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Chapter 18 : Cursed

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The scene began in complete darkness accompanied by torrential sound of rain and the ringing of ceremonial bells that slowly reveals itself soon after of a memorial site for people to pay respects for the dead in a drizzling , gloomy afternoon , three years later . A small crowd of people dressed in black gathered around a casket with the name 'Gail' engraved on the cover in the midst of being lowered awaiting proper burial . Among the crowd , young Layla is seen holding young Ron's hand while she looks at him , both clearly had grown closer to adulthood .

Young Ron (Solemn) : *Mindless and lifeless gaze at the casket* ...

Young Layla (Thought) : *Stares at young Ron's face , concerned* ... papa ...

Young Layla kept a curious but pained eyes at young Ron , motionless and dead and blank in expression while the people who were there mourning began leaving the area one by one until there's no one left there , except for the both of them . The remaining natural light that lit up the scene soon starts fading away , consumed by the growing dark clouds which led to much heavier downpour , soaking young Layla and Ron completely . They've remained there ... motionless and unchanged for minutes that felt like hours . Losing the fight against the cold from being soaked for too long , the same can't be said for him as he seemed unfazed , she tried to call out her brother , only to have a disgusted as his wrinkled severely and gradually while still retaining that dead stare at the casket for a moment before slowly looking down towards her . His empty yet haunting stare frightens her , promptly stopping her from calling him out .

Young Layla (Terrified & Hesitant) : *Forced grin and trembling* Papa , you okay ?

Young Ron : ... fine ... everything's going to be all right ...

Young Layla (Thought) : Papa , you're scaring me ...

Young Ron : *Turned head in a slow and lifeless manner away from young Layla and walks away* ... everything's fine ... as long I don't stray from the path ... we'll always be together ...

Young Layla : *Coughs several times* ... papa ...

"Everything's fine" , "As long I don't stray from the path" , "Together ... forever" ... he mutters to himself as he walked away from his little sister , distraught and lifeless as young Layla stood there motionless and displaying signs of being sickly , unable to bring herself to be by his side no more like she used to before the passing of Gail as she can only watch him slowly distancing himself without a trace of awareness or familial care and love to even comfort his little sister , let alone take a look back or even call out for her to come along to his side , something she'd internally wished he do at the very least . And so she waited , waited and waited until he vanishes from her sight under the thick veil of shower , even knowing already that he will never turn back and be by her side like always , she kept on waiting ...

"... papa ...

What happened to papa ... ?

... why did papa leave me alone ?

... please ... don't leave me ..."

She wept and begged in her mind until her body can't take it no more and fainted on the spot ...


Moments later , inside a bedroom of someone's house , a large bed covered in white sheet nestles in the corner next to an opened window with its complementary curtain flutters from a cool breeze billowing into the room . Frisse is seen seated by the bed , currently occupied by young Layla , with an oil lamp placed next to it on top of a wooden side-table .

Young Layla : Unngh ...

Frisse : Ah , take much rest , dear . You're having high fever from fainting under the cold shower .

Young Layla : Aunt Frisse ... . Papa ... where's papa ...

Frisse : Sorry , dear . When I found you , he's nowhere to be seen , not even here , in my late-friend Gail's house .

Young Layla : ... papa , where are you ... please don't leave me ... *started tearing up*

Frisse : There , there now ... he'll be back , trust me . Now , get some more sleep ... (Just where did he disappeared to ? Leaving her like that ...)

A series of scene of young Ron wandering aimlessly around the rural residential and semi-urban commercial districts , distraught and lifeless . At one moment , he began smiling , albeit in a creepy manner as if he is smiling out of insanity .

"Papa did came back to me and kept me safe and happy like always ... but papa didn't remained by my side for long . Everytime papa came back to me papa looks so sweaty , sometimes papa is covered in all sorts of icky stuffs all over ... but everytime ... papa is always so tired . The time we spent together got shorter ... most of the time papa is either out somewhere or fast asleep from being too tired . Papa even never take a bath before going to sleep and the clothing papa papa had on was all weird ... I've never seen such clothing .

But otherwise , papa always returns my happiness like he used to , like always ...

... always ."


Four years later , in a poorly-lit alleyway at the back of a restaurant early afternoon where young Ron , now had grown into his mid teen dressed in an attire of the restaurant staff is seen hauling a big and heavy rubbish bag over and into a large dumpster .

Male staff : *Screaming from inside* Shift change ! Shift change ! All morning shift are to check out within an hour !

A call out has been made , marking the switch in shift , but he continued to work for the entire hour before ending his work shift . After scanning his ID , he sprinted without hesitation out and passing by several buildings , pedestrians , street and city landmarks , utilities and commercial banners , all the way to the front of a large bookstore , Eligor's Fine Books . Through the window and by the counter , an elderly man with greyed-out hair and short beard in black vest ,white shirt and brown trousers is seen seated onto a stool , is seen in the middle of writing something on a small notepad . Behind him seated by a narrow staircase , a teenage girl , from the slender figure and the notable chest , despite her head being concealed by the flooring for the second floor , is seen in preoccupied with a book in hand .

Bookstore owner : Ah , if it isn't Ron . Looking to purchase another book for a read together with your little sister ?

Young Ron : I don't know yet . Can I browse through your collections first ?

Bookstore owner : Go right ahead .

And so he began browsing through aisle after aisle of books stacked and arranged on bookshelves of towering heights , imposing and intimidating especially for a youngster like Ron as if its closing or even raring to topple over onto anyone who gazes onto it for too long . Assorted types and kinds of books can be seen being sold in the bookstore , from old to new , wafer-thin to dictionary-thick , comic books to educational textbooks for all ages and ideals . Somewhere along one of the many secluded aisle , he idles in front of stacks of what seems to be a collections of thick-covered brown , vintage books and began browsing through all of it for minutes . One particular book , old-fashioned , worn-out book with a large golden title in front of it - "The Golden Pass To Utopia" caught his attention , prompting him into picking it up and headed straight towards the cashier counter to make a purchase .

Bookstore owner : Ah , this book ... how intriguing that you picked that up .

Young Ron : It was ?

Bookstore owner : Before it was just a fairytale storybook , it was once believed to be a telling documentary of a mythical phenomenon .

Young Ron : *Smile* I'm sure she'll be happy to read it along with me .

Bookstore owner : Oh , how sweet of you . I hope you keep spending as much time you could spare with your little sister , okay ? That'll be 1000 herskels (Writer's note : Roughly $1.50) . Half price discount for regular customer .

Young Ron : Thank you ! I'll be off now , bye !

Bookstore owner : *Waves him goodbye* Bye ~ .

Teenage girl : Pops , who is he ?

Bookstore owner : A regular customer . How unusual for him to be even working at his age ...

Teenage girl : ... I agree too .

A human perspective full view of a partially decrepit , wooden-plaster , single-storey bungalow nearly devoid of color all worn out by nature , surrounded by overgrowth with garden flowers jotting out of it indicating signs of lack of maintenance . The concrete pavement that leads to the garage are riddled with cracks and chips with overgrown lawn grass bleeding over the sides of the pavement . The interior of the garage is barely visible from thick concentration of dust kicked up by wind entering it as if the garage door hasn't been closed for years . Young Ron is seen running towards the front door with a book he purchased not long ago from the bookstore and a bag of packed meals in hand . Young Layla , grown up like a freshly bloomed daisy , dressed in a white one-piece dress , stood by the front door waiting for someone's return as she dazes towards the sunset sky coughing occasionally .

Young Layla (Elated) : Papa ~~~ ! *cough* Welcome back home .

Young Ron : Are you okay ?

Young Layla : *Nods* Perfectly fine . Don't worry ! *Grins*

Young Ron (Hesitant) : ... are yo-

Young Layla : Perfectly fine ! *Pouts*

Young Ron : Okay , okay . Come , let get to eating before we get to a new storybook I've picked up on my way here .

Young Layla : Ya- *coughs hard* !!!

Young Ron (Worried) : Are you sur-

Young Layla : *Hands up , stopping young Ron from finishing his question* I screamed too hard there ! *grins and blushes* .

Young Ron : *Deep sigh of relief* You got me worried there for a second .

Young Layla : Teh heh !

In a dimly lit bedroom , the ceiling lamplight 'struggles' keep the room constantly well lit . Young Ron and Layla is seen seated on a bed meant for adults , happily reading the book Ron bought not long ago together while having their meal .

Young Layla : Ooo ... so interesting . I wonder if we can get one of it ... *looks at young Ron motionless with his eyes partially opened* ... papa ?

Young Ron (Thought) : ... why can't I shake off the feeling of de ja vu ?

Young Layla : *Shouts close to young Ron's ear* PAPAAA ~~~ !

Young Ron (Startled) : AAA ~~~ !!!

Young Layla : *Pouts in anger* ...

Young Ron : S-s-sorry ? Just feeling very sleepy right now . Aren't you too ?

Young Layla : Uh-huh .

Young Ron : Okay , let me tuck you there ... and there we go .

Young Layla : ... um , papa ?

Young Ron : Yes ?

Young Layla : *Turns away from young Ron* ... nothing . Nighty-night ...

Young Ron : ... *Shrugs off and goes to sleep*

And sound asleep he is the moment he laid his head onto the pillow , while being watched by his little sister with a sad expression . She then hugged him from behind and pressed her forehead onto his back as she began to tear up and sobs but her cries didn't wake him up at the slightest bit ...

"... I can't do it ... I can't say it . Aunt Frisse ..."


The scene where both young Ron and Layla is transitions into a flashback scene of her seated up in a bad condition , coughing and hacking in a disturbing and horrifying manner while being tended to by Frisse .

Frisse : You're not getting any better ever since when I brought you back from the cemetery unconscious . I need to tak-

Young Layla : No- *Coughs and hacks from sudden raise in voice , followed by taking in deep breaths* ... no , please . Papa must not know that I'm gone ... papa must not know I'm not okay !

Frisse : Bu-

Young Layla : NO ! *Coughs* ... papa must not know , papa shouldn't ... or else , or else ... papa'll end up like before , back then . *Shedding tears* ... I don't want that ... that's not papa I love ! *Curls up and buried her head behind her legs under the cover of her arms , crying*

Frisse (Solemn) : *Forlorn expression as she watches young Layla , helpless* ...

"... I can't ... I must be happy for papa ... I must ."

The next day , in front of young Ron and Layla's house late evening ...

Young Ron : (Hmmm ? She's not waiting for me by the doorway ...) *Looked around the compound* Laylay ? ... where is she ?

In an ever increasing state of fear , young Ron yells throughout the house looking for young Layla's whereabouts . Upon entering their bedroom , he discovers her still in her bed . Thinking that she may sound asleep , he tip-toed towards her and jolts her up but she didn't get awaken from it . His act of shaking her up causes her entire body to move and shuffle around like a rag-doll , her body felt cold to the touch of his hands , he began to panic . Distraught as he feared for the worst , he carried her lifeless body out of the house and ran towards the nearest known hospital , still very exhausted from his day job as he struggles to inhale every breath while keeping his frantic , hasty pace without dropping her or falling over .

Inside the emergency ward waiting room of Feuller General Hospital ... few hours later . A doctor is being accompanied by a nurse as they exited the emergency room and immediately gets greeted by a distraught young Ron , still drenched in sweat from tiredness and fear .

Young Ron (Desperate) : Is she okay ?! Tell me she's fine !

Doctor : Yes , she's stable for now . She ... she seems to be very anemic (Which is odd for her age . What's causing it ... ?) .

Young Ron : Th-thank you for the good news ! Can I visit her now ? Please ? I need to be by her side ... forever .

Doctor : Not yet . We're still running a few more tests to make sure she doesn't have any other undiscovered or underlying illnesses . Please be patient until then .

Young Ron : ... I'll wait right here . *sat himself down on one of the chairs by the ward*

Moments later , most of the lights in the room had been turned off as to allow the patients to sleep .

Doctor : *Wakes young Ron up* Mr. Ron ?

Young Ron (Groggy) : Umhh ... doctor . What's the result ?

Doctor : *Sigh* ... Leukemia ... final stage .

Young Ron : Huh ? Leukemia ?

Doctor : It's a form of life-threatening cancer . Give or take , six months to a year to live ...

Young Ron : W-wait ... you're kidding me ... right ? You're telling me ...

Doctor (Solemn) : ... I'm sorry .

Young Ron (Despair) : No ... no way . This must be a lie , a dream ... why me again ... why us ... *drops down onto his knees , trembling in tears* ... I did what you asked me to . Why ... I don't understand .

Doctor (Thought) : *Averts gaze and walks away* ...

Young Ron : No ... *shakes head violently* NO ! She's perfectly fine ! *Ran in front of the doctor and grabbed him by the collar of his coat* Aren't you a doctor ? Cure her of "Leukemia" ! DO IT !!!

Head nurse : Sir ! Stop what you're doing this instant !

Young Ron : *Lets go of the doctor* ... sorry . But please ... I beg of you ...

Doctor : ... though in her current state the chances of curing her illness is very lo-

Young Ron : I'll take it !

Doctor : (Can you afford it in the first place ? I can tell it's impossible ...) ... the treatment's expensiv-

Young Ron : I don't care ! I'll take in more jobs , even if it cost me my life ... whatever it takes to return to the way it was ... the way we were , I'd do it ! Just give her the treatment !

Doctor (Solemn) : ... *Deep sigh* alright . *Pulls out papers for the treatment from his file in his hand* Fill up these form for the approval . We accept deposits of a minimum 10% per treatment cost . If you wish to see her , she is resting in room 444 .

Young Ron : *In tears , relieved* Thank you ! *Fills up the form*

Head nurse : *Whispers* Are you sure it's the right thing to do ?

Doctor : Hospital policy . He has the final say on this matter ... much to my dismay .

Inside room 444 of the Intensive Care Unit inside Feuller General Hospital , young Layla is seen seated upright with her back resting against the hospital headboard , with several IV tubing attached to her hands located by the window .

Young Ron : *Swings the door wide open* Laylay !

Young Layla : RonRon , You're here ! ... why am I here ?

Young Ron : Everything's going to be alright !

Young Layla : RonRon ?

Young Ron :  I'm going to make everything better ! for both of us ... I have to ... I must !

Young Layla : RonRon ... what are yo-

Young Ron : Wait for me ! I'll be right back after getting rid of the "monster" infesting our base ! Wait for me ! *Runs off*

Young Layla : W-wait !

"Like always ... like always ... like ... always ... *tearing up*"

As she clutches one of her hands close to her chest with much agony and pain having to to accept her fate and the outcome she longed to keep it hidden and away from realization , away from his brother's mind ... she can no longer hold back her tears and cried out the entire night .


Inside the receptionist hall of Feuller General Hospital , young Ron is seen ransacking and flipping browsing through numerous newspapers and magazines taken from all of the racks on the floor .

Ron (Thought) : *Skims through the 'Jobs and Application' section of a newspaper , looking for available job* ... just what did I do wrong to deserve all of this ? Why can't I see it ? Why can't I understand still ? Why ... WHY ?!

The scene gradually gets consumed by darkness that prolongs for the remainder for the page , as if nothing had happened after that for a long time , but gradually returns back to the same room where young Layla is , seated upright facing young Ron , seemingly in the middle of a conversation .

Young Layla : It's been a year already . Why can't we return back home ?

Young Ron : The "monster" had adapted and my current attacks no longer works on it . *Smiles* I need more time to prepare the means to attack that . We'll get it back from it and then , we can go back together like always . So , please wait for a while longer .

Young Layla (Gloomy & thought) : ... you're lying , aren't you ?

Young Ron (Nervous) : Uh ... is that a problem for you , LayLay ?

Young Layla : *Shakes head* ... it's nothing . *Grins* If you say so , RonRon . I'll wait !

Young Ron : *Sigh of relief* Okay then ... I'm leaving now . I need to attend a "meeting" with someone ASAP .

Young Layla : U-uhm ... *nods* . Come back soon .

Young Ron : ... *Bittersweet smile* I will ... *leaves room*

Young Layla (Solemn) : *Watches him leaving the room* ... please ...

"... after that time ...

After the "meeting" ... that "meeting" , whatever had happened after that ...

Tomorrow , a couple of days , several days , a week , a few weeks and then a month ...

Those were the time papa were together with me , but everytime papa were with me ...

Papa grew more distant from me ...

Papa grew more and more tired ...

Papa often struggle to keep up with me to read a storybook together ...

Papa hardly ever smile along with me like papa used to , make funny jokes , play along , or even have a long , happy talk , just the two of us ...

... papa ... what happened to papa after that "meeting" ?"


A month later , late night in the same room ...

*Sound of door opening*

Young Layla : *Turns focus towards the door , expecting young Ron to greet her* Welcome back pa- ... pa ... .

And as expected , young Ron greets young Layla ... but not in the way he would before she was hospitalized . With his thin and frail body and facial expression , drained of all the energy and spirit he used to have , he struggles greatly to make his way towards young Layla lying in her bed with much effort , on the verge of collapsing midway , The horrific sight threw pales her into a state of deep panic , prompting her to get out of her bed in an attempt at help him out .

Young Layla (Horrified) : Papa , what happened to you ?!

Young Ron : *Stopped young Layla , smiles unenergetically* ... just ... tired ...

Young Layla (Solemn) : RonRon ... why ...

Reluctant , young Layla remained in bed and watches the struggles of young Ron in despair and grief as he dragged a nearby chair next to her bed with much effort and struggle . He then sat with force , as if he couldn't bear to stand for another second and collapsed by the side of the bed next to her .

Young Ron : Sorry , LayLay ... I forgot ... to bringgh ... strry ... booh ... *fell asleep*

Straight into a deep sleep he goes under as he is being watched over by young Layla with a pained and sombre expression . She places her trembling , frail hands onto his head and caresses his disheveled hair and sweaty forehead in a gentle manner , an act of comfort she could only offer for being helpless in the situation , as tears starts falling down from her eyes . She wept on for the remainder of the night under the company of the moonlight beaming onto them in their bed , illuminating them among the pitch-black darkness of a bleak , bland room ...

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Develop Your Story / Re: "La Sanctum" Club (18+)
« on: September 25, 2018, 01:03:05 PM »
Chapter 17 : Memories

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Flashback scene of an unknown rural slums of few dozens rundown shacks and huts surrounded by plains of tall thatch and sparse concentration of trees 16 years ago . The scene in question focuses on one particular shack , riddled with holes and signs of decay from the environment . The scene finally snaps to a close-up shot of a family photo , all happy and smiling , inside a wooden frame placed on top of a drawer slowly pans out , revealing the insides of a rundown wooden shack . A couple is seen quarreling against each other physically and verbally as they threw household items at each other , causing them to be strewn all over the place , broken , bent or in shambles with a number of them flew near or onto the little boy's back as he covers a little girl underneath him from flying debris . The boy is seen putting on a pained smile as he looks at the little girl , visibly trembling and crying from the horrifying terror that unfolds right before their own presence , fearing the worst .

Middle-aged lady : *Hurls a plate towards her husband* How dare you come back here AGAIN ! Leave us ALONE and rot along with that WHORE !

Middle-aged gentleman : Same goes to you ! What kind of example you're trying to be , HUH ?! Being a gambler and drug addict while making our children go begging on the streets to feed your addictions ! "GOOD example" to you , HUH ?! You've got to be kidding me .

Middle-aged lady : "MY" good example is that I took care of the kids by putting food on the table for them while you whore yourself out EVERY F***ING DAY ! All that bills goes right up her p***y must've felt better than seeing me and your children happy , do you ? HUH , DO YOU ?!

Young girl (Terrified) : *Weeping uncontrollably* I'm scared ! I'm scared ! I want to ... to ...

Young boy : *Grins in pain* Everything going to be fine . Just ... stay under me . I'll find a way out of here ... I promise .

As the couple feud continues to intensify in violence and destruction , the young boy is seen comforting and protecting a young girl under his body from the heinous scene unfolding in front of them , attempts at making an escape , waiting for the right time to do so . As soon as the escape opportunity presents itself to young Ron , he grabbed her by the waist and sprinted out of the house . In the middle of a chilly night , they're forced wait it out under such brutal environment until the situation dies out . Only a brief moment had passed and he notices her shivering from the cold as she fell asleep from mental fatigue , he wrapped her in a tight embrace in an attempt at keeping her warm as he himself slowly succumbed to the bone-chilling cold of the night , gazing towards the star , reminiscing something in his mind .

"... they're fighting again ...

*Deep , sorrow-filled sigh*

Why do they fight ? ... Ron don't understand .

We used to eat , play , gather and sleep together .

... used to ..."

Young Ron gave a forlorn look at her little sister in his embrace , still shivering from the cold night ...

"Until the moment she joins us .

... my little sister ... why ... what did she did wrong ?

I don't understand ... I ... don't ..."

And so they spent the night sleeping under the freezing moonlight , struggling to keep each other warm . A flashback memories of the times when he , being the only child of the formerly happy family came plays in his dream , reminiscing moments that he can longer enjoy anymore ...

"Mama ... papa ..."

And soon after , those memories began fading away and another memory of the moment when he confronted his mother , all bruised and battered from what could be from an abuse from her husband as of recently , seated in a slumped manner with her head being held by both hands facing down as she stares at the surface of the table with trembling and hysterical eyes .


Young Ron : Mama ?

Ron's mother (Delirious) : I should've known *manic giggle* ... I should've not trusted him ... I should've not loved him at that time ... ... I should've not strayed off the path I was on ... I shouldn't have ... *manic giggle*

Young Ron : Ma ... ma ?

Ron's mother : *Turns her attention towards his son , emotionally wrecked* Son ... do you love your mama ?

Young Ron (Stunned) : ... !

Ron's mother : ... do you ... ? *Stood up and swept the contents on the table off* ANSWER ME !

Young Ron (Terrified) : !!! I-I-I-I-I do , I DO !

Ron's mother :  *Hysterical laughter for several seconds before pausing and taking in a deep long breathe* ... aaah , you appreciated my love , my devotion ... my sacrifices , my all ... for the family . *Snaps head towards her son with manic gaze* Say ... are you ... betraying me as well ?

Young Ron : *Trembling in fear* H-h-h-how can I do that , mama ? You're my mama and I love mama and-

Ron's mother : Then ! *Immediately kneels before her son and hugged him* Please ... don't stray off the path . Stay by my side ... just the two of us ... please ... please ... please ...

