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break Room / Help me cheat my russian test xD
« on: November 04, 2015, 01:34:10 PM »
So I have 2 hours to learn a 100 russian words. Which is nearly imposible.

Or you could say, that I have 2 hours to prepare to cheat through the test.

So the vocabulary test will consist only of a crossword, which will contain 20 random words from a 100.

Do you have any tips how do I do this? xD
I have a pretty good grade, so I don't want to mess up just because I have a weak vocabulary.

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Develop Your Story / Killing Fate
« on: October 28, 2015, 02:42:32 PM »
Welcome to my 'Killing Fate' project, a story written in a storyboard, describing how a manga made by this would look. I worked once on this, and with the help of other people, their reviews and suggestions, I was able to update it to, as I see, almost it's full potential.

Genres: shonen, humor, mystery, supernatural, action-adventure, dark.

So as I see it, before every chapter, there would be a page or two, telling some backstory or information that would not be displayed in manga, but that would give the reader a better understanding of characters and what is going around outside the scene, so they could get more immersed into the story.

The backstory of chapter 1 is also a bit of synopsis.

So,  here's the backstory for Chapter 1:



Spoiler

There was a small island near Madagascar. It didn't have a big population, maybe 6 or 7 families only lived there.

One day, a small meteorite hit the island, causing an explosion, and killing off everybody on it, except for 3 eight years old boys.

One of them was found by a cruise ship in Arabian Sea. They took him in, and helped him recover. The boy had a sword, but did not want to let other people have it

When the ship reached the coast, it was empty, every single passenger was killed with a sharp weapon, the boy's sword.

The boy travelled to Scandinavia, killing innocent people on his way. People started to call him the 'Tentacle' because he was a mysterious killer, who couldn't be stopped by armies.

In Norway, using his powers, he created his  empire, and became a rich king.

The second boy awoke in Mozambique. He also had a sword. Filled with rage that he lost his father, he decide to clear the world of criminals and other evildoers so that noone would be hurt again. But he attracted the police's attention, so he was forced to kill even the good people who were after him. Following such events, he decided that he is above law, and that anyone who goes against him should die too. People called him the second killer, 'Vulcano' because it is said that his anger is unstoppable.

The third boy, our main hero, awoke in Australia. He had a sword with with him, but didn't want to keep it. He left it at the beach where he awoke, however the next morning the same sword appeared near his bed. No matter what he would do, the sword would come back to the boy in the morning.

An Australian family found him crying over his fate. They found out that the boy had lost his memory and had black eyes with red middles. They adopted him and took to their village.

But the children were mean to the boy, they would laugh at his red eyes and his amnesia.

One day, filled with anger, he killed the whole village. Scared of his own abilities, he started living a wild life, killing farm animals for meat. But fate was cruel to him, as he would lose consciousness and wake up in piles of blood. People called him the killing 'Bird', as no one knew where he would strike next. As Bird moved to central Asia while hunting for food, he noticed that words have appeared on his sword: "Killing - Killer's Fate"




 Chapter 1: "The first encounter":

Spoiler

1 page, 5 panels (2-2-1)



panel 1 Narration: You think your life is hard? Then just look at me... Picture:A boy's silhouette with a sword is shown standing on a mountain against the sunset in the sea.



 Panel 2: Narration: For the past 3 years I've been killing people everywhere I go...  Picture: The inside of someone's house, there's blood everywhere, a broken window and a dead grown up man with slash marks and an arm's biceps bitten off.



Panel 3: Narration: Sometimes to survive... Sometimes for My Own Pleasure... picture: the boy's face is shown and his sword held against it. The face has a little cut in it, blood is dripping. The hair is black and short. Eyes are red, while the rest of the eyeball is black (Could be painted grey and black). You can barely see a smile on his lips. The sword has some words written in red color: "Killing- Ki"  and you can't see the rest.



panel 4 Narration: This is my fate as a killer... My...  Picture: the sword is piercing through a human's. body, blood is spilling everywhere. You can see the Great China wall in the background. Now the whole sign on the sword is shown: "Killing - Killer's Fate"



Panel 5: there is a text on a grey background: "Killing Fate". The "Kill" And "Fa" parts are white, while "Ing" and "te" ar black. There are three black swords stuck in the letter F, and you can see a somekind of a six-armed human with six swords behind Ing part. Only a part of his chest, parts of his legs and arms with swords can be seen, 70% of the body is hidden.



Page two, 5 panels (1-2-2)

panel 1 
Narration: Somewhere East. There is a riverside forest shown, and in the background you can see a Volcano. There's also a campfire on the grass, some bones.



Panel 2 The bones are showed from a closer view. It's an Ox's head, an uncooked porkchop and a snake's skeleton with some flesh still on it. Sfx show that the river's flow is heard (don't know what's the sound people use in English to describe it)



Panel 3: A bloody hand with blood dripping from it is shown. Trees in the background. Sfx: deep breathing and river's flow



Panel 4 (Is in the top left corner of Panel 5): A boy's face with blood on it is looking at something sadly. He says: "Oh are you dead already? But you were acting so badass..."



Panel 5: The boy is ducking near a dead man who has an open wound in his stomach. Rhe man's right arm is cut off, laying near him, there's a pistol in it's hand. The boy is licking the dripping blood from his own hand saying: "Well, I guess people do die if they are killed... poor guy."



Page 3, 6 panels .(1-2-2-1)



 panel 1
: the boy is leaving the dead body. The body is on the right side and the speech bubble on the left "Rest in piece, meatbag " he says. Only above his waist is shown.



panel 2: The boy has returned to his campfire and started cooking his porkchop. He has his sword tied to him. Another dead body can be seen within the woods



panel 3  (Merged with Panel 2 from the left): A Sniper with a gun is shown hiding in the forest and aiming at someone. Another man is bending near him, you can see a katana tied up to his belt.



panel4 (Merged with panel 5): The sniper says "target locked"



panel 5 : The other one's face is shown as he replies : "Shoot the target within 3... 2..."



panel6 There's a speech bubble dragged from panel 5 saying : "1 " A shot bullet flying through the air from the gun is shown. The gun covers half of the sniper's face



Page 4, 5 panels (2-1-2)



Panel 1
: 3/4 of a strip, merged with panel 2. The boy is shown from the right. You can see the bullet going through the boy's chest.



Panel 2.  1/4 of the strip. Shows the katana wielder shouting "success!"



Panel 3: a strip showing the boy fall down in from the left side behind him.



Panel 4.  Shows the katana wielder and the sniper cheering and high fiving, Sniper is shouting: "The 200 Grand are ours!"



Panel 5:  Shows a maniac's smile on the boy's face. The eyes are still open.



Page 5; 6 panels (2-2-2)



Panel 1:
The view is shown from sniper's lower back. You can see the boy slowly standing up. A revovler with six bullets is tied up to sniper's belt. Two "!" imply that the duo noticed the boy standing up.



Panel 2: a little bigger that Panel 1, merged with panel 4 below it. The sniper pulls out his revolver and the 3 sfx "click(?)" shows that he shot 3 times. Sniper is screaming.



Panel 3: Shows The boy already standing and the shots passing through without any harm, as if the the boy was air. The boy is smiling.



Panel 4: A little larger than Panel 3 , merged with panel 2. Sniper is screaming: "How is that son of a b*tch still alive?!"



Panel 5:  The katana wielder runs out of the woods and pulls out his sword, saying: "My turn then!"



Panel 6:  The angle is from behind of the boy's right shoulder, showing the katana wielder charging for him.



Page 6, 4 panels (1-2-1)



Panel1: Shows a white slash in the black background



Panel2:  You can see the katana wielder slashing through the boy as he was air, without doing any damage,  view from the kid's behind. Since the man is pretty close, you can see that the boy is kinda tall, the size of an average adult, but still shorter than his opponent.



Panel 3:  Shows the horrified wielder's face as he asks : "How?"



Panel 4:  Angle is from infront of the boy, almost from the swordsman's eyes. Shows the boy getting ready to punch "the reader", while saying: "I think it's called... "



Page 7, 3 panels



panel 1:  takes 1/3 of the page, a vertical strip on the left side. Shows the boy hitting the swordsman with an uppercut punch and sending him a little bit into the air, while finishing the sentence from last page: "...Intangibility!"



panel 2 : Shows the swordsman's head as he hits the ground. Blood is comming out of his lower lip. Sfx: bump and speed lines to show the fall.



panel 3 : . Shows the boys foot chrushing the katana wielder's nose. a sfx that implies the nose is broke. Swordsman is unconscious.



Page 8, 4panels.

1 Panel:  Shows the sniper holding his revovler with fear, ready to shoot the boy and asking: "Who... who are you?!"



Panel 2:  The boy's sad face is shown as he answers: "I'm little Bird, who has broken out of the egg."



Panel 3:  merged into panel 4 on it's top right corner. Shows the sniper screaming: "Ghwaaa!!!" as a sign of him being angry, as he shoots three times.



Panel 4:  takes 2/3 of the page together with panel 3, Shows Bird standing on swordsman's face, while the bullets pass through him.



Page 9. 4 panels:



Panel 1:  shows the sniper falling on his knees frightened, as the gun slips out of his hand. He says: "Oh fu*k me..."



Panel 2: Shows Bird's front face view. The boy is smiling as he answers: "You know... "



Panel 3:  a view from the ground how Bird takes out his sword and puts it on the swordsman's face, between the eyes. he finishes his words from the last panel: "You're fu*ked already..."



Panel 4:  Profile view. Shows how Bird pushes his sword through.



Panel 10, 4 panels: 



panel 1: shows how Bird takes his sword out, doesn't show below his waist. A speech bubble shows that someone is talking: "Birds are meant to be free..."



Panel 2:  Shows the sniper's terrified and surprised face, as someone continues talking: "They have beautiful feathers and voices..."



Panel 3 : A black eye with a red pupil is shown, with some white strings of hair falling on it, as someone continues to speak:"Their wings let them to fly high and unrestricted..."



Panel 4:  Black words on a white background are shown: "But I can burn them down."



Page 11, 6 panels

panel 1: 
This panel is seperated to two triangles by a slash. One triangle shows Bird's face, the other - sniper's face as they both notice something in the sky.



Panel 2:  A far Side view. A huge amount of birds flying straight down are shown. Not any specific species of birds, but different ones mixed all up together. Sniper is right below them.



