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Develop Your Story / Re: Level of Combat ~
« on: November 26, 2018, 01:20:19 PM »
Spoiler
Well, we always encourage people to post their stories to MR directly. I know it can be a pain if you're already posting it somewhere else, but people are often wary of clicking links from people they don't know very well. That being said, now that you have met the post goal of 25, you are allowed to post links!

But I digress, let's talk about your story

As far as your first question goes, it is really a question only you can answer. But I can give a few thoughts that might help you figure it out.

The first thing you need to consider, is your own interest and ability to write each of the power levels. Writing a purely martial arts focused story is great and all, but if you find yourself unable to make the fights interesting without laser beams, then maybe you'll want to reconsider.

You also have to think about the characters themselves. When crafting a character, they have to make sense for the world around them. They need to have been crafted by it. If your hero is just a really good martial artist, he's going to think differently about others (these people could become as strong as me with just the right training) vs if he has seemingly magical god powers that only he possess (screw regular people, I need to only keep track of the other super humans)


As far the second question, while options A and B are certainly going to make it easier to push the story forward, it's also going to make it boring as all get out if you don't do it right. Option C lends naturally to a lot more interesting fights. But if you're concentrating less on the fights themselves, and more on the characters and things happening around the fights, then all will work, depending on what kind of story you're writing.

For instance, One Punch Man only works because while there is some spectacular fights, the main interest is how Saitama interacts with the world while being who he is. It's not about the fighting, it's about the results of the fighting.

That being said, the most common shounen trope I sorta a mix from what you stated. I.e.: much stronger than the friends, slightly stronger than the enemies. This is a good strategy as it makes for interesting fights, but if you don't want your side chracters to backslide into irrelevance immediately, you should make sure the friends are in the running with the hero as well. Because let me tell you, if not, three nights in you'll be dying to play around with someone else for a while, but you will have left yourself with simply zero options.

I hope that helps. Good luck!

Actually that's quiet helpful, kinda cleared my minds on few things. My characters are all crafted with this universe i created, which makes it harder because i have to consider every detail i put in a character's arsenal. One thing that's making it harder that am trying to drop a mix of "Fighting forces" into the story. Just like Naruto for example where each ninja is specialized in a certain jutsu, or in One Piece if the character is a Devil fruit user or a Haki user or someone depends on accessories.

For the second point, also an interesting point you have there. That what i was missing in my endless debate in my mind "What makes the story special the fights or the events".

I'll spin those ideas in my mind, Thanks a million @Coryn !
 

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Develop Your Story / Level of Combat ~
« on: November 24, 2018, 09:01:15 AM »
Evening fellas,

Finally got my ass into asking for an advice from you guys.

First of all, I write as a hobby. I don't usually do long continuous day by day writing so that leave me vulnerable for second thoughts, re-writing and a lot of doubts in my contents.

When i started to write this story i had an idea of how this story is going to, the characters, type of powers and few huge events. But now once i reached to my first serious fighting scene i stopped for nearly 2 months now thinking of how will i go forward in this.

Let me explain the protagonist, just before the story start (Spoiler) he was trapped with a #Number# of people. When they were trapped they were asked to only practice fighting and nothing else, all of them were fighters of all types some with powers and some are physically strong etc;. For straight 5 years the only thing they did is only to train 24/7. Keep in mind that comparing to his family's reputation he started way late to power himself. After a certain event just before our story started the protagonist was thrown outside this place. And apparently the first villain he's facing is a certain person who's "close" to him. Also he'll be gathering an entourage of 4 people with him while progressing in the story.

But i still didn't cement the fighting so far, only low-level fights. At the moment am still bouncing between the choices below.
  • A - Very high level - catastrophic level (DBZ - Last Fight NarutoVs.Sasuke).
  • B - High level - Like Seven Deadly Sins - Magi.
  • C - Medium Level - Like One Piece fights - DMC.
  • D - Low Level - Hajime no Ippo - Kenichi: The Mightiest Disciple.

