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Develop Your Story / Re: Demon Hunters - Chapter One
« on: May 05, 2013, 01:05:54 PM »
This is my first post and just joined cuz i wanted to comment here. I will  be frank.

IT misses:
--a 'Awe' moment for the first chapter, a single awe moment, which could compel me to read ur further chapters.

--Also, When Hero senses his sister using high Spiritual energy, Shouldn't he be alarmed and run for her rescue, instead of sitting and waiting for food?


Also, I dont know If it is good suggestion or  not, but....

When Misune reaches city, Let her see that Demon and those 'Demon hunter' fighting. When she sees them, She tries to run back to her brother, but is blocked by Green Demon. Then Hero comes in rescue and this way, he can kill demon and by saving those Hunters, they can tell him 'that demon wasn't joking about returning' and also can ask him to Join them.

 Its good but needs a awesome moment, something which gets u in an instant, It could be dialogue or execution of his fight..... a powerful rescue or a powerful finish.

thats it...Anyway, this is what I think.

Thanks for the reply, AceD. I'm honored to have your first post be in my thread! But, yeah... I was aware of my first chapter missing that sort of "awe" moment that you spoke of and I've been trying to think of something to amend that issue. Also Ikkatsu didn't run out to rescue Misune because he is also able to sense the wear abouts of creatures with high amounts of energy - like a demon. He knew it wasn't close enough to harm her... yet. Also he knows Misune is also a fighter and is almost as strong as Ikkatsu. She can even do certain things her brother cannot which was not explained in this first chapter so he wasn't TOO concerned because Ikkatsu figured that she could probably handle it.

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AMV section / New AMV I made (Yu Yu Hakusho)
« on: May 01, 2013, 01:07:20 PM »
Just finished a Shinobu Sensui tribute AMV. I thought maybe I could get some publicity here and maybe you guys might enjoy it. Check out my other YYH AMVs too if you want.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n9YF5F8bZrs

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Manga Anime FanArts / Re: My YuYu Hakusho Villain drawings
« on: April 24, 2013, 12:15:19 PM »
you say little known but Yu Yu Hakasho wa one of the most watched animes  back in elementary school.
They look good though!

I kind of meant it in a sarcastic sort of way, lol. It is pretty underrated though I think.

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Manga Anime FanArts / My YuYu Hakusho Villain drawings
« on: April 21, 2013, 12:34:03 PM »
Heres a few pictures of the three main villains from a little known show called YuYu Hakusho. The villain's in this show are very in depth and have legit motives for being what they are other than just being evil for the sake of being evil. Especially Sensui.

Here is my drawing of Toguro


Here is Sensui


And lastly, Yomi


I'm currently working on the 4 main protaganists of the series now only they will have more or less a full body picture done for them since I made the three main villains head only.


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Develop Your Story / Re: My Manga Backstory and plot
« on: April 20, 2013, 03:42:33 PM »
Bumping for a new generation of viewers!

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Develop Your Story / Re: Demon Hunters - Chapter One
« on: April 20, 2013, 03:41:12 PM »
Bumping this so it can be seen by a new generation!

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Develop Your Story / Re: Demon Hunters - Chapter One
« on: December 26, 2012, 08:29:17 AM »
Nobody wants to read this?  :o

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Develop Your Story / Re: Demon Hunters - Chapter One
« on: December 16, 2012, 03:33:23 PM »
^^^BUMP^^^

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General Discussion / Re: Stages Of Coming Up With An Original Character
« on: December 16, 2012, 03:26:55 PM »
That's actually not a bad idea, DBnext. Too bad I don't have any action figures anymore. I lost all my gundams I used to collect. I HAD AN EPIC COLLECTION. I don't even think you can buy those in stores anymore. Kids these days don't like awesome toys like gundams anymore :(

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General Discussion / Re: Stages Of Coming Up With An Original Character
« on: December 16, 2012, 01:38:25 PM »
I too am very curious as to what steps need to be taken to make an original character. The one I'm focusing on right now is kind of ironically to yours, a demon hunter whos parents were murdered by a demon. I have his BASIC personality down... I guess but I don't know how to develope him further.

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Thanks for the three replies n_n

Kinre's in particular is more of what I'm looking for. In my mind Ikkatsu's hair is kind of slicked back and he drew that spot on. It's not really up in the air much. DBZNext's is good too but Ikkatsu isn't that ripped : D

Anyone up for a full body draw? Like I said put him in whatever clothe you like.

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Sure thing guys, show me anything you got even if you might think its bad! lol

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Hi, I'm wondering if anyone here will be willing to make a better version of one of the drawings I have done of a character I created. I'll link the pic below. Now, I don't just want a redone version of the same picture I want him in different poses. Like take the bust of him that I will give you and draw him in some sort of "power up pose" from DBZ some other badass pose or whatever you would like. Put whatever clothes you want or keep him shirtless.  I havn't gotten as far as to design what he will be wearing yet. Maybe I will use one of your guy's ideas if you let me.

If anyone of you are generous enough to do this I would really appreciate it, thanks!


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Develop Your Story / Re: My Manga Backstory and plot
« on: December 11, 2012, 10:01:28 AM »
Umm for the name how about "Death Runs Rampant"!

Also few problems/questions for you?

1. If every demon hunter knows the spell to destroy the demon's soul, why must they entrap it in the first place?

2. Why did the master demon hunter pass on his spiritual power instead of destroying the source itself, since he was strong enough to put for demons under a mind control spell for life!

These are just suggestions/problems I see in the story that you can either change or fill in. Other than that it looks real good! :thumbsup:

Well, The demon soul imprisonment device weakens the demon soul and makes in vulnerable to the spell. On its own the soul is too untamed and wild to be destroyed by the spell... basically.

The old master foresaw that someone in the near future would be able to use his power to accomplish great deeds which would help save the world from utter destruction. So, instead of just letting his energy go to waste when he died he decided to leave it in a cave full of trials so that only someone worthy of his power could obtain it. He doesn't just want some random schmuck to obtain his sphere.

I hope that answers your two question... thingys :)

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Develop Your Story / Re: Help before I go insane
« on: November 30, 2012, 11:19:17 AM »
You could always use Belldandy from Ah My Godess as inspiration for your angel character. I'm not very good at coming up with totally original hairstyles, clothing for my characters so I always take bits and pieces from other manga to help me and put them all together.

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