Panel 3: Profile view. shows how suddenly all birds have attacked the sniper. There are so many, that not a part of him can be seen. Sfx that implies biting.



Panel 4:  All of the birds run off like chicken, leaving a Bloody sniper standing, with his skin torn off.



Panel 5: profile view of sniper falling down dead



Panel 6:  Shows someone's foot stepping on sniper's head.



Page 12, 1 panel.  Shows a a really muscular boy standing with one foot on sniper's head. Sniper looks dead. The boy is wearing only pants and shoes, nothing on his tops. He is very strong, has a body of a weight lifter. Has white hair, that hasn't been cut in half a year or so. His head is lowered, hair covers his face so it can't be seen. He's holding a sword in his right hand. There are some letters on it, but too small to read.



Page 13, 4 panels



 panel 1: 
Bird's confused face is shown. He asks: "And you're supposed to be?"



Panel 2:  The other boy's face is shown, as he lifts his head a little. Now his black eye with the red midle can be sefm. He answers: "I'm the erupting Volcano. But you will know me as your killer"



Panel 3:  a strip showing the profile of Bird from the right, as he lifts his sword against his opponent. "Killing - Killer's fate"  can be seen written on the sword. Bird says: "Hah. Like that's an original line."



Panel 4:  a strip showing the Volcano's profile from the left, as he lifts his sword against his opponent. Words can be seen on his sword: "Killing gets rid of evil ". Volcano says: "Sorry, came to kill, not to play."



Page 14, 5 panels



Panel 1:
Bird's face's profile is shown, he's thinking: "Volcano? He's the second killer... His face also reminds me of something, but I can't figure out what!"

Panel 2: Volcano's profile with his face. He's thinking: "Well, he changed less than both of us, huh... He's still a free-spirited child. A child, That I will..."



Panel 3: Profile view. Shows Volcano charging out for Bird as he finishes his thought: "...KILL!"



Panel 4: A strip. Volcano tries to cut Bird in half, but he avoids it by doing a frontflip over Volcano.



Page 15, 4 panels:



 panel 1: 
a view from the behind of Bird as Volcano and Bird are turning back to each other.



Panel 2:  Volcano swings his sword but Bird shapeshifts into a small ball.



Panel 3:  Volcano's sword stays in the same place as the ball flies behind him, implying ball's insane speed.



Page 16, 4 panels



panel 1:
Bird turns back into human from the ball form behind Volcano, ready to swing his sword. A "!" near Volcano's head implies that he understood what happened.



panel 2: Volcano is able to swing his sword backwards to block Bird's attack without looking. A sfx that shows two swords hitting each other.



Panel3:  A really backed up view. Bird jumps back with a long backflip. He is saying: "Why are you..."



Panel 4: Bird is standing, looking at Volcano, finishing his sentence: "...attacking me? You don't look like those people who go after the bounty?



Page 17, 5 panels



 Panel 1:
A crazy smile is shown on Volcano's face. "You mean you don't know? " he says



Panel2 : Bird is confused. He replies: "Don't know what?"



Panel 3: Volcano laughs: "You fool! Did you forget about us?! Did you think that only you got powers?"



Panel4 : Front view of Volcano holding his sword against 'the reader' is shown. His hair covers his right eye, and the left one is widened like a maniac's. He says: "Well let me enlighten you..."



Panel 5: A strip. Three swords are shown. One is Bird's with the text, second is Volcano's, the text can be seen too. The third one has text too, but it's blurred out. Volcano is the 'narrator' of this page as his words can be seen around the swords: "You are the Third Killer, Bird. You are known to the world as the weakest killer of all, that's why you still have a bounty on you" "The second killer is me, Volcano. I punish people for their evil deeds, that's why everyone is afraid of me" "The first killer is Tentacle, he's held the most powerful one. And only because he used his powers to create an empire!"



Page 18, panels



Panel 1: 
1/6 of the page. Volcano's profile, as he continues his speech: "It's the swords, which we received after the meteorite crash, that give us powers! That's why I came to take yours!"



Panel 2:  1/6 of the page. A profile of Confused Bird as he asks: "What meteorite crash... What are you rambling about?"



Panel 3; in a top left corner of panel 4 The Volcano's face is shown as he holds his sword against his eyes. he says: "Explanations are meaningless. Now, God, I call upon you"



Panel 4:  Shows a view from a 2 meters[6feet] high, to the right from in front of Volcano (the longest view I’ve ever wrote). Shows half of Volcano’s body and a new man that appeared from nowhere behind him. Volcano is looking back, at the peron, smiling. The person asks: “What is your wish? ” and Volcano replies: "I want my enemies to lose their powers "



Page 19, 5 panels



1 panel:  a strip, showing how Volcano and Bird are standing against each other. The man is nowhere to be seen anymore. A speech bubble in the middle: "Your wish is granted"



Panel2:  Bird's confused profile. He asks: "What was that all about?"



Panel 3:  Volcano's giggling profile, as he answers: "One of my powers is to summon a God so that he would grant my wish for one hour..."



Panel 4:  Front view of Volcano half of his face is shaded,"While my other power is..."

panel 5: Volcano is shown getting ready to attack. Wild animals gathering can be seen in the background. Volcano's speech bubble pops out of the panel: "To control all living animals…”



Page 20/21, a panel in 2 pages.  Shows a huge amount of animals gathering around Bird from a bird’s view. Volcano finises his sentence: “in a half kilometre's radius!"



Page 22, 1 panel: Bird and Volcano are showed standing, they're separated by a slash "/". Volcano laughs at Bird: "So little Bird, What are you going to do without your wings?!" . Bird is grinning. Angry Animals and birds can be seen in both backgrounds.



Page 23, 4 panels



 panel 1: 
Front view of Bird, doesn't go below his waist. Bird is looking at Volcano confused, as he replies: "I'm actually wondering..."



Panel 2: Shows Bird's face a from the right side (not a profile picture). Bird smiles and finishes his last sentence: "... How are you going to defeat me?"



Panel 3:  Shows Volcano with a confused smile. He says: "Are you stupid?  You lost your powers, but I still have mine! These animals will tear you apart!"



Panel 4 : Bird raises his sword and points to Volcano. "Yes,  I lost my powers" he's  says, and in the next bubble: "But my sword did not!"



Page 24, 5 panels



Panel 1:  Shows shocked and frightened Volcano's eyes.



Panel2: Volcano throws his hand in the air and shouts: "Kill him!"



Panel 3:  Shows from a 'worm's' perspective as animals jump on Bird.



Panel 4:  A side view how animals bump to each other, because Bird turned into a ball and charged into Volcano (speed lines show the flying)



Panel 5:  Bird turns back to human infront of Volcano and they both swing their swords to each other (swinging shown by speed lines). Bird is saying: "Looks like this..."



Page 25, 4 panels



panel 1: 
1/6 of the page Seperated in two by a slash "\". In the left one there is Bird's eye, in the right one - Volcano's. It gives an impression that eyes are looking directly into each other.



Panel 2: 1/6 of the page Shows Bird's and Volcano's swords heading for each other, a moment from hitting.



Panel 3:  Bird goes intangible and goes through Volcano, who is surprised that the swords didn't hit.



Panel 4:  Bird turn around behind Volcano, swinging his sword. Volcano is still confused about what happened. Bird finishes his sentence: "...Was your last mistake Volcano!"



Page 24, 3 panels



panel 1: 
Profile view, a strip taking half of the page. Volcano takes a step forward trying to dodge the attack, but his lower back is still slashed. Blood is dripping.



Panel 2:  Profile view: Shows Bird's face and body above the waist, just after the slash and the serious look he has. Drops of blood are flying in the air (no speed lines, to make the time look stopped)



Panel 3:  Profile view. Shows Volcano falling and his mouth open for a scream. Blood drops are flying. Again, no speed lines to make the time look stopped.



Page 25, 3 panels.



panel 1: 
1/3 of the page. Shows Volcano lying on the ground from Bird's view. The wound on his back is long but not wide, blood is coming out. The backbone is cut too. Inside censored by dark color.



Panel 2: Front view as Bird raises his sword saying: "You're just a mountain, not a volcano"



Panel 3:  Front view of Volcano's face as his eyes widen in anger.



Page 26,



1 panel: 
The view is backed up behind Bird and a little to the right, showing how a huge wave of birds cover up Volcano's body and everything around it, including half of Bird's body. Bird is surprised.



Page 27, 4 panels:



 Panel 1:
birds fly away in the same huge wave, but Volcano's body cannot be seen anymore.



Panel 2 : Shows us right behind Bird, as he's watching the birds flying away. Words are shown on a whote background in the corner: "I will be back Bird!"



Panel 3: Shows front view of Bird's face, as he's still watching the birds. The words on a white background continue: "And I'll be back stronger! ". As an answer to that, Bird says: "Don't hope on me just sitting here and waiting"



Panel 4:  This panel is cut into two: one side shows the right half of a serious Bird's face and the other one shows the left half of Volcano's angry face, merging these two halfs into 'one'.



Page 28, 3 panels.



 panel 1
: Shows Bird as he's eating something. He's thinking: "Volcano will want revenge and with that wish of his, I will be defeated"



panel 2:  Bird is cleaning his sword in the river. His thoughts are shown again: "The only way for me to defeat him, is to find this Tentacle guy. Volcano won't be able to defeat both of us!"



Panel3 :  a strip with narration: "You think your life is hard? Well, just look at what I'm going to face..." . A castle with 8 towers is shown somewhere in a snowland.

Feel free to leave a review, a suggestion or anything really. Just knowing that someone got the intererest to read this already feels like a compliment.

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Welcome Center / I'm back fellow MangaRaiders!
« on: October 25, 2015, 08:29:12 AM »
I'm kinda bad at being sad for leaving for such a long time, so if allow me to skip straight to the point.

So I'm back.
Back again.
liuxess is back.
This reference is lame.

So hello everyone, who remembers me, and greetings everyone, who I haven't met on my short time here or just doesn't recall me. Most of you probably don't.

Since I didn't make a topic on this board, I guess an introduction won't hurt. Even if no one actually cares.

I'm a writer, skilled in action sequences and plot-twists, but not so good in expressing character emotions and dialogue (Working on it...). My stories contain sarcastic humor, as well as their dark moments. I'm from Lithuania, so my vocabulary might not be perfect, as well as my spelling and grammar.

