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Develop Your Story / Re: Death By Ex-Girlfriend (COMPLETED)
« on: December 05, 2017, 12:27:13 AM »
Yeah I probably will. The story does alright without it, but it will add just that extra layer of suffering. Gotta make the reader as miserable as possible lol I also left out a lot of battles and some homely happenings at the Senkumo mansions, but whatever. Even shaved down, the whole thing is still 60+ chapters

Develop Your Story / Re: Death By Ex-Girlfriend (COMPLETED)
« on: December 04, 2017, 01:38:13 PM »
You know, there was actually supposed to be a 4th part to Senkumo War Stories. The Book of Phantoms. It takes place in the two month gap between the end of Betrayal and the start of Vengeance. Healing and preparing for her upcoming slaughter of Bishamon and his co-conspirators, Tsukiakari comes across the ghosts of her fallen comrades, all of them having taken dark or demonic form. They all try to kill their former commander, but not all of the ghosts and battles end up being real. Some of them were just guilt induced hallucinations.

It was going to be quite the ride through Tsukiakari’s emotions, as the ghosts that hunt her take on some pretty trippy forms meant to symbolize what they felt when they died. Even Mayumi and Ebina, with the latter apparently leading the spectral hunt against her. Taeko is the only ghost that isn’t vengeful, but Tsukiakari can’t figue out if she’s a real ghost or yet another mirage of sorrow.

In their final talk, Taeko tried to convince her that there are more emotions in her than hatred, more purposes for her than war and ceaseless conflict. There was so much more of the Senkuno clan to remember than just its tragic downfall. But of course, Tsukiakari refuses this and sticks to her path of carnage. Once all the Ghosts are Laid to rest, both real and hallucinations, she goes off to find Oyamatsumi to begin her massacre, tying in with the start of the Book of Vengeance

Buuuut that would’ve put the whole arc well over 100 chapters and I’m still not sure if I should write it. Anyone have any thoughts? Do you think it might flesh out the arc a little more?

MR Pub / Re: Chit Chat 2017
« on: December 01, 2017, 05:05:55 PM »

Develop Your Story / Re: Death By Ex-Girlfriend (COMPLETED)
« on: November 29, 2017, 07:45:12 PM »
I’d answer that, but I might spoil the series

Anime Talk / Re: Your worst anime openings
« on: November 29, 2017, 05:28:31 PM »
Parasyte’s absolutely abysmal, auto-tune, screamo thrash OP

Music / Re: What are you listening to
« on: November 26, 2017, 10:50:46 PM »
Help Me Doctor Jesus by The Plattermen. I’ve fallen in love with this one, especially with the drumming. It’s genius to make a Soul/Rock/Gospel song like this

Oh and this groovy masterpiece

Music / Re: OGHM's Wacky Slappy Guitar Riffs
« on: November 26, 2017, 10:42:42 PM »
Short snippet of me soloing on Free Man by Point Blank

Cover of Melvin Laid an Egg

Messing around with The Light Will Shine On You

Develop Your Story / Re: Death By Ex-Girlfriend (COMPLETED)
« on: November 26, 2017, 06:29:09 PM »
“No nothing bad happens to Aika otherwise I riot”




Develop Your Story / Re: Death By Ex-Girlfriend (COMPLETED)
« on: November 23, 2017, 03:16:18 AM »
This was meant to be posted after Amatsutsuki's and the Shoku Twins's stories, but as I've been unable to write anything for over a month, I figured you could just have this until the rest is up

Rousoku's Final Message To Osamu



"Moving on." That was my fate as a wandering spirit. Our ilk die with regret nested deep within our hearts, our anger and agony tethering us to the earth. This tragic state of existence is our own fault. My own fault. I committed suicide and wound up in Kyoto, as if some force of nature was at work to bound our fates together just one more time. Yours and mine.

You get it now, don't you? Yes, I know you know. I was a wandering ghost, but my existence came to its second end that scarlet night, the coastline baptized in my blood. Osamu...I'm finally home.

But god...what has become of you? You may not be dead, but you linger around like a ghost. You've become me, and that's the last thing I would ever wish for. My phantom has already been laid to rest. So why is it that I'm still with you? Why am I even writing these words?