Also i have another consideration in mind which is, How strong is the protagonist?. Also comparing to his entourage should he be much stronger than them? Also i have few choices in my mind.
  • A - Stronger than his entourage and stronger than most enemies mostly, This will make the story easier to progress and to write.
  • B - Slightly Stronger and even with most enemies, This may add a lot of factors in the story such as teaming up with his entourage to fight etc. And also give a chance for the rest to let's say rebel against him.
  • C - Evenly strong as his entourage, This will leave a great space of development for the protagonist where at the end of the story he'll be stronger than the rest after certain events.

Forget to mention that the protagonist have a certain power within him that awakes occasionally depending on the power itself (To sum it up just like the Nine-tail/Kurama).


Any additional ideas or adjustments are very welcomed. Am not sure if i can post a link yet or not but please visit my word press page where am releasing my story chapter by chapter and any tips are welcome! :sadbye:

https://baruden.wordpress.com/

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Manga Writer workshop / Re: Black Friday: One-Day-One-Shot!
« on: November 20, 2018, 12:25:18 PM »
Count me in Boss  8)

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Manga Talk / Re: One Piece Manga Chapter Discussion
« on: November 17, 2018, 03:55:27 AM »
Recent chapters Oda showed the world that Luffy is not the "always win protagonist" that everyone is assuming is.

Plus it showed us that the end-game of One Piece is nothing comparing from what we are seeing now!

For example how much stronger the Yonkous are from Luffy?

For god sake he used all his power against Big Mama and with just a piece of her arm above the elbow she knocked him out cold.

Kaido just Insta K.Oed him in a single shot without breaking a sweat.

I really love where it's going now!

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Thats a great amount of detail, i will add that to my list. I do have a tendancy to miss details but i will try and get them all :)

An artist must do what's comfortable for him, do not worry about missing few things as long as you're doing it from your soul's comfort zone!  :dance: :thumbsup: :angel:

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Ok am kinda excited for this! haven't written in a while and kinda feeling down, but now i gotta see my main character alive that will give me motive to write more! i hope am not being too picky in my details and the background story/personality to help you understand the character's burden! goodluck and thanks a thousand! :dance:

Spoiler
Story:  Thesari
Genre: Epic Fantasy, Young-Adult Fiction, Adventure, Mythology.
Era: Mix between all eras (a long story would give up a lot of spoilers if I try to explain)
Name: Baruden Blackens
Age: 23
Zodiac Sign: Cancer (If it helps)
Appearance:
Skin – Light brown
Hair – Very short hair / bald
Height – 174 cm (5’85)
Body – Ectomorph body, with light muscles.
Face – medium size nose, little above average lips, dark yellow eyes. A horizontal scar across both his eyes.
Face Expression - He has three main expression, one where he gently smiles/carefree, the second where's he has a devilish/crazy smile that being lured into a fight and the last one where he's lost in thoughts where even the person front of him will feel like a hollow as he through them as if they are not there.
Marks – Burning marks on his left shoulder toward his neck.
Cloths - dark brown cape with a hood, the hood is down to show his face features. Tight white shirt from linen fiber with the sleeves pulled up just before the elbows. Black pants with brown belt.
Accessories - Black glove on his right hand as if it’s a safety glove to use weapons, on his left hand wearing a brown leather bracelet with a black metal piece holding the family’s crest (still didn’t decide the crest but it’s like a mirror with a sword inside)

Personality:
He’s the youngest of 4 brothers, carried a piece of personality of his older brothers.
 Good Humors, improvise on the go, have a bad temper, moody, considerate, smart when it comes to self-benefit and lazy as it gets.
His family are trying to get his born-with powers on their side to do keep growing their power over the world. He still loves his family specially his brothers, in the story he’ll be facing them, and they can go very low just to break him to get to their side. He’s very loyal to his best friend who he has he trying to find in his journey. A lot of secrets and burdens are within him through his journey where he cannot share with his current entourage.