Since that is out of the way, how is everyone? I've already noticed most of the names changed, so sorry If I don't recognize some of you at first.

So, has the site done anything about newbies going straight out searching for an artist problem? that was the biggest one when I left. Or maybe you encountered a larger one?

Oh, and how's the MR Anthology been going? I remember I didn't finish my part, even though I still recall the story.

Ahh... It's good to be back MR!!!

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break Room / Happy Birthday, Matsui!
« on: February 23, 2015, 12:40:37 PM »
Happy Birthday, Matsui! :birthdaywish: :birthdaywish: :birthdaywish:

 :shotgun: :shotgun: :cake: :cake: :cheers:

 :cheers: :cheer: :cheer: :birthdaywish:


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Manga Art Gallery / why is it a drawing if I have already drawn it?
« on: February 18, 2015, 11:04:36 AM »
So,  hey guys, I usually don't draw, but such things happen from time to time.
So here's my latest creation. (It is smoke behind him)
Took the pic with my phone so yeah

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MR Writers Anthology / The Raider of Raiders!
« on: February 08, 2015, 02:39:05 PM »
Warning,  not to be taken seriously!
Chapter 1:
Spoiler
"Where is he?" Sasha wondered.  He was sitting in the VIP seats,  closest  to an empty stage.
"Shut up, Sasha" His older brother Gnash replied the usual way.  These two were the only ones sitting in the VIP seats.
"Can I go and play with my friends" Ginger asked. 
"I didn't pay you to play.  I didn't even pay you to have friends" Gnash replied with his usual tone.
"But you don't pay me at all!"
"Shut up,  Sasha."

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On the other side of the huge-ass room with a stage,  in the huge amount of people talking and even partying,  Lorenx was sitting in a chair on the corner,  watching people chatting.  If anyone would have looked at her eyes,  they would have died because of the anger she was producing into the atmosphere.
"He's late again." She sighted "Like every single goddamn time."
Lorenx looked at her watch, as if time would go slower the more she stared at it.
Suddenly,  a little girl walked up to her.
"Hey Lorenx! Watcha doin'? " The girl asked,  showing no fear of the woman in front of her.
The moment Lorenx looked at the little girl,  they both smiled and Lorenx's anger disappeared.
"Waiting for the start of the show. What about you? "
"I'm talking to you silly! " Churro giggled childishly.
"Oh of course,  silly me. " Lorenx rolled her eyes.
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These two females were being overwatched by three guys at a table eating pizza.
"That little girl is so cute... " Matsui smiled.
"Yeah, There is a rumor going on that she is a a Queen of Kawaii... " Usopp replied.
"Queen of Kawaii? She?  How? Does she burp ponies and fart rainbows? " liuxess raised his eyebrow.
"Of course not,  Don't be stupid. " Matsui shook his head gently.
"Yeah" Usopp agreed "Of course she doesn't burp ponies. They would not fit even in her mou- "
Usopp was suddenly interupted by Lego,  who sneaked up on the three.
"Woah, don't tell me you were just gonna make THAT kind of joke. " Lego looked angrily at the trio. "You know you have to keep all this Pg13+,  right? "
"Don't worry. " Matsui answered "We won't screw the rules,  we don't have money. "
"Just making sure... " Lego started backing up from the friends,  watching them while walking backwards.
Accidentally, he bumped into someone and they both fell down. 
"Uh,  I'm sorry. " Lego said,  while standing up. "I wasn't watching where I'm going"
"Welcome to MR" Coryn shouted by jumping on his feet,  as he was the one knocked down on the ground.
Lego Sighted.
"Coryn. Dude. It's the third time you greet me the same way! "
"Not true" Coryn blinked.
"You greet Everyone the same way. "
"No I don't! " Coryn denied,  but the moment his eye got a glimpse at a newbie raider,  he couldn't resist his insticts and shouted: "Welcome to MR! "
The duo stood silently for a few seconds. 
"Proves nothing" Coryn made a chibi angry face.
"I swear Coryn,  sometimes you act like you're secretly a twelve year old girl. " Lego walked away, scratching the back of his head
 ------------
"Shut up,  Sasha "
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"So yeah,  I punched him in the face and said: "They don't need a dog to stop you when they have a wolf! " " Vio laughed.  He was sitting on a sofa,  surrounded by sexy chibi girls.
"Omg,  Vio,  you're so cool! " one of the chibi girls said, and all the others started agreeing.
"Of course I am.  After all,  I am Vio,  the great! "
The moment he finished those words, a ninja star flew through the air and hit the wall next to Vio's head.  Vio's face slowly went from happy to scared,  as all the girls around him scattered and ran away.
"What the f*ck,  man? You're trying to kill me?" Vio shouted at two figures approaching him.
"Not now,  it wouldn't really change anything" Whitecrow replied.
"Yeah,  don't be such a cry baby. " Vacant pulled out the ninja star out of the wall.
"Your mom's a crybaby" Vio thought but kept silent.
"There will be a surprise tonight. Gnash finally found a way to use his money.  If you'll need help,  just come to the highest hill you can find" Whitecrow covered his eye like it would hurt.
"What?  " Vio asked,  but with a poof of smoke, Whitecrow and Vacant were gone. 
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Manimal stretched his arm towards the stage. He had a faithful view in his eyes.
"I wish I could once be on that stage... " he sighted.
"Oh really? You want to be like Hasith and gather the raiders to look on you on stage,  listening to your every little announcement? " No1sey took a sip from his drink.
"Don't be stupid! Me,  the king of Rock&Roll,  saying such things on the stage? Well,  only if some cool music would be playing before I enter! " Manimal replied
Exactly the same moment Manimal finished his sentence, John Cena's theme started playing in the room.
"I said COOL music! " Manimal angrily shouted,  while Noi1sey giggled
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With the words " Your time is up,  my time is now! " Hasith entered the stage.  There were paper signs saying : "Who Has It?  Hasith!" being held by raiders,  including Jamie and Neoraise.
The volume of the song went down,  as Hasith started talking via microphone.
"Hello dear fellow raiders. It's nice to see you all here! "
The crowd shouted with cheers.
"I know you're all eager to just hear what I have to say" Hasith made a short pause to clear his throat "But you shouldn't be that happy.  You see,  there is a problem that our family has to face.  The number of writers is far too great,  compared to artists,  and our house of "Artists wanted" has a line of writers waiting to get an artist! Most of them are 90 Years old,  but they started standing there when they were 13! "
The crowd got silent. Hasith waited a few seconds before continuing his speech:
"That's why I'm announcing a 15-people battle royale! You will slaughter each other until only one is alive!  Any raider,  writer or artist , can be chosen to participate. I don't give a damn if you wish not to compete.  Never did. The choosing will be random! ""
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"Wait a sec,  What do artists have to do with all of this? "
"Shut up Sasha "
"Oh, bugger"
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"The computer will choose a random name!  " Hasith shouted,  as a huge computer screen started glowing behind him.  "When you hear your name,  please come and choose a weapon out of these 15 and go through the door! " Hasith pointed to a table with weapons,  and a door behind them.  There were 14 knives and an assault rifle on the table.
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"That's smart" Lorenx thought to herself "The first person to enter gets to choose the best weapon,  but won't know his opponents....  The last person will get the worst weapon,  but will know all his opponents... "
"Why do they need weapons?" Churro asked. "Hugs are way better"
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"You will participate in an area that reminds a jungle,  that we secretly built behind this house,  with the financial support of mr.  Gnash! "
Gnash stood up waiting for applauses. But everyone was silent. Hasit pressed a button on his watch,  and a soundtrack of people clapping played.  Gnash sat back at his seat happily.
"The winner will be called the raider of raiders! While the losers' heads will be hanged on the gates of MR,  so every newbie would see,  this is serious! "
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"This sounds like a bad MR fanfic" liuxess yawned
"Yeah,  like a one YOU would write" Usopp highfived Matsui.
Chapter 2:
Spoiler
"Now the computer will start choosing people,  and they'll enter one by one!" Hasith walked to the side,  so everyone could see the computer screen.
The screen was all blue,  and just in the middle,  random names of raiders were popping up.  They were changing with each other so fast,  you couldn't even understand which names had been shown.
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"Isn't it a little unfair? I mean,  the first person WILL choose the rifle,  and everyone else wil be left with bloody knives" Ginger protested out loud. "
"Shut up,  Sasha" Gnash answered without a single emotion on his face.
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Hasith pressed a button on his watch and the names stopped changing.  The computer screen was now showing only one name,  the name of the first contender. 
It showed "Gnash-sama"
Gnash stood up smiling.  Ginger was shocked. It was the first emotion his brother showed in years!
"How?!  " Sasha shouted
"Shut up,  Saaaaasha! " Gnash laughed.
"Ya know,  that phrase is really naff'... " Ginger said in a scared voice.
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Lorenx was standing on her toes,  just to see the stage through the people's heads.  Everyone was shocked.
"It can't be..." Austa suddenly appeared near Lorenx.
"But it just happened... " Lorenx said in a confused and shocked voice. "Gnash really laughed just now. "
"World went mad,  huh?" concluded Robin Ryu,  who just was following Austa around.
"I don't even want to know who will be chosen next... " Lorenx mumbled in a terrified voice.
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"So... "
"Yeah... "
"What's wrong guys? " liuxess asked finishing up his pizza,  while Hasith asked what weapon will Gnash choose.
"Oh I don't know liux...  Maybe there's this little problem that GNASH just received an ASSAULT RIFLE" Usopp sarcastically answered.
"Yeah,  aren't you even a little worried liuxess? " Matsu wondered.
"Me?" liuxess replied watching as Gnash walks through the door with a rifle. "Not really.  I mean,  just as Usopp said just a bit earlier,  Only I would be stupid enough to write this kind of fanfic...  So... " liuxess stood up from the table. "I am able to do anything in this story!"
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The computer screen started skimming through the names again.
"Now,  let us choose another raider to join Gnash in this epic fight to the death! " Hasith shouted,  as the screen stopped.  The name it was displaying was "Whitecrow. "
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"So this is what Whitecrow meant? hm... Meet him in the hills huh? " Vio thought,  as The ninja Crow jumped on the stage,  grabbed a knife and ran through the door.
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"Prove it" Matsui said "Prove that you're a god in this story! "
"Yeah,  you shouldn't go around saying stuff like that without proof! " Usopp agreed.
"Okay" liuxess smiled "You will be the third contender,  Usopp! "
The moment liuxess finished his sentence,  the computer screen showed "God Usopp" as the third contender.
"Lucky guess! " Usopp shouted angrily.
"Yeah,  sure, Usopp,  whatever you say...  Of course I'm lucky-guessed that it would be you out of more than 200000 raiders!  Of course I did!" liuxess laughed as Usopp headed to the stage.
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Fourth contender: "No1sey "
"Dammit! " No1sey shouted.
"Don't sweat it,  man,  I'll watch your back!" Manimal said.
"You're going in too? " No1sey suddenly became full of hope
"Of course not. But I can bet Hasith installed some cameras inside! "
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Fifth contender: "Vio"
"Here goes nothing! " Vio said out loud,  putting his badass black sunglasses on.
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Sixth contender: "Coryn"
"Too late to say 'screw you guys,  I'm going home!',  right? "
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Seventh contender: "Miss Churro"
"What? Even her? " Lorenx started searching for Churro with her eyes,  but the little girl was already on stage,  choosing a knife.
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Eighth contender: "liuxess"
"Sorry,  but it looks like you won't make it in,  Matsui! "  liuxess smiled at his friend while heading towards the stage. 
"You're talking like I want to! "
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Ninth contender: "Robin Ryuu"
"What?! But I wasn't even introduced in the first chapter! "
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Tenth Contender: "Vacant"
"Common! I just want a normal school life!"
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Eleventh Contender: "Legomaestro"
"And he said 10 grand will be enough to keep me out"
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Twelfth Contender: "Lorenx"
"Ohhhhh,  he's gonna get it! "
" You go girl! " Austa shouted when Lorenx went towards the stage.
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Thirteenth Contender: "Austadophilus"
"Looks like I go too! "
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Fourteenth Contender : "Matsui Kenshin "
"Fu*k you,  liuxess!!!"
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Last Contender: "GingerSasha"
"What? I'm in too? Oh, bugger. " Ginger got surprised.
He walked up on the stage.  There was only one  old and rusty knife left. He put it in his back pocket and entered through the door.
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Of course, We could follow every character's detailed storyline,  but nor I wanna write it,  nor You wanna read it,  so why don't we just do what's important?