You understand. You've always known. The phantom you carry with you, the specter you've declared as a symbol of your's not real. I'm not real. All of the ghosts you carry with you, we're all just pieces of your broken, weary heart. Your torment, Osamu, is partly an illusion. And it is torment that you do not deserve.

I know what emotions coil and slither around you. I know your agony. But no matter how many days you spend bedridden, no matter how much ash you consume, no matter how fiercely you hate and destroy yourself, your punishment will never bring me back to life. Rousoku Hinawari, your former lover, is dead. And she will never return to you.

Deep below all of that anger, that vexation, the sorrow and pain....I know what emotion truly lies at the bottom of your heart.

Let it out, Osamu.

Let it free. Let it sing and cry, wail and scream. And at last, at long last, forgive yourself. Blow the candle out, let the smoke rise into the night sky, and be at peace.

Though our memories together are interwoven with bitter sadness and resentment, there are still so many happy, beautiful moments. You don't have to look back in anger or anguish. You don't have to reminisce with a heart burdened by guilt. Fate brought us back together for a reason. It tested us, reshaped us into something more than our previous selves of yesterday. If we hadn't met again after all those years, I'd still be wandering the world, lost and alone.

I am gone, and I am finally at peace. It's time for you to do the same, Osamu. And so, this ghost of a ghost shall disappear for good, until the day when you too are chosen to cross over to the other shore, when your cinders and ash join the soil with mine.

Until then, seek peace, Osamu. Seek comfort. It's okay for you to live. It's okay for you to mourn. I know it will take time, but time is the surest anodyne for your pain.

It's time for this candle's flame to be blown out. I think I know exactly what I want my parting words to you to be.



For it's time...

To let it all go.

break Room / Re: Nobuhiro Watsuki was arrested!
« on: November 21, 2017, 09:23:56 PM »
I guess you can say he's not much of a Noblehiro anymore huh?
If any of the girls were amputees, he probably had lewd fantasies about the Nishiwalks on, eh? EHHH?

Yes that was a child amputee pornography pun. Yes I'm an awful person.

Music / Re: What are you listening to
« on: October 24, 2017, 09:46:02 PM »

Kojima Mayumi.


Develop Your Story / Re: Death By Ex-Girlfriend (COMPLETED)
« on: October 20, 2017, 10:42:21 PM »

break Room / Re: Just Putting it Out There...
« on: October 17, 2017, 04:26:09 PM »
I just couldn't even look at it anymore. I don't think I'll be digging that idea up from the grave again  :ninja:

Uh oh, did I kill off someone's favorite character?  :hmm: I sure hope I didn't but I've killed a lot :ohmy: Between gearing up to put DbEG out there, I've also been trying to drum up another idea around my usual, favorite themes. I really want to capture the warm and homely feeling of Anzu again, with the same kind of development of drama and cruel twists. Ah well, I'm sure it'll come to me.

Writing this one was a good mental workout. Just figuring out the big TWEEST took days for me to wrap my hear around. a Three-way identity swap. What on earth was I high on

break Room / Just Putting it Out There...
« on: October 17, 2017, 03:54:30 PM »
I had Sincerely Your Dearest Phantom removed because, well, for as much praise as it got, I didn't like it. Like, at all. But I realize that I kind of burned down the parade on that one with its swift removal. There's no way in hell I'll ever get back to writing that story, but I can at least tell you THE SHOCKING TWEEST

Yes, the world Shiya and whatever the other girl's name was a digitized simulation, one made of the collective conscious of thousands of other people. In the real world humanity had nearly come to an end and the Earth was torn asunder as the sun began to die and morph into a red giant. Humanity was only able to build a few Celestial Arks (Basically giant space-travelling ships) to save roughly 1 million people while the other billions were all killed.

Shiya and Whatsherface were able to get on because Whatsherface's father was one of the people working on Japan's Celestial Ark. He was also the one who invented the digitized space that everyone on the ship would live until their arrival to a hospitable planet, as well as the AI guardian of that space, Daedalus. Shiya was gravely injured as she first got on the ship, but was treated with prompt medical care before having her consciousness uploaded to the alternate world. Whatsherface had an organ complication and would certainly die in short time while in the alternate world. All 50,000 or so people on the ship were sent there, as it was meant to be a form of morale control and body preservation.