Young Ron : I will not , mama ... I will not .

"... but mama never do the same for her own daughter . It's as if she wasn't in her mind ...

I tried asking mama ... many times ... mama never answered back ...

Keep reminding me again ...

So I do as she say ... so that we all can be together again like we used to ... forever ... but ..."

Young Ron was then woken up by a sound of door being closed nearby . Greeting him in his wake , his father , with his dark brown , spiky hair all messed up , along with stains and torn fabric all over his blue shirt , black suit and his matching trousers from the recent tussle and brawl with his estranged wife was just by the door .


Young Ron : ... papa ?

Ron's father : Shhh , keep it down ... *Give a nudge stare at his daughter* you too .

Ron's sister : *Nods* ...

Young Ron : You okay there , papa ?

Ron's father : I'm okay . Here , something to keep you warm . *Gave his children each a cup of warm milk*

And so both young Ron and his little sister , properly insulated by blankets given by their father , sips on the warm milk as they keep their father accompanied in complete silence .

Ron's father : *Scratches on head* ... I feel sorry for you two . I might've brought much trouble by bringing both of you into this world to begin with .

Young Ron : What you mean , papa ?

Ron's father : *Sigh* A child like you will never understand ... but I can't help but to fear not being able to and when you're old enough , to confess the reason for our fighting ...

Young Ron : Papa ...

Ron's father (Gloomy) : I'm not being a good father ... and soon , I won't be ... listen , Ron . I want you to be her papa and take good care of her from today onward . Make sure she's shining around you , okay ?

Young Ron (Shocked) : Why you say that , papa ?

Ron's father : Just do as I say ... until my return back from work ... *got up and left them behind* ... until then ... I hope .

And I did what papa told me to ...

... but papa never return ... why ?"


A month later , morning , both young Ron and his little sister seen being kicked out of their home by their enraged and deranged mother .

Ron's Mother : How dare you justifying your use of the money I asked you to collect for me to put food on the table being used to get her this piece of junk ?! *Tosses a torn-up teddy bear onto the ground and grinds it with her own foot* Get the f*** out of this house . I don't bear children of a big time cheater and liar !

Young Ron : But sh- *Screams in pain after being stomped onto young Ron's exposed wounded back from the last incident by his mother* GYAHAH !

Ron's sister (Shocked) : Stop it ! You meanie !!!

Young Ron : *Stops young Layla* I- ... I'm fine . *Grins* Everything's all right ... don't worry .

Ron's mother : "Everything's all right" my foot ... hurh , like father like son , taking that whore kid's side over ME ! You can go f*** her , make her your f*** mama for all I care ! You are to never return here EVER AGAIN ! *Slams door behind her*

Ron's sister : Why are yo-

Young Ron : *Stops young Layla once again , shakes head* ... forget it ... come , let's go ...

Ron's sister : U-umm ... okay .

Facing with the cruel reality of the lost of their only shelter and "safe haven" from the outside elements behind , unable to return for good , they're forced to embark on an aimless journey with no goal in mind . They walked along uncharted roads and dirt path , through unknown places , terrain and environment that are treacherous especially to kids for hours , like lost lambs desperately looking for their flock to return to . She continued to cling firm out of fear onto young Ron's tattered shirt , despite feeling exhausted and in pain from the long walk , fearing that she will lose her bearings and the only one she knew ever since she was born , fearing he might vanish unknowingly ...

Young Ron (Thought) : I can't allow anymore sad things ... must not make her unhappy ... stay on the path ...

Ron's sister : Uhm , where's papa ?

Young Ron : Huh ? Oh ... mama said that papa's not coming back anytime soon ...

Ron's sister (Sad) : ... no , I don't want that . I want papa with us ...

Young Ron : *Grits teeth upon hearing her pleas for a moment before relaxes* ... don't worry . Didn't I tell you that everything's going to be fine ? See ?

Ron's sister : ... see what ?

Young Ron : See me ? You want papa ? I can be your "papa" for the day ! *Attempts at imitating his father's voice rather humorously* Go ahead , call me "papa" . Go on , go on , go on ~

Ron's sister : *Giggles* You funny , "papa" !

Young Ron : *Smiles* There you go . All happy again ... (... I can tell she's barely hanging on keeping up with me , walking aimlessly ... I need to do something ... something ...)

And his thoughts trails off into silence ...

Two years later , a bird's eye view of an unknown rural commercial district , several paved streets and roads criss-crosses through small , single and double-storey shops consisting of restaurants , thrift stores , bars and other sorts with streetlights , public trash bins , an assortment of vehicles and pedestrians of all walks of life dots the streets , roads and sidewalks on a busy afternoon . In the alleyway behind one of the restaurant , "Golly's Diner" , young Ron and his little sister is seen on a run from something or someone , carrying with them cardboxes , several plastic wrappings and a bag filled with scrap food .

Store owner : Get out of here , you filthy squatters ! *Throws a boot at them*

Young Ron : *Gets hit in the back by the boot* Ughh !

Ron's sister (Shocked) : Papa ! You okie ?!

Young Ron : C-codenames ! Our codenames !

Ron's sister (Startled) : Eek ! Sowwy , RonRon !

Young Ron : *Smiles* Nevermind me , let's make our escape , okay ?

Ron's sister : But-

Young Ron : Don't worry about me . Look , we've got a new enemy above ! *Points at the gloomy clouds hovering above them*

Ron's sister : Yeep !

Young Ron : Run like the wind , LayLay !

Ron's sister : *Pretend injured after feeling several drops of rain on her skin* Agh , I've being hit !

Young Ron : Quick , to our homie !

A view of a rickety shelter of soaked cardboxes under a large tree at the top of a mound , carpeted in grass and flowers in the middle of a rain , young Ron , completely drenched is seen erecting a plastic sheet above his little sister's head with branches and cardboxes , keeping her dry , as a temporary solution as their shelter no longer has the structural integrity to house them under for shelter from the downpour .

Young Ron : Welp , there goes our homie . Got to gather new boxes afterwards ...

Ron's sister : You okie there , papa ? That hit on your back must've hurt lots ...

Young Ron : Hahahah ... yup , I'm fine . Didn't I tell you ? Don't worry about me . Everything's fine !

Ron's sister : B-but ...

Young Ron : *Impersonates a grown man* No pain , rain or cold shall bring me down . I'm a MAN ! *Snorts*

Ron's sister : *Laughs hysterically at his impersonation* ... hey , I got something to say .

Young Ron : Hurmm ?

Ron's sister : Me confuse ... everybody in the place we go to often keep calling each other with weird callings . Mathilda , Luca , and you , Ron ...

Young Ron : Oh , you meant a name , huh ? (My parents hadn't given her a name ever since she was born ...)

Ron's sister : So , what's mine ? Is it LayLay ?

Young Ron : Hurmm ... *deep in thought for quite a while* ... Layla . Yeah , that's your name . Your codename's after that as well , like mine .

Young Layla : "Layla" ... *giggles in happiness and huddles close to young Ron* I like it ! *Took a deep yawn and fell straight to sleep*

Young Ron : *Watches her taking a nap* ... I'm glad you did ...

The never-ending downpour of spine-chilling water droplets took a toll on young Ron's weakened and tired body as he struggles to keep the plastic sheet in place . It wasn't long before he succumbed to the cold as he passed out leaning onto the big tree behind , letting go of the plastic sheet cover as it now only covers her , exposing him to the weather . He began to hear voices in his dream , waking him up in the middle of what could be just a white room , surrounded by a field of light colored flower . He began looking around for the source of the sound and notices a blurred figure approaching him , prompting him to make a cautious retreat away from it .

??? : You do not have to fear me . I'm here to bring forth a ray of hope that'll guide you to what you're looking for ...

Young Ron : W-w-who are you ? Stay away ...

??? : I'm the one whom you seek for answers to your problems in life .

Young Ron : Problems ? With my life ? What are you talking about ? Everything's fine to me . I'm doing just fine !

??? : ... your answer you seek ... has arrived ...

Young Ron : What are you talking about ? Wai ~ ... *Scream trails off , scene blacks out gradually*

Young Layla : Papa ! papa , papa , wake up !

Young Ron : *Wakes up* ... ummh , oh ... what is it ?

Young Layla : *Points in front of her* Lookie there .

Standing before them , an elderly women dressed in a one-piece loose , thick dress , frail from the appearances alone . Being held up by a single wooden cane , she presents them a spare umbrella for them to use to shelter themselves from the rain . She offers them a delightful smile of the old as she greets them .

Elderly woman : Hello there , sunshine .

Young Ron : *Backs off , held young Layla in his embrace* ...

Elderly woman : There , there now , sunshine . Young don't have to fear me ...

Young Ron : I don't trust you ...

Elderly woman : You fear me ... understandable . By the way , I know of you ... and her .

Young Ron : ... what ? How ?

Elderly woman : I pass by these area every other day . My home is just downhill . Your daily life is being played within my sight on a regular basis enough to know that . Where are your parents ?

Young Ron : ...

Elderly woman : There , there now , no pressure in answering it . Say , why don't the both of you come and stay in my house ? I'm sure you'll fare better under a proper shelter .

Young Ron (Apprehensive) : ...

Elderly woman : *Smiles* I've got homemade cookies waiting for you back there .

Young Layla (Happy) : Cookies ?! Yay !

Young Ron : Laylay !

Young Layla : She's a nice person because she offers cookies !

Young Ron : ... but-

Young Layla : You no trust me ?

Young Ron : No ... it's just ... *a momentary pause* ... okay .

Young Layla : *Jumps around in joy* Yee !!! Papa approves her kindness !

Elderly woman : *Giggles* Off we go , sunshines .

Still cautious as ever , young Ron is being "forced" to follow the elderly woman back to her house by young Layla as she firmly held his hand , leaving behind their dilapidated cardboard shelter soaked by the rain in a state of disrepair . Young Layla starts humming unrecognizable lullaby as they walked slowly along a dirt pavement that cuts through a stretch of thicket towards a small rural settlement out on the horizon in front of them . As they reached in front of a wooden-plaster , single-storey bungalow , they were greeted by a short-haired lady , dressed in a red-white patterned blouse and a white long skirt , waiting outside the house , holding a pot in her hand .

Short-haired lady : Oh , you're back , Miss Gail .

Gail : Oh , if it isn't Frisse .

Frisse : I've brought you what you need ... and who are these children behind you ?

Gail : Oh , them ? Some lost souls whom needed my care . I've stumbled upon them many times as my make my trip back and forth from shopping always playing around the large tree on top of that mound .

Frisse : Oh ... *looked towards a terrified young Ron a short distance away from Gail* ... awww , don't be afraid of her . She's the nicest lady within our community . She took care of my children before while I needed to go somewhere else for a long time . I'm sure she'll take good care of you two *grins* .

Young Layla : *Jumping* See ? See ? See ? I told you she's a good person !

Young Ron (Apprehensive) : U-umm ...

Frisse : Anyways , I've got to go . I'll get some spare clothing for them tomorrow . *leaves the scene*

Gail : Oh , how sweet of you . I appreciate your kindness ! *waves* ... come , sunshines . Let's get you all cleaned up and well fed first .

Young Layla (Happy) : Yay , Food ! Me hungry !

A series of scenes depicting young Ron and Layla being taken care of by their new surrogate mother , Gail in her house .

With the care of their newfound surrogate mother Gail , both young Ron and Layla had their first proper , full meal in years around a small wooden table that was meant for a small family of four , filled to the brim with mouth-drooling meals fit for a banquet like soups and stews , proteins , carbohydrates and greens , gobbling them up in a insatiable and messy manner in pure bliss of a properly filled tummy are they're being monitored by Gail , smiling throughout the moment . Soon after the wholesome meal , she led them to the bathroom for much proper cleansing of body . Seated down on a foot stool , she began scrubbing both young Ron and Layla thoroughly until they're pristine clean , free from dirt and germs they've accumulated for years being exposed to the outdoors while both enjoyed their first ever tingling and ticklish sensation of being scrubbed and wiped all over , unable to contain their laughter every now and then . She also took her time drying them up with towel and hair drier before dressing them up with spare clothing she had in her house . Throughout the whole time under her caring and gentle care , young Layla had being showing a very broad , gleeful grin and humming harmoniously to the occasion while young Ron is seen watching over her once in a while as he put on a rather modest smile . After much drying up , she ends the night with getting them into bed by using an unused room of her house , tucked them in their bed and offer them one last kiss on their forehead before leaving them to sleep peacefully .

Young Layla : *Giggles to self for several seconds before turning towards young Ron* Papa , you've been staring at me a lot ...

Young Ron : Ah , sorry about that . Did that bother you ?

Young Layla : *Nods quickly several times* You creeping me lots .

Young Ron : Ahahahah . Sorry about that ... I'm just reaffirming something .

Young Layla : Liaffiming something ?

Young Ron : *Nods* Yep ...

Young Layla : What is it ?

Young Ron : *Smiles and pinches young Layla's cheeks lightly* This smile confirms it . Keep smiling on , okay ?

Young Layla : Oh . Okies ! *Goes to sleep*

Young Ron (Thought) : "Happiness" ... huh ...

A series of scene depicting the happy moments of young Ron and Layla enjoying life alongside their surrogate mother , Gail .

And so they spent their lives under the loving care of a cheery surrogate mother , Gail as both young Ron and Layla begin their journey into discovering the feeling , sensation and pleasure of fun , freedom and happiness like any children do - zipping around the compound and nearby the house with abundance of energy and spirit , rolling around the lawn grass together while laughing together , playing with butterflies flying around the flowerbed nearby , having loud yet cheery conversations together around the dining table and by the front porch , having a springy stroll around the countryside alongside their surrogate mother , regular dose of bedtime storytelling for them , to name a few , a time gleefully spent unhindered , unrestricted and fully for days , weeks , then months and even for the entire year or two . One day , they had an unexpected call for a photoshoot of the three together by their surrogate mother to be taken by Frisse . After the picture had done processing , she then presented it to both young Ron and Layla for them to admire , putting on a bright smile as they take a look at the photo of them smiling brightly that was taken not long ago . As they were ogling on the picture , he notices Gail making her way out and to the backyard for her routine relaxation and followed her there .

Young Ron : Ummh ... Aunt Gail ?

Gail : Just call me Gail , sunshine . Say ... you're Ron , right ?

Young Ron : Yes .

Gail : Ah , pardon my rudeness for forgetting your name . Old age does mess with memories , after all *light laughter* ...

Young Ron : I-it's fine .

Gail : And your little sister ... Layla , right ?

Young Ron : Yes . I gave her the name since my mama and papa never gave her one .

Gail : Goodness gracious me , how terrible ...

Young Ron (Thought) : ... Aunt Gail didn't remember the conversation she had with me just a week ago ... I don't understand .

Gail : Say , what brings you here ?

Young Ron : *Nods with a light smile* ... it's nothing , just here to say hi .

Gail : I see , I see ...

A moment of silence ensues as Gail resumes enjoying the background of a coming sunset while young Ron kept looking at her for unknown reason ...

Young Ron : Ummh ... Gai-Oh- Bwuergh ! *Gets gored by young Layla*

Young Layla : There you are ! TAG ! *Gores young Ron to the ground* Catch me if you can !

Gail (Happy) : My , my , my ...

The sudden sound of something being shut with force is being made , turning the scene of both young Ron and Layla playing a game of tag in the backyard while Gail watches over them all happy a pitch black before the gradual sound of rain and the ringing of ceremonial bells can be heard within the darkness ...

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Develop Your Story / Re: "La Sanctum" Club (18+)
« on: September 25, 2018, 01:01:10 PM »
Chapter 16 : Justice

Spoiler
A full frontal view of Alinna's stone mansion basking under the searing morning light on the following day , columns of mainly Corinthian order acts as support beams for the building itself , the floors and its flat-top , well-ornate white roof . White marble-granite blocks of near-perfect geometric shapes makes up the walls in-between the columns , leaving parts of the columns visible in the exterior , with series of equally highly-ornate arched windows dots its surface . In front of the building , a large marble statue stood in front of the building and a centerpiece of the scene with the driveway made of cobblestones encircling it . A well-maintained hedges forms a natural divider between the driveway , the mansion and adjacent gardens surrounding the mansion and a forest of spruce that surrounds the entire mansion . An unknown vehicle is seen making its way to the building .

Alinna's butler : Oh , a guest . *Approaches and readies himself to greet the person in the car*

A dark-glassed lady with a charismatic stature and posture , dressed in a black work suit with its matching tie and trousers emerges out of a luxurious car and made a quick scan of her surroundings before being welcomed by Alinna's butler .

Alinna's butler : Oh , Lady Vanessa , it's been a while !

Vanessa : Is my little sister at home ?

Alinna's butler : What business do you have with her , madamme ?

Vanessa : I'm here because she called me to meet her . The reason is classified .

Alinna's butler : Understood . She's in her bedroom .

Vanessa : Thanks ! *Walks into the mansion*

Vanessa strides her way up to the second floor , but immediately changed her pacing and movement as soon Alinna's room is within sight as she tip-toes slowly towards the door . She stood there for a brief moment and starts taking in deep breath and-

Vanessa : ALINAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA ~~~ !!!

The roaring howl of a lion rocked the entire mansion off of its foundation , rattling the life of those within the vicinity - the maidservants and butlers , cooks , gardeners , utility workers and the person most affected by the "calling" , Alinna , who squealed incoherent vocabularies the moment she hears it . Ron , who was nearby , is still curled in the corner , muttering to himself and Alinna's personal butler by the door , wasn't fazed by Vanessa's actions

A short side solo-shot scenes of Ron and Alinna's butler who was by the door .

Alinna's butler : *Sigh* That's very Vanessa Zhu . Ah , memories ...

Back at the scene where Vanessa is ...

Vanessa opens the door leading into Alinna's room to inspect on her . Stationeries were strewn about around , with blotches of spilt ink from a toppled over inkwell staining the carpet flooring and its all over Alinna as well , with few small pieces of paper stuck on certain parts of her face as a result of the ink . She is seen on her rear on the floor in the middle of the mess as a result from the sudden screaming made by Vanessa .

Vanessa : *Snort* ... gotcha .

Alinna (Furious) : It's not funny at all ! Didn't you get the memo at all ?!

Vanessa : Oh ? I thought it was so that I don't startle you like this everytime we meet ?

Alinna : You think I'm the kind of person who would joke around freely ?! We were all keeping our activities as discreet as possible because I got a friend of mine here who is having a mental breakdown nearby ! Thanks to you , he might go through it again !

Vanessa : A-ah , my bad , my xiao meimei (Writer's note : "Adorable" little sister) , my bad , okie ? I can't help but to pull a quick prank on you . So don't be mad at me , pleeease ?

Alinna : *Turned away dissatisfied* Hmph !

Vanessa : Awwh ~ . But it's also your fault too , you know ? I miss you so much ... *pouts* I feel very lonely ever since you last contacted me , sooo lonely . Paperworks , meetings , business travels ... *presses two fingers together on and off*

Alinna : ... fine , I'll forgive you . Just stop welcoming me in such a manner , will you ?!

Vanessa : *Sticks tongue out* Teehee , yee ~~ ! I promise I won't ? !

Alinna (Skeptic) : *Picks up a box filled with what looked to be tapes* (Your cringy behavior says otherwise ...) Anyways , here ! *offers them to Vanessa*

Vanessa : Oh ? What's this ?

And so Vanessa began listening to the tapes , plugging both ears and had her focus on what's being recorded in them . She had her serious expression on her face for a period of time until at one point , her expression began distorting into a state of disbelief as cold sweat began forming on her exposed skins . She continued on listening until the very end and when it was done , she pulled out her earphones with the last expression still being shown as if it was already frozen onto her permanently .

Vanessa (Disbelief) : ... Allie (Writer's note : Alinna's nickname) , is what I'm hearing now ...

Alinna : Yes , you heard it right . Your much needed 'leverage' ...

Vanessa : But , this is too real to be true . It's like this person literally unhinged , blurting out without a single care in mind of the consequences !

Alinna : Yyyeph ...

Vanessa : What did you-

Alinna : It wasn't me .

Vanessa : ... then who was the lady in the recordings ?

Alinna : A monster .

Vanessa (Puzzled) : A ... monster ?

Alinna : Monster , mythical beings , ethereal manifestations of god , whatever it is you wanted to call them , that is if you do encounter them , if anything , it's anything but human . They're the one pulling the vital and important strings on the defunct plan of yours while I provided the gadgets you've given to me before that they quote "not familiar with but otherwise be of use to them" . If you're not convinced yet , why don't you meet the mastermind behind the success and ask her yourself ? She even asked you to act now .

Vanessa (Shocked) : H-hold it ! What's the rush-

Alinna : "Better execute the attack now or risk the chance of a failure again" ... *Shakes head in total disbelief* don't ask me why or how she knew you'd be in no rush to pursue immediately into delivering the coup de grâce but I had to agree with her suggestion . So , you'd best act quickly or he might find out about it and begin thwarting your plan once more . Oh , if you do want to thank her still , don't bother looking for her ... she will come to you instead .

Vanessa : *Creeped out* ... o ... okay ... *leaves the scene*

Alinna : *Sees her big sister's departure* ... *deep sigh of relief and satisfaction* ... finally ... *gazes at the ceiling above* ... Ron ... hang in there until then .

Several days later , back inside Planning & Development (PD) Department ...

Life goes on for the staffs working the department , mundane , burned out and unlively , all but Wuhrer , doing what he'd always do the moment he was assigned as the chief of the department , having his legs perched on the workdesk seemingly in a state of bliss , preoccupied with the handheld device in hand ... until the CEO stormed into the department unannounced , accompanied by a couple of law enforcement officers , catching all , especially Wuhrer , by surprise . Clearly mad from his flushed red facial expression dotted by bloated veins alone , he makes a beeline towards Wuhrer's work desk , seemingly in an attempt at confronting him .

Wuhrer : *Hid away his handheld device before the CEO had a chance at spotting it and stood up immediately* B-b-boss ! ... and cops ?

Company CEO : Wuhrer , you are fired , effective immediately . *Signals a go ahead directed at the police officers behind him* Arrest him .

Wuhrer : Heh ? Fired ? Arrested ? Is this a surprise prank for me ?

Company CEO : Do I look like I'm in the mood to pull a prank on you ?

Police Officer : You're under arrest under second-degree negligence-

Company CEO : Don't even bother to listing the crimes he committed and names of the affected ones .