The corridor behind the door was really long. Gnash would have ran for several hours,  if there wasn't a motorcycle inside waiting for him.  He paid some money for it to be standing here,  of course.  Exactly the same way he paid Hasith so he could be first and get a rifle.  Exactly the same way,  he paid for a map where the support boxes with weapons,  food and other stuff are marked.
He sat on his bike and drove off.  He knew almost everyone on the list.  It was just a fun killing spree,  where he will be able to get rid of his enemies and,  most importantly,  his little brother.
He spent some time gathering resources.  But he was even able to find a grenade,  not to mention the food.  He threw most of it out in the river,  so others couldn't make much use of it.
Gnash had his strategy planned.  He had calculated that most of his opponents have already entered this ring of doom,  so it won't be too sad if he would camp near the entrance and kill everyone who comes in with his rifle.

He found himself a comfortable position,  where he could clearly see the entering point. Since it was near a forest he was afraid of using his grenade, so a wildfire wouldn't start.

Gnash was camping maybe for half an hour,  silently counting how many billions of dollars is he left with,  and finally he noticed the sounds of steps coming from the corridor.  He readied the gun,  waiting for the target to come out.
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A flat area,  where ground consists mostly of rocks.  A river is flowing by.
Churro is sitting near a freshly made campfire,  cooking a bloody rabbit. Her knife is laying on the ground near her. It has blood on it,  which is probably from the rabbit.
"Welcome to MR,  Churro! " she heard a shout from the other side of the river.
When she lazily turned her head towards the shout,  she saw Coryn, waving with his hand as a greeting.  In his other hand he held his knife,  but immediately put it inside his backpack,  that must have been dropped somewhere.
"Don't  worry, I won't hurt you! " he shouted "But you're not safe in this plain area! I'll be there in a second,  just you sit tight and comfy!"
Coryn was going to simply pass through the water,  but then he noticed that the flow of water is really strong.  If he would have entered the water,  Coryn would be carried away by the river in a matter of seconds.  Luckily,  the were some rocks sticking outside the water,  so he could jump across the river through them.
"One,  two,  three..." Coryn,  counted his jumps,  and as he was going to do the last jump to land on the other riverside,  something heavy hit him in the head and caught him off-balance.  Coryn fell into the water,  but luckily was able to grab on of the rocks with his right hand.
He quickly returned to his senses and looked at Churro,  to see if she was okay.  The first thing he noticed, was that the rabbit was missing.  The second thing...  it was horrible.  Churro was standing with her knife in hand,  laughing...
With the last hope,  Coryn begged: "Churro,  help me! "
Churro cutely smiled,  raising her knife.
"Damn,  she's kawaii! " Coryn thought just a moment before Churro threw her knife.
It hit Coryn's right hand,  cutting off his index and middle fingers. The pain was too great to control and Coryn couldn't hold on anymore, letting the rock go,  being washed away by the river while screaming in fear and pain.

End of Chapter 2!  Who will die first?  Place your bets!

Chapter 3:

Spoiler
"You're sure this will work?" Matsui asked in a disbelieving voice.
"Of course I am... " liuxess assured. "Remember all those pranks that I played on you and they worked?"
"Well yeah...  but... Have you seen Usopp? "
"Yeah...  he went for...  a walk...."
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Coryn woke up.  The river had thrown him out of the water somewhere near the end of the forest,  where somekind of a desert  started.  Coryn couldn't see the end of it,  but he noticed somekind of a box not far away.
"This is crazy" Coryn mumbled to himself when he opened it.
It was a support box,  with lots of food inside,  also some smaller weapons. He took some ninja stars,  cooked meat,  and,  if Coryn understood correctly,  a molotov.  He didn't have a way to light it up,  but if he found out a way,  it would become a dangerous weapon. He also took a huge hammer with him. 
"Okay Churro, we'll play rough! " Coryn thought.
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Gnash put his finger on the trigger.  He was trying to guess who it was based on how heavy the running steps were,  but couldn't work out anything.
The moment Lego entered the arena,  the light from the ceiling, made to look like a natural sky with clouds, blinded him for a few secs.  The moment he recovered,  he heard shooting and felt how small bullets were hittin him from the left side.
"Sorry,  Lego. Had to be done. " Gnash smiled,  lowering his gun.  He walked up to Lego,  who had fallen on the ground.
"Hm? " Gnash got confused "Where's the blood? "
Suddenly, Lego jumped on his feet and grabbed Gnash's neck. He started choking him,  by lifting Gnash into the air with one hand.  Gnash dropped his rifle trying to free himself.
Lego smashed Gnash into the ground, making the guy spit blood from the surprisingly very strong hit.
Gnash,  pumped with adrenalin, kicked Lego in the face with both his feet. Lego backed up a little from the hit,  and Gnash used the chance to open and throw the grenade at his opponent,  while running away.
The grenade hit Lego's chest,  and before he could understand what it was,  exploded.
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Adonis wa-
I mean, Vio was walking down the forest,  with no troubles in mind.  He was heading towards a mountain-hill,  in search for Crow. 
His knife was long and not really sharp,  but it was enough slice through someone's neck,  and that was the whole reason behind weapons in Vio's mind - to be able to kill opponents. 
Vio stopped,  as somekind of noise was getting his attention.  When he listened more carefully,  he understood that it was someone whistling a simple rhythmical melody. The sound was getting closer,  and Vio decided not to hesitate, and after dropping his glasses on the ground,  climbed up the tree, ready to jump on anyone who would stop by the glasses.
The whispering got really close and then stopped.  Vio couldn't see through the leaves who it was.  He saw the person stepping near the bait,  and without waisting any time,  jumped on it with his knife in hands.  But he couldn't get even close.  The person reacted,  and while Vio was still maybe a meter in the air,  he was hit by something to the right side and flew into a tree. He bumped and landed.  His mind was giving orders to move,  get to safety,  but his body got knocked out, he could only feel pain of some bones broken in his chest.  Luckily,  Vio heard his opponent backing up,  maybe even retreating.  His body started moving again,  so Vio stood up and looked at his opponent.  3 meters away,  Usopp was standing with a metal bat in his right hand,  and a small rock in his left.
Vio was waiting for his opponent to do a move.  He was suspecting what Usopp might do,  so he couldn't attack head on. 
Usopp realized that Vio won't attack and smiled.
"Hope you're ready,  my friend! " Usopp shouted and threw the rock in a straight vertical line up.
Once the rock started falling down,  Usopp swung and hit it like baseball ball,  sending it flying in super high speed towards Vio. Vio anticipated that kind of an attack and was able to move just enough to not be touched by the rock,  which hit the tree and got stuck in it.
Both guys understood their situation.  If the rock would have hit Vio in the head,  he would be dead.  Vio,  not waiting for Usopp to pick up another rock from the ground,  charged head on.
Usopp smiled like a maniac and pulled out another rock out of his pocket.  Vio slowed down,  but there was nowhere to hide,  as Usopp repeated his previous attack,  sending the rock towards Vio. 
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Churro was slowly walking by the riverside,  sad and hungry. Sad,  because her knife fell into the river. Hungry,  because she didn't kill anyone yet.
But the kawaii,  as always,  was on her side,  as she noticed someone sitting in front of her.  They had a box.  As Churro looked closer, she recognised Austadophilus.
She made a cute face and ran towards her,  waving her hand and shouting:"Austa-chan! "
Austa looked her way and waved back, smiling.
Suddenly,  Churro tripped and fell down on her face.
"Churro!" Austa shouted,  standing up and running towards the girl. 
Austa helped Churro stand up.  Both females sat up on the ground near the box.
"There's lots of food in here! " Churro shouted,  starting eating everything that looked eatable.
 "Yeah... " Austa replied,  a little bit confused what she should do with the little girl in this deadly game.
"Say,  Churro... "
"Hm? "
"Have you met anyone besides me yet? "
A short silence.  Churro made a sad chibi face and answered:
"No...  Should I had? "
"Maybe it's better this way. " Austa sighted.  "This isn't a game Churro. You can only leave by killing everyone or being killed... "
Churro kept silent.  She was just picking food up from the box.
Austa laid on her back and closed her eyes.
"If anything happens to me,  Churro,  you should run away. Find Lorenx...  She might help you... "
Anf with the end of the last word, a knife was stabbed through Austa's neck.  She opened her eyes trying to scream,  but the knife was inside her throat.  The last thing Austa saw before closing her eyes,  was Churro,  saying:
"Don't worry...  I'll find Lorenx! I'll find her soon~ "
Chapter 4:
Spoiler
Lego took a deep breath.  His head was spinning. All he saw was smoke, he couldn't hear anything like he was deaf. Slowly,  the sounds returned to him and as well as his other senses  and he started coughing.
He stood up from the ground,  where he was laying and looked around. The grenade wasn't strong,  but it did burn out all the grass a meter around Lego.
"What the hell ? " he thought,  but his mind was kinda drowzy so it took some time for him to recall what happened.
"Gnash threw a grenade... But how did I survive that? " He sat on the ground once again,  in disbelief of his survival. 
The moment he looked at his arms,  his eyes widened from shock.  About a centimeter of his skin was burned off,  reavealing an solid steel inner-skin. Not only his hands were like that,  but about 90% of his body's skin was burned off,  revealing Lego's real steel body.
"Don't panic Lego... Everything's gonna be okay... " He thought,  and to calm himself,  he took a deep breath.
He started slowly moving towards the forrest,  not feeling stranger than ever.  Luckily,  his eyes noticed the rifle Gnash dropped.
"Better take this. With the steel body of mine,  and a gun like this, I'll be a real life Terminator! "
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Vio was able to maneuver his knife fast enough to hit the flying rock and change it's trajectory.
"Not bad,  Vio! " Usopp shouted cheerfully "Let's see how much more of these can you deflect! "
Usopp took out another rock,  and repeated the process of throwing it into the air and hitting it with a swing of his metal bat. 
"I have to keep moving! " Vio tried to motivate himself by taking a step forward and hitting the projectile with his knife to block the attack.
"Come at me bro!  " both guys shouted at the same time,  and Vio rushed towards Usopp.
Usopp started hitting his rocks at a 1 rock per 2 seconds speed,  but Vio was able to block them all,  with every block getting closer to Usopp.
Once the distance between these two opponents became nothing more than two meters,  Usopp laughed and threw three little rocks into the air,  hitting them with his swing at once.
"Home-run!" Usopp shouted as he swung.
Vio was only able to knife-block one rock.  The second one missed,  but the third hit him in the knee,  probably breaking it.
He fell on the ground screaming in pain, dropping his knife and grabbing his knee.  Usopp stood just in front of Vio victorious, raising his bat for a final blow.
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After some wondering through the forest,  Lego found a small house,  probably belonging to a somekind of forester.  It had only two rooms,  a bathroom and a living room. Lego entered the bathroom and went straight for the sink. He washed his face and rose his eyes up to the mirror above it.
"Well...  Now I really look like a terminator... " Lego thought staring at his own face.  The right side of it was burned off,  revealing a cyborg like red glowing eye.  Even his afro was metal. 
"Hope I don't rust after washing myself! "
He checked a chest he found in the house. There were some cans of soup,  but nothing more serious.  He found some jeans in the closet and tried them on,  since his clothes torn up in the explosion. The jeans fitted him perfectly,  so he felt like he's ready to go. 
But once Lego stepped near the door,  he heard somekind of swearing outside.  The person, who was cursing the world,  was coming towards the house.
Lego stepped back a little with fear.
"Wait a second" he thought "I'm a terminator with a fu*king assault rifle! "
He kicked the door open,  scaring the person outside so much,  that they fell on the ground.
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Something sharp flew through the air and cut through Usopp's hand with the bat before he could finish Vio off.
"I like your game,  Usopp.  Too bad I don't play games."
It was WhiteCrow. He was wielding an interesting weapon. It was a long metal chain tied around his right arm,  with a kunai at one end.  The kunai was the one who cut through and got stuck Usopp's hand,  making him drop the baseball bat.
"Thank god, Crow! " Vio shouted cheerfully.
Usopp fell on his knee for the pain,  but he was able to pull the kunai out,  saying:
"I'm not finished yet! "
WhiteCrow pulled his chain strongly,  making the kunai slip out of Usopp's hand and return to Crow.
"You want to play, boy? " Crow asked with a calm face.
"I want to fight! " Usopp answered,  taking his bat into his left hand, while blood was dripping from his right.
Crow didn't waste a second for more talking. He jumped towards Usopp,  ready to use his kunai as a short range weapon.
"Not gonna work! " Usopp shouted by swinging his metal bat at Crow before he got too close,  but the ninja stretched his chain with both hands and blocking the hit with it.
"Too bad" Whitecrow said, punching Usopp in the stomach with his left hand and with his right hand hitting the bat out of Usopp's hand..
Usopp fell on his back and rolled to the side before Crow attacked again.
Crow was standing in defensive position while Usopp got up.  Usopp started backing up,  but WhiteCrow didn't move.  In a matter of seconds,  Usopp was gone.
"Thanks man,  I would dead without you!" Vio thanked while trying to stand up.
Crow calmly looked at Vio, who was trying to put all his weight on his good leg. Crow picked up the bat.
"You came here like I asked you to? " Crow asked.
"Yeah " Vio answered
"And exactly what for?"
"Well" Vio got silent for a second "I was searching for help "
"So you're searching for help in a battle where anyone can backstab you?"
"That's why I came to you,  not anybody else"
"Wrong choice! " Crow shouted,  swinging the bat and hitting both Vio's knees at the same time,  breaking them,  and making Vio fall on his face.
Vio screamed with a painful voice:
"NO! NO! NO! "
"It's sad,  but yes! " Crow replied by cutting Vio's throat with his kunai.
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"Welcome to...  MR" Coryn said, while sitting on the ground after his fall from seeing Lego.
"This is the second time I made you fall on the ground" Lego said while Coryn stood up.  "The third time will be your last fall, Coryn! "
Coryn was just staring at the metal Lego,  like he didn't hear what his opponent just said.
"Wow" Coryn mumbled "I have never seen a shiny Legomaestro before. I must catch it!"
"Was that a pokemon reference? " Lego got angry and raised his rifle,  pointing at Coryn.
"What if I say no?"
Lego stood a few seconds in silence, thinking.
"I'll kill you... in a fast way? "
"Oh no,  thanks" Coryn answered,  Raising his right hand that was missing two fingers. "A person has already tried to kill me off. Since I survived that,  I just can't possibly let YOU kill me!
"And how are you going to destroy my steel body?" Lego smiled
"I'll bet on something" Coryn said "I'll bet that you still have your normal organs under that steel...  And if I break through that skin,  your organs will be wide open for me!"
Suddenly Coryn pulled out a huge hammer from his back. Lego understood that it must have been tied to Coryn's back in a way that no one would notice from the front.
"So Lego...  Will you fight me like a man,  or will you cowardly hide behind this rifle? "
"You ask me to fight like a man while you wield a weapon? " Lego closed his eyes and smiled " I accept! "
He threw his rifle to the side and charged towards Coryn. Coryn swung his hammer,  trying to knock Lego's head off,  but Lego was able to fall down in time to dodge the attack. Coryn spinned a little from the hammer's momentum,  and when he tried to do a second swing, it was too late. Lego punched him in the stomach,  making Coryn let go of the hammer and crouch a little. Lego kicked with his left foot the back of Coryn's left knee.  Coryn fell on his knees and arms, moaning in pain.
"I fought like a man,  but you just weren't manly enough! " Lego laughed, grabbing the back of Coryn's neck and starting to crush it.
"You're just an onix compared to my steelix! " Lego raised Coryn's head and then crushed his face down to the ground,  breaking both the skull and the neck.
Lego stood up victorious. He picked up his rifle and walked away like a champ.
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Churro was just jumping from rock to rock in the forest,  shouting "Lorenx! " from time to time. She hid her knife in her boots,  so it couldn't be noticed from further away.
She  found a box in a plain area inside the forest.  It reminded the box Austa had,  so she laughed and ran towards it. Churro suddennly tripped on a somekind of a wire, and about three arows flew above her head.
"Damn it Churro! " Somebody shouted from the tree next to the girl.
It was Vacant. He was crouching on a tree's branch,  looking down on Churro.  He had a backpack with arrows and some knifes,  shurikens inside. His was holding a bow.
Churro looked up,  confused.
"This boobytrap wasn't crafted to kill little girls...  If only you were half a meter taller" Vacant  spoke more to himself than to Churro.
Vacant was even more confused than Churro.  He was facing a dilemma: he could easily kill his opponent,  but his opponent was just a harmless little girl.
"Hey,  mister Vacant,  can I go and eat some food from the box? " Churro cheerfully shouted.
Vacant kept silent. Churro,  since her request wasn't denied,  headed towards the box.
"The minefield...  " Vacant thought,  but still kept silent,  observing the little girl's moves.  He knew every mine he placed,  and where he placed. And to his surprise,  Churro stepped on a few of them,  but somewhy they didn't activate.
"It must be because of her weight. She's too light" the man stood up "Either that,  or her kawaii diactivates mines. "
Churro opened the box,  but there was nothing inside. She made an angry  chibi face and shouted at Vacant.
"Vaaaaaacaaaaaant! There is nothing in here!""
Vacant pulled an arrow and placed it in his bow, getting ready to shoot.
"Mister! Can't you hear me! "
"I might have to kill her in the future anyways,  so it's just better to ignore my feelings and kill her quickly.  It will still be better than a torturing death from a creep like Matsui... "
He shot his arrow,  aiming straight for her head. The arrow crossed the air,  but at the last second,  the arrow suddenly changed it's way and flew to the side of Churro's face.
"What?! " Vacant's eyes widened in surprise "I'm sure I was gonna hit her! "
He readied another arrow and shot. But just as the last time,  the arrow changed it's direction just before hitting Churro.  The girl got really mad and started shouting at Vacant.
"What are you doing?! "
Vacant started shooting arrows one after another until he had no more, but every single one of them didn't reach the target.
"It can't be... " Vacant thought taking a shuriken into his hands.
He threw it.  Shuriken flew spinning,  but just before hitting Churro into her face,  it changed direction and hit the ground like the arrows.
Vacant jumped down on the ground and dropped his backpack.
"It seems she has somekind of a shield against projectiles...  or maybe all weapons?"
Vacant kneeled and pulled out a long green spear from the ground,  which was impossible to notice because of the grass.
Churro laughed looking at the serious Vacant.
"What are we gonna play now, mister? " she asked.
"Kill the girl" Vacant answered dashing forward her,  carefully placing his feet so he wouldn't touch a mine.
"Wut? " Churro closed her eyes in fear of Vacant,  like a puppy who fears it's master.
That sight made Vacant hestitate.  He stopped right in front of Churro,  confused about what he should do.
Churro crouched and started crying,  hugging her legs.
Vacant put a step back,  unwilling to do anything.
Suddenly the little girl's cry turned into a furious battle cry mixed with some laughing,  as Churro jumped on Vacant with her knife in hand. She stabbed him in the stomach and blood spilled on her face.  Vacant tried to scream,  but his lips didn't make a noise. He used his spear a long stick to defend himself,  hitting Churro with the wooden side so hard, that the spear broke and the girl was sent flying backwards.
He threw his spearhead before the girl could stand up.  The spike pierced through her right bicep.  Churro screamed angrily in pain.
Vacant kneeled,  trying to hold in the pain.  But Churro stood up with an angry face,  like she wasn't feeling any pain. Her eyes were red from anger.
The ground started shaking.
"It can't be an earthquake, can it? " Vacant wondered.
But everything exceeded his expectations.  Thousands of rainbow colored ponies started running out of the woods behind Churro. It was an unstoppable force,  ready to squash Vacant. He jumped back,  trying to run away,  but he stepped on a mine and it exploded.
Vacant didn't see anything. His body was unconscious,  while his mind wasn't. It felt like he was flying in space.
"How did she materialize or even summon so many ponies" he thought,  but the answer hit him in a mere couple of moments
"My traps! They didn't activate! It must have been all an illusion of some sort.. "
Slowly he awoke.  He felt huge pain on his chest and couldn't feel his legs.  Once his consciousness fully returned,  Vacant understood that there was a rope tied on his neck.
He looked around.  His legs and half of his stomach were blown up.  A road of blood showed that he was dragged from the explosion to...  where?
Vacant looked around again and got terrified. He was near the tree he was previously hiding before. The rope,  that has been tied on his neck,  was thrown over a big fat branch,  and on the other side of the rope,  it was Churro,  getting ready to tie it around the tree.
"Churro" Vacant mumbled,  trying to reach out for the girl,  but she didn't react,  like she didn't hear him.
Churro said something quietly and giggled.  She started pulling the rope,  raising Vacant's body into the air.
"Can't... breathe... " the man said as the rope tightened around his neck.
Churro fastened the rope to the tree and then screamed. She ran to Vacant and shouted:
"Mister! Mister,  what happened?! "
Vacant stared at her with the eyes of a man who still has will to live,  as he tried to loosen the rope with his own hands.
"Wait here,  Mister! I'll get some help!" Churro shouted,  running away,  leaving Vacant hanging.