Ectomorph



Protruding Eyes



Instead of Blue on the bottom, white! and if you wanna change the design to fit the outfit at your taste am ok with that.




Inspiration character (totally not the same but his shoes/body are pretty awesome!)




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How did i miss this post T_T!

Still up for it?

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Manga Artists Wanted / Re: Looking for Shonen-style Artist.
« on: October 12, 2018, 04:06:48 PM »
Edit your 1st post and describe what your characters look like.
That would make your life a bit easier.

Done! ^ post edited  :read:

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Manga Artists Wanted / Re: Looking for Shonen-style Artist.
« on: October 02, 2018, 04:21:54 PM »
Life is using me as a sandbag, an artist would make it easier on me.  :ohmy: :sheep:

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Manga Artists Wanted / Re: Looking for Shonen-style Artist.
« on: August 18, 2018, 06:40:32 PM »
Still looking.  :sheep:

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Manga Artists Wanted / Re: Looking for Shonen-style Artist.
« on: August 04, 2018, 04:07:13 AM »
Hello I would be interested, I'm new I like to draw my style is similar one piece, dragon ball, black cover



i've sent you a PM.

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General Manga writer discussions / Re: Weird Writing Habits?
« on: August 02, 2018, 06:22:45 PM »
I noticed that it's not the "Music" we need to run our engine to write.

Sometimes only noises, many times i i open a talk-show on my tv and leave it while writing.  :notunderstand:

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General Manga writer discussions / Re: Weird Writing Habits?
« on: August 01, 2018, 04:36:48 AM »
I tend to buy pushed down-buttons keyboard, so when i write i just smoothly move my fingers over the buttons to reach the next button which kinda makes me feel like a maestro and weirdly makes me feel like flying in my text....ok this sound too weird, but hey it works for me  :dance:

and for music i tend to listen to: Two steps from Hell - Archangel  :sure:

And regarding deleting a whole sentence, i believe as a writers we tend to write a sentence in a perfect way or it feels the sentence is wrong or not "Perfect form of writing" that what i feel when i write it.


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Manga Artists Wanted / Looking for Shonen-style Artist.
« on: August 01, 2018, 04:26:50 AM »
Goodmorning guys,

Am looking for a Shonen-style artist to draw few of my characters in my story. I need something to fuel me up to move forward, i believe seeing my characters come to life would make that happen.

How will this work, i'll try to pinch you the character looks and throw a background story along his personality. I believe mixing these three factors would also impact you as an artist. Also if it's possible to draw weapons would be awesome.

This would be most likely an unpaid job, but i hope it would go a long way if things works out.  :sheep:

Edit: Ooook i'll just throw in a description of one of the characters. (i like to throw a background story to help the artist feel the character)

Name: Dred

Origin: Africa

Age: 13

Height: 133 cm

Occupation: Slave / Blacksmith

Weapons: small Blacksmith’s hammer

Outfit: long pants torn at the bottom and dirty, and sleeveless white shirt bloody a bit. His hand and handcuffed by iron handcuff but the chains are broken because he is a loyal slave who loves his work.
Facial: Little afro hair, scars below his ears indicate that he’s a slave. Golden big eyes.
Dred was enslaved since he was a child, he only had his father. His father used to be a great blacksmith for the noble family also well-known with his charisma and bright smile. However, when the kingdom announced that each noble family must have slaves or else they’ll be exiled from the city the family betrayed Dred’s father by forcing him to be a slave, but he refused due to his pride. They killed him and made Dred their slave at the age of 3. Dred did not know what does a “Slave” mean and the noble family treated him nicely, he never had any issues by being called a Slave. Until he reached the age of 12 then he started to realize what it is and saw what the other families did to their slaves and how disrespectful they were to them. He worked for the family for 9 years as a blacksmith and had a very spectacular skills with the hammer he was called “Slave Prodigy”.
But…He and his best friend Bairon made an oath to free-slavery and rebel against all the noble families and the royal family to stop this madness.


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It would be nice to see your art.

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