Wuhrer : Wha-what are you talking about ? I did noth-

Company CEO : *Pulls out a report written by the Chief Management of Mailing Department* I do now . Take him away ! I want to have a talk with the staffs here in private . *Sees Wuhrer being taken away*

Wuhrer : *Struggles to set himself free* That's baseless accusations ! You've got nothing on me - none of you all do ! NOTHING !!! I'll be set free soon and I'll get even with you and everyone in this sh*tty place for putting an innocent gentleman like in the hell HOLE !

The live arrest and removal of Wuhrer , fuming from the "false" accusations made by his CEO , out of the company to be taken into custody caused a commotion among all the staffs currently present within the department , a never heard before situation for a department that was known to be eerily silent . Most of the staffs expressed their disbelief and surprise over the sudden booting of Wuhrer off the company , even more so when he is also arrested , otherwise they had a grin and elated expression on their faces . Joshua , who is in the midst of the "celebration" , just smiles along , knowing that the person he and Alinna wanted to see finally getting justice being served to him on a platter and he glances towards Atramille every once in a while , as she is seen observing the situation occurring right before her eyes , as if she's accessing it .

Company CEO : ... *Clears throat* everyone , please calm down and be seated . I would like to make an announcement . First of all ... *Bows a full 90 degrees* ... my deepest , sincerest apologies to all of the staffs of this department for all the suffering he had caused that I wasn't being informed of and condolences to the victims of his doings that took their lives . It was irresponsible and neglectful of me as the CEO of Hoff's Advertising Agency for not making sure that all those who work under this roof are to be treated with care and respect , something that is a core for all company's health . I should've made a routine visitation but instead I relied on the reports given by my the representative of each department ... and placed too much faith on their words and duties . *Bows again* I deeply regret this decision of mine ...

The CEO's sudden act of bowing in front of them , expressing his deepest regret and guilt for his shortcoming and for what Wuhrer had done to the staffs of his department that he hadn't realized it sooner in addition to that he took his time to come down here to deliver his feelings about the situation caught the entire staff in the department in complete surprise , silencing them up .

??? : *Stood by the entrance* Apology alone had very little compensation value in nullifying the damage caused by his actions .

Company CEO : What do you expect me to do then ... "Corporation's Harbinger of Death" ? Raze this company down to the ground and be part of the remnants of companies you have set your eyes on and ruined as well with your authoritative and influential power of your family's name ?

Vanessa : First , if you already knew that I'm a daughter of a very influential family of power , let me remind you as to who ratted out the mole behind your company's dark reputation for the past several years . If you got the memo then refer to me by my name - Vanessa Zhu ! Consider this as a warning or I'll go ahead and do exactly what you think I am going to do if you're feeling lucky , then you can go ahead and call me by that "title" and rot along with those failures of businessman and entrepreneurs because that's what they resort to while not admitting to their own cowardice and immaturity , blaming everything but themselves for the failure in keeping their own company afloat , so that makes point number two . Third , yes I'm here because you're on my radar but no , I came here for these people , not you and your company's pitiful demise from the wound being inflicted by that person . That fault's on you for quote ,"placing too much faith on their words and duties" . Power is the most dangerous tool mankind can get hold to and because of that , it has ways to corrupt the wielder . You shouldn't had given too much power to your right-hand men and leave them do their thing unsupervised .

Company CEO : ... I-

Vanessa : If you still believe that I'm here for this company ... *made a charismatic approach towards the CEO* you open to my ... "propositions" ?

Company CEO : What ?

Vanessa : I know , I know ... "It's rather rude and disrespectful for someone who had zero relations and ties with my company to make any form of propositions , demands and requests . Therefore , I will reject any propositions of yours" , right ?

She then pulls out and flashes a portable tape player and proceeds into playing it , seemingly in a taunting manner . What's being played is an audio conversation between Atramille and Wuhrer , where it plays the part of the conversation where Wuhrer reveals his plot at defaming the CEO into retirement . And as soon as it was being played , she stops it and glares at the CEO with a menacing , darkened gaze and expression , as if she is peering deep into his soul .

Wuhrer : That CEO is so oblivious of what I've been scheming , that I had no problem building up my case in order to frame him .

Atramille : What kind of case are you talking about that you're in the middle of building ?

Wuhrer : It's an attack on his reputation by tarnishing his Achilles heel , the company itself . It's his father's company after all , so it must've been hard for him to maintain and keep watch over it . So what I did first is to add more burden by taking in lots and lots of projects . With more projects comes with more workload for the employees in the company and thus , more paperworks for him . It went swimmingly as he began giving more power to the department chiefs over control of their staffs . That's when I began phase two , which is-

*Tape player stops playing*

Vanessa : Need another reminder ... again ?

Company CEO (Pale) : *Given in to her terrifying gaze* ... state your proposition ... please .

Vanessa : Glad that you got the message . NOW ... *offers him a sheet of paper listing the "demands" made by her for the CEO to adhere to*

"
Agreement of Responsibility

This agreement is created in response to the success of a nearly a decade old plan initialized by the agreement proposer , Vanessa Zhu , with the goal of finding out the source/root cause of all the rumors , allegations and dark reputations that stems from this company and means to pursue a lawsuit against the company (if it were the case) and/or the person responsible for smearing the same bad reputation onto a company under the supervision of Vanessa Zhu , Miracle Pharmaceuticals , which nearly garnered bad press worldwide .

The goal of this agreement is to offer means for the CEO of Hoff's Advertising Agency , under the proposer's (Vanessa Zhu) terms , means of reparation for all the damages his company had suffered due to the actions of Wuhrer Gordolla that had gone unsupervised and unmoderated for nearly a decade by offering a joint effort between the CEO of Hoff's Advertising Agency and the Chief Advisor of Miracle Pharmaceuticals , Vanessa Zhu , both affected by Wuhrer's countless act of unruly , inhumane misconducts and tyranny . The agreements are :

1. You will hereby to submit your resignation from your position as the CEO of Hoff's Advertising Agency effective within a month to Vanessa Zhu personally . Replacement CEO will be decided by Vanessa Zhu or representatives of her trusted right-hand men via a board meeting through voting , not on the basis of next in-line promotion (Vice CEO , for example) . Your history , achievements , acclamation and contributions to the company before the creation of this agreement will remain .

2. In addition to your resignation , you will be offered a new position that puts you in a temporary position that is considered as "indirect involvement" to the company , as a hired guest supervisor (an unofficial position exclusive to the oath/contract to the company itself) to serve alongside me (Vanessa Zhu) who will assume the position of chief advisor for the newly-elected CEO to take the reign , once you've submitted your resignation letter to Vanessa Zhu . Your position will be treated as a job and therefore , will be given monthly wages (will be set upon employment) and mandatory retirement bonus for when you officially retire from the job .

3. The revenue income generated and reserves will be split 10/90 to you and the other to Vanessa Zhu , the proposer of said proposition . The profit and the reserve money Vanessa Zhu owns and control will be funded to a charity focused on aiding the victims of (mainly) Planning & Development (PD) department once managed by Wuhrer by offering them a lump sum of wealthfare and healthcare funds accordingly (monetary compensations) .

4. You are do your part and fulfill these duties given to you by Vanessa Zhu as part of the reparation process of company's reputation and integrity (or if it was beyond reparation , damage control would have to do) :
- Retrieving/relinquishing seized possession(s) currently owned/held by Wuhrer , bundles of letters and mails ceased by Dushlam Police Department via reporting an appeal/pardon . Upon a successful claim , you are to deliver them (personally) to their respective recipients , or the representative of recipients who are either permanently incapacitated physically , mentally or pronounced deceased (Which is claimed to be true) .
- Making an official apology statement/speech to/for the current employees working in the Planning & Development (PD) department in the most direct , truthful and honest manner . This also extends to the public media , should they decide to cover it .
- Claim responsibility in reparation process and fulfilling the proposal given by Vanessa Zhu by making use of the company's reserves to pay for the wealthfare and healthcare to those affected .

5. You are to immediately assume a low profile and remain silent from here upon signing this agreement on anything pertaining to the case at hand , about the agreement itself and your personal opinion and statements about it unless being asked to by Vanessa Zhu and any of her trusted associates for legal and safety reasons .

Upon agreeing to this agreement , you are hereby relinquishing control of the company to Vanessa Zhu , who will be in charge of the reparation upon the eviction and arrest of the root cause of the company's current state that the public has established it as . Pray that it wasn't too late ..."

Beneath it , two underlined spaces on each end meant for signatures to be signed on , with one being signed by Vanessa herself while the other was left blank , meant for the CEO of Hoff's Advertising Agency's signature and an additional note scrawled on by someone .

"I want you to seize control of Wuhrer's personal bank account and use it to pay off one of my friend's outstanding debts he had accumulated throughout his years of suffering working in that damned department under his merciless grip , along with those permanently affected heavily by his "actions" .

- Alinna Zhu , the person responsible for ratting out the person responsible for the gradual and ever-rotting state of your company's integrity and reputation ."[/font][/size]

Company CEO (Baffled) : ... this "demands" are outlandi- *got interrupted by the sight of Atramille , who stepped in-between them out of thin air* ... who are you ?

Atramille : Pardon me for interrupting into your conversation but as part of the worker working in this department , I would like to offer my story that may help better your perception on the discussion at hand , if you don't mind .

Company CEO : ... alright , I'm listening .

Vanessa (Thought) : ... is she the one my sister was talking about ?

Moments later after Atramille is done telling her story to the CEO and Vanessa ...

Atramille : I have done my part and therefore , take my leave now . *Bows and leaves*

Vanessa : Well ?

Company CEO : That's ... not what I wished upon my own employees when I took over this company on behalf of my deceased father ...

Vanessa : I take that as you finally see the fairness of the agreement , considering the amount of "garbage" and "faeces" he had dumped and smeared all over your company , while you are being as blind as a bat to not realize it , quoting that from your Chief Management of Mailing Department I've just talked to before coming here . *Whistles out calling for someone*

Vanessa's man : *Enters the scene and presents her with a mystery box* Here you go .

Vanessa : Flip the box here with care , please . Thank you ~ ? . *Reveals its content - more tapes similar to what he had in possession and a tall stack of papers* Here , sir , is just a tiiiny fraction of his "mess" . Personal top priority copies , of course . Had to reason real hard with the cops just to get exemption for all of these ...

Company CEO : *Inspects the pile* Company feedbacks , police reports , eulogie- ... wait , eulogies ?!

Vanessa : From the family members of the deceased former employees from this department . Some of them even went public , didn't you know ? Were you living under the rock when all of this is happening around you ? "Reasons , reasons , reasons" ... you know what , you can simply not sign the agreement and let you deal with thi-

Company CEO : *Signs the agreement , disgruntled but out of own free will* ...

Vanessa : *Shrewd smile* ... hmph . It's a deal then . *Snatches and rolled the signed agreement paper* The gears are now set into motion ... *points at the crowd of employees of the department* starting with them . *Waves and leaves the scene*

Upon leaving the scene and the company CEO all to himself with the crowd of restless and agitated employees of PD department , he began getting swarmed by comments and complaints by them causing him to panic as he tries his best at damage control , alerting the rest of the employees nearby into investigating the commotion occurring within their vicinity . Meanwhile , as Vanessa makes her exit out of the building , she stumbles upon Atramille standing under a taxi stand , waiting for an available public transport to take her somewhere and immediately approaches her .

Vanessa : *Taps on Atramille's shoulder* Excuse me , miss .

Atramille : How may I help you ?

Vanessa (Hesitant) : Uh , you ... are you th-

Atramille : Yes .

Vanessa : ... heh ? I haven-

Atramille : I came forth to the scene because after much proper observation and listening in on your conversation , I can conclude that you're the person Alinna had been referring to whenever she brought up the plan as a topic to discuss . I presume you must be her elder sister , is that correct ?

Vanessa : *Sigh* Then both of us was right . She said you would come to my attention instead of looking for you and I assumed that person was indeed you walking into our negotiations . Yes , I'm his elder sister , Vanessa Zhu .

Atramille : *Bows and curtsy* Atramille de Surquouis , at your service . If you'll excuse me , I must hurry back to Alinna's side to resolve another pressing matter at hand before it's too late . *resumes wating for her transport* .

Vanessa : Ooo ... I'm heading there as well . I'll take you there instead .

Atramille : *Bows* Much appreciated . *Got into her limousine with her and drove off together to Alinna's house*

Night , inside the main hall of Alinna's house , Alinna , Libra and her 'sisters' who had payed a visit before is seen waiting for someone or something to come by the door in a very solemn manner .

*Creaking sound of a door opening*

Vanessa : I'm back .

Alinna : Oh ... how it goes ?

Vanessa : *Two thumbs up* Better than I've expected .

Alinna : Oh ... good then .

Vanessa (Confused) : Aren't you supposed to be rejoicing over this ? *Looks around , noticing a crowd of people not familiar to her , looking all tense and gloomy* ... everyone's so gloomy here ... just who are these people ...

Atramille : *Bows , walks past by both Vanessa and Alinna and made her way upstairs* I'll be going to him now to deliver the news .

The eerie and suffocating silence persists even after Atramille left the scene and on to the second floor and eventually to the room where the still-deranged , half-dead Ron resides , without any known update on his current status of his physical and mental health for more than a month . Not one of them had that will to even speak out a word in the scene , not even Libra nor Alinna , to answer anything , to speak of what that is to come next that must happen above them that will break the will and minds of the unprepared . Unable to take the silence for long , Vanessa began questioning the reason behind such drowning and ominous atmosphere ...

Vanessa : *Whispers* Pssst , Allie ... don't you think you should tell me why ... like , now ?

Alinna : ...

Vanessa : *Whispers in frustration* Come on , Allie . You can't leave me hanging clueless when I'm already here , you know !

Alinna : *Points up* ... him .

Vanessa : Your friend ? Why him ?

Alinna : *Deep long sigh , filled with sorrow and fear* ... I'll keep it short and brief .

On the second floor of the same building , Atramille just made it up to the second floor by the stairs . She then takes a long , heavy walk along the moonlit corridor beaming from the glass arch roof above it that run through doors and doors of closed rooms and potted plants placed on top of pedestals on both sides before reaching to the unilluminated end of the corridor and at the front door of the very room where Ron was last seen and currently is in , where the natural lighting from the moonlight doesn't reach , and freezes on the spot .

Atramille stood motionless for minutes , lost in thought in front of a door leading to an isolated room where Ron resides , being guarded by one of Alinna's maidservant . An eerie and frightening silence freezes the entire room a stale , cold atmosphere , enough to make the composed Atramille sweat in fear of what unforeseeable yet undeniably ugly outcome lies upon delivering the letters she had in her hand to him as she hesitates on opening the door right before her . She walks away from the door and basks herself under the moonlight for a moment to relieve her from the tension and worries , allowing her to recompose herself before making another attempt at completing what she had set herself to do all the while . She gave the maidservant a nod , prompting the maidservant into unlocking the door and leaving the room in haste - she musters up her courage and determination into the opening of the door . Musty , damp odor jets out of the room , blasting it right at her the moment the door's opened as she briefly held her breath in to wade it it . Greeting her by the corner end of the room is Ron , slumped lifelessly by the wall , with IV tube attached to his arm and wearing an adult diaper instead of a regular pants . The stand holding several IV and other unknown medical fluid and the now-burnt out incense made by the sky blue-haired lady lies next to him , an indication to his current health .

Atramille : ... Ron ... I've brought something for you ...

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Develop Your Story / Re: "La Sanctum" Club (18+)
« on: September 25, 2018, 12:39:22 PM »
WARNING : SEXUAL CONTENT AHEAD!

Chapter 15 : Karma

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In the living room of the villa owned by Ron's boss , romantic lighting lights up the room , with soothing orchestral music being played from an expensive looking set of stereo surround sound speakers , in an attempt in raising the 'romantic' atmosphere . On the glass coffee table surrounded by glossy black sofa set , a plate full of assorted chocolates and other mouth-washer bites , accompanied by a bottle of fine wine and a couple of crystal wine glass , all looked luxurious and exquisite that only the rich and famous could afford and enjoy . Atramille is seen seated before it and next to her with his arms stretched out , seemingly relieving himself .

Ron's boss : *Takes a deep breath* Hahh , I'm stuffed . I gotta say ... you look stunning ! *Takes a deep whiff near Atramille's neck* ... and you smell ... exotic . What's your secret to such alluring pheromone ever since the day our eyes met ?

Atramille : Thank you for your compliment , monsieur . *Light smile* It wouldn't be a secret if I told you in the first place ... don't you think ?

Ron's boss : My , my , my ... you know how to keep a gentleman like me attached to you for as long as you want . Anyways , forgive me for even questioning your personal secrets . I'm just a bit ... apprehensive with anything happening around me due to ... well , it's a secret *snide and lustful smirk* . Oh my , where are my manners ~ ! Name's Wuhrer ... *kisses Atramille's back hand* Mr. Wuhrer . (Writer's note : A homage to James Bond)

Atramille : I'm curious ... Mr. Wuhrer , why would a decent person like you who did nothing wrong would need to be apprehensive with his surroundings ... could you perhaps enlighten me with your problem ?

Wuhrer (Apprehensive) : ... do you know of Alinna Zhu ?

Atramille : "Aleena Shoe" ? *Tilts head in confusion*

Ron's Boss : Hurmmph ... (Strange ... I can't shake off that feeling that she might being truthful about not knowing her . Oh well ...) . Wait here , be right back . I'll bring something that might enlighten you . *Runs off into his bedroom*

Atramille : *Bows* Certainly ...

The moment Wuhrer's enters into his bedroom , Atramille began meddling with her armlet , revealing a couple of different but otherwise strange-colored tablet stored within a small compartment inside the armlet . She immediately consumed one of the tablet and dropped the other into the drink that of Wuhrer's , swiftly dissolving itself completely without leaving a trace of its existence . She then pulled out a bottle filled with dull-colored liquid from her purse and began masking it all over her in a very light coating before returning back to her idle state , awaiting Wuhrer's return .

Wuhrer : *Closed the room door and makes his way towards Atramille with a box filled with papers* ... okay , I've brought them . But ... (Hurrrm , even though I believe that she has no relationship with that eyesore , why am I ...)

Atramille : *Approaches Wuhrer and offers him the drink spiked with the diluted strange-colored tablet* I can understand that what you are going to show me are meant to be kept private . *Approaches him even closer and more intimately* Would a nice , long exchange in conversation be a good start be a good start for you ?

Wuhrer : *Heavy breathing , blushing* W-w-w-why sure , that sounds good ! S-sh-shall we ? *Takes a gulp of the drink in an attempt at recomposing himself* (Woah , that allurement of hers got stronger that I'm starting to get a boner . Is she ... courting me ?)

Three hours later , midnight ...

Wuhrer : Hahaha , right ? If it weren't for the change in the mailing system , I wouldn't had found out about her plan ! Damn , that b***h is good ... but not good enough to outwit my intellect and power !

Atramille : I'm curious ... you're not worried at all . For someone with such respectable intelligence , you're aware about telling such secrecy to complete stranger like me , don't you ?

Wuhrer : Hmm ? Now that you mention it , *scratches head , confused* ... hmmmgh , I don't even know myself . I just feel like I can trust you ... yeah , I do ... do I ?

Atramille : *Nods with a mild yet mysterious smile* Allow me to offer you the 'solution' to all your problems ... *Approaches Wuhrer in a very seductive manner , with one of his arm wedged in-between her chest while placing her mouth close to his ear and whispered in an erotic manner* I can tell , your restless eyes says it all . I'll offer you "that" and you can decide when you want it and in return , I want your trust in me ... that's it . *Picks up a piece of chocolate bite and shoved it into his gapping mouth , following up with a kiss on the cheeks* What do you think , Wuhrer . The . Great ?

Wuhrer : *Gulps down the chocolate , fidgeting and nervous* ...

Atramille : *Slides away from Wuhrer and settles down in the other corner of the sofa* I'll await your call ...

Wuhrer (Thought) : That proposal really is one-sided ... nah , who cares . All that matters is that she knew what I truly wanted from her and she gave me the green light ! *Tight clenching of both fist , cries and grins internally in joy* THE TIME HAS COME ! I'M FINALLY GOING TO GET IT !

Atramille : So , wha-

Wuhrer : *Stood up instantly* DEAL !

Atramille : *Stands up and smiles* ... lead the way .

And so , Wuhrer brings her into his sleeping chamber , all psyched up for the long awaited "action" he longed for , especially from someone like Atramille ...

Inside Wuhrer's bedroom , Wuhrer is seen lying on his velvet bed that could fit half a dozen of him , robed in a white fur sleeping gown , looking up at the lavender white ceiling in a state of daze , whistling gleefully as he awaits his much desired 'reward' . A set of side-tables and front trunks hugging the sides and front of the bed , with a marble work desk being placed at the opposite of the bed , with a safe right under it . Several posters of girls in suggestive dresses and poses are on display all over the front of the work desk and wall-mounted lamps illuminates the posters and the room a dim warm light , creating a romantic and erotic atmosphere .

Atramille : *Approaches Wuhrer on his bed* May I sit ?

Wuhrer : *Heavy breathing and gulps deeply* W-w-why sure !

Atramille : ... *Sits on the bed , back facing Wuhrer*

Minutes of silence passes by with Wuhrer grew increasingly antsy , fidgeting around as he's restrains himself from doing something indecent as he had his gazes fixated on Atramille's exposed back of her dress as she's preoccupied with mending her hair , catching glimpses of her side breast every now and then , challenging his restraints in his lustful urges . Unable to hold back any longer , he lunges towards Atramille , hugging her from behind with one hand tucked inside her dress , groping and fondling her breast while the other wraps around her waist in a lustrous embrace as he began breathing and sweating heavily as a result from drowning himself in lust . Before he could land his first kiss on her , she had one of her hand raised right at his face , with the other pulling his hand away and out of her dress .

Atramille : I have something that just came in mind ... a proposal . Do you have room for one more small request from me ?

Wuhrer : *Face flushed red* W-wh-why sure ! What is it ?

Atramille : Not long ago , I went to the mailing department to obtain a letter meant for me but unfortunately they told me to look for you to get them .

Wuhrer : Oh ? You wanted your letters ? Well , *scratches cheek* I could but ... uh ...

Atramille : *Lays down on bed next to Wuhrer in the opposite direction* Please ?