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Manga Writers wanted / World went mad: writer needs a writer
« on: February 05, 2015, 01:35:53 PM »
Hello guys,  and welcome to another complain of mine that my computer is nor working right,  so I hafta write stuff through phone.

Well,  yes,  I'm searching for a writer,  because need a small favor to ask.

Could any of you edit the layout of my 'Killing fate'?  I will be getting back to writing it in a short while,  but some people suggested adding bolds and italics to it.  And since I'm doin stuff with my phone,  that would be something like a two hour work.  So I'm just asking if someone could bold stuff like 'Page X' and 'Panel x' and add italics to dialogues,  speech to be exact.

if you press here it will take you to the last update. If someone could do all that on the whole story,  I would be really grateful!

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Welcome Center / I'm back!
« on: February 04, 2015, 12:21:07 PM »
Hi guys, I'm back! Yeah yeah, I know this isn't the "coming back" topic or smth like that, but It's me guys, I'm just too lazy to search for it! But this is the 'Welcome centre' so why don't ya all 'welcome' me being back? :D

Anyway, I've been hella busy with school work, exams and stuff like that, but... I'm back!

My Pc is still not functional, so phone is my friend at times like these.
And the worst part is, after my month of absence, my 5 posts per day became 2.9 posts per day...
DAMMIT!

But, It is nice to be back!
It's great to see you again, MR!

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Manga Artists Wanted / Looking for artists working for free... yah...
« on: January 03, 2015, 04:36:56 AM »
So yah...
I'm a pro wrter, I has story that will put Naruto and One Piece to shames.... yah...
Yah... This story is so good, it has All, ALL the genres you can think of... yah... It's so good that I won't even post it here, because everyone will steal it... yah...
I'm searching for artists, so I wamt al artists of MR to pm me so I could choose the best artist... yah...
The artist will earn 10% from everything I get, since it is my story... yah...
You'll see, moi story is so good, it will be turned to anime after the first chapter is published... yah...
I know I speak english so good, Even if I'm not Australian... yah...
So, yah, bit*he's who want money, pm me!
Yah...

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Manga Writer workshop / You wanna peek inside, believe me [contest!]
« on: December 28, 2014, 02:07:44 PM »
Ladies and Gentelman! Writers And Artists! Newbies and Veterans!

Let me present you this little contest that I thought up!

What's the meaning of this you may ask? It's promote your stories and get your characters noticed!

What is this? I'll tell you what this is...

THIS IS WRITER RAP BATTLES!!!

Okay, after this warm welcome,let's get to the point where I explain stuff.

So, everyone knows wgat rap battles are- where you rhyme and diss the sh*t out of your opponent.

You will have to step into the shoes of one of your chracters and rhyme and rap your way to the top.

If you want to register, There is an application at the bottom that you should fill in

Since it's the first time I'm hosting a thing like this in a forum, I'll take it easy: it will be one on one matches. Once you know your enemy, you should go to pm with him or any other way you can contact him, and start a conversation with him.

There will be 2 rounds. You should decide between the two of you, who goes first. The rapper A sends his round 1 lines to rapper B.

Rapper B will then send his round 2 lines to rapper A.
Rapper A then sends his round 2 rhymes to rapper B, rapper B then finishes round 2 with his lines and posts both rounds on the topic.
Just feel the limits. It has to be more like a friendly and funny rhyme than an insulting one.

It will go like a tournament system. A pair will have to post their rap in the limit of a week. If a rapper cannot contact his opponent, opponent is then disqualified. Rapper A has to send his round 2 rhymes two days before the week of posting ends

Also, when you post your rhymes, use spoilers, so it won't consume too much space.

I might make another topic for the purpose of posting your character rap battles

The winner will he judged by 3 judges.  They might be members who have over 100 posts, so if you want to be a judge, just say so. It would be best if you would log in on a daily basis.

What's the prize for winning you may ask? This, unfortunately, is the best and the worst part of all.
The loser will have to read the winner's  story about that character (if it's really long, deals can be made) and review it, give some feedback. Since there are like 20 writers and only like 3-5 people who take their time to give some feedback, this will help your story to get noticed by many people.

Also, if you decide to participate, your character might interest some other rappers or people who just came to this topic. So you might win anyways.

Have any questions?
Here is the application. I'll fill it in myself in just a sec.

Spoiler
Character name:
Link to the story:
Some interesting facts about this character:
Character's goals and ideals:
Other details:
Your imagination as a writer from 1 to 10:
Your wrting skills from 1 to 10:
Your dissing and rapping skills from 1 to 10:


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Welcome aboard people, I present you a game you have probably already seen: What would you do to the person above you, if you find him in you closet at night?

Rules are simple: You just say what would you do to the person above you, and thr person who posts after you, will say what will he do to you.

Example:
Peson A: start!
Person B: tie you up in a chair and force you to listen to jazz!
Person C: I would hang you, Person B!
Person A/Person B/Person D: would put you on a table, tie you, and then throw a lot of fish on you. I would exit leaving the windows open, so all the neighborhood's cats could enjoy you!

Simple huh?
Let's try this is out!
START!

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break Room / Funny jokes about Christmas?
« on: December 11, 2014, 01:24:48 PM »
Hi guys, I have a problem
I have a tradition to make little presents for my classmates: a joke or two about christmas or such and a yugioh card. It might sound stupid and it is. It's so absurd that it makes it fun.
The problem is that I ran out of jokes for the last few people-.-
So if you can, give me some christmas jokes, just that it wouldn't be world play, because I translate to my native language and mostly word plays don't work
So, pretty please?

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Develop Your Story / The Ghost town ( On going writing)
« on: December 07, 2014, 02:59:31 PM »
I have already created a topic with one story, but I'm not sure which one should I write first, so based on the feedback, I'll choose

The summary of the story:
Spoiler

These kids were just having a trip to a forest. But they arrived at a mysterious town, and the moment they stopped, ghosts started appearing out of nowhere. The main character, a boy named David, decided to run for his life like everyone else on the bus, but someone accidently hit his head and David lost consciousness.
He awoke in the late evening.  The bus was empty, except for backpacks and food that the kids brought. He decided to act like an adult would, and filled his backpack with food.

As he wandered through the city, he found some ghosts that explained where he is. David became trapped in a survival  game created by three devils. This was a game, where children would get powers at random.
As he was suddenly attacked by his classmate Ben, who decided to use this game to please his own ghoulishness, David found out that he was given 'Master' powers- his body's abilities became stronger.
Ben, who suffered a humiliating defeat, ran off to make an offer to the devils - they took his soul but made him an 'Ghoul' - a evil version of 'Master'.
David formed a survival party, consisting of 5 members, and found some weapons to protect themselves from skeleton armies that appear at night.
But skeletons aren't the only things they have to fear. Other survival parties are killing each other off, so that they would be the last ones standind.
However Ben isn't the only one who made a pact with the devils. Necromancers, 'Shamans', 'Demonists' and 'Ghouls' are trying to kill everyone who still has a soul.
David's party is stuck between two enemies: The one who still have a soul, and the ones who don't.