However, Shiya's body continued to suffer from complications during her extended time in her Chamber of Respite (the terminal by which people's minds are uploaded to the digitized world). There was one occurrence where Shiya collapsed in the digitized world because her comatose body was going into shock in the Chamber of Respite. This was when Yonaka collapsed in the classroom as Shiya (I just remembered her name lol) was cradling her. On that day, Yonaka's Angel was born and initiated the scene with the solar eclipse and mass rapture of souls into the dark orange sky.

Got all that? Notice the error in detail there? Okay.

Here's the truth.

In that scene, the one known as Shiya was cradling an unconscious Yonaka as the angel went on its rampage. Yonaka revisits this memory from Daedalus as she realizes something isn't right with it. Without telling her, Daedalus has it so Yonaka revisits the memory as she experienced it when it happen, so she's essentially reliving it. Yonaka could see what appeared to be Shiya cradling her, with her vision greatly blurred and POV taking place from the side (She thinks its an outer body experience like the first visit of this memory). Some surviving students came into the classroom to offer help, laying Yonaka on a row of desks until she woke up again. One of the students then says "But...what about her?" They all turn around and look directly at Yonaka. No, not the one on the table. The Yonaka witnessing all of this, having no idea that she's experiencing it exactly as it happened, and not as a mere spectator. Do you recall the angel that was detected by Daedalus in the classroom? Yonaka is experiencing all of what happened from her body.  :ninja: The one we've known as Shiya all this time was not the cute blonde either. Shiya was originally in Yonaka's body, and the angel they would both later despise was actually the blonde cradling who you knew up to that point to be Yonaka, but was actually Shiya at the time.

Right, so we have a 3-way identity swap here. Here's what happened. The story began after this swap occurred. Let me put this bluntly. As you Know them = How they were

Yonaka = Shiya

Shiya = Angel (forgot her name too)

Angel =Yonaka

The angel that served as the antagonist was Shiya's actual best friend and step sister in the real world. They boarded the Celestial Ark together and entered the simulated world together. Yonaka was a friend of theirs and a sort of role model to Shiya (who was the real source of the angel). Following that classroom incident, the Angel, turned the series of misfortune and loss of life in her favor. The less minds Daedalus has to tend to, the easier it is to simulate the world and tend to the person's body. Since Angel's father (the one you thought was Yonaka's father) was the keyholder of Daedalus, control over him and the world went over to her after the father himself died and released an angel.  Daedalus, under her command, diverted all of the ship's power to keeping Shiya stable, but it was clear she wouldn't last long.

And so she devised her master plan. A reckless, insensitive, and cruel plan.

Angel needed to save Shiya, and that would only be possible if she could receive a new body. She devised a plan where a mental switch would occur in the digitized world, where Shiya's consciousness could be tampered with, swapped out, and placed in her body. This was to fool the angel that was still loose in the world, throwing the heat off of Shiya herself in case it tried to destroy her. While this would happen, Daedalus would tend to her organs in the real world. This is the "Transfer" that is referred to in the story. However, Tenshi (Just remembered Angel's name too!) didn't quite want to die in all of this. So she switched her own consciousness with Yonaka's before doing any of this, without consent as Yonaka was still unconscious. Tenshi tampered with both of their memories, not just their bodies.

Yonaka = Received Tenshi's memories as her own and Shiya's original body, thinks she has been Shiya's best friend this whole time and inherited Tenshi's intense will to save her at all costs, bearing the brunt of the Transfer's consequence in Tenshi's place and becoming the decoy for the angel originally released by Shiya.

Shiya = Inherited Tenshi's original body and retained some of her own memories, but does not remember anything beyond her first day in Daedalus's world, helplessly thinks its the real world.

Tenshi = Stole Yonaka's original body, maintaining her memories.

The world is recreated with the populace that was killed during the disaster simulated by Daedalus instead of, you know, actually being alive. Daedalus is tasked by Tenshi to act as Yonaka's guardian for the sake of the plan to save Shiya, knowing full well the two would have to fight against each other. Daedalus, being the loyal AI he was, successfully fulfilled this role and followed Yonaka. While the first transfer between all three gave Shiya a new body, the second transfer between Yonaka and Shiya ensured that Shiya's original organs would be transferred to the new body in the real world. Otherwise, Shiya would've died from Tenshi's original, faulty organs.