Wuhrer : *Makes a full sweeping gaze of Atramille laid next to him in a rather enticing manner* ... alright then , only for you ...

Seeing this as an opportunity for Atramille to find out where Wuhrer stashed the rest of the letters , she had her focus and sight on every movements and action he makes , without arousing his attention as he sat in front of a safe that was placed underneath his work desk and opens it . Although she couldn't get a clear sight of him pressing the access codes , she's able to catch on and memorized certain buttons he had pressed before the safe's being opened . Letters and mails pours out as he digs and sifts inside the safe for the letter she requested for . Her expression turned sour as she witnessed before her very own eyes just what kind of person he is , confirming all of Alinna's claims and accusations of him . Realizing that she is in the middle of her duties , she calms and recomposes herself and continues playing her role while he is still busy looking for it .

Moments later ...

Wuhrer : *Closes safe and turns around* Whew , took a while but here it is , your let- ... -ter ...

... A partially covered but otherwise naked Atramille leaning on a headboard in a sultry gesture and stare welcomes him ...

Atramille : Can I have it . Right . Now ? *Waves for Wuhrer to come to her*

*The sound of a flipswitch being flipped*

Wuhrer : *Throws the letter away and leaps onto Atramille , while undressing himself* Bon Appétit ! Here I come ~~~ !

Atramille : Nyaa-hah !

And so Wuhrer , fueled by the built-up , overflowing sexual drive , advances onto Atramille , ravishing her every erogenous parts like a lustful madman . He began indulging himself by sinking his face on her breasts and cleavage , occasionally rubbing on it as his hands does all stimulation to further arouse her - sliding , pinching , fondling and groping , every action sends an electrifying sensation throughout her body , she twitches and fidgets constantly , unable to hold back her moans and groans . However , the irresistibility of her pronounced breasts before his eyes had pushed him over the edge of sanity as he began sucking and kissing on them aggressively accompanied by his relentless fondling in a voracious manner .

Atramille : You're an animal ! I feel god-awfully good !!!

Wuhrer (Elated) : Damn right you do ! I'm a GOD when it comes to pleasing the ladies !

Atramille : Why not skip to the main course of the day ? *Rubs on her soaking wet v****a* Look , you've stimulated me so much , my p***y's rearing to be 'destroyed' by your big , hard d**k ! *Groans* ... ngghh , hurry up ...

In a rather comical way , Atramille's erotic plea for his 'embrace' pumps Wuhrer's libido up , turning him into a literal "ball of fire" , further overloading his sexual desire . Without a moment to pause , he rammed his raging hard p***s riddled with veins that's raring to pop at any moment into her soaking wet v****a with brute force , knocking her back and onto the headboard of the bed , forcing her to let out a loud scream from such impact to her insides , bringing her a blast of sheer pleasure and orgasm upon penetration . A surge of sheer bliss starts coursing through his p***s and eventually envelops his entire body and mind , blocking all means of thought and reasoning . Like an animal in heat with mating being the only thing he had in mind and nothing else , his hips began thrusting instinctively at an increasing pace and intensity , to the point where the heavy bed they're on begins rocking and creaking , straining to fall apart . A series of moans and groans and straining sound of the bed they're on trying to bear the aggressive movements saturates the entire room as the rapid pounding continues on , slowly drowning in lust and pleasure ...

Atramille : *Endless release of groans and moans of pleasure* Ahh ! Nghhh ! Ngaah ! SOOOOO GOOD !!!

Wuhrer : F***ing *censored* , the insides of you feels too heavenly , I can't stop myself from violating them anymore ! Oh sh** , I'm- *Howls* !!!

The scene pans in a direction away from the current event , revealing the other end of the room , offering a panoramic view of the entire room . Atramille , still in her dress , is seen standing by the work desk on the other end of the setting , observing Wuhrer humping his pillow passionately and vigorously , thinking that he's still having sex with her as he moans , groans and screams sexual-related vocabularies alone in his bed .

Atramille (Thought) : *Watches Wuhrer unamused* ... too potent again , but regardless ... *turns around and toward the safe beneath the work desk* ... that 'shiny' box .

Atramille seats herself by the safe in silence , trying to recollect anything she saw not long ago that are vital in unlocking the safe . In her recollection , though not in clear view , she's able to see parts of it through a gap in-between his arm and torso , and fortunately , part of the keypad . Focusing on his finger movements to see what button had been pressed , she able to make out part of process and password . Upon pressing the first button of the partial password she had memorized , the beeping sound being made made her realized that he may have pressed more buttons than what she had seen . Putting herself into a zen-like state of mind , she concentrates on key things she may have disregarded but it came out blank . Looking around for another possible clue to help her figure out the full password for the safe , she discovers a lamp mounted on a wall nearby shining at her . She doesn't seem to mind it at first but as she noticed the direction and placing of the shadow being casted off her body as the result of that lamp . Curious , she places her finger close to the safe and discovers that the shadow is being formed by her fingers in an intriguing manner that seemed vital to her , prompting her to go back to her zen-like state of mind but having her focus on the shadow being casted by his hand onto the safe . Though it wasn't a clear cut , it was still enough for her to make out the remaining buttons being pressed behind his torso by tracking the position of the shadow in-line with the buttons visibly seen with her naked eye and the distance the shadow is from the buttons . With what could be the complete and correct password in mind , she pressed the remaining password on the keypad - "Enter" , "9" , "8" , "0" , "4" , "2" , "8" and then "Enter" again . The loud beeping sounds made by the opening safe startles her , prompting her to take a swift glance back at Wuhrer in bed to check if he was alerted by the beeping sound , only to be relieved that he's still busy with his "activity" . Thanks to his rather 'loud' activities in bed , she turned her focus back to the safe that's now being partially opened by the spilling of contents contained within' - huge piles of letters , along with several oddities that she isn't familiar with .

Atramille : *Stares at the pile* ... I should look for it now ...

*Sound of creaking wooden floor nearby*

Atramille (Startled) : Who goes there ? *turns head towards the source of sound*

??? : It's your cab driver .

Atramille : *At ease* How were you able to get in here , monsieur Danny ?

Danny : Through the sliding door by the living room . It wasn't locked . Say , you're planning on taking back all of these ?

Atramille : I had planned to .

Danny : Well , sorry to break this news to you but ... don't .

Atramille : Why ?

Danny : Well , I'm no law enforcement officer but I've known enough through documentaries that in order to accuse someone effectively , you'd need proof of evidence . Just from the meeting I was involved in last time , I can tell Alinna wants some means to sue her company she once worked in . *Plucks out a letter with a name he's familiar with* Ooh ? Ain't these person one of my regular customer ? God , that's awful not receiving them before he took his own life . See ? Concrete evidence .

Atramille : I understand but Ron's sister's letter is still of an utmost importance that I must retrieve as soon as possible . Ron's life withers away as time passes by and we currently had very little left to spare .

Danny : Hmm ... alrighty then . I'll help you out but only look for the letter in question . Remember to leave the rest alone .

Atramille : Understood . I'll do as you say .

Danny : *Stares at Wuhrer* Let's get the search going now and be done with ASAP before that horny loony snaps out of his perverted wonderland ...

Atramille : ... I couldn't agree with you more .

A couple of hours later , back at Alinna's house , Atramille and Danny is seen following the wirings that snakes all the way into the slim gap beneath the door of a room .

Danny : Yo , good news , we've suc- ... cessfull- ... uh , Alinna ?

Alinna , all greyed out having her soul knocked out of her seats in front of several high-tech surveillance equipment and instruments , hunched on the chair lifeless , seemingly unresponsive to their arrival for a brief moment . In a slow and jerky manner , she turned her head towards Atramille , confounded and shocked pale like a corpse . She trembles her way towards Atramille , resting her hands on her shoulder with a rather light smacking impact upon reaching . She tried to construct a sentence in her rather shaken state of mind , in tears and drenched in sweat .

Alinna (Stupefied) : I don't know ... how am I ... thank you ... ? You ... you all ... what ... what are you ? ... tell me now ...

Danny : Say ... just what went on while I was away ?

Atramille : Nothing happened .

Meanwhile , back in Wuhrer's bedroom , where it's shown that he's still at it ...

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Develop Your Story / Re: "La Sanctum" Club (18+)
« on: September 25, 2018, 12:28:50 PM »
Chapter 14 : Progress

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The sound of the antique clock outside the guest room can be heard echoing inside the room as Alinna , Joshua and Atramille haven't spoken a word for several minutes , only staring at each other . Feeling that the silence has dragged on for far too long , Joshua decides to try and break it . He slowly but cautiously approaches Alinna from behind , extending his hand close to her shoulder . Without any warning , a blinding swing of her hand lands square on his nose , forcing him to leap away and curls and writhe in pain .

Alinna : Oh , so the icky sensation I'm feeling was from you all along ...

Joshua : *Muffled speech , holding onto his bleeding , broken nose* And I'm glad you're not totally out cold again !

Alinna : *Displays her fist* Need further assurance ?

Joshua : And deal with Atramille all by yourself again ? I'm in !

Alinna : *Pales out from that thought* Eep- ! Okay ! OKAY ! Please help me out ! *Grabs Joshua's shoulder , begging* I can't take all the insanity these ! My brain just can't ! *In tears*

Joshua : Then calm down there first , will you ?!

Alinna : *Hic* I ... I-I ...

Joshua : *Sigh* I get it . What they are , they've been up to and how they've been able to do and achieve what could be inhumanly impossible , it totally don't make sense for someone of your high intellect mind - I feel you now . But now's not that time to blank out from such thing . *Points above them , where Ron is currently , hinting and reminding Alinna of their priority*

Alinna : *Looks above , realizing the reality and her priorities* ... U-uh . I get it .

Joshua : Now you get it , time to get this started . As per your request in the letter , I've observed everything that has happened during the working hours and ... well ... he took the bait .

Alinna (Shocked) : *Stood up instantly* WAT !? (Writer's note : Spoken in an eastern accent)

Joshua :  There you go again ! (Though I did too at that time ...)

Atramille : In addition to the success in question , I would like to thank you for agreeing to our request in procuring the necessary materials required in order to increase the success rate , mademoiselle Alinna .

Joshua : Huh ? Just what exactly ?

Alinna (Distraught) : *Hands planted on each side of the head , shaking head while letting out hysterical laughter every now and then* Bunch of ingredients , ingredients as bizarre as the name itself ... so she brought her other "friend" down here to show me what the hell it is ... *having delirium breakdown* yeah ... unannounced , unexplainable appearances again ... yeah ... insanity ...

Joshua : (She's mentally broken now ...) "Friend" ? Your "friend" , Atramille ?

Atramille : *Nods and points at Alinna* She's right there .

Just like how Aundlexia made her appearance in front of Alinna and Joshua , a lady with black hair that extend just over her shoulder that curls inwards at the end of it , clothed in jet black , body-fitting dress with white frills on each ends of the arm and neck and ruffled lower half that reaches all the way to her feet that covers all of her body , topping a jet black picture hat with white and red flowers all bundled on one side of it with a patterned veil covering her face with a decorated eye-patch in a semi-transparent manner , with her sky blue hair bleeding slightly below her shoulder line and outwardly , "magically" appeared behind Alinna , startling both of them once more . While still in a state of shock and delirium , she stealthily positions both palm close to her nose before she could see and react . The act caught her by surprise soon after realizing it , gasping from being startled before sliding down , out and away from her . Just as she positions herself behind Joshua , she began to wobble and faints soon after .

Joshua (Enraged) : *Goes to Alinna's side , checking on her condition* Just what the hell did you do to her ?!

Atramille : I can understand that you find our sudden act to be hostile . Rest assured that she is alright . She just took a whiff of an aromatic scent brewed by my sister .

Sky blue-haired lady : *Nods* ... aromatherapy .

Joshua : "Alright" ? She's out cold ! How can I believe what you said there ?!

Sky blue-haired lady : ... too potent ... ?

Atramille : ... another miscalculation ?

Half an hour later ...

Alinna (Groggy) : *Regains consciousness* Unghh ...

Joshua : Alright , she's up now . Both of you , apologize now !

Atramille : *Bows along with the sky blue-haired lady* I sincerely hoped that you'd forgive me for my act- ...

Alinna : Forget it ... whatever you did there ... I ... I can't bring myself to hate you for it .

Joshua (Surprised) : Woah ? Zen mode Alinna ? Alter-ego Alinna ?

Alinna : Shut it . Anyways , save that apology for later . Get the discussion going , please .

Joshua : Okay then . Who is she ? Some sort of ... witch ?

Sky blue-haired lady : *Trembles in fear upon hearing the word 'witch' , hid behind Atramille* ... have mercy .

Atramille : *Comforts her , puts up a serious face and stance in front of Joshua* I can understand that her recent actions and what she does fits the image that of a witch but I can vouch my existence that she isn't one of them . Please do not associate her as one who sold their soul to heretical beings . It wasn't her choice that she chose such path and masters in an art that had been perceived as taboo by you .

Joshua : *Feeling guilty , taken aback from Atramille's serious front* Uh , I ... didn't know it was a bad thing to call her as such ... uh , sorry ...

Alinna : (Scary ...) L-l-leave the introduction aside and resume with the report . Atramille ?

Atramille : *Nods then presents her with a business card with something written on it given to her by Ron's boss* Here .

Alinna : *Inspects the card given to her* ... this is his home address and ... his phone number ? Did he invite you or something ?

Atramille : Yes , he invited me to dine with him at his place .

Alinna : Alright , so he did ... *shocked* wait , to his house ? That early ?!

Atramille (Confused) : Is there a problem ?

Alinna : Nononono , not at all . I mean , that's good news ! Not according to plan ... but it's the result I'm lookng forward to ! Did you accept his proposal ?

Atramille : Yes .

Alinna : Great ! As nonsensical and shocking as I see it , I don't care ! An opportunity for us to frame him and possibly the entire company for all of the mistreatment and abuse towards all of the staffs in PD Department is now within' our grasp once more !

Atramille : But what about the letters ?

Joshua : Yeah , about that ... apparently him directing the letters to the company was because he might have learnt of the mail delivering service the company had established was still active - both of us went to the department in charge and confirmed this ourselves . However ... there's a change in the delivering system . No longer they will handle with delivering them personally , it's the department chiefs .

Alinna : I see ... it all makes perfect sense now ... all of it . Why the staffs no longer receive their mails out of sudden , why he had a sudden flip in personality ... why he couldn't bring himself to fire me after finding out about my actions ! I might've made a slip somewhere but all it takes is just one wrong move ... just ONE ! F***ing sleuth roach !

Joshua : But strangely , he still took the 'bait' *points finger at Atramille , indicating that she's the 'bait'* .

Alinna : *Scratches head* I find it too real to believe ...

Atramille : Your skepticism is understandable . Even with all the precautions I have taken to make sure that failure rate is low overall , there's always a possibility that such prospect might happen . However , it is a risk I'm willing to take , a risk that is overshadowed by the more serious case at hand that I am personally am responsible for it to happen in the first place . *Places hand close to her heart* When that time comes and I'll gladly offer my life to satisfy it ... whatever the fate dictates .

Alinna : What ... precautions are you talking about ?

A series of projection scenes of Atramilles mind when she was being asked to offer her hindsight after the success of the plan .

Atramille : My request for your assistance in teaching me ways of your life , even if the learning curve is impossibly steep is one of them . Without your guidance , with my current overall understanding , skill set , and experiences , it's almost certain that I might get caught . I appreciate your efforts and suggestions by sacrificing your wealth to grant me the best possible disguise but after the last failure , there's a possibility that he had his full awareness focused towards people who had appearances that of high social status or worst any new faces that exhibits the slightest acts that is deemed questionable in the slightest . You were aware of it as well the day after the failed attempt , hence why I made the request I've stated before along with a couple more , one of that is that you dressed me in appearances no grandeur to that of a middle-class citizen but with an extra criteria that it accentuates a female's sex appeal better , with the other being that you'd allow me to invite someone from my circle who will be essential in maximizing the success rate of the plan overall . The ingredient she had requested was needed to concoct a concoction that is perfect for the cause and goal of the first phase of your plan and I requested that she concocts something very potent but easy to conceal its existence and effects from public senses other that the intended target . All of it was in order to further bolster the success rate and drastically reducing the chance of fail- ... *Serious and determined expression* no , it must not fail ... at all cost .

Atramille's speech , a well-thought speech that can only come from someone with and who had experience and knowledge in covert and tactical operations , spoken with such intellect and charisma stuns both Alinna and Joshua still speechless .

Joshua (Flabbergasted) : *Whistles in awe* Woah ... she was spot on about you .

Alinna : What are you talking about ?

Joshua : Oh , I didn't tell you about it . In addition to all of that well-thought out preparations on her part , she also did all of that back when we were at the location where the letters we were looking for were supposed to be at . You already knew of the change in the system and what had that a*****e had done to the letters already but I forgot to tell you the part where the chief department in charge of the mailing service was about to send a report to the CEO directly about that a*****e's violation of responsibility and privacy . *Faces towards Atramille , trembling slightly* She stopped him before he could send it out , stating it might ruin the plan in hand and might prove useful when time comes . Something to do with "shock and awe , blitz tactic"

Alinna (Disbelief) : What ...

Joshua : Yeah ... who exactly are you ?

Atramille : To be truthfully honest , I don't know myself . It just happened ... instinctively .

Joshua (Terrified) : ... you and your lady friends ... you're all so full of mysteries , it's both fascinating and the same time frightening ...

Alinna : So that long silence from you when I was going through the whole history of the plan with your "sister" at that time ...

Atramille : *Nods* Yes .

And that one word response from Atramille silences the entire room . Upon hearing it , both Alinna and Joshua starts breaking out in cold sweat as to Atramille's true identity ... if she's really a maidservant ... or someone of sinister background ...

Sky blue-haired lady : *Taps on Alinna's shoulder* ... the plan .

Alinna : Plan ? ... yeah , that's right ! I completely forgot about it . *Clears throat* Since he actually took the 'bait' and brought you to his place , we can proceed to the 'main dish' of the plan ... but now that I think of it , I think it's still impossible to make him blurt out information on the letters whereabouts ... even if he's stone cold drunk .

Sky blue-haired lady : *Taps on Alinna's shoulder again* ...

Alinna : Huh ?

Sky blue-haired lady : ... I can do that .

Alinna : How ?

Sky blue-haired lady : ... necessary ingredients .

Alinna : ... again ?

A few days later , inside one of the many rooms of Alinna's house that was once empty , which now sits a large cauldron in the middle of it on top of stacks of burning firewood with a couple of tables with paraphernalia , some familiar but lots of odds to all , and strewn about are equally odd-looking oddities that looks like ingredients of sorts , something out of a fantasy . A sky-blue haired lady is seen standing in front of one of the desks . The only door leading into the room is seen being opened , Alinna and Atramille walks into the room towards the sky-blue haired lady .

Atramille : I'm here to collect them . The time has come ...

Sky blue-haired lady : *Presents her with a perfume bottle filled with dull-colored liquid and a two different but equally strange-colored tablet* ...

Atramille : Many thanks . I shall take my leave now . *bows and leaves the room*

Sky blue-haired lady : ... farewell .

Alinna : *Watches Atramille leaving the room* ...

Sky blue-haired lady : *Taps on Alinna's shoulder to alert and offers her a satchel filled with some unknown powder* ... here .

Alinna : Ah , thanks . (Hope this can force Ron to get much needed nap without any intervention from any of us physically ...)

*Sound of knocking on door*

Alinna : *Turns around facing towards the knocking sound* Who's th-

??? : As good as your intention may be , I recommend that you'd not do that .

Alinna (Startled) : Wah ! My- no ! Libra !

Libra : Oh my ... I thought I've made sure that I informed you of my forthcoming beforehand .

Alinna : That's my butler's job ! Didn't you inform him of your coming first ?

Libra : *Ponders for a moment* ... oh , I forgot about that . I'll keep that in mind .

Alinna : *Sigh* ... seriously , you all are real bunch of mysterious weirdos .

Sky blue-haired lady : ... "weirdo" ?

Libra : Putting that aside ... don't lull Ron into sleep .

Alinna (Angry) : What ? Are you asking me to further let him suffer more from sleep deprivation ? Even death ?!

Libra : I'm aware of that but I fear something even worse might happen if he ever takes another slumber ...

Alinna : That's an outrageous request coming from a ghost like you ! *Grits teeth* You'd best give me a god damn good reason for not allowing me to do so ...

Libra : Your anger is justifiable and as the matriarch of my brethren it warrants much needed reasoning . Ron , like all of our patrons can only visit the sanctum through special means - their souls will be transported instead of their physical body and only after they're deep in their sleep , with the help of the golden card in their possession . There , in the sanctum , they will receive an appropriate service according to their current struggles in life and once it's done , they'll be sent back to their physical bodies . Ron's a special case ... . Made dire due to unforeseen series of events I didn't pay much heed and importance the moment it occurred and tried to prevent . Our patron's soul will only make their visit to our sanctum once and once they've done so , they can never visit it again as the golden card dematerializes right after their return . That wasn't the case for Ron ... the golden card never dematerializes . Because of that , everytime he goes into slumber , his soul will always end up in the sanctum and with each appearances , it became increasingly difficult to 'encourage' his soul to return back to his physical body . I've exhausted all options and methods in preventing his visitations to the sanctum ... but all had but kept his soul away from the sanctum , all but one method , *expression turned solemn and pained* one that I wished I never had to do ... ever ... but in order to make sure that it doesn't get anymore dire than it should , I made that decision to prevent him from falling asleep again .

Alinna : *Throws fist down , discontent and enraged* That still doesn't sound comparable and make sense at all !

Libra : That I would agree on if it was from a human's point of view . But it's not much different from that if his soul does not return back to his physical body anymore . Think of it like an unconscious person but it last for as long as it remains soulless .

Alinna : *Pales out* ...

Sky-blue haired lady : *Pays respect to both Libra and Alinna before leaving the room with a smoking incense tray in hand* ...

Libra : *Looks towards the sky-blue haired lady leaving the room* Without her expertise and assistance , his soul would've latched onto the sanctum for eternity , unwilling to return back to his physical body ... unable to see him like you would , should and wanted to . When I heard that she was summoned to your side by Atramille , I asked her to do her best to keep Ron alive . She gave me her words ... giving it her all in ensuring that Ron's vitality doesn't wane out and leaves for the afterlife , just like she tried her best in 'encouraging' his soul to return back to his physical body everytime he ends up in my sanctum *Turns around facing Alinna with a mellow smile and expression* ... I'm sure Atramille is too .