Here are the powers, or as you may call them, classes:

Spoiler
Master: the natural power given at random for 5 % of the people. They are stronger and faster than others. They also have the smae power as Soulers
Soulers: A natural power with 80% of a getting chance. People who's soul can merge with a ghost, as the ghost becomes a body, and the soul controls it. Can only be done with ghosts that want to, you can't force yourself into a ghost. Also, while your body is soulless, a ghost can take it over, so when your merging with ghost time runs out, you become another ghost
Vaidilla: a natural power, given to 5% of people. It's the weakest power. You can only summon ghosts of people that are dead
Shaman: A natural power given to 10% of people, but can be powered up by making a pact. These people can force ghosts to merge with objects and weapons, making them stronger and less destructible. If a pact is made, the shaman can poison ghost's mind, so that he would always do what the owner tells him to and not run away.
Ghouls: A power given to people with strong will and desires. Most of the time is stronger than Masters, but they do not posses the devilists powers.
Devilists: The evil side of soulers, the power is given to ordinary people who make a pact. They can merge their minds with a ghost, so that they would be able to control the ghost as a body. Their bodies are left unconscious, but are too corrupted for ghosts to take over.
Necromancer: a power given to people who have strong mentality and have made a pact. This power let's people to control skeletons and dead bodies.

Give me some feedback on this, do you like it or no, should I try to write it or no.
If you have a question, feel free to ask.
 ::)

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Develop Your Story / Killing fate (ongoing writing)
« on: December 07, 2014, 05:37:01 AM »

An updated version!
I came up with the idea than there should be more or less information about the story that should concern the reader before every chapter. You know,  to spice things up a bit.
So,  here's the backstory for Chapter 1:

Spoiler
There was a small island near Madagascar. It didn't have a big population, maybe 6 or 7 families only lived there.
One day, a small meteorite hit the island, causing an explosion, and killing off everybody on it, except for 3 eight years old boys.
One of them was found by a cruise ship in Arabian Sea. They took him in, and helped him recover. The boy had a sword, but did not want to let other people have it
When the ship reached the coast, it was empty, every single passenger was killed with a sharp weapon, the boy's sword.
The boy travelled to Scandinavia, killing innocent people on his way. People started to call him the 'Tentacle' because he was a mysterious killer, who couldn't be stopped by armies.
In Norway, using his powers, he created his  empire, and became a rich king.
The second boy awoke in Mozambique. He also had a sword. Filled with rage that he lost his father, he decide to clear the world of criminals and other evildoers so that noone would be hurt again. But he attracted the police's attention, so he was forced to kill even the good people who were after him. Following such events, he decided that he is above law, and that anyone who goes against him should die too. People called him the second killer, 'Vulcano' because it is said that his anger is unstoppable.
The third boy, our main hero, awoke in Australia. He had a sword with with him, but didn't want to keep it. He left it at the beach where he awoke, however the next morning the same sword appeared near his bed. No matter what he would do, the sword would come back to the boy in the morning.
An Australian family found him crying over his fate. They found out that the boy had lost his memory and had black eyes with red middles. They adopted him and took to their village.
But the kids were mean to the boy, they would laugh at his red eyes and his amnesia.
One day, filled with anger, he killed the whole village. Scared of his own abilities, he started living a wild life, killing farm animals for meat. But fate was cruel to him, as he would lose consciousness and wake up in piles of blood. People called him the killing 'Bird', as no one knew where he would strike next. As Bird moved to central Asia while hunting for food, he noticed that words have appeared on his sword: "Killing - Killer's Fate"


And the updated,  edited,  and all better Chapter 1: "Volcano's mistake":
Spoiler
1 page, 5 panels (2-2-1)

panel 1 text: You think your life is hard? Then just look at me... Picture:A boy's silhouette with a sword is shown standing on a mountain against the sunset in the sea.

 Panel 2: text: For the past 3 years I've been killing people everywhere I go...  Picture: The inside of someone's house, there's blood everywhere, a broken window and a dead grown up man with slash marks and an arm's biceps bitten off.

Panel 3: text: Sometimes to survive... Sometimes for My Own Pleasure... picture: the boy's face is shown and his sword held against it. The face has a little cut in it, blood is dripping. The hair is black and short. Eyes are red, while the rest of the eyeball is black (Could be painted grey and black). You can barely see a smile on his lips. The sword has some words written in red color: "Killing- Ki"  and you can't see the rest.

panel 4 text: This is my fate as a killer... My...  Picture: the sword is piercing through a human's. body, blood is spilling everywhere. You can see the Great China wall in the background. Now the whole sign on the sword is shown: "Killing - Killer's Fate"

Panel 5: there is a text on a grey background: "Killing Fate". The "Kill" And "Fa" parts are white, while "Ing" and "te" ar black. There are three black swords stuck in the letter F, and you can see a somekind of a six-armed human with six swords behind Ing part. Only a part of his chest, parts of his legs and arms with swords can be seen, 70% of the body is hidden.

Page two, 5 panels (1-2-2)
panel 1 
text: Somewhere East. There is a riverside forest shown, and in the background you can see a Volcano. There's also a campfire on the grass, some bones.

Panel 2 The bones are showed from a closer view. It's an Ox's head, an uncooked porkchop and a snake's skeleton with some flesh still on it. Sfx show that the river's flow is heard (don't know what's the sound people use in English to describe it)

Panel 3: A bloody hand with blood dripping from it is shown. Trees in the background. Sfx: deep breathing and river's flow

Panel 4 (Is in the top left corner of Panel 5): A boy's face with blood on it is looking at something sadly. He says: "Oh are you dead? But I thought that you were going to kill me..."

Panel 5: The boy is ducking near a dead man who has an open wound in his stomach. Rhe man's right arm is cut off, laying near him, there's a pistol in it's hand. The boy is licking the dripping blood from his own hand saying: "Well, I guess people die if they are killed... poor guy."

Page 3, 6 panels .(1-2-2-1)

 panel 1
: the boy is leaving the dead body. The body is on the right side and the speech bubble on the left "I never liked human meat. It's too salty " he says. Only above his wrist is shown.

panel 2: The boy has returned to his campfire and started cooking his porkchop. He has his sword tied to him. Another dead body can be seen within the woods

panel 3  (Merged with Panel 2 from the left): A Sniper with a gun is shown hiding in the forest and aiming at someone. Another man is bending near him, you can see a katana tied up to his belt.

panel4 (Merged with panel 5): The sniper says "target locked"

panel 5 : The other one's face is shown as he replies : "Shoot the target within 3... 2..."

panel6 There's a speech bubble dragged from panel 5 saying : "1 " A shot bullet flying through the air from the gun is shown. The gun covers half of the sniper's face

Page 4, 5 panels (2-1-2)

Panel 1
: 3/4 of a strip, merged with panel 2. The boy is shown from the right. You can see the bullet going through the boy's chest.

Panel 2.  1/4 of the strip. Shows the katana wielder shouting "success!"

Panel 3: a strip showing the boy fall down in from the left side behind him.

Panel 4.  Shows the katana wielder and the sniper cheering and high fiving, Sniper is shouting: "The 200 Grand are ours!"

Panel 5:  Shows a maniac's smile on the boy's face. The eyes are still open.

Page 5; 6 panels (2-2-2)

Panel 1:
The view is shown from sniper's lower back. You can see the boy slowly standing up. A revovler with six bullets is tied up to sniper's belt. Two "!" imply that the duo noticed the boy standing up.

Panel 2: a little bigger that Panel 1, merged with panel 4 below it. The sniper pulls out his revolver and the 3 sfx "click(?)" shows that he shot 3 times. Sniper is screaming.

Panel 3: Shows The boy already standing and the shots passing through without any harm, as if the the boy was air. The boy is smiling.

Panel 4: A little larger than Panel 3 , merged with panel 2. Sniper is screaming: "How is that son of a b*tch still alive?!"

Panel 5:  The katana wielder runs out of the woods and pulls out his sword, saying: "My turn then!"

Panel 6:  The angle is from behind of the boy's right shoulder, showing the katana wielder charging for him.

Page 6, 4 panels (1-2-1)

Panel1: Shows a white slash in the black background

Panel2:  You can see the katana wielder slashing through the boy as he was air, without doing any damage, from the kid's behind. Since the man is pretty close, you can see that the boy is kinda tall, the size of an average adult, but still shorter than his opponent.

Panel 3:  Shows the horrified wielder's face as he asks : "How?"

Panel 4:  Angle is from infront of the boy, almost from the swordsman's eyes. Shows the boy getting ready to punch "the reader", while saying: "I think it's called... "

Page 7, 3 panels

panel 1:  takes 1/3 of the page, a vertical strip on the left side. Shows the boy hitting the swordsman with an uppercut punch and sending him a little bit into the air, while finishing the sentence from last page: "...Intangibility!"

panel 2 : Shows the swordsman's head as he hits the ground. Blood is comming out of his lower lip. Sfx: bump and speed lines to show the fall.

panel 3 : . Shows the boys foot chrushing the katana wielder's nose. a sfx that implies the nose is broke. Swordsman is unconscious.

Page 8, 4panels.
1 Panel:  Shows the sniper holding his revovler with fear, ready to shoot the boy and asking: "Who... who are you?!"

Panel 2:  The boy's sad face is shown as he answers: "I'm little Bird, who has broken out of the egg."

Panel 3:  merged into panel 4 on it's top right corner. Shows the sniper screaming: "Ghwaaa!!!" as a sign of him being angry, as he shoots three times.

Panel 4:  takes 2/3 of the page together with panel 3, Shows Bird standing on swordsman's face, while the bullets pass through him.

Page 9. 4 panels:

Panel 1:  shows the sniper falling on his knees frightened, as the gun slips out of his hand. He says: "How do you kill this monster?"

Panel 2: Shows Bird's front face view. The boy is smiling as he answers: "You don't... "

Panel 3:  a view from the ground how Bird takes out his sword and puts it on the swordsman's face, between the eyes. he finishes his words from the last panel: "The monster kills YOU..."

Panel 4:  Profile view. Shows how Bird pushes his sword through.

Panel 10, 4 panels: 

panel 1: shows how Bird takes his sword out, doesn't show below his waist. A speech bubble shows that someone is talking: "Birds are meant to be free..."

Panel 2:  Shows the sniper's terrified and surprised face, as someone continues talking: "They have beautiful feathers and voices..."

Panel 3 : A red eye with a black eyeball is shwon, with some white strings of hair falling on it, as someone continues to speak:"Their wings let them to fly high ad unrestricted..."

Panel 4:  Black words on a white background are shown: "But I can burn them down."

Page 11, 6 panels
panel 1: 
This panel is seperated to two triangles by a slash. One triangle shows Bird's face, the other -sniper's face as they both notice something in the sky.

Panel 2:  A far Side view. A huge amount of birds flying straight down are shown. Not any specific species of birds, but different ones mixed all up together. Sniper is right below them.

Panel 3: Profile view. shows how suddenly all birds have attacked the sniper. There are so many, that not a part of him can be seen. Sfx that implies biting.

Panel 4:  All of the birds run off like chicken, leaving the Bloody sniper standing.

Panel 5: profile view of sniper fall down dead

Panel 6:  Shows someone's foot stepping on sniper's head.

Page 12, 1 panel.  Shows a a really muscular boy standing with one foot on sniper's head. Sniper looks dead. The boy is wearing only pants and shoes, nothing on his tops. He is very strong, has a body of a weight lifter. Has white hair, that hasn't been cut in half a year or so. His head is lowered, hair covers his face so it can't be seen. He's holding a sword in his right hand. There are some letters on it, but too small to read.

Page 13, 4 panels

 panel 1: 
Bird's confused face is shown. He asks: "And you're supposed to be?"

Panel 2:  The other boy's face is shown, as he lifts his head a little. Now his black eye with the red midle can be sefm. He answers: "I'm erupting Volcano. But you will know me as your killer"

Panel 3:  a strip showing the profile of Bird from the right, as he lifts his sword against his opponent. "Killing - Killer's fate"  can be seen written on the sword. Bird says: "I'm not a bird that can be caged so easily"

Panel 4:  a strip showing the Volcano's profile from the left, as he lifts his sword against his opponent. Words can be seen on his sword: "Killing gets rid of evil ". Volcano says: "Then I guess I'll have to do it the hard way..."

Page 14, 5 panels

Panel 1:
Bird's face's profile is shown, he's thinking: "This guy reminds me of something...But, goddamn me, I can't remember!"

Panel 2: Volcano's profile with his face. He's thinking: "Well, he changed less than both of us... He's still a child. That I will..."

Panel 3: Profile view. Shows Volcano charging out for Bird as he finishes his thought: "...KILL!"

Panel 4: A strip. Volcano tries to cut Bird in half, but he avoids it by doing a frontflip over Volcano.

Page 15, 4 panels:

 panel 1: 
a view from the behind of Bird as Volcano and Bird are turning back to each other.

Panel 2:  Volcano swings his sword but Bird turn into a small ball.

Panel 3:  Volcano's sword stays in the same place as the ball flies behind him, implying ball's insane speed.

Page 16, 4 panels

panel 1:
Bird turns back into human from the ball form behind Volcano, ready to swing his through his right sword. A "!" near Volcano's head implies that he understood what happened.

panel 2: Volcano is able to swing his sword backwards to block Bird's attack without looking. A sfx that shows two swords hitting each other.

Panel3:  A really backed up view. Bird jumps back with a long backflip. He is saying: "Why are you..."

Panel 4: Bird is standing, looking at Volcano, finishing his sentence: "...attacking me? You don't look like those people who go after the bounty?

Page 17, 5 panels

 Panel 1:
A crazy smile is shown on Volcano's face. "You mean you don't know? " he says

Panel2 : Bird is confused. He replies: "Don't know what?"

Panel 3: Volcano laughs: "You fool! You really thought that you're the only one with your powers?!"

Panel4 : Front view of Volcano holding his sword against 'the reader' is shown. His hair covers his right eye, and the left one is widened like a maniac's. He says: "Well let me enlighten you..."

Panel 5: A strip. Three swords are shown. One is Bird's with the text, second is Volcano's, the text can be seen too. The third one has text too, but it's blurred out. Volcano is the 'narrator' of this page as his words can be seen around the swords: "You are the Third Killer, Bird. You are known to the world as the weakest killer of all, that's why you still have a bounty on you" "The second killer is me, Volcano. I punish people for their evil deeds, that's why everyone is afraid of me" "The first killer is Tentacle, he's held the most powerful one. And only because he used his powers to create an empire!"

Page 18, panels

Panel 1: 
1/6 of the page. Volcano's profile, as he continues his speech: "Our swords are the ones that give us powers! That's why I came to take yours!"

Panel 2:  1/6 of the page. A profile of Confused Bird as he asks: "But if we all have powers... What are yours?"

Panel 3; in a top left corner of panel 4 The Volcano's face is shown as he holds his sword against his eyes. he says: "Glad you asked. Now, God, I call upon you"

Panel 4:  Shows a view from a 2 meters[6feet] high, to the right from in front of Volcano (the longest view I’ve ever wrote). Shows half of Volcano’s body and a new man that appeared from nowhere behind him. Volcano is looking back, at the peron, smiling. The person asks: “What is your wish? ” and Volcano replies: "I want my enemies to lose their powers ". The man answers: "Your wish is granted".

Page 19, 5 panels

1 panel:  a strip, showing how Volcano and Bird are standing against each other. The man is nowhere to be seen anymore.

Panel2:  Bird's confused profile. He asks: "What was that all about?"

Panel 3:  Volcano's giggling profile, as he answers: "One of my powers is to summon a God so that he would grant my wish for one hour..."

Panel 4:  Front view of Volcano half of his face is shaded,"While my other power is..."
panel 5: Volcano is shown getting ready to attack. Wild animals gathering can be seen n the background. Volcano's speech bubble pops out of the panel: "To control all living animals…”

Page 20/21, a panel in 2 pages.  Shows a huge amount of animals gatheringaround Bird from a bird’s view. Volcano finises his sentence: “in a half kilometre's radius!"

Page 22, 1 panel: Bird and Volcano are showed standing, they're separated by a slash "/". Volcano laughs at Bird: "So little Bird, What are you going to do without your wings?!" . Bird is grinning. Angry Animals and birds can be seen in both backgrounds.

Page 23, 4 panels

 panel 1: 
Front view of Bird, doesn't go below his waist. Bird is looking at Volcano confused, as he replies: "I'm actually wondering..."

Panel 2: Shows Bird's face a from the right side (not a profile picture). Bird smiles and finishes his last sentence: "... How are you going to defeat me?"

Panel 3:  Shows Volcano with a confused smile. He says: "Are you stupid?  You lost your powers, but I still have mine! These animals will tear you apart!"

Panel 4 : Bird raises his sword and points to Volcano. "Yes,  I lost my powers" he's  says, and in the next bubble: "But my sword did not!"

Page 24, 5 panels

Panel 1:  Shows shocked and frightened Volcano's eyes.

Panel2: Volcano throws his hand in the air and shouts: "Kill him!"

Panel 3:  Shows from a 'worm's' perspective as animals jump on Bird.

Panel 4:  A side view how animals bump to each other, because Bird turned into a ball and charged into Volcano (speed lines show the flying)

Panel 5:  Bird turns back to human infront of Volcano and they bot swing their swords to each other (swinging shown by speed lines). Bird is saying: "Looks like this..."

Page 25, 4 panels

panel 1: 
1/6 of the page Seperated in two by a slash "\". In the left one there is Bird's eye, in the right one - Volcano's. It gives an impression that eyes are looking directly into each other.

Panel 2: 1/6 of the page Shows Bird's and Volcano's swords heading for each other, a moment from hitting.

Panel 3:  Bird goes intangible and goes through Volcano, as he's surprised that the swords didn't hit.

Panel 4:  Bird turn around behind Volcano, swinging his sword. Volcano is confused about what happened. Bird finishes his sentence: "...Was your last mistake Volcano!"

Page 24, 3 panels

panel 1: 
Profile view, a strip taking half of the page. Volcano takes a step forward trying to dodge the attack, but his lower back is still slashed. Blood is dripping.

Panel 2:  Profile view: Shows Bird's face and body above the waist, just after the slash and the serious look he has. Drops of blood are flying in the air (no speed lines, to make the time look stopped)

Panel 3:  Profile view. Shows Volcano falling and his mouth open for a scream. Blood drops are flying. Again, no speed lines to make the time look stopped.

Page 25, 3 panels.

panel 1: 
1/3 of the page. Shows Volcano lying on the ground from Bird's view. The wound on his back is long but not wide, blood is coming out. The backbone is cut too. Inside censored by dark color.

Panel 2: Front view as Bird raises his sword saying: "You're just a mountain, not a volcano"

Panel 3:  Front view of Volcano's face as his eyes widen in anger.

Page 26,

1 panel: 
The view is backed up behind Bird and a little to the right, showing how a huge wave of birds cover up Volcano's body and everything around it, including half of Bird's body. Bird is surprised.

Page 27, 4 panels:

 Panel 1:
birds fly away in the same huge wave, but Volcano's body cannot be seen anymore.

Panel 2 : Shows us right behind Bird, as he's watching the birds flying away. Words are shown on a whote background in the corner: "I will be back Bird!"

Panel 3: Shows front view of Bird's face, as he's still watching the birds. The words on a white background continue: "And I'll be back stronger! ". As an answer to that, Bird says: "Don't hope on me just sitting here and waiting"

Panel 4:  This panel is cut into two: one side shows the right half of a serious Bird's face and the other one shows the left half of Volcano's angry face, merging these two halfs into 'one'.

Page 28, 3 panels.

 panel 1
: Shows Bird as he's eating something. He's thinking: "Volcano will want revenge and with that wish of his, I will be defeated"

panel 2:  Bird is cleaning his sword in the river. His thoughts are shown again: "The only way for me to defeat him, is to find this Tentacle guy. Volcano won't be able to defeat both of us!"

Panel3 :  a strip with narration: "You think your life is hard? Well, just look at what I'm going to face..." . A castle with 8 towers is shown somewhere in a snowland.
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break Room / Does anyone else have a problem with character aging?
« on: December 07, 2014, 03:28:17 AM »
What's up dudes?
As I'm creating stories with several 'seasons' I find it a sad fact that the characters age.
Most of mine start at their teens, and it's just sad for me to see them as grown up man in their latest adventures.
Has anyone else had a problem with this? The characters are even just getting too old to fight villains, but I just can't let some of themgo, their stories are just too great. I tried to kill off one hero once, but it ended up turning him into simple human, and later on he got his powers back so... Any advice on how I should deal with it?

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