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Messages - Forlorn Serpent

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break Room / Re: If you were on an island...
« on: November 23, 2017, 08:14:21 PM »
How do you plan to eat when you see something like this?


When the time comes. Humans will end up looking this when you suffer heat exhaustion and hunger.



Remember, this is before I do any research. Everything I learned is from TV.

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Manga Writer workshop / Re: Poetry House
« on: November 23, 2017, 04:31:10 PM »
Metaphorical title

I saw a brother of thousands fall.
It will be the first of many this season.
They were brown, red, orange, and yellow.

“Don’t worry, I’ll clean it up” said my brother
I replied “just leave them there, don’t bother”


The old die for the next in line, except these.
They will be collected and bagged and eventually dumped.
Their journey endied,  but they would not be connected to their own.
However, I will change that.

My neighbor hired a man to clean their yard.
The following spring he will return to bring  back what he took.
It’s funny that they will pay twice for nothing.



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break Room / Re: If you were on an island...
« on: November 23, 2017, 03:53:13 PM »
This is before I do any research and just use the information from television and movies. No life experience on this one.

I think like 99% of insects and arachnids are edible.

Venom can be ingested and not harm you. Poison is what kills when ingested.

If you dig, you will find a butt load of bugs, no matter where you are. Except Antarctica.

More protein per gram is found in insects compared to humans.


So, I will eat a human because that is the only time cannibalism is socially acceptable .

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MR Pub / Re: The Velvet Room (aka the Tarot Thread)
« on: November 23, 2017, 12:21:56 AM »
Thanks


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Manga Art Gallery / Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« on: November 22, 2017, 07:16:52 AM »
Okay. I widened the hips. I wanted to use screentones but the basic clip studio i have doesn't allow screentones and i don't want to copy paste a copy from the interet. I know. I'm lazy.

Spoiler

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break Room / Re: Nobuhiro Watsuki was arrested!
« on: November 21, 2017, 03:56:28 PM »
This should bring up the topic, can you separate the work from the artist? Since I was never a fan, I have no qualms. If it was Oda, hmmm, I would still read one piece. But I would look for signs in the story.

I think I am more pissed that this will add another mark on being a manga/anime fan.

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break Room / Re: Nobuhiro Watsuki was arrested!
« on: November 21, 2017, 03:32:51 PM »
Alright. Time for inappropriate joke.


But seriously. I read what he likes. Yeah... no...

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Manga Art Gallery / Re: Forlorn Serpent's Art Gallery
« on: November 21, 2017, 03:30:03 PM »
@suupertramp thanks for the notes. But first.
Spoiler

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Manga Creations / Re: Black Soul (Short Story)
« on: November 21, 2017, 12:40:47 PM »
Added my notes. Please don’t yell at me.


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Manga Creations / Re: Black Soul (Short Story)
« on: November 21, 2017, 11:46:01 AM »
You failed! You used a gif you already used!  :noyoudon't:

Now, your story.

How do you want me to critique it?

Issues i have with story.
1) not keeping the same tense
2) a narrator asking too many questions
3) plot wise, she went from a cave to outside the cave. That’s it.
4) why is it so depressing!!!!!!! Meaning, you need to balance it so the depressing stuff is highlighted when next to happy moments.
5) you can stretch it out by having Mary do more than just walk. The story might flow better if the wolf part was during the story, and not just a memory.

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Manga Art Gallery / Re: And then Nairbons had a Gallery
« on: November 21, 2017, 08:58:02 AM »
Now I know Nairbons  digs cryptids.

I remember being 13 :tongue:

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MR Pub / Re: Chit Chat 2017
« on: November 20, 2017, 12:48:16 AM »
I was reading some Buzzfeed "articles". it was titled Job horror stories or something like that.

Some of these were clearly stupid. that is the point after all. But this one screamed of egocentric bullcrap. So this chick was going to miss her graduation because of work schedule conflict.  You would think this would be in the perspective of the employee. No. it wasn't The horror story is in the perspective of the manager.  He's pissed that the employee quit because she didn't want to miss the graduation. He goes on to add, this is her first job, no one in her family ever had a professional job ( i don't even know how he knows that), and she was leaving her job with idea that she could potentially do this again in her next job. LIke, she isn't being professional at all.

Dude, STFU. I can't believe this guy complained!

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MR Pub / Re: Chit Chat 2017
« on: November 19, 2017, 08:40:57 AM »
@manimal    I had no idea what Omegle is until I looked it up after reading your post a second time.  I thought you literally walked around your area with a guitar and met people. You know how old people use to meet people :tongue:. I was thinking, I thought you had a shyness problem and you want around talking to people in the real world. But nope, I was wrong.


Oh yeah, I forgot to say. Screw anyone who didn’t like Kefla from Dragon Ball super. I really liked her. You haters are really dumb!!! I knew she was going to lose but you guys keep saying asspulls, she can’t be this strong, she just learned to transform. That’s what happens when you train and never knew there was another level.

You guys act as if she was actually going to beat Goku and felt threatened.

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Manga Art Gallery / Re: SpartanG Art others
« on: November 18, 2017, 10:24:45 PM »
I know i don't need to tell you this, but these look great! :clapping:

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MR Pub / Happy birthday Vacant!
« on: November 17, 2017, 06:49:43 PM »




Now wish that you could look like him :tongue:

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