From then on, Tenshi continued to play her role as a villain, provoking Shiya's sense of self throughout the story, fighting against Daedalus and his system, and outwitting Yonaka. In the final cour, Tenshi was to reveal all of this to Yonaka as well as a few other things.

1. Tenshi reveals that Angels are the manifestation of the subconscious will of self-preservation, in a world designed to do that for you. Thus, the angels are naturally destructive in this world, seeking to break free and set others free through rapture so they can freely fight to preserve themselves. Daedalus was supposed to mitigate this, but couldn't keep it under control when Shiya panicked as she neared death in the classroom. Her subconscious fought viciously to break free and maintain itself.

2. Tenshi gained her angel powers by devouring the heart of her father's angel, the one crucified in the church. She and Daedalus managed to grab hold of the angel's corpse after the father died in the first disaster. She decided to absorb the heart after Daedalus discovered it is the nucleus of the instincts that drive the angel. With his help, she was able to balance her own sense of self and the angel's inherent will to break free from the false world.

3. Tenshi reveals that she has played her role as a villain because the "voyage" as she vaguely refers to it, is nearly at an end. At this point, she is confident she has already won, and that Shiya will be perfectly fine now.

In the final chapters, Yonaka is completely destroyed. Everything she knew about herself was a complete fabrication. She remains at home, silent, naked, and too numb to even think of suicide. Tenshi confronts her again, apologizing for what she had done to her and thanking her for playing her role. Also at this point, Daedalus is gone and has not reappeared for some time, despite Yonaka's rather emotional pleas for his company.

With the world unguarded, Tenshi releases Yonaka's angel (though, it's really Shiya's angel), from the moon and initiates the end of the world. The moon approaches the earth just as it did the first time, but then splits open like a dissected eyeball, covering the world in blood. The souls of those that were raptured out come down as angels and begin rapturing the humans still left in the digitized world (yes, there were still thousands of them way outside the town Shiya and everyone was confined in).

Yonaka and Shiya watch all of this from the roof of a skyscraper and Daedalus finally reappears, explaining the role he took in all of this. He also leaves Yonaka with her final responsibility by explaining what Tenshi meant when she referenced the voyage. The Celestial Ark, low on power but still chugging it to its destination, was nearing arrival of a hospitable planet. Soon, there'd be no need for the alternate world. It was up to Yonaka to accept what had been done to her and give Shiya the push of bravery to step out from this eggshell world and awaken in the real world.

A lot of action, blood, and trippy visuals later, we reach the prologue scene where Yonaka and Shiya lie together on the beach, truly and completely alone in the world. Shiya, knowing the truth of everything now, has to make a choice. Stay with Yonaka, who has reached the end of the transfer and will die soon, and wander the desolate fake world alone. Or, wake up, leave Yonaka behind, the fake world behind, and live her new life on a new planet. It's here that Shiya understands the "I am you" dynamic presented in the prologue. Yonaka is trying to say that, through Tenshi's cruel actions, she inherited what was originally Shiya's body.

Tenshi appears in front of them, taking Shiya in her arms and carrying her off in the Fetal Moon. Daedalus sits with Yonaka on the bloody beach, the world locked in eternal, scarlet night. Its implied they remain there together until Yonaka dies.

Shiya and Tenshi wake up in the real world, the transfer successful. Tenshi had stolen Yonaka's body and gave her own to Shiya. They awaken next to each other, slightly malnourished with their hair and nails grown out wildly. A holographic letter sits in wait for Shiya as the Celestial Ark's door opens and lets in the light of the new world. The letter is the one Yonaka mentioned in the prologue, written during her final hours in the fake world. Whether or not Shiya or Tenshi are alone in the new world is left up to interpretation.

So there you have it. Yonaka was the subject of the transfer and was cruelly designated to act as the decoy for Shiya's angel, and as the last person who would remain on and die in the digitized world. The ship is also mostly a necropolis after it lands. All of its inhabitants except for Shiya and Tenshi were killed off (So that Daedalus could stay with Yonaka a little longer until she dies).

What a convoluted mess. I really just took the "identity swap" TWEEST from 6 Cataclysms: Guilty Rat and intensified it. I'm a hack lol

MR Pub / Re: Chit Chat 2017
« on: October 13, 2017, 12:59:31 AM »
Mombot's my fave

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