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Offline Ginga

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« on: July 30, 2013, 06:33:55 AM »
Pls. Read the char. info first ...
Here>> http://forums.mangaraiders.com/index.php/topic,8251.msg149199/topicseen.html#msg149199
It is read from left to right... Forgive my art... But I'll try to improve....  :D
This is a short one so I"ll put all the chapters here... by the way this is a love story...

The story is about Mio who's head over heels with his best friend Fredrick. And now Fredrick is back from work in other country and start clinging to Mio again. How long can Mio hold in her feelings with Fredrick around ?? And Rio is here too!! I'm pretty sure his up to something...

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« Last Edit: August 04, 2013, 08:37:00 PM by Ginga »
"Kiss Your Nightmares and Phantoms Good Night But To Me My Sweet Will You Ever Say Goodbye?"

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Re: CAPTURED >> left to right
« Reply #1 on: July 30, 2013, 06:38:08 AM »
Part 2 ..

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Ti'll next update..  :ohmy:
« Last Edit: August 04, 2013, 08:37:55 PM by Ginga »
"Kiss Your Nightmares and Phantoms Good Night But To Me My Sweet Will You Ever Say Goodbye?"

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« Reply #2 on: April 30, 2014, 06:03:17 PM »
This is really cute! I really want to see want happens! Hope you get more pages done soon! :)  :clapping:

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« Reply #3 on: April 30, 2014, 06:06:27 PM »
it moves really fast. its cute...but i have a feeling it'll end fast.

we didn't get much of a beginning. and its hard to udnerstand the main character. the male character on the other hand, acts consistently.

sometimes she's storng, sometimes she's weak. she reminds me of sakura haruno from naruto.
Stop playing victim....you know what you did.

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« Reply #4 on: April 30, 2014, 06:12:53 PM »
I kind of want to say it moves too fast with no setting and storyline. So, obviously they have been friends for a while, that's great. Build upon that and continue. I just feel like the story is being rushed as it has only been planned for that climax of him wanting to take her away. The climax is fine as it is, but the background hasn't been put out too much yet. I say rewind a bit before you just throw the climax in.

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« Reply #5 on: April 30, 2014, 11:12:10 PM »
Dun dun duuuun. Not one for romance tales, but this looks fun! Good work