a young boy echoing in the mind of Yuzuru)
Young Voice: One day, I’ll be a champion! Just like you!
Yuzu opens his eyes, and looks at Yarai with a determined look
Yuzu: I’m in
Yarai and Miura grin and begin to walk away
Yarai: Keep an eye on your phones. I’ll give you a call when the boss is ready to see you.  I look forward to when I can fight you both. I can guarantee the girls are itching to see what you are made of as well Hana.
We waved goodbye to Yarai and Miura. It took a lot to not just scream into the air like a bunch of idiots. But we had finally made it… We headed home, only imagining where this winding road would lead us. But one thing was certain, we would take this opportunity with open arms and never ever let go.
Cut to Yarai, he is in a car along with Miura. He takes out his phone dials out and holds it to his ear. The shot changes to an office, dimly lit office covered by the orange glow of the setting sun. A figure is stood at the window looking outwards. He picks up his mobile phone
Shrouded Figure: How’d it go?
Yarai: They’ll be there
Shrouded Figure: …good work (hangs up)
The figure flips his phone closed and holds it in his hand. He looks down at a file with Yuzuru’s image next to it on his desk
Shrouded Figure: Yamato, eh? Let’s see what kind of legacy he left you.
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