Scene transition to the series of events and activities of Atramille , dressed in a dark velvet , silk gown with a deep neck and back plunge and a pair of semi-transparent deep red veil drooping down to the elbow hanging from the shoulder and a small bundle of velvet lilies tucked in-between strands of light blonde , wavy hair that seem to emit a light radiant as it reflects the moonlight beaming on its surface . A large , golden armlet studded with gemstones , mainly black opal is worn on one of her arm , entering into the backseat of a cab and being taken to her next plan's location , with a few back scene of where Alinna and Libra is .

Libra : Beyond doubt , I can tell that you can't help but to question her every actions that you and Joshua will find it unlike her . All I can is this ... have faith in her and her intentions . She probably had to set aside her feelings , her regrets ... and the most telling one , her guilt ... all for the sake of keeping her focus solely on duties she was entrusted to handle and accomplish , both mine ... and yours . That unwavering , undying devotion to whatever duties she was entrusted to ... *gives one last mild grin and exits the room* that's so like her , always giving it her all . I wonder why ...

Watching the departure and the closing of the door before her , she stares beyond the emptiness of her thought that was once filled with disillusions of the activities Libra and her 'sisters' the she had seen as disrespectful and insensitive , finding means to repent for her anonymity towards them all alone in the room ...

Alinna (Thought) : ... Atramille ... I may have gravely misunderstood her actions . She , Libra , Aundlexia and the girl in sky blue hair ... they're just doing what they could on their part ... just so Ron could live a normal life once more ... Joshua was right all along ... it wasn't them who were being childish and immature all the while ... it's me ...

A mid-transition scene to a full view of a high-class two-story modern villa at night . Several high-powered spot lights beaming on all four corners , further emphasizing the marble white concrete walls and the dark brown , wooden veranda and sidewalks . A marble gazebo with a Jacuzzi visible from the outside is seen standing out in the backyard , surrounded by well-maintained carpet grass that extends all the way to the front yard , dotted with stone slabs and several exotic-looking trees and shrubs . One side of the villa's wall is made out almost entirely of clear glass , allowing a clear view of the living room of the house , where a male figure is seen walking around in it . Atramille is seen standing outside and in the foreground of the scene , next to a parked taxi , staring at the building before walking towards the front door .

*Sound of opening door*

Ron's boss : Come on in , sweetie ~ ...

Atramille : *Bows and walks past him*

Ron's boss (Thought) : *Takes a deep whiff of the fragrance trail being made by Atramille and stares at her in a flirtatious manner* My , my ... such bodacious and exotic figure ... befitting such provocative dress of choice , Atramille de Sekiss ... (Writer's note : He can't pronounce her familial name properly . Totally given . I dare you pronounce it without my help .) *shuts door after Atramille had entered*

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General Discussion / Re: Does some commission artist own your OC?
« on: August 26, 2018, 05:22:56 AM »
For clarity, a character is not copyrighted just because you draw him. You have to register your character to be copyrighted with a federal agency such as copyright.gov in the United States. If an artist draws it under commission you can register that character. Registering the character would cost more than the commission itself, so it's unlikely the artist would do it first.
Let me remind you that not all of us are from the US, including me. Copyright laws differs country to country. So I'd recommend everyone to look for the ones that was enforced in your own respective country, not (just) the US.

The universal rule is that if the said IP is created by you and that it wasn't a direct and/or heavy derivation, replica, homage of any known, existing source, you own all rights to that IP unconditionally. Under the permission of the owner of said IP, anyone can use it freely as long as it adheres to the condition set by the owner of said IP. Otherwise, don't do it.

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break Room / Re: I got booed at an hospital
« on: July 25, 2018, 01:00:16 AM »
Guys, don't just go hating on children just because their unfiltered honesty... I find that savagely adorable.

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Develop Your Story / Re: "La Sanctum" Club (18+)
« on: June 05, 2018, 07:44:46 AM »
Chapter 13 : Breakthrough

Spoiler
In the lobby of the Hoff's Advertising Agency ...

Male office worker 1 : *Sigh* ... man , working nearly everyday turns me into a white sheet of paper ...

Male office worker 2 : *Pats male office worker 1's shoulder* Life of an adult ... I feel you , bro .

Male office worker 1 : Ah ... Onii-sama ... (Writer's note : Literally , he spoke in Japanese)

Male office worker 2 : *Moans lightly and caresses Male Office Worker 1's cheeks* ... yes , brother ... ?

Female office worker (Disgusted) : *Backs away a few steps* Eww ... just get a room and bang each other right now , will you ?

Male office worker 1 : I'd welcome a three-piece with you , honey-pot ...

Female office worker : *Brings out a nut-cracker from her purse* ... you sure ?

Male office worker 1 : *Pouts* Bububu ... joy-killer !

Male office worker 2 : Say , spotted any walking dead on your way in ?

Male office worker 1 : Nope .

Female office worker : Me too . Sucks to be in their shoes though ... lucky for us .

Male office worker 1 : Yyyup . Still kinda wish we could do something for them ...

As they had their conversation while waiting for the elevator to come down , a mysterious lady with a wavy blonde hair , dressed in a common , form-fitting work suit greets them from behind ...

Mysterious lady : Pardon for interrupting in your conversation . I've overheard you mentioning a place called 'Planning and Development Department' (Writer's note : PD Department , in short) . Could you offer me directions to the place in question ?

Male office worker 1 & 2 (Mesmerized) : ...

Female office worker : *Stares at them unamused before answering to the mysterious lady's request* Take this elevator up to floor 12 . The whole department's located on that floor .

Mysterious lady : *Bows* Many thanks for the guidance , mademoiselle . *Enters the opened elevator and being sent up*

Female office worker : "Mademoiselle" ?

Male office worker 1 : ... Onii-san , I ...

Male office worker 2 : Yee , my brother , I feel you too . My body's very ready to blow ...

Female office worker : *Brings out a nut-cracker from her purse , face turned sinister dark* You apes in heat forgot about me already ?

In front of the section chief's desk inside the Planning and Development Department of Hoff's Advertising Agency , the section chief is seen laying with a handheld device with both of his legs placed in front of his desk , indulging himself to some game .

Ron's boss : ... eergh , this goddamn level boss is tuff' as f*** ! Just drop DEAD ALREADY !... *caught glimpses of a shadow casting in front of him as he shook his handheld device* ... what now ? Can't you tell that I'm f***ing BUSY HERE ?

??? : I would like a grant to a job here .

Ron's boss (Thought) : Hurrm ? A girl's voice ?

A sight of a lady with a wavy blonde hair , dressed in a form-fitting work suit welcomes his vision as he lowered his handheld device to find out who was it . Her bright but rather imposing presence threw him off balance upon proper visual contact , falling off from his chair while launching the handheld device up onto the ceiling , breaking it in the process . Flustered , he tried to get up , only to stumble back down in a clumsy manner , a hasteful urgency to attend to the lady standing in front of her . A choir of woos , whistles and suppressed cheer of rejoice rhyming along in harmony throughout the office the moment their concentration were broken caused by the section chief's loud accident . Some even crept closer in order to get a better view of the lady before them . All but one , Joshua , had a different reaction to the scene at play , clearly shocked by what's he's seeing for himself .

Ron's boss (Flustered) : Ahh ... uhh ... *Ahem* one second , if you don't mind . *Recomposes self , taking a deep breath and seats himself back on his chair* ... okay *brings out an application form* , I need to fill up this application for you first . So , let's start by letting me know your name *winked in a perverted manner* ...

As he looks up to get a good look at her face , she reveals herself to him and to the staffs in the department , including Joshua (And you , the readers) to be-

Mysterious lady : Atramille de Surquouis .

Joshua (Thought) : *Screams internally* No f***ing way !!!

The scene pans out of the building and towards the sky while reversing the time back to a week ago at night , panning back down and zooming into the guest room of Alinna's house , where Alinna , Atramille and Aundlexia is seen having a discussion .

Atramille : Allow me to partake in your plan .

Alinna : Didn't I tell you that the plan is already d- ... wait , what ? You're telling me you're planning to-

Atramille : Yes .

Alinna : Hang on there , just a second ! Really ? You ? Taking on MY role ?

Atramille : Yes .

Alinna : Do you have any working experience , like working as a clerk ?

Atramille : No , but I'd would like you to teach me how and I'll be glad to learn from you .

Alinna : Wait , how am- , I mean it would take a lot of- no , it's just- ! Just how- ! *shakes head violently* You're asking for the impossible here ! Are you out of your f***ing mind ?!

Atramille : I can understand that upon considering all the factors in order for me to take your place and reinitiating the plan again in an unforgiving small window of time , but after much consideration , I believe it's the only way to obtain Ron's letter from him . I can also understand your reasoning and reluctancy in getting me involved in your plans , but I sincerely beg for your guidance , teachings and most importantly your faith and trust in me in getting it done .

Aundlexia : You can trust her in anything memory related . It's her role and her job for a long time now .

Alinna : Wha- wuh ? What jo- ... urgh ... *looks up at the ceiling , contemplating* (ah , Joshua ... help me . I can't deal with crazy anymore ...)

Aundlexia : Well ?

Alinna : Argh ! FINE ! We'll begin whenever you're ready , okay ?

Atramille : *Nods* As you wish .

Back inside the Planning and Development Department of Hoff's Advertising Agency in the present time ...

Ron's Boss : Alright , all filled up for you - you're in ! *Points at an unoccupied cubicle right in front of him* You can take the cubicle right th-

Atramille : I appreciate your kindness but I had my eyes on a vacant spot as I made my way in here . I'll take my leave now ... *shakes his hand , bows and leaves in a gentle , elegant manner *

Ron's boss (Flustered) : *In a daze and whispers to self* ... ah , her hands and that smile ... that CURVES ! Thank the heavens for answering my needs ... *places both palm on his cheeks*

The gazes of the staffs in the department still fixated at Atramille , tracking her movements in all forms of manner that can be classified as curious , indecent and intrigued as she makes her way to the back and into an empty cubicle that once housed a former staff , Alinna . As she makes her way there , she made a close pass by Joshua , clearly still not out of shock , pulls out a letter and stealthily snugged it into a gap his suit . Joshua snaps out the moment he felt her hand coursed across his body and upon regaining back his senses , sees a letter within his suit . Upon pulling out , he discovers that the letter was written for him by Alinna . Discreetly , he hid himself in his cubicle and read it from within , out of the section chief's presence and sight .

A series of scene depicting a series of activities over the course of a week . Alinna is seen offering Atramille lessons , etiquettes and required skills and experiences needed for a clerk . From operating common machineries found in any offices including the computer , handling projects and paperwork , basic office etiquette and terminologies and dressing up like one , to name a few , with every scene , Alinna is seen either having a disbelief or shocked expression worn on her face .

"... you owe me my sanity . It was your idea to let them help out on Ron's issues . My head's all mushed up , trying wrap my head around all of their nonsensical shenanigans without you around ...

Now it's your turn . I want you to keep your watchful eyes on whatever she does , assist her if needed to . I'm still very doubtful that she is going to pull it off with just a week of "training" ... she might screw up eventually ...


Joshua : *Takes a peek at Atramille inside her cubicle , as she is typing on her computer in a rather professional manner* I don't think so ... she's working just like any experienced office clerk would . What the hell ... *Resumes reading the letter*

"Anyways , you know how the plan goes . We need that f***er to take the 'bait' . You know what you're supposed to do as well , so do whatever you can to get him to take- "

Joshua was then interrupted by a conversation happening nearby , just loud enough for him to make out what is spoken by the conversing party . Upon taking a peek at the direction where the conversation's being made , he sees his section chief , much to his total disbelief , flirting with Atramille in a very perverted and coy manner before offering her something he couldn't identify . Having a hunch that he might think what Alinna might thought of , he reads the rest of the letter ...

"If successful , I want you to confront and talk to her about our next stage of the plan ... not that it'll happen , right ? I don't ."


Joshua (Thought) : *In a state of disbelief and slightly terrified* ... Alinna ... hate to tell you this ... he took the bait . I ... my sanity ... I can feel it disappearing .

Dusk , in the lobby of Hoff's Advertising Agency , Atramille is seen standing outside waiting for someone . A familiar female office worker is seen at a distance approaching her .

Female office worker : Ah , it's you again !

Atramille : Greetings to you again , mademoiselle .

Female office worker : Ah , "mademoiselle" again ...

Atramille : My apologies . I didn't know that it-

Female Office Worker : Nononono , it's fine . It's just that the last time such honorific was ever used was hundreds and hundreds of years ago and it does not even originate from this continent at all .

Atramille : It was ... weird ?

Female office worker : Yuh-huh~ , very . Anyways , who are you waiting for ?

Atramille : *Points at the direction of someone screaming at distance behind her* I'm waiting for him .

Female office worker : Oh him ... YOU ! Stay away , Perv-O-Donna ! I have enough of yo-

Joshua : Gee , Genna ! I already told you that I'm sorry for tak- *Gets choked by Genna*

Genna (Enraged) : *Face flushes in red* Don't even mention it ! *Shakes Joshua violently followed by a close-up glare* Don't . EVEN !

Joshua : Guh , suh-gwee ... worghnt !

Atramille : Is something a matter ?

Genna : Ah , no , not really ! *Releases Joshua from his grasp , dropping him flat on the ground* . Say , you've got business with him ?

Atramille : To be more accurate , I've been instructed by Alinna to work alongside him on the plan .

Genna : Plan ? *Pauses and recall something in her memory* "That" plan ? I thought it she'd long abandoned that ship .

Joshua : *Gags and coughs for a moment* ... I thought so too , but she volunteered , much to my surprise .

Atramille : For the plan to reinitiate , it only needed another willing volunteer to take her place , am I correct ?

Joshua : Well ... yeah , but I never expected someone like you to volunteer !

Genna : I don't see anything wrong with that . I mean , your "comrades" were drooling insatiably upon seeing her the first time , so I'm sure that s***head would too .

Joshua : Okay ! First of all , we're not perverts . We just have fe- I mean abnormal level in taste and passion for our interest and treats them like 'masterpieces' and utmost respect !

Genna (Dubious) : *Sarcastic jeer* Yeeeah ... riiight ... toootally ...

Joshua (Annoyed) : SECOND , she ain't no office lady . She's a bona fide maidservant .

Genna : *Snaps her head facing Atramille , shocked* What ?! Don't tell me-

Atramille : Would these be considered a success ? *brought out a business card with written address and phone number behind it that once belongs to Ron's boss* .

Genna : *Turns head towards Joshua in a jerking manner in a state of utter disbelief and shock* ...

Joshua : *Sweats* I can relate to such ridiculous result ...

Genna : *Regains composure* So ... what are you gonna do after that ?

Joshua : Gather proof , of course . But this time , I also need to track down letters my buddy Ron's sister had made for him .

Genna : What letter ? Who's Ron ?

Atramille : Ron is a close friend to Joshua and Alinna . The letter is the reason why I volunteered myself on a plan Alinna once proposed , executed and failed before . To atone for the sins I had committed towards Ron , one of our patron , it has became a highest priority of mine in the search of the letter written by his late sister .

Joshua : Dear , no need to look for the letters here anymore . The letter might be in a void between here and the hospital . This service who're supposed to be in charge of delivering letters to us hasn't been delivering any for years now . It's safe to assume that it's long being discontinued .

Genna : It's still running .

Joshua : Heh ?

Genna : You heard me . It's still active , just that it had a major revamp in the system .

Joshua : But ... why we weren't informed about it ?

Genna : Public broadcast speaker broke down at the time the announcement was made . Because of that , your boss should be the one to deliver the news . Huh . Shocker ! All the more reason to hate him now , yes ?

Joshua (Aggravated) : F***ing hell ... don't bother reminding me about that . I'm enough pissed ...

Genna : Anyways miss , since the letter you're looking for is important to you , why don't we pay them a visit and retrieve the letter from there ? Chances are is that it might still be there .

Atramille : *Nods in appreciation* I'd appreciate it .

Genna : Follow me .

Inside the Mail Organization and Distribution Department of Hoff's Advertising Agency , Joshua , Genna and Atramille is seen standing in the middle of it , surrounded by steel racks on all four corners of the wall of the room . In front of them , an elderly man with grey hair and beard , dressed in a grey vest , black-white striped shirt and grey trousers is seen in the middle of sorting parcels , mails and letters in front of a bag filled with more of it , all piled up in the middle of a large desk surrounded by a few other staffs .

Genna : So , you're saying that the only people responsible in delivering and distributing the letters to all of the employees of the company are the department chiefs ?

Joshua (Angry) : F***ing hell AGAIN !

Mail sorter chief : Ya heard me . The ever growing size of this company and everyone's being too busy with work to come down to our counter to claim it had forced the CEO to alter the system . Now we deliver bundles everyday to each respective section chief and let them deliver the letters to their staff before the arrival of their staffs . Here , just look at this ! *Gives the logbook to Genna and Joshua*

Genna : *Reads the logbook* Hmm , how detailed ...

Joshua : Hey ! Are you s-

Mail sorter chief (Angry) : *Slams fist down on table with force , rattling all objects placed on the table* Attitude , boy ! And LISTEN ! *Thumps on another logbook placed in front of him repeatedly* THIS logbook is a written prove that your boss DID collect all of it . ALL . OF . IT . Don't ever think that we're negligent in doing our job , Ya got ME ?!

Atramille : *Stepped in* Our deepest apologies in advance if our presence and tone had made you feel much displeasure , monsieur . But if you may , even if the letters were no longer in your possession , I'd still like to know if you happen to stumble upon a letter meant for a person named Ron ?

Mail sorter chief : *Simmers down* See ? That's politeness and being considerate ! Lad , I need this person's full name . There's bound to be more than one 'Ron' working here . Just sayin' ...

Joshua : Ron E. Stuperd . Also , forgive my outburst *bows* .

Mail sorter chief : Apology accepted . *Looks at the direction of one of the staff on a far end of the table* Eyy' , ya heard him there ! Found any hit ?

Male staff : Yes , chief ! There's more than a year's worth of letters being stored here , with the last one being delivered close to half a year ago . Status ... unclaimed . All was accounted for and included in stack number 2304 .

Joshua : But he received none of it , the same goes to everyone in our department ...

Mail sorter chief : What ?! How irresponsible of your section chief to do that ! Time to file a report to-

Atramille : *Places hand on the mail sorter chief's hand in a gentle manner* Could you hold it back temporarily , monsieur ? It might make things more complicated .

Joshua : Eh ? Why not ?

Atramille : Shock and awe , blitz tactic . In order for the plan to go smoothly , it's best that he doesn't know that he's being targeted upon again . The last thing we want this plan to go through is a renewed and heightened defense from his end . In addition to that , this information will prove very vital for Alinna's cause as she is looking for means to gain leverage for her case .

Joshua : *Still speechless as he listens* ...

Genna : *Whistles in awe* Look at the strategist at work here . Kinda wonder if you're even a housekeeper to begin with ... *looks at Joshua in a mocking manner* unlike this person with brains devoted to tits and a** .

Joshua : SHUT UP !

Genna : *Sticks out tongue* I'm leaving ~ !

Mail sorter chief : Anyways , ya want me to deliver the report later ?

Atramille : Yes .

Mail sorter chief : Hmmm ~ ... if ya say so , lad . I'll withhold the report until then . Now , if ya excuse me , I need to process through all of these mails before midnight . Good luck in whatever ya'rr planning to do . *Goes back to sorting mails*

Atramille : I understand and many thanks for your cooperation . We shall take our leave *Bows and leaves* .

Joshua : Wait , I'm coming with you !

Night falls as both Atramille and Joshua arrived in front of Alinna's house to share an update on the progress made for the day with Alinna . Upon opening the door to the guest room , they're "greeted" by Alinna , slumped on a stool at the corner of the room , all pale and desaturated , gibbering words that can only be heard and intelligible up close ...

Alinna : It's impossible ... yeah ... impossible ... it's just a dream ... it's only a week ... she will not succeed ... yeah ... impossible ... I'm sure of it ... I can't be wrong ...

Joshua : Say , Atramille ... just what did do when I weren't here ?

Atramille : Nothing at all .

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Develop Your Story / Re: "La Sanctum" Club (18+)
« on: June 05, 2018, 07:42:55 AM »
Chapter 12 : Initiative

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This afternoon in the lobby of Feuller General Hospital . A close shot view of Alinna shocked face as she is in the middle of reading what had been displayed on the monitor after being shown by the receptionists at the reception counter . After an inaudible conversation between her and the receptionist , she dragged her way out of the hospital . She had a visibly blank yet heavy expression worn on her face and what seemed to be partially dried up tears that had once trickled down her cheeks can still be seen as she exited the building and left the scene .

Alinna (Thought) : ... I can't believe it , Ron . I ... can't ... . How ... just how am I going to ... *Slumps*

An outside view of the window of Alinna's house under the basking moonlight of the night that slowly zooms into the interior of the guest room , Alinna and Atramille is seen seated opposite of each other on their respective couches , looking dejected .

What is supposed to be a meeting to report on the progress and findings from the investigations being made on the same day never happened as both Alinna and Atramille is seen seated opposite of each other , not making any eye contact ... or rather Alinna did not as she had her head lowered facing the ground completely defeated as she avoids looking at and supposedly , initiating the supposed discussion with Atramille , who had her mildly saddened eyes on her , in hopes that she would get the meeting started . The silence and heavy atmosphere as the result from the situation caught Joshua by surprise the moment he entered into the room and had visual contact with the both of them .

*Sound of the front door opening*

Joshua : Sorry that I'm la- ... -te . What the hell with this suffocating atmosphere ... ?

Alinna (Gloomy) : ...

Joshua (Thought) : *Takes a peek at Alinna* I don't think I'd be asking for a why from her ...

Atramille : You came , monsieur Joshua .

Joshua : (And she's unusually composed ...) Drop the honorifics , please . Explain to me what is going on that I do not know of ? Why is she like that now ?

Atramille : I'm not sure myself . When I arrived here not long ago , she was already in such a state , the same as well with Danny when he brought me here . I'm still waiting for her to begin the discussion she had planned for it to happen at this kind of time .

Joshua : Hmm ... . Okay . Since she's not going to , I will then . Now , any developments so far ?

Atramille : Yes . I have news that came from someone who had an affiliation with-

Without any warning , Alinna snaps into a fit of rage , flipping the table in front her towards Atramille , nearly hitting her , followed up with an onslaught of beration over her tone of speech and insensitivity . The sudden act of aggression interrupted her conversation , forcing her to distance herself away out of the impact zone and from Alinna . Caught by surprise , Joshua immediately restrained Alinna out of fear that she might go after Atramille again .

Joshua : (Such raging strength ...) C-calm down now , Alinna ! Remember th-

Alinna : I don't f***ing care ! I had enough of them bringing in more bad omens than it should already ! I want them and their devilishly cold attitudes out of my house , NOW !

Still having a tight hold on Alinna's aggressive moves , Joshua signals Atramille to leave the premise . Hesitant , she makes her way out , making a wide girth around Joshua and Alinna . Aundlexia , was just about to enter the room to find out what's going on but was taken along by Atramille outside , stunning her in a state of shock . Outside , they waited for several minutes for Joshua to meet up with them . A loud scream in anger can be heard from inside made by Alinna just as Joshua makes his way out of her house .

Several minutes later , at the frontyard of Alinna's house . A large marble statue stood in the middle of a driveway made of cobblestones that encircles around it , surrounded by well-maintained hedges that formed a natural divider that can be easily mistaken for the kind front yard a palace would have .

Joshua : *Exits the building , walking towards Atramille and Aundlexia* Damn it ... nothing's going to get solved if it continues on like this ...

Atramille (Regretful) : *Bowed down along with Aundlexia* Our deepest apologies for what we both had caused . We never meant fo-

Joshua : *Gestures a 'pass' sign* No need to apologize for that . Alinna had problems in life herself and whatever that happened that we don't know of may have affected her badly ... let's leave it at that , okay ?

Aundlexia : You seem rather ... calm .

Joshua : If I tell you that really I am , then I'm a really REALLY bad liar . *Sigh* I'd rather put all differences aside in order to get this issue at hand resolved and see that my usual Ron returns back ... well , not "that" Ron I knew back when he began working in that sh*tty company though but the Ron that I had never knew of that I should be identifying him as . I'm sure Alinna's looking forward to see that side of Ron ... how about you two ?

Atramille : As long as it brings a closure to the current issue at hand , we'd be glad .

Joshua : Excellent ! Now , let's resume this meeting , shall we ?

Atramille : *Nods* As I was about to state before , I have news that came from someone who claimed to be the caretaker of Ron's little sister , Layla .

An hour and a half ago , in front of Ron's house ...

Atramille (Shocked) : Layla ? Ron's little sister ... had passed away ?

Layla's Nurse : *Nods , saddened* And it's been several months already . We're still waiting for her brother to give her a proper burial . That worries me *shakes head* no , a good number of us involved are worried , even the CEO himself . I've been looking for him way before her passing just to get him to pay her just one visit before it's too late and it was really difficult , like REALLY difficult . I had no lead whatsoever when I took up on this task ! I kind of wonder if he'd even received her letters up to her death that she'd asked me to deliver all the while ...

Atramille : A letter from his sister ? I've been searching his entire house for about a week now and I couldn't find the letters you speak of .

Layla's Nurse (Shocked) : What ? What happened to them then ?!

Atramille : That's what we're here trying to look for . Where exactly did you deliver her letters to ?

Back in front of Alinna's house ...

Joshua : "Hoff's Advertising Agency" ... *Head dangles lifelessly , feeling defeated*  ... great ... *deep sigh*

Atramille : Have I ...

Joshua : No , not your fault . Rather ... *Lets out a big sigh of frustration* ... why didn't he give her his home address instead ?

Atramille : Are you perhaps ... saying that it was Ron's fault ?

Joshua : *Waves hand* No , I wouldn't ! Still ! ... god , I wish it wasn't his fault at all but ... f*** ! *Clenches fist , grits teeth* I can't believe it ...

Atramille : Danny also said and felt the same thing as you do while he brought me here . He also requested that I show you this ... *hands over the picture frame with a picture in it to Joshua*

Joshua took and looked at the picture for some time before he had his attention focused onto the little girl and then at Ron when he was young before a saddened expression starts to show as if he was reminded of something in his life before he regained back his composure .

Atramille : Joshua ?

Joshua : *Clears throat* You can have it back ... *Hands over the picture frame with a picture in it back to Aundlexia instead of Atramille*

Atramille : Did you find anything that may help in this case from that picture ?

Joshua : *Paused for a moment* ... nothing that we know of , I think .

Aundlexia : Permission to speak .

Joshua : Go ahead .

Aundlexia : *Shows and points at the little girl in the picture for Joshua* This little girl in this picture ... I remember her .

Joshua : You knew her ?

Aundlexia : Yes , she was one of my patrons for clarity in life .

Joshua (Perplexed) : Wuh ? Ah ... ?

Atramille : It's one of several services we offer .

Aundlexia : The patrons that were sent to me are the kind who're already walking into the afterlife and I'm in charge of offering means to give them much needed rest and enlightenment so that they wouldn't end up restless when it's time to cross over . So , it's rather natural that the patrons I've attended to tend to be lost , depressed , sorrowful , defeated ... but her ... it's very dire .

Joshua : How dire was it ?

An isolated series of scenes of a whitewashed room with wind chimes chiming softly . Layla is seen seated on a white bed in the middle of the room , seemingly absent-minded , surrounded by several dozens ornate , large , pictureless picture frame hung on all faces of the walls , with some lying flat on floor . Aundlexia is seen observing her from a safe distance wearing a solemn expression , as if she understands her just from the body language and facial expression alone . She then approaches Layla in an attempt at offering her service like she is entrusted to do , comforting her in a warm embrace and listening to her grievance .

Aundlexia : She muttered to herself these lines repeatedly while I'm behind her - "Where are you ?" , "Please come back ..." , "Let's be together again ..." , "Just the two of us ..." . She gazes as if she was in a trance , a longing gaze , longing for papa . When I began offering my consultation , she bemoans on giving up on everything , even living on with such mortifying resolution , devoid of any traces of doubt for such decision about papa that is always out of her reach , no matter how hard she tried . All I could do is to ease her soul ... *Lowers head* I've given her my comforting warmth in an attempt to free her from all her emotional suffering and encouraged her to not give up in writing one more letter for papa as if it's her last words before she leaves to join the river of souls above . I can only pray that she does so ...

Joshua : *Pauses for a moment to absorb all of what Aundlexia had spoken* ... had a change of mind now , Alinna ?

Alinna : *Doubtful and hesitant facial expression and body language* ...

Aundlexia (Startled) : How long were you behind us ?

Joshua : Not long after I started the discussion with you two . *Looks at Alinna with a serious expression* So ?

Alinna : But how-

Joshua : I don't ... but it happened , right ? Possibilities , actions and unforeseen consequences ... have you forgotten that you yourself taught me to put that into consideration , Alinna ? So , can you please put aside any form of personal disagreement until we resolved Ron's issue before it's too late ?

Alinna : ... *nods* ... let's resume this discussion inside .

And thus they walked back into Alinna's house and towards the guest room to resume further discussions .

Thirty minutes later , in the guest room of Alinna's house ...

Alinna : *Seated on a couch with face firmly planted on her palm , letting out a deep , long sigh* ... great ...

Aundlexia : You too ?

Joshua : We're both work buddies of the same company . So that's a "We're so f***ed" moment for us ...

Alinna (Gloomy) : ... if only I hadn't resigned at that time ... if only . *Clenches fist*

Joshua : There , there now . Don't go putting that blame on your own shoulder ...

Alinna (Frustrated) : *Deep sigh* But how can I not , especially with such an unexpected turn of event ? Have you forgotten the goal we had that I had a crucial role in ?

Joshua : Oh ... right .

Alinna : *Sigh* With time already not on our side , we can no longer wait for another eligible candidate to come and work in that department just to execute that plan ... great ...

Atramille : ... pardon me for breaking into your conversations , but what candidate and plan do you speak of ?

Alinna : *Gazes towards Joshua , doubting heavily* ...

Joshua : *Waves a go ahead sign* Go ahead and tell them ! I've got to go and prep myself for tomorrow . I beg of you to put aside all of that hatred and work alongside with them , please .

Alinna : Alright !

Joshua : *Leaves room and whispers to self* ... not that it matters if it were to reinitiate again ... *sigh* .

Alinna : *Sigh* Okay ... we both had planned ... well ... for a strike .

Atramille : A "strike" ?

Alinna : Yes ... well , sort of . The goal is to gain the upperhand in court on the multiple counts of mistreatment and indirect abuses on all of the employees in the same department as the both of us , both former and current , caused by one person - the sectional chief manager .

Aundlexia : How sure are you that this person you're going after is the right person ?

Alinna : According to a lot of stories from older , former employees I've talked to and from first hand experiences , he is . Through and through . He's gone full scummy the moment he was promoted to his current position . Irresponsible , unscrupulous , uncouth , heartless , zero humility , empathy and apathy , the lists goes on . And to make it worse , he's sly as hell or he won't be holding that position at all after all of the scummy moves he's being pulling . The "Pièce de Résistance" ? He overworks his employees all day long and stripping them of their pre-requisite day-offs on back-to-back major projects and once it's done , he took all the credits for all our work and kept all of the rewards , reputations and recognition all to himself when it's supposed to be FOR the department . The result ? The first mass resignation a month after his promotion ... and it's still ongoing as we speak .

Aundlexia : How cruel ...

Alinna : *Clenching fist , holding back anger* It's beyond cruel . We had people who worked under him taking their own lives because their personal life's gone f***ed from that . Imagine that ... . That's why we've decided to try and gather solid evidences to back-up claims of his criminal acts , evidences that can only be obtained by getting through him first .

Aundlexia : Are you planning on ... an espionage ?

Alinna : You could say so . I've got to thank my big sister for that ; it's her plan to begin with after all . She wanted means to blackmail the company for its past incident with one of her company she owned that nearly tarnished her reputation and finance permanently . So she asked me for a favor in return for something "special" . She knew I need means to go independent and free from the grasp of my parents hold on my freedom so she figured this could be a start since almost no work experience is required to apply for the company ... that struck me as questionable .

Aundlexia : Questionable ? How so ?

Alinna : Don't you find it odd that a company that does advertising doesn't need any academic qualifications whatsoever ? And yet is able to complete a lot of large scale projects being offered to them within just a month ? To makes things more questionable , the high amount lay-offs at the same time ? That's why I took up on her offer , even though I can simply make her look for someone else to do her 'dirty' job . *Shakes head* ... it didn't take long to find out why and discovered a hole that I could exploit not long after that .

Aundlexia : A "hole" ? Are you talking about ... weakness ?

Alinna : Yes . He's a big-time womanizer and a heavy drinker *irked and shivered by the thought of it* . The moment he made his move on me , I knew that was the opening I'm looking for . Got him completely stoned once and began digging out any information needed to make an official lawsuit against the company . All seems to be running smoothly ... until he had a sudden flip in personality .

Aundlexia : That doesn't seem to be a problem , as long as-

Alinna : "My cover's not blown" ? He literally gave me a cold shoulder and ignored me openly , not even a glimpse or even a word , on the very next day . He no longer drinks , flirts and had his paranoia meter bumped up to ludicrous level judging from his constant watch over everybody's "questionable" actions and conversations happening in the department . *Shakes head in disappointment* THAT'S the sign that my covers blown wide open . I believe during the time he realized that he's being spied upon he knew who I was as well , hence why he didn't gave me the booting . I don't know myself how he found out about all of that's related to me and the plans ... but regardless , it's impossible to continue with the plan ever since and considering the rumors being spread around over the span of nearly more than a decade , recruiting someone to take my place is just not possible anymore ... *sigh*

Aundlexia : But what about the evidences you've gathered from your last attempt ? Wasn't what you've gathered then good enough ?

Alinna : *Shakes head in disappointment* While they're somewhat credible , they aren't strong enough to give an advantage . Let me remind you that I'm going against a well-known , global company . But I still believe that he may be hiding something somewhere ... but then again , Joshua was right about the fate of this plan after his unexpected change of personality . *Lowers head , defeated*

Aundlexia : Oh ...

Alinna : *Deep sigh* Your response ... hmph , no surprises there ... *Turns head towards Atramille* And you're awfully quiet all the while ...

Atramille : *Unresponsive for a moment* ... about your plan ...

A week later , inside the Planning and Development Department of Hoff's Advertising Agency , Joshua is seen working as usual alongside with other 'half-dead' staff in their respective work cubicle , seemingly irked about something as he is currently deep in thought .

A short flashback of a day after the meeting Joshua last attended , in front of Alinna's front door late evening where he stood . Alinna's personal butler , with his palm up denied Joshua an entry beyond the front door .


Joshua : But why ? I'm needed in this discussion and I need to be in the know !

Bulter : I'm sorry , sir , but my master insists that she'd rather not have anyone know about what she's doing at the moment . She had left me a message for you in case if you do return to pay my master and her guests a visit again ...

Back in the office ...

Joshua (Thought) : "Be prepared" ... for what ?! Arrgh ~ *Scratches head viciously , disheveling his once tidy hair* my innate human curiosity is itching my brains to the point of- !!! *Interrupted by a commotion happening in his department* ... huh ? What's happening ?

A choir of woos , whistles and suppressed cheer of rejoice rhyming along in harmony throughout the office . The staffs are seen standing up in the occasion , with their gazes all towards the front desk where the sectional chief is located . Out of curiosity , Joshua stood up at took a peek at what everyone's looking at from the confines of the cubicle wall . Standing in front of the desk facing the sectional chief , in a state of utter shock of disbelief , a back profile lady in a rather form-fitting work suit that accentuates her curves , partially covered by her lightly wavy blonde hair so glossy , sunlight bouncing off it made her shine like an angel that's all to familiar to a certain someone .

Joshua (Shocked) : You've got to be kidding me !

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Develop Your Story / Re: "La Sanctum" Club (Update)
« on: June 05, 2018, 07:39:52 AM »
Chapter 11 : Discovery

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In a closet room of a bedroom , Ron is seen curled up in a corner , unkempt and sickly both physically and mentally with visibly bruised-eyed facial expression , muttering silently to himself as he slowly lowers his head onto his knees . The scene soon pans away from him to the other side of the door where Alinna is seen standing by it , staring at it with a concerned expression .

Alinna (Thought) : ... I hope that his silence is a good sign ... *turns around , revealing Aundlexia and Atramille behind her , watching* but I can't bring myself to leave you alone with these ... 'ghosts' , as much as I wanted to get the hell out of here and away from them . I don't like them and what they've been pulling ...

An hour ago , in front of the main staircase in main hall not far from the guest room . Atramille , Aundlexia and Libra is seen at the bottom of the staircase seemingly having a discussion among themselves . Shortly after , Alinna made her appearance as she is on her way down to discover them having a discussion , stopping in her tracks while they're still not aware of her and began eavesdropping in their talks .

Atramille : Are you leaving , milady ?

Libra : Yes , I can't remain here for long , I can sense the discord appearing with this body ...

Aundlexia : I'm sorry to ask this but , what are we to do with her ?

Atramille : I'm in an agreement with her concern as well . It seems like she doesn't trust us at all regardless of our efforts in reasoning .

Libra : It's understandable but there's not much else we could do if she's still harboring much distrust for our actions .

Atramille : *Bows ninety degrees* My deepest apologies ... I have pushed my duties to the point of-

Libra : No apologies needed . I was somewhat expecting this to happen since upon agreeing to your request as we're first and foremost strangers to begin with . But I'll still be in the dark in this issue if I don't take risks in search for answers ...

Aundlexia : What do propose us to do before you leave and without your presence here , mother ?

Libra : *Steps around in close proximity deep in thought for quite some time* ... do as Joshua asked you to .

Back in the room where Alinna , Aundlexia and Atramille is ...

Alinna (Thought) : *Clenches fist and grits her teeth while having an enraged expression* Asking them to watch over Ron ?! You know full well that you're the reason Ron became like that , Joshua ! This is UNACCEPTABLE !

Aundlexia : *Whispers to Atramille* Is she ...

Atramille : *Nods* ... she requires much needed room to calm down for now . But ... *approaches Alinna* pardon my interruption but allow us to watch over Ron in your stead . Judging from your body language and facial outlooks , I highly recommend that you take much needed rest or you might risk hampering the plans you had tomorrow .

Alinna : *Leers at Atramille in utter distrust but lacking in energy* ...

Atramille : I understand your distrust for us after all of the incident we have caused that leads to such outcome and we are here to make things right again with the help of both you and monsieur Joshua's guidance .

Alinna : *Turns leering gaze towards Aundlexia* ... and her ?

Atramille : She serves as the seeker's and Libra's eye and mouthpiece , mademoiselle Alinna . The seeker is currently observing Ron's current condition on our behalf .

Aundlexia : Sir Joshua's orders , Madamme Alinna .

Alinna (Aggravated) : Tch ! Fine ! I'll go to bed then ! *Stomps out of the room*

Atramille : ...

The scene zooms out of Alinna's house and towards the view of the night sky that slowly turns into a sunny noon that gradually lowers down , slowly revealing a rather large , white building with several bands lavender white stripes that stretches around the overhanging walls that separates floors , with a large red cross mounted right at the center front of it . An unlit red sign of the hospital name , "Feuller General Hospital" is seen mounted in the front overhang , with a large parking lot right in front of the building , some of the lots of which are occupied . Several small trees dots throughout the parking lot symmetrically , with hedges serving as a 'wall' , filling the void in-between the trees , all planted for aesthetic purpose . Alinna is seen entering the building along with several random civilians and patients going in and out of the same entrance and makes her way towards the receptionist's counter .

The interior of the hospital , the lobby is a glistening brown and white marble , with potted plants dots around and next to marble pillars with a chandelier hanging in the middle of it , lighting up the room . a handful of commoners are seen scattered throughout the area , some seated on the couches all situated on a corner of the lobby while the rest wanders around , in and out of the area .


Alinna : Excuse me .

Receptionist : How may I help you , miss ?

Alinna : I've heard that one of my friend's sister is currently hospitalized here . May I know which ward my friend's sister is currently placed in ?

Receptionist : Okay . May I know your friend's sister's name ?

Alinna : Layla . Only Layla .

Receptionist : Alright , give me a moment while I search for her whereabouts .

Alinna (Thought) : Joshua ... I hope nothing goes wrong while I'm away ... Ron ...

Last night , back in the guest room of Alinna's house , Alinna is seen standing in front of where Joshua once sat on , with Joshua , Atramille , Libra and Aundlexia having their attention towards her , seemingly awaiting her to speak up ...

Joshua : "Further investigation into Ron's closely hidden secret , without his consent" huh ? So not like you , so not liking this ...

Alinna : Like we've got any other choice . He's like a ticking time bomb close to ignition .

Joshua : Yeah , I get it . Tell us your plan then .

Alinna : This plan's a three part . First and the top priority is to pay his sister a visit at the hospital and get her to uncover Ron's past . Upturning Ron's house to dig out for more clues would be the next thing to do . Until help arrives , I'll watch over Ron here in my house with the help of my servants .

Joshua : You're going to do all of that ?

Alinna : Yes .

Joshua : ... neat . But I have a better solution to all of that .

Alinna : What would that be ?

Joshua : Instead of you handling all of them , why not distribute the tasks at hand among these ladies present here ? Saves time , you know .

Alinna : *Startled* Wha- ! Them ? NEVER !

Joshua : *Deep sigh* Here we go again . Alright listen . Weren't they the ones who helped creating a breakthrough in solving this case ? I get it , they're responsible for what had happen to Ron and it's rightfully so to not trust people who commit such heinous act to our close buddy . But don't you think you're being unfair right now after all they've been doing for us , for Ron ? They've relinquished all their findings , brought their superior down to consult with us , exposing their "shady" activities and proving their innocence to us , don't you think that's rather sufficient enough to at least be optimistic about them ?

Alinna (Hesitant) : But ...

Joshua : *Sigh* Have some optimism , will you ? Gee , always uptight about everything , just like the struggles of the buttons holding your suit- Eurrgh !!! *Gets jab on the throat by Alinna*

Back in front of the receptionist counter in the lobby of the hospital ...

Alinna (Thought) : *Check on herself , aggravated* Damn you , 'Pervo-donna' . No tact whatsoever ...

Receptionist : *Waves for Alinna* Ma'am !

Alinna : *Walked towards the counter* So , is she here ?

Receptionist : According to the database , Miss Layla was warded here on the 6th ward of the intensive care unit , Room 3045 .

Alinna : "Was" ? What happened to her ? Did she move elsewhere ? Was she discharged already ?

Receptionist : *Turned her monitor towards Alinna* Well , I'm a bit surprised myself but ...

Meanwhile roughly around the same time by the front door of Ron's house , recently abandoned by it's owner , Danny and Atramille are seen standing by it .

Atramille : *Observes Danny intently* ...

Danny : *Opens door into Ron's house* Uh ... is there anything on my face , pretty lady ?

Atramille : ... it's nothing .

Danny : Heh ?

Atramille : *Walks into Ron's house* I'm having thoughts of rectifying on last night's incident that made you flee the scene in fear . I can now conclude that you're alright .

Danny : Oh ... (Thanks for reminding me of that moment that got me sleepless night ... but I'm not over it yet .)

Atramille : Monsieur Danny ?

Danny : Ah , yes ! *Rushes in*

Atramille and Danny analyzes the interior of Ron's house , accessing the environment as they walked around for a moment before they begin ransacking Ron's house once again in search for more clues but unlike before , every inch of the house is not left untouched . Everything gets either upturned , unraveled , opened and emptied out , slowly turning the house into a chaotic mess that gets worse with each passing hour ...

Danny : Say ... are you really his personal maid ?

Atramille : Yes and no . The service is offered at my own free will and served as a cover-up for my primary objective as well .

Danny : Still , even if you really are a maid by job , your outfit's rather ... unusual .

Atramille : *Looks at her own outfit* ... it was ?

Danny : Well yeah . Haven't you notice how the maids in Alinna's house are dressed up like ? It is as if you're a maid from another era or dimension ... are you real-

Atramille : I have an assumption that the sole reason you fled the scene the moment Libra invited her was for the same reason mademoiselle Alinna had feared what we might be . If it's true , don't you think that it'll be nigh impossible to manifest at times like this ?

Danny : Ah , right'o ... good point there . But how does she appear in the room without first getting through the front door we were standing next to in the first place ? The room we're all in had no place for her to hide at all ...

Atramille : ... it's magic .

Danny : O ... kie , how about-

Atramille : A doppelganger . *Resumes searching*

Danny : ... but how do you-

Atramille : Mental deductions .

Danny :*Taken aback* ... are you ... analytically genius or reading my mind ?

And the mix of light conversation and search plays on until the golden dusk illuminates the interior of the house . It was then Danny stumbles upon a picture frame on his desk once discovered by Atramille . Inside it rests a picture , worn , creased and washed out in color as if it was taken a long time ago , of two kids , a girl and a boy , all covered in grime and superficial scrape marks all over their exposed bodies , smiling in front with an unknown elderly lady standing right behind and between them wearing a warm smile , taken in front of a rather large single story house with a large garage next to it encompassed by blooming flower shrubbery of various colors and lush green carpet grass .

Atramille : *Spots Danny looking at the picture* ... I've already inspected that . There's nothing out of the ordinary about it .

Danny : *Sigh* ... ma'am , you don't know the importance and value of pictures like this .

Atramille : Have I ? *Takes another look at the picture , perplexed* ... I don't understand .

Danny : Hohohoh , then allow a "self-proclaimed expert" to educate you then . *Clears throat , wisen up* Pictures like this photograph are like time capsules . It captures that moment in time that last for eternity . There's a saying born from the birth of art , "A single picture paints a thousand words of meanings" - this picture is art . Those who're simple and shallow-minded will not see the meaning behind this single , "boooring-looking" picture ... *Tch* youngsters these days with their obsession of taking pictures of food and their shameless selfies ...

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Atramille (Piqued) : ("Selfies" ? "Photograph" ?) Interesting ... If that's true , what value does this picture has to Ron ?

Danny : Hurmm ... judging from its wear and aging effects yet how well it's been cared for by being place in this picture frame of such quality and value ... it must've hold high importance and value to him . Well , this is just a "mental deduction" of mine . Heheh ! You should ask someone who is an expert at this 'cause I sure ain't one .

Atramille : I see ...

Danny : *Inspects and analyzes the picture again thoroughly for a moment* Hmm ... this little boy here , that's definitely Ronny boy ... and this little girl ... judging by how intimate she is with Ronny boy tells me that she might be closely related to her , probably his sister . But just who is this elderly lady behind them ?

Atramille : I believe you've given much value to this to see that it serves as a possible lead in this case that's worth further finding out more .

Danny : Heh , glad to be useful at the very least for a complete clueless nobody in your circle . You hold on to it for now ! *hands over the picture frame to Atramille*

Atramille (Thought) : *Nods* "A single picture paints a thousand words of meanings" ... was I not aware of it ... ? I have so much yet to learn ...

And the search for leads goes on as night starts creeping into the background . As the scene slowly pans out of the interior and outside of the house , allowing the view of the soon-to-be night sky from the worms eye view , an unknown figure's feet appeared , partially blocking the view as it makes its way to the front door of the house where Atramille and Danny is in .

*Sound of the ringing door bell being rung*

Danny : Hmm ? Who could that be ?

Atramille : I'll attend to the guest by the door .

Greeting Atramille by the front door as soon as she opens it , a tidy-looking , black-haired lady in her 30's , dressed in a pleated blouse and jeans , currently pre-occupied at looking at her phone seemingly looking for something .

Lady : Hrumm ... the navigator seems to point me to this location , that's for sure . So this must be ... *Looked up to see Atramille standing by the door* uh ... you're not Ron .

Atramille : *Bows* Evening , mademoiselle . I'm his personal maid of this household that belonged to Monsieur Ron .

Lady : His maidservant ? Huh ? (A maid of his ?  Judging from the gross amount of back payments he had accumulated , there's no way he could've affo-)

Atramille : I can assure you that the owner of this house is that of Ron . I volunteered to be his personal maid at my own free will .

Lady (Flustered) : (Wai- , how did she ... ?) *Clears throat and lets out a sigh of relief* W-well finally I've came to the right place . Took me months to get a lead that should've been easy ...

Atramille : Pardon ?

Lady : Ah , I am a Feuller General Hospital staff nurse and a caretaker of Miss Layla . I'm entrusted to an errand given by my head nurse and now , the hospital administrative to deliver a package along with news that are crucial . Is he at home now ?

Danny (Thought) : *Eavesdrops and overhears the conversation* "Feuller General Hospital" ? That's where Alinna is currently at right now to look for Ronny's sister , Layla ...

Atramille : My apologies but the person you're looking for is not available . However , I will personally deliver your package and news to Ron should he ever return . What will the news you wanted him to know of ?

Lady : Okay . *Offers her a letter* You see ...

The scene splits into three . The first one is a solo shot of Atramille by the door with the nurse , the second is Danny who is peeking out of the corridor towards Atramille and the nurse and the last one is Alinna in front of the counter , reading what has being displayed on the monitor shown by the receptionist . Aside from Atramille , Danny and Alinna had a grossly disbelieving expression worn on their face .

"Miss Layla , Ron E. Stuperd's biological sister , has succumbed to Leukemia several months ago and the hospital officials are still awaiting his biological brother to actually claim and offer a proper respect and burial."

Manga page count : 21 - 22
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Anime Talk / Re: Politics of Anime
« on: April 20, 2018, 01:25:19 PM »
Censorship is slowly thinning out in the anime/manga media and I find that personally a good thing. However, those who thinks that it's worth exploiting it needs to sit down and contemplate first before taking it on.

Politics is one of that subject you'd want to tread really carefully, especially in this day and age. So if you plan on injecting political subjects into your story, make sure it does not take away the main purpose of the story.

Invoking and spreading of any form of propaganda and/or agenda is a big fat no.

It's not recommended to make a story strictly revolving around politics. It had little to no audience for good reasons.

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General Manga writer discussions / Re: Service Trades?
« on: March 27, 2018, 12:03:34 PM »
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And no I'm not going to join Manga Mavericks. Me and Lumaria don't get along. (Still irritated she told me to quit one of my projects just because she didn't like the source material.)
Totally respect your decisions and understand your beef with Lumaria (And so as many others here), but I didn't asked you to join. Just saying that I'm there more often than here, especially on critiquing.

I only recently open back my offer of critiquing but this time, if it's a request via PM. I just don't have that mood in dealing with people with sensitivity and denial issue. Again, no need for a trade, just your patience, especially if you need more.

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I don't think there's much left to say on the main topic?
Nope. Let's see if there are people interested or not.

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Develop Your Story / Re: "La Sanctum" Club (18+)
« on: March 27, 2018, 11:49:49 AM »
Chapter 10 : Roadblock

Spoiler
Back in the guest room inside Alinna's house , everyone in the room except for Atramille is in a state of stone-shocked after discovering that the lady guest before them is that of a late idol - a ghost or a zombie , smiling a bright glimmer , not curious of their reactions .

Atramille : ... Mother ?

Myna a.k.a Libra : Yes , it is I . Went through without much complications . Now that I'm on Ron's world , I would like to start a conversation with the people who sent me that invitation . I might've missed points within this meeting that may prove vital . In that case , enlighten me first please .

Atramille : *Bows* As you wish ...

Several minutes later ...

Myna a.k.a Libra : ... alright , I'll take over from here on . Assist me when necessary ...

Atramille : *Bows* Understood .

Myna a.k.a Libra : *Seats herself in front of Joshua* I presume you were the one who requested my presence to be here with you but the invitation mentioned of two . May I know who might that other person be ?

Joshua : *Snaps out of state of shock* Ah , y-yeah . You're talking about Alinna ? She's rii ... *Looks around for Alinna , realizing that along with Danny and Skynn , she had left the scene , leaving him all by himself in the room* (She left me alone when I needed her the most !) *screams internally*

Myna a.k.a Libra : I presume that the lady who were behind you a while ago was the other person in question . I'm afraid that she had left this room in a hurry ... is it perhaps-

Joshua : That you're a ghost ? Or a zombie who had risen from the grave after years of slumber ? You're supposed to be dead , Miss Myna !

A shot taken outside of the room , showing Alinna crouched near the door , seemingly trembling in fear with both hands on the back of her head , pressing her head down closer to her knees while having her ear pressed against the door in an attempt at eavesdropping on their conversation .

Myna a.k.a Libra : I don't know who is this "Miss Myna" you speak of . But I can assure you that I'm not a ghost ... technically .

Joshua : "Technically" ?! Then who am I talking to right now if you're not that famous idol !

Myna a.k.a Libra : If you need a name just as much as Ron would too , I'll formally offer it to you through my introduction . I'm Libra , after one of the twelve star signs .

Joshua (Confused) : That's rather ...

Libra : You need not know ponder deeply into that matter for now . Don't you have a more pressing issue at hand that needs to be taken care of ?

Joshua : A-ah , right . *Points at Atramille* Why is it that just by the sight of your companion there is enough to make him go insane ? What is she doing in my friend's house in the first place ? Is this all your plan ? Just what are you up to exactly ?

Libra : I wanted to know myself as to what we did wrong . Throughout our time of activity , we've never encountered a case this severe . He didn't behave out of the ordinary when he was with us in our place nor did he told and showed us signs of one . Even her initial findings and further encounters and direct involvements suggests that Ron's behaving normally , aside from his constant refusal in accepting our services and ignoring her presence altogether . Since we do not have answers ourselves , perhaps you and your friend do ? We'd be glad to listen to whatever you had in mind .

Joshua (Thought) : It should be US asking you that ...

Upon hearing the last line , Alinna snapped in anger and stomped her way into the room , confronting her for giving such nonchalant response to a dire issue Joshua is trying to show in an enraged manner , only to be stopped in her track by Danny , Skynn . The scene swiftly turned chaotic , unintelligible mess as Alinna raged on at Libra , expressing her disgust at her responses she had overheard on the other side of the room while Joshua , being the most composed "human" person in the room currently , attempts to remain cool in front of Libra and Atramille , all flustered and panicky , letting out a big sigh and planted his face onto his palm as the scene is being played right before him . It didn't take long before the situation turned violent as Joshua notices Alinna attempts at lunging towards Libra , seemingly in an attempt at getting physical with her .

Joshua : *Stood up and screamed his lungs out* ENOUGH !!!

The roaring scream filled the entire room , rattling everyone out of the ensuing conflict , causing immediate silence among the conflicting parties .

Joshua : Alinna , didn't I tell you to let me do the talk ?!

Alinna : I know ! But-

Joshua : I know that ! But for a mature and intelligent person like you , I can't believe you lambasted like a little girl !

Alinna (Embarrassed) : Erk ...

Joshua : *Turns head towards Libra* And as for you dear guests , let me remind you that both of us invited you all into this discussion because we hoped that you all had the answers to this mess , not to question us . Clearly , it wasn't us who triggered Ron's mental breakdown , *points at Atramille* it's her . Got it ?

Libra (Pale) : *Shudders* ... I understand ...

Joshua : Excellent ! *Takes deep breath* Now please , can you all ladies kindly chill and get to the issue at hand now ?

A sound scolding from Joshua prompts everyone into a state of calm and composed as they seat themselves down except for Atramille who remained standing by Libra's side , having her sight fixated towards Skynn , standing by the door , seemingly analyzing him for a moment .

Atramille : *Raises hand* Monsieur Joshua , may I speak ?

Joshua : Yes ?

Atramille : I can understand your doubts and err for our questionable actions . For that , we'll take full responsibility for it . However , no matter what you may perceive it to be as , we still meant no harm and we're just as befuddled as you are by Ron's sudden change in state of mind . I'd like you to give us a chance to prove our innocence to you and mademoiselle Alinna .

Joshua : *Turns head towards Alinna for "assurance" before facing back towards Atramille and letting out a sigh* ... go ahead .

Atramille : *Bows and walked towards Skynn , currently pre-occupied with Danny , catching him by surprise* Monsieur Skynn .

Skynn (Startled) : Wh- ... y-y-yes ?

And Atramille stood in front of Skynn motionless as she kept staring at him face-to-face as if he wants him to react to her actions . He remains confused as to why she's acted that way so close to him for a moment before something came into mind .

Danny : Hoi ... something going on between you two that I don't know off ?

Skynn : ... How the hell would I know ... but I can't shake that feeling that I knew her somehow .

Atramille : *Puts up an elegant smile* Welcome , dear guest . May I see your verification ID , please ?

Skynn : Huh ? *Stares intently at Atramille* ... hurmm , that smile ... that line ... my dream ... you resemble that of the lady in my dream or at least one of them ...

Danny : "That lady" you kept bragging about to everyone during work ?

Libra : Was this person one of the many who came for our service ?

Atramille : *Nods* ... he was one of our patron , just like Ron .

Joshua : Wait , what are you guys getting at this time ?

Libra : Interesting ... . Those present in this room , before anything else happens , I hope that whatever we speak of should be kept a secret from anyone . This is the only favor I would like you all to uphold for us . I hope that you all could accept it just this once .

Skynn : U-umm ...

Danny & Joshua : O ... kay ?

Alinna (Dissatisfied) : Why would I ? Such a one-sided bargain ...

Joshua : *Whispers* Just do it , Alinna !

Alinna (Annoyed) : *Whispers* Tch ... fine .

Libra : Many thanks for agreeing to our request . *Looks at Skynn* Do you perhaps remember possessing a golden card before ?

Skynn : Wait ... what ? How did you know that I had it before ?

Libra : We were the one who offered that golden card to you , you were invited to our place to be cared and treated for the current issues in life . I know it's not right to ask you this but could you tell them your life before you received the golden card and recall anything up to the point when you woke up feeling ... different .

Skynn : Uhh ... alright .

20-30 minutes of storytelling later ...

Joshua : ... that was amazing that you're still breathing after all that , sir .

Danny : Right ? I still don't believe that he'd be able to get pass all that and still lives to tell the tale . Talk about hell , he still bore all those scars on his body right now ...

Joshua (Thought) : And I thought the people working in the same department of the company like me and Alinna had it hard ...

Skynn : But , I'm still confused as to how I became into who I am right now right after I woke up that one fine morning ...

Libra : That's the result of our service . We only offer those whose life is literally at wits' end and the kind our seeker would seek out .

Joshua : ... Seeker ?

Libra : She's the one responsible for materializing the card within' this person's presence , the same was done for Ron .

Joshua : Then , could you bring her down here and-

Libra : *Shakes head* I'm afraid that would be impossible to do . It's ... difficult to explain in your term .

Joshua (Disappointed and confused) : The hell ...

Libra : I had the gist that you might seek her audience in this discussion . That's why I've prepared a workaround to this ... *Closes eyes*

Alinna (Pale) : *Flinches* Don't tell me ...

Joshua : Don't wimp out on me again ...

After a short moment of stillness and silence , a jet black-haired feminine figure , dressed in a Victorian-Gothic style dress appeared next to Atramille , seemingly embracing her in a graceful manner . Her appearance was so sudden that it's as if she'd just appeared in the next frame of a film , catching all but Atramille and Libra by surprise .

Libra : *Opens eyes* Kindly introduce yourself to them .

Jet black-haired lady : *Curtsy and bows* Aundlexia Warwinn el Fortuna graciously greets you all .

Joshua (Thought and shocked) : ... had my eyes deceived me , or did that exquisite masterpiece literally popped out of thin air ?! *Looks at Alinna , looking all pale and stiff* ... there she goes ...

Skynn : *Sweating* I~ guess I'll take my leave now . Duty calls ...

Danny : *Sweating* WOW ! HOLY S*** ! You're right ! Would you look at that time , I've got to get my much needed naptime for tomorrow ! BYE !

Joshua : Wait , guys ! WA-

And the door shuts before Joshua could even finish his sentence as they've left the building in a hurry , leaving him and his currently out cold friend Alinna behind in the meeting ...

Libra : ... have I done something that made them to leave ?

Joshua : Well ... uhuh ... *lets out a few cough and flails his hand momentarily* nevermind that . So , she is ...

Libra : A mediator that will relay your message to the 'seeker' in my world and back .

Joshua : O ... kay . So , do I just ... talk ?

Aundlexia : Yes . It may take a short bit of time to get to the 'seeker' . She needs to relay speeches into a sub-conscious message before relaying it to the seeker and vice-versa .

Joshua : Alrighty *takes in one deep breath and lets out before initiating a conversation with Aundlexia* ... after hearing Skynn's past life and his involvement with you and your act that gave a fresh new life , why doesn't it work on Ron ?

Aundlexia : "... I'm not the only one still trying to figure out why ."

Libra : True . *Raises hand together with Atramille*

Joshua : Then can you at the very least offer us any lead , just any , like the problem Ron has currently or in the past that is affecting him right now ?

Aundlexia : "... impossible . I can't read minds of souls . Atramille might offer more clarity in this" .

Joshua : *Turns head towards Atramille* Huh ? You can read minds ... ?

Atramille : *Shakes head lightly* I can only see manifestations around or within a person and not everyone has such manifestation and it's often too ambiguous and vague to me to understand myself .

Joshua : Wuh ?

Libra : Let's just say she had senses that's beyond human comprehension and capabilities and leave it at that for now . Atramille , go ahead ... what do you see ?

Atramille : *Nods* ... layers of walls of dark crystals , seemingly erected in a crude manner resembling that of a fortress ... within it , a masked figure ... wandering aimlessly .

Joshua : *Deep in thought for a moment* ... one moment , please .

Libra : Sure .

Joshua then got up and makes his way towards Alinna . He whispers close to her ears in a rather questionable yet visibly fearful and cautious manner , seemingly in an attempt at snapping her out of her state of shock and possibly awakening a fearful beast that only he knows best .

Joshua : Alinna ~ , if you don't snap out of it , I'm gonna grop-

A blinding swing of Alinna's fist lands on the side of Joshua face with tremendous force , sending him corkscrewing into the wall with a bone-shattering impact before slumping down to the ground , startling Libra , Atramille (slightly) and Aundlexia . No longer out cold , Alinna lets off a deathly leer at Joshua , all bruised up and bloodied from that one blow .

Alinna : Could you repeat that ONCE more ?

Libra : Are ... are you alright there ?

Alinna (Terrified) : Wait a minute ... that voi- *Caught a sight of Aundlexia* Heeek !!! *Backs herself against the wall* It's ... it's ... *slowly turning pale and losing consciousness*

Joshua :*Got up and lunges towards Alinna* Imma grop-PhOublURGH !!! *Gets punched by Alinna , again*

And so the repeating cycle of Alinna on the verge of fainting from the sight of Aundlexia , Libra and Atramille and Joshua getting beaten up senselessly by her for his ... 'actions' plays for some time ...

Joshua : *Covered in bruises and bandages* There , better now ?

Alinna (Nervous): *Blindfolded* Y-you'd better make sure tha-that ... 'thing' doesn't come for me !

Joshua : Of course she wouldn't ! *Gives a snidey stare towards Libra , Aundlexia and Atramille* ... you wouldn't , would you ?

Alinna (Terrified) : Guh !!!

Libra : No , we wouldn't do-

Joshua : There , your answer . Happy now ?

Alinna : *Spastic nodding* ...

Joshua : Good ! *Seats himself back down* Now , Atramille , please repeat what you said before to her .

Atramille : *Nods* Layers of walls of dark crystals , seemingly erected in a crude manner resembling that of a fortress ... within it , a masked figure ... wandering aimlessly .

Joshua : Now , Alinna . Translate that into layman's interpretation , please .

Alinna (Thought) : *Recomposes herself* ... dark crystals ... layers ... a masked figure ... I think I get it ... roughly .

Joshua : Well ?

Alinna : Based on my limited understanding on human psychology , walls usually represent a mental block . Dark crystals ... probably a representation of cause or maybe the type of defense ... I'm not sure but most possibly he is hiding and guarding something within , which fits the purpose of a fortress . Masks had a common symbolic meaning and it had to do with facade . In other words and if it's true , the Ron we see now isn't the true Ron .

Joshua : Whoa , what a brain-killer trying to digest something this deep ... but it seems like the Ron we see ain't the Ron we knew the day we both first met ... or maybe he's wearing that mask way before that .

Atramille : Does that explain his refusal to any form of contact and help from us ?

Alinna : That's entirely unrelated . (... or maybe it does . Can't tell ...)

Joshua : So ... not an answer ? Not even a lead ?

Alinna : More like "I thought so" . I brought him into our group when he was still a freshmen because of what Atramille sees in him . It made more sense to me now than ever .

Joshua : You probed his mind ?

Alinna : What am I to you ...

Joshua : *Sweats* Kidding ... just kidding . So , what is it that made sense to you ?

Alinna (Frustrated) : *Pulls down blindfold and frowns* Did it not raise your eyebrow at all , Joshua ? He began working in the company at the age of sixteen ... sixteen ! A person like him at his age should still be at school but he applied for a job meant for adults like us both . The reason he gave when we asked for just don't make even more sense !

Joshua (Defeated) : Aaah , so that's why . Why not ask hi- ... oh ... *facepalm* bummer .

Alinna (Defeated) : Why are yo- ... owwh ... *droops head down* great ...

Libra : Uhmm ... pardon for the intrusion but I'm not understanding the situation unfolding before me ...

Joshua : *Points above , roughly in the direction of where Ron is* ...

Libra (Solemn) : *Looks up , realizing who is right above her* ... I see .

Silence accompanied by the ambient sound of night crickets fills the room the moment everyone inside the room soon found out that after all of their effort in trying to and manage to get a lead for the issue at hand , it lead them to another dead end . Donning the expression and posture that of a defeated person but none had it more pronounced than Alinna and Joshua , who is now more worried than ever for Ron's state of health , both mentally and physically , now felt more helpless than ever as he slowly slips closer towards death's door right before their own eyes . The usually well-composed Atramille herself can't help but to get more worried as well as she tried her best to figure out what to do to make things better for all ... until a light bulb triggered in her mind . She reached into her bloodied apron to pull out pieces of crumpled papers she had taken from Ron's house and placed it in from of them on the table .

Atramille : Perhaps these might help ?

Joshua : What are these ? Letters ?

Alinna : Let me read those letters for a while ...

A few minutes later ...

Joshua (Frustrated) : *Scratches head* Just how much secrets he hid from his friends ? I don't really blame him if he does so since we're not his family member , but ... damn it , none of us knew he had one to begin with until this letter came to be discovered . I can't shake this feeling that his whole existence is one big secret in itself ! ... Atramille , did you find anymore of these ? Or any return letters ?

Atramille : *Shakes head* Unfortunately no .

Joshua : *Further examines the letter with Alinna* ... weird . All of these letter were written not long apart from each other and they're all rather old letters , dating back to several months , even years . I get the feeling that her letters did not reach him somehow ... *faces towards Alinna* you're awfully quiet and totally fixated on the letters itself . Something's brewing in your mind right now ?

Alinna (Thought) : Same address for all letters ... that's a possible lead . His sister might still be there , I hope . She might have answers to Ron's problems ... *Stood up and puts up a serious and determined expression in front of everyone in the room*

Split full page of two scene with Alinna standing in the middle of the two scene , with the two scene is divided by a transitioning effect between scenes . The top scene is that of the room where they're currently are and the bottom is an outdoor scene of what seems to be a hospital , with an ambulance and a white building can be seen at a distance from where she stood .

Alinna : ... yes , I do . Hear me out ...

To be continued ...

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Develop Your Story / Re: "La Sanctum" Club (18+)
« on: March 26, 2018, 01:36:25 PM »
Chapter 9 : Nightmare

Spoiler
Scene begins with a black background . Dragging footstep sound can be heard among total darkness that got louder .  The panel slowly revealed the source of the sound at a distance - a masked individual , barely resembled that of a male , seemingly washed and bleached of all color , walking forward aimlessly barefooted and somewhat naked , with no signs of a visual destination , landmark , nor even a single notable but insignificant environmental object in which he'd follow or go to . He had a plain white mask on , without any form of means of sight and had nothing that holds the mask in place , as if it's been glued or grown onto the face itself , had a molded expression resemblance that of Mona Lisa . He kept walking on until a series of selected 'voice' speeches starts echoing the scene with each replacing another as the previous slowly got muddled and quiet .

"Where we going ? Where's mama and papa ?"
"Yipee , our home is beautiful !"
"Let's sleep together , cuddle me , please ..."


Masked individual : ... yes ... just the two of us ...

"You can stay in our house . I'll take care of you two ..."
"She's our mama now ? Mama !"
"I'm so happy ! Let's stay happy forever and ever and ..."


Masked individual : ... umm ... let's stay like this , happy ...

*Sound of several people chanting prayers with deep-sounding bells being made in-between chants , accompanied by ambient sound of light rain and cries of a small crowd in the background*

"What's happening ? Where's mama ?"
"You're going somewhere ? Okay , I'll wait here !"
"Welcome back ! Is that a book ?"
"And then they lived together forever ... happily ever after"


Masked individual : ... but , I can make it better ... for the both of us ... but I have to go somewhere in order to do so ...

Radio static-like sound starts filling up the scene , although not to the point where it's deafening , it was enough to make some parts of the 'voice' speeches heard along the way garbled and unintelligible . However , the masked individual seemed unfazed by the sound as if this person doesn't notice it and kept walking on , as visual white crack-like static begins distorting the surroundings .

"Higher pay ? Well , this company offers you more cash , but *Static*"
"Okay , before you apply for this job , you need to know the ter- *Static* -ou're hired"
"Welcome to the research departmen- Static*"
"Psst , names Jo- *Static* -erson here is Ali- *Static* -nny , nice talkin- *Static*"
*Beeping sounds*
" Plea- *Static* -leav- *Static* -ly..."


Masked individual : ... wait for me ... I'll be by your side again ... I will ... *Repeats this phrase several times* ... wait for me ...

The same static sound eventually envelops the entire scene for the remainder of his 'pathless' journey . A glint of light can be seen at a distance , advancing towards the masked individual at blistering speed shortly after its appearance , instantly transforming the dark but heavily distorted scene a blinding bright white , in which shortly after , dims away , revealing a field of grass in front of him as he kept walking towards it and stopped cold in his track the moment he felt something different underneath his feet . The sensation of cool but prickly feeling of the grass startles the masked individual into taking a couple of quick steps backwards . Soon after , a series of more 'voice' speeches come rushing pass close by the masked individual like a speeding train .

"Kindly enter to receive your treatment , I hope that our service would help heal you of all of your problems" *Unknown crackling sound*
"Are you alright ?"
"Do you need help , we're here for you"
"If you need help , let me know"


Masked individual : ... help ? ... I'm fine ... we're fine the way it is ...

"Are you alright ?" *Repetition of phrase but with different voice tone*

The overwhelming pressure coming from the heavy rush of 'voice' speeches thundering pass and nearby the masked individual soon became unbearable as the masked individual crumbles down and curls up from it .


Masked individual : *Unknown cracking sound* We're fine ... why aren't you listening to me ... please ... leave us be .

"Are you alright ?" *Keeps on repeating but slowly sped up until it became unintelligible*
"Kindly enter to receive your treatment , I hope that our service would heal you of all of your problems and *Voice dips to an eerie low* never have to return here again" *Unknown cracking sound*
"Is our service not to your liking ?"
"... you wanted me to get started with the treatment then ..."
" Treatment ... *Echoes endlessly*
"Kindly remain calm . I won't hurt you ... *Spoken in a very distorted tone , ending with an eerie low and more unknown crackling sound*"


Masked individual : Leave.Us.ALONE !

The 'voices' that rushed pass by the masked individual's ears immediately ceased the moment he yelled out at 'it' ... but then , cracking sound can be heard being made unusually close to the masked individual . A beam of blinding light soon seeps through the slowly-expanding crack that gradually dimmed itself enough to get a visual of grass carpeted beneath him - he is able to see for the first time , the masked individual blinks for his very first time . Soon after the realization , an unknown piece fell onto his hand right before and within his field of vision . Confused and curious , he stares and ponders around it as more unknown pieces come falling onto his hand . After a short moment of wondering , the masked individual came to realize where it came from , he touched his face and felt cracks all over it - his 'face' starts crumbling away upon touch . Having a 'misled' thought that he is decaying off as if his life is slowly blowing its last wind , hysteria and fear began taking over his mind , as the masked individual desperately tries to hold it all together . However , whichever way he placed both of his hands on his crumbling 'face' only made it worse as it further speeds up the process . The masked individual's ongoing frantic and desperate attempts made him caught glimpses of his surrounding so unfamiliar beyond his already paranoid state of mind could comprehend , further exacerbates his insanity and fear . The 'voices' that the masked individual had once managed to repel gradually came back , darker and more morbid than ever , his fleeting instinct starts kicking as he tried his best to run away from all of that .

"*Hellish and sinister female voice* There's always the probability that you may wake up in this place again"
"None of the proposed solutions will keep you away from this place"
"So as long the card exist ..."
"You will rot here in hell FOREVER ! *echoing laughter*"
"No excuses , YOU'RE FIRED !"
"You're a trash to my eye ! I wish that you were never born !"
"Parasite ... !"
"IT'S ALL YOUR FAULT ! *echoes along with the laughter*"
"I don't raise children of a rotten cheater . Rot away from here !"


Masked individual : *Looked and ran around aimlessly* Why ... why I'm here ?! No ... NO ! Let me out , PLEASE ! I shouldn't be here , I don't want to be here ! *Repeats for several times* Let me out !

Like wailings of a banshee , the grossly warped , distorted and ghastly 'voices' continues to assault the masked individual's already broken mind , further instilling more fear and paranoia into his mind , making him tremble uncontrollably to the point of crippling his means to escape the inescapable - his legs had given up on him , rendering the masked individual immobile . Peering through his squinted eyes while enduring the screeches made by the 'voices' , he saw a mysterious figure at a distance , casting a shadow that shields him from the bright light in front of him partially , slowly walking towards him while the mysterious figure attempts at reaching out to him as it gets more clearer the closer it got . Its call somehow pierces through all the deafening sounds echoing throughout the scene , calling out a persons name ...

"Ron ..."

"Ron ... ?"

"Ron , can you hear me ? I came here looking for you . I'm here to help you with your current problems"


Masked individual : Problems ? ... who are you ?

And then the veil lifts off from mysterious figure , revealing the person before the masked individual the moment it squats down close in front of the masked individual , it answered his inquiry ...

"It's me , Ron ... Atramille de Surquouis ."

And then ... silence .


??? : ... ... ... huh ...

Scene blacked out the moment a swinging and shattering sound of something heavy and glass-like is heard , prompting a switch to a scene of a back view of the main entrance of Alinna's house where Alinna , Joshua , Danny and the butler stands by it , currently peering at a direction where the source of the sound of broken glass was made .

Alinna (Fear) : Oh no ... follow me , quick !

A few scenes depicting them making haste towards a room where Ron and Atramille is , opening the door with force . Inside and among shards of broken glass , ceramic and other light clutters strewn all over the room , Atramille lies on the floor in-between the bed and the door close to where Alinna and the rest are , struggling to get herself up , bleeding from her head . Ron , with bloodshot-widened eyes , clearly enraged and not in a clear state of mind is seen about to lift up one of the end table next to the bed .

Alinna : Subdue him quickly !

Danny , Joshua and Alinna's butler makes haste at goring down Ron away from the barely conscious Atramille , forcing Ron to drop the lethal object he had in his hand before it strikes Atramille , falling flat onto the floor . Joshua then assisted Danny in pinning him down while Alinna's butler came to pull Atramille away from him .

Ron : *Flails aggressively* IT'S ... HER ! SHE'S STILL IN MY HEAD ! L ...LET ME GO ! I WANT HER GONE ! I F***ING WANT HER GONE !

Danny : (Damn , what strength under such condition !) Calm down ! Ron !

Ron : SHE'S STILL HERE . F***ING EVERYWHERE ! I CAN'T UNSEE HER ... WHY CAN'T I ?!

Joshua : Wh- ... *grunts* what are you talking about ? She's not here anymore ! *Secretly gestures Alinna's butler to take Atramille out of the room* So ... settl-

His sheer rage and hysteria granted Ron a brief inhuman strength to force himself out of Danny's and Joshua's grasp and ran towards Atramille , only to have the door shut and locked before him by Alinna . She immediately slides away from his blind charge towards the door before impact , slamming his entire body with an explosive thud before recoiling off from it and being restrained and subdued again by Danny and Joshua .

Ron : MY LIFE ! GIVE ME BACK . GET ME BACK ! MY HAPPINESS . OUR HAPPINESS ! I CAN'T AFFORD TO LET IT HAPPEN AGAIN ! NEVER !

Joshua : When ... *Wheezes* is help ... going to arrive , Alinna ?! *Grunts* I can't ... hold him down much longer ...

Alinna : The doctors below needs time to prepare the sedatives to pu-

Ron : No , please ... not that ! I DON'T WANT TO SLEEP ! I DON'T WANT TO END UP BACK THERE AGAIN ! NNOOO ~ !!!

Danny : Woah ! *Falls over*

Once again , Ron broke free from their hold and ran for an opened window as an attempt to escape ... or attempting suicide . Before he had his body out of the window , Joshua barely made it in time and gored him away from the window and had Danny block it off . In the middle of recovering from the knockdown , he sees a room with a door opened nearby and makes a beeline towards it . Realizing where he is going to next , Alinna ran towards the room , closes and locks the room as soon as he is inside before he could come back out of it again . The door was so thick and sturdy , Ron's hysterical screaming can barely be heard and made out of as the bashing on the door continues .

Ron : *Barely audible* LET ME GO ! LET ME OUT ! I CAN'T LET THAT HAPPEN AGAIN !

Danny : *Pants heavily from exhaustion* ... darn it . That was brutal ... his strength ...

Joshua :*Takes in several deep breaths* Are you sure it's fine for him to be in there ?

Alinna : *Slouches down , letting out a sigh of relief* The only way out is through the same door and it's empty inside . So , yes .

Ron : *Barely audible* I DON'T WANT TO GO BACK THERE , NOT THERE , HERE , THAT HELL ! LET ME OUT !

Joshua : "That place" ? "hell" ? Is he referring to that company ?

Alinna : I don't think so ... but maybe she does .

Danny : Who ? That maid lad Atramille ?

Alinna (Serious) : *Nods* ... he ran away from his own home from her and was very reluctant to go back . If anything , she is the prime suspect for his current state of mind ...

Joshua : *Observed Alinna's expression and tone for a moment* ... you know what ? I'll do the talking instead . I can tell that you're not in the right mood to stay cool . Relay any inquiries to me instead .

Alinna : Wha- ... fine .

Joshua : Okay then . We go now .

They make their way down to towards the guest room , where Atramille was sent to for treatment , in search for answers . Atramille , now stable and conscious enough to stay seated upright on one of the four large velvet , ornate camel-back couches encircling a table with a large , oriental-designed porcelain vase with a bouquet of flower placed in it in the middle of it , is seen staring at her blood-stained sleeve , seemingly deep in thought about something , having a large bandage on her forehead as Alinna's butler kept watch over her at a distance . As she kept staring at her bloodied sleeve , she began hearing haunting whispers that sounded like cries of the sufferings and anguished pleas for help and mercy , but was interrupted by the sound of a door being opened nearby , snapping her out of it . Upon entering , Alinna instructed her butler to keep watch over Ron , who is currently locked inside the closet room of the bedroom and leave Alinna and Joshua alone with Atramille for questioning . Danny however is seen roaming around the room , admiring the luxurious items being displayed just outside the room with a mobile phone in one of his hand placed next to his ear .

Joshua : *Ahem* ... Atramille de Surquouis .

Atramille : *Turns head towards Joshua , slightly surprised* ... how do you know of my name ? Is Ron alright ?

Joshua : How I know your name don't really matter now . Ron's not well ... well , "not well" is an understatement , judging from what I've witnessed and experienced first hand ...

Atramille : That means that I'm needed-

Joshua : *Halts Atramille* Sorry , mademoiselle , that's not gonna happen . Alinna's *points at her behind him* statement suggests that you're the reason behind all of this .

Atramille (Confused) : How can it be my fault ? I was just fulfilling my duties as his personal maid .

Joshua : Then why did he ran away from his house , away from you ? Both of us suspect that you must've done more than just "tend to his needs" and "keeping the house clean" . Care to dispel that suspicions , please ?

Atramille : Does my recent act of stripping myself down to my bare skin and only donning myself with an apron be the reason ?

Joshua : *Instantly aroused , face turned a bright red* G-give me a sec ! *Turns around , attempting in regaining composure and self-control*

Alinna : *Stares at Joshua with disgust* ...

Joshua : *Whispers* Wouldn't you reacted the same way upon hearing that from "Fabio" (Writer's note : Google it and visualize , girls !) ?!

Alinna : *Whispers* Alright , fine ! So quit fantasizing and focus on the objective !

Joshua : *Turns back around , calm and collected* That ... it may be a little bit too much to the male's gaze (F*** you Ron , you lucky bastard !) but that doesn't really answers his fleeting response and reluctancy to come back to his house , to you .

Atramille : But I had not done anything that were harmful .

Joshua : *Gets nudged in the back by Alinna* One moment *Listening to Alinna for a period of time , in silence* ... now that's questionable ... Alinna believes that you're not a regular housemaid to begin with ... I'd agree too .

Atramille : But I am indeed a maid and my master is Ron .

Joshua : Hurmm ... you see , *assumes an imposing pose* here's why Alinna's point makes more sense than yours . One , he doesn't have the money to hire let alone sustain one and two , even if you are his personal maid and you did it for free , he would've rejected it because he prefers being alone ... all the while - that's his lifestyle , says him . So , isn't it time for you to state your real reason for us ?

Atramille : *Feeling boxed in* ...

Alinna : Just spi-

Joshua (Serious) : *Hands up to stop Alinna* Alinna ... please .

Alinna : *Notices Joshua's shift in tone , character and expression* ... I'll go get some fresh air ... *Leaves the room*

Joshua (Serious) : Now , I want you to think about this really carefully and thoroughly . Whatever you're doing right now , even if your intention were indeed good , Ron isn't having any of it , period . Right now , he's above us , locked up in a small room , completely deranged and berserk , he can't tell friend from foe anymore . If it weren't for our intervention , he'd be bludgeoning you senselessly until you breathe your last breath . Do you still wish to continue on playing your game ? Because , we're not stopping him the second time this happens , that's for sure .

Atramille sat on the couch motionless as her mind wanders deep within the state of deliberation for minutes , making decisions that will affect everything that is associated with her - her 'family' up in the 'sanctum' , their purposes and goals , everything , while under the constant watchful eyes of Joshua .

Atramille : ... I yield .

Joshua : *Slightly relaxed* I'm glad *gesturing signs towards Atramille into divulging information* ... well ?

Atramille : It was my proposal along with the blessings of my mother to be by his side to gather whatever clues needed in resolving an ongoing issue we currently had .

Joshua : "We" ? "Mother" ?

Atramille : *Nods* ... when it comes to executive orders , she is the one .

Joshua : I would like to have a talk with that person then .

Atramille : I'm afraid that she might not be abl-

Joshua : No can do , mademoiselle . I'd prefer to have a face-to-face conversation with her , along with my lady friend out there , who would agree as well .

Atramille : But-

Joshua (Serious): No "but"s .

Atramille : ... alright . I'll relay this invitational request to her right away . I'd suggest that you'd not interfere with the process ... *Closes eyes and went into a sleep-like state*

Joshua (Perplexed): O ... kay ?

As Joshua stares at Atramille perplexed , the scene fades in a transition to Libra's private chamber , where she is seen seated in a 'seiza' posture , meditating .

Libra : ... welcome back . *Slowly turns around , revealing Atramille behind her approaching her* You're covered in blood !

Atramille (Gloomy) : Forgive me for I may have failed you ... *Bows a full 90 degree*

Libra : An apology can come later . Let us tend to-

Atramille : It's more urgent of a matter that I deliver this message from Ron's acquaintances in his world .

Libra : ... alright . I'm listening .

Atramille (Regretful) : *Nods* ... They'd wish to talk to you in person ... it seems like I may have caused us irreversible damage . I ... *shudders* I'm ...

Libra : ... I've suspected that this might happen . So don't blame yourself for what has happened . This is indefinitely my fault . I've might've made one too many wrong decisions due to the lack of understanding , knowledge and experience ... and secrets can no longer remain hidden forever , so it seems .

Atramille : ???

Libra : *Nods* I sort of ... foresaw it coming , along other host of things that may yet to come . It needs to be done ... before the inevitable happens .

Atramille : But how are you supposed to do that ? You've made it clear that you're unable to exist beyond this place .

Libra : *Grabs hold on to one of the floating orbs surrounding her meditating spot* Actually , I can ... short , but rather complex of a process and requirements that comes with risks ... but I believe the current situation now outweighs it . Return back to where they are now and deliver my answer . I'll be there with you shortly .

Atramille : *Bows* Yes , milady .

The scene transitions back inside Alinna's house on the other side of the door of the guest room , Danny is seen roaming around the area , passing by Alinna standing by the front door .

Danny : ... this silence is perturbing ...

Alinna (Uneasy) : ... I'm going back inside .

Danny : Okie dokie . I'm staying put here .

Shortly after Alinna's exit from the scene , the sound of a running engine is heard approaching the house . A voice of an elderly man is being made right after the engine is turned off , calling out for someone .

Mysterious voice : Danny ! You in there ?

Danny : *Goes outside to investigate who was it* Oh , it's you ! ... and who's that with you ?

Back in the guest room .

Alinna : I'm back , Joshua . Why is it quie-

Joshua : *Puts a finger close to his mouth and whispers* No interference ...

Alinna : *Whispers* What ? *Looks at Atramille , seemingly motionless* She asked you to ?

Joshua : *Nods and whispers* Let's go along with her request for now ...

Alinna (Perplexed) : *Sat down with Joshua , observing Atramille together* O ...kay ...

For minutes both Joshua and Alinna kept their focus on Atramille , absolutely motionless , as if she's a machine that has ceased it's operation . Without any forewarning whatsoever from Atramille , she suddenly opened her eyes and spoke her first words after minutes of silence .

Atramille : *Open eyes* Your invitation has been accepted . She'll be here shortly .

Alinna & Joshua : *Flinched in surprise* Eeek !

*Loud knocking of the door*

Alinna & Joshua : *Spooked off their chair* Wharrgh !!!

Danny : *Opens door* Uh ... bad timing ?

Joshua : *Sweating from the series of successive jumpscares* N-nono , you're not ...

Danny : Okies ... I brought someone with me . My work buddy , Skynn-

Skynn : Skynn here , reporting ! I brought a customer with me . She wanted to be transported here .

Just as they're done introducing themselves to Alinna , Joshua and Atramille , a girl with blue eyes , dressed in a brown jacket and a light pink one-piece dress with a straight , shoulder length , silver hair attempts to walk into the gap between Danny and Skynn , prompting them into making way for her .

Joshua (Shocked) : *Taken aback* W-w-w-wait a minute ! M-m-m-miss Myna ?! (Writer's note : A big shot celebrity among otakus in this story's world)

Alinna : Miss ... Myna ?

Joshua : Yes , her ! How are you still alive ? Weren't you being pronounced dead in an accident six years ago ?

Alinna , Danny and Skynn : ... WHAAAT ?!

And their endless cries of utter disbelief and shock trails off all the way into the space ...

Back at the 'Sanctum' , in the same room with a large , ornate golden door where Ron was a couple of times before , a jet black-haired feminine figure , dressed in a standard black-velvet-violet Victorian-Gothic style dress is seen standing by the door , seemingly waiting for someone or something .

Jet black-haired lady (Thought) : "I might be needed down on the human world" is it ... ? *Lifts up an orb similar to the ones in Libra's private chamber* If milady asked me to wait for the signal , then it must've been real urgent . *Clenches fist* I pray that everyone involved is alright ...

*A feint , prolonged sound of a small crowd screaming their lungs out*

Jet black-haired lady : ... have I heard something just now ?

To be continued ...

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Online proofreading count : 0

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General Manga writer discussions / Re: Service Trades?
« on: March 26, 2018, 12:19:07 PM »
I've offered storyboards before, but no bites.

If it is to get an artist on your team, it's a good alternative but you got to factor in interest and quality of your story as well. Storyboards to writers are mere substitutes for a wall of text.

If it is for a trade for something else per the title states, it's rather worthless. They'd be better off getting an artist to do one or do one themselves. Stick with concept and character art as a trade or the more common critique for critique.

And I'm offering critique. PM me if needed or find me in the signature link below. No need for a trade, just your patience. I have a busy